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1. Well, AIBat is telling me you have an unused image: sb\c5.png. Remove it if it's not used.
2. 00:00:868 - Add a red line here so that the downbeat is correct.
3. I have a little bit of problem seeing your 3rd combo color, especially in the beginning >< Might just be me, but maybe either remove it or just not use it for the first part?
4. I'll just say it now, this map is greaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaat >w<

1. 00:07:361 (4) - Not sure about readability since it's a shortslider and starting on a red tick. You could just extend this so it starts at 00:07:137 to avoid anything, but it might be fine as-is too.
2. 00:38:032 (3) - Clap
3. 00:56:391 (1) - A loop might be very confusing for a total beginner. If you can, are you able to change this shape? ><
4. 01:04:003 (4) - Remove whistle, add clap on beginning?
5. 02:51:465 (1,2) - Lower volume a bit since the song is fading?

1. 01:23:256 (4) - NC?
2. 02:51:913 (3,4) - Same as Easy.

1. 01:46:092 (5) - Clap on end?
2. 01:56:391 (3) - The whistle on sliderend here sounds a bit off ><
3. 02:18:779 (6) - Standard soft-hitfinish on the sliderhead?

1. 00:21:018 (4,1,2,3,4) - Well, since you're at it, you could make a pentagon here xD
2. 00:34:898 (6,1) - You should probably spread this a bit more, as it looks like 1/2 while it's not.
3. 00:43:406 (1,2,3,4,1) - I see it's a gradual increase in spacing, but I still think it looks better if it's even. Well, if anything, 00:43:741 (4,1) 1 gridlvl4 to the right :p
4. 01:01:764 (1,2) - Can you rework the distance here somehow? Because of the semi-jump at 00:58:182 (1,2), this part really looks like a 1/4 too, so yeah >< Atleast move it more to the top-left or something.
5. 02:51:913 (3,4,5) - Same as Easy and Normal

CXu wrote:

Hi Beren. PM mod request~
Damn I'm slow orz.

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I'd prefer that you quote my post and state which changes you make, and which you have not. Thanks~ okok
If you have any problems understanding what the hell I'm talking about, feel free to poke me in-game!

[Color guide]

1. Red text means that the issue is unrankable.
2. Blue text is a strongly recommended suggestion.
3. Black text is a regular suggestion.

[General]

1. Well, AIBat is telling me you have an unused image: sb\c5.png. Remove it if it's not used. deleted
2. 00:00:868 - Add a red line here so that the downbeat is correct. added
3. I have a little bit of problem seeing your 3rd combo color, especially in the beginning >< Might just be me, but maybe either remove it or just not use it for the first part? sry no orz
4. I'll just say it now, this map is greaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaat >w< thanks xD

[Easy]

1. 00:07:361 (4) - Not sure about readability since it's a shortslider and starting on a red tick. You could just extend this so it starts at 00:07:137 to avoid anything, but it might be fine as-is too. k
2. 00:38:032 (3) - Clap k
3. 00:56:391 (1) - A loop might be very confusing for a total beginner. If you can, are you able to change this shape? >< k
4. 01:04:003 (4) - Remove whistle, add clap on beginning? k
5. 02:51:465 (1,2) - Lower volume a bit since the song is fading? k

[Normal]

1. 01:23:256 (4) - NC? k
2. 02:51:913 (3,4) - Same as Easy. k

[Hard]

1. 01:46:092 (5) - Clap on end? k
2. 01:56:391 (3) - The whistle on sliderend here sounds a bit off >< ?_?
3. 02:18:779 (6) - Standard soft-hitfinish on the sliderhead? k

[Paradise Kiss]

1. 00:21:018 (4,1,2,3,4) - Well, since you're at it, you could make a pentagon here xD k
2. 00:34:898 (6,1) - You should probably spread this a bit more, as it looks like 1/2 while it's not. its ok :3 no change
3. 00:43:406 (1,2,3,4,1) - I see it's a gradual increase in spacing, but I still think it looks better if it's even. Well, if anything, 00:43:741 (4,1) 1 gridlvl4 to the right :p k
4. 01:01:764 (1,2) - Can you rework the distance here somehow? Because of the semi-jump at 00:58:182 (1,2), this part really looks like a 1/4 too, so yeah >< Atleast move it more to the top-left or something. k
5. 02:51:913 (3,4,5) - Same as Easy and Normal k

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Man, I can't mod ><
Great job! Have a star since I really can't find a lot and I like them sliders

NatsumeRin wrote:

[General]
红线要868那一条就够了，全难度统一。好

[Easy]
00:05:794 (3) - 这样节奏会不会比较合那个电声。。http://puu.sh/Yno1 改了
00:42:734 (3) - 为什么和00:28:629 (4) - 这里整成了不同的样子？虽然不是什么问题 尝试改成一样但是后面的note都要移位太复杂了 就没改
01:32:659 - 这么短break，还不如删了加点啥（或者Easy不太合适。。那就长点和Normal那样）删了..

[Normal]
没啥问题也实在没啥特色……我觉得2哈还是太横平竖直了点就是。。。

[Hard]
00:13:853 (2,3) - flow感有些不对，如果2可以离远些，把3反过来，45转上去会自然些？ 好
00:44:077 (1) - 我自己是没跳的感觉。。即使是小跳。跳了~
00:45:644 (1,2,3,4) - 这里先叠起来的话，67的叠就显得没那么特别了，建议改正常移动 嗯
01:51:913 (1) - 上面俩问题重复次 ^

[Paradise Kiss]
00:47:435 (1,2,4,5,1) - make this larger a bit. ok
00:54:600 (1,2,3,4,5) - ^ ^
01:40:271 (4) - too dangerous you know. i know...changed
01:51:913 (1,2,3,4,5) - should make the spacing consistent here imo. ok
01:54:823 (1,2) - ..but this one could be a jump? 找不到好位置跳就没跳......
02:33:107 (1) - ...not sure but i prefer to change this to another shape.changed

Beren wrote:

NatsumeRin wrote:

Nice map Nice SB.

Garven wrote:

[General]
Tick rate 2 fits this song best you know....

[Storyboard]
Some of your lryics have a lot of unnecessary transparency on the sides. Please crop those fixed

[Paradise Kiss]
00:34:897 (6) - Yeah, just a circle please. ok
01:26:838 (1) - Can hear the default sliderslide here ok

There's a lot of strangely-shaped curve sliders in this difficulty such as 00:02:211 (4) - that have kinks near the edges so the curve isn't as smooth, as compared to sliders like 00:05:345 (2) - Maybe comb through this and see what you can smooth up. Some of the blankets aren't quite as convincing either, if you want to try and get those cleaned out it'd be great o3o fixed

Not much left to poke at here. Let me know your thoughts!

Garven wrote:

I miss you Bad boy
Lonely in Party time~

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找点善良歌来求SB啊准备ヽ(･∀･)メ~