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Frostmourne
Hi , as per your request :)

Attention
00:39:110 (1) - I guess you miss finish at the start here
00:50:960 (7) - whistle at the start , according to this note 00:46:160 (1) -
00:57:860 (1,2,3) - first time , it looks like stream, I suggest you to new combo it every note like 01:23:210 (1,1,1) - (it makes very clear)
01:01:910 (5) - emm large spacing , new combo here ? , It's ok imo
01:52:310 (1) - clap with finish is better than only clap here like this 00:39:110 (1) -
01:57:710 (3) - emm, it cuts the flow I think, it must be repeat slider imo , better much for me :)
01:59:060 (4) - clap at the end ?
01:59:810 (3) - clap ?
02:04:010 (4) - ^
02:36:560 (1) - ^ at the start of the slider , finish here is better
03:17:210 (7) - miss clap here
in these pattern
add clap 03:21:410 (6) - , 03:21:560 (7) - , 03:21:710 (8) - <only red tick and the end of slider , I hope this sound will make it better much
03:22:910 (4,5,6,1) - can you make jump here ? , I think it's very good position to make it :)
03:24:560 (1) - finish at the end
03:32:810 (7) - add note here with clap please , it's very empty :?
03:34:310 (1) - finish at the start
04:00:710 (1,2) - (1) is too short from (2) I think at least me will miss at this slider cuz it looks like 03:59:960 (1,2) - <but this is 1/2

imo , some point like this 03:22:310 (2) - and 03:23:510 (2) - in other part aren't still be added finish yet . add it more for more exciting ! :P

very fun mapset and good song xD
star here , Good luck for approving !! :)
GiNa
Kore kowai map desu ne ~
star >_<
maybe mod this if I have time (and not lazy) or when yuca-chan gives mod to my map
Sorda-chan good luck ~
Snowy Dream
Mod request from PM request
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[General]
OFFSET: 700-705 would be better IMO


[Attention]
00:17:505 (1) - spacing! (you should do a jump here imo)
00:29:055 (5) - :< can move it to another position?
00:52:605 (9) - NC
01:47:955 (2,3,4,5,6) - not the regular star shape
01:49:005 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - not the regular hexagon
01:51:105 (5) - NC
02:15:705 (4) - jump? (x:322 y:244)
02:17:355 (5) - add a note?
02:41:130 (8,9,10) - try to increase the spacing
03:19:605 (1) - why NC?
03:29:280 (5,6) - make it more fluent
03:57:705 (6) - NC
03:55:905 (1) - jump?
04:00:705 (1) - ^
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ya > <
Perfect Mapset (1st)
And star :3
Topic Starter
S o r d a
fixed most above~
thanks!
but offset cant change
also,I ask Niva timing check

11:17 <S_o_r_d_a> : yo Niva~
11:17 <Niva> : hi S o r d a (:
11:17 <S_o_r_d_a> : can you check offset?
11:17 <Niva> : ah, sure
11:18 <S_o_r_d_a> : thanks ~
11:18 <Niva> : map's link? xD
11:18 *S_o_r_d_a is listening to (IA - Kisaragi Attention)[http://osu.ppy.sh/s/51765]
11:18 <Niva> : ok, downloading~
11:18 <S_o_r_d_a> : setup Charles445 but modder's said 700~705
11:18 <S_o_r_d_a> : I think bit wrong offset now:>
11:23 <Niva> : hmm, I agree with Charles445 more
11:23 <S_o_r_d_a> : oh,okey>A</
11:23 <S_o_r_d_a> : I can show this log?
11:24 <Niva> : hmm, yep
11:24 <Niva> : for example
11:24 <Niva> : in 01:42:710 (2) -
11:24 <Niva> : in 25% playback 710 sounds better~
11:25 <Niva> : (:
11:25 <S_o_r_d_a> : I see! thanks Niva~
also thanks for star all!
banvi
散々だった今日に、ちょっと期待しちゃいそーだ

modreq from in-game

[Attention]

S o r d a
  1. 00:01:010 ~ 00:08:810 - うーむ、ニューコンボの間隔がばらばらなので下のように変えたほうが統一感あっていいかなあって思います
  2. 02:16:460 (1) - silderslideがうるさいので http://puu.sh/ywEl 使ってみてください
  3. 03:19:310 (1,2) - (5)のスライダー、hitburstとかぶらないところに置くとベターだと思います
  4. 03:57:785 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - 下のように形整えたほうが綺麗でいいかなあって思います
  5. 04:02:510 (1) - new combo? (かっこつけ程度にw)


y u c a
  1. 00:50:960 (7,1) - ニューコンボの入れ替え
  2. 01:03:110 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3) - スロー再生で何回か聞き直しましたが曲の音とずれててかなり違和感を感じます…(微妙に変速がある(?))
    複雑な問題になりそうな感じならここは消すのも一つの手かも… う~ん、私の勘違いかもしれないですがorz
  3. 01:40:160 (1) - remove new combo
  4. 01:40:610 (2) - new combo
  5. 01:47:510 (1,2) - ここのスペーシングは直した方が良いと思います
  6. 01:49:010 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - うーん、私としてはもうちょっと綺麗に6角形作って欲しいです
  7. 02:24:710 (1) - もうちょっと綺麗にスライダーの形を整えたほうが良いです
  8. 02:33:710 (1) - nazi : move 2 grid right
  9. 02:35:810 (1,2,3,4,5) - スペーシングを整えたほうがいいと思います


saymun
  1. 00:29:060 (5) - Hmm, not stacking here would be better I think. move to another place?
  2. 00:36:110 (3) - ctrl+r would be better to flow I think.
  3. 01:14:810 (5) - nazi : move 1 grid right
  4. 01:23:210 (1,1,1) - weird placement for me. Change like this? ↓


That's all I can find ><
Good Luck ;)
Thite
S o r d a
00:05:204 (3) - もう少し(2)から遠ざけてみては?
00:16:154 (1) - ここのfinish消して(2)のスライダーの頭にfinishつけてみては?
00:19:454 (2) - ホイッスル追加?
03:19:604 (1) - このnew comboはいらない気がします
03:29:354 (6) - ホイッスル追加?
01:59:354 (1) - スライダーの頭にホイッスル?
04:01:754 (1,2,3,4,5) - ちょっと見栄えが悪いんでこんな感じで対称にしたらいいかなぁって思います http://puu.sh/yzbz


y u c a
01:03:692 (5) - new comboの位置に少しだけ違和感があるような?
01:36:404 - note追加してみては?
01:48:554 (6) - 綺麗な5角形にしたらいいかなぁなんて
01:54:704 (1) - しっかりスタックさせてみては?


saymun
00:35:354 (1) - add whistle this slider's top?
00:31:904 (1) - remove this new combo and put next note?
01:04:304 (1) - add finish?
01:12:704 (1) - ^
02:40:004 (4) - stack exactly like this? http://puu.sh/yz5Z

ふぁいとー! :)
Reiji-RJ
Hello! :3

Attention

S o r d a

  1. 00:04:604 (1,2) - maybe stack them as all? :O
  2. 00:12:254 (2) - move it some grids down and left and stack 00:12:554 (3) - with 00:11:804 (6) -
  3. 02:01:604 (5) - maybe stack with 02:01:004 (1) - ? Return pattern C:
  4. 02:04:154 (1) - finish
  5. 02:07:454 (5,6) - default clap on them!
  6. 02:08:654 (5,6) - ^
  7. 02:11:054 (4) - custom clap on the beginning and end?
  8. 02:15:554 - add a note here and 02:15:629 - here?
  9. 03:17:504 (1) - finish?
  10. 03:26:804 (5) - remove clap from the end
  11. 03:31:904 (3) - finish
  12. 04:00:104 (2) - change finish to clap


saymun

  1. 01:04:304 (1) - add a finish
  2. 01:06:704 (1) - ^
  3. 01:08:804 (9,10) - maybe continue triangle pattern? So that 01:08:804 (9) - will be stacked with 01:08:354 (6) - and 01:08:954 (10) - with 01:08:504 (7) -
  4. 01:14:504 (3,4) - ctrl+r? for better flow :O
  5. 01:16:304 (1) - finish?
  6. 02:41:354 (1) - ^
  7. 02:50:954 (1) - ^
  8. 03:39:104 (1) - ^
  9. 03:43:904 (1) - ^
  10. 03:48:704 (1) - ^


y u c a

  1. 00:50:954 (7) - finish!
  2. 00:55:154 - add a note with custom clap
  3. 01:39:404 (3) - as you started to map another sound, remove this slider and add one from 01:39:554 - till 01:39:854 -
  4. 01:42:704 (2) - move nc here
  5. 01:54:404 (9,1) - stack them properly
  6. 02:19:904 (1) - finish
  7. 02:24:704 (1) - ^
  8. 02:27:104 (1) - it's quite hidden by stream's hitbursts D:
  9. 03:05:804 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - add claps to them!


Wow, good map! *^*
Good luck~
y u c a
01:39:404 (3) - as you started to map another sound, remove this slider and add one from 01:39:554 - till 01:39:854 -

03:05:804 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - add claps to them!
no changed there because my baka teacher modded and changed it like this :)
ばんびさんの変速の件は赤線入れることになりました!ありがとうございました!

thanks mod guys( * ・ ◡・ ) fixed verstion here :arrow:http://puu.sh/yFDC
mjw5150
[S o r d a]
01:57:404 - add finish here?
02:06:179 (2) - move it to 02:06:029?sounds better imo

[saymun]
00:41:204 (5) - del finish?sounds not so good to add a finish here
00:43:679 (8) - del this note?
01:23:204 (1,1,1) - not so good to use this style at the end of kiai lol(missed in my first play lol

[y u c a]
00:56:504 (6,7) - make 7 right a grid so that they could be symmetrical
00:58:304 (1) - down 2 grid?it will look better if you make the spacing equal for these 4 notes
01:52:304 (1) - down 1 grid the spacing will be better

really nice mapset~
☆~
GiNa
[Sorda]
02:04:154 (1) – endpoint move to x:304 y:200, looks better like that
03:17:804 (2) – middle point move to x:240 y:244
03:24:479 (7) – this doesn’t fit, maybe delete

[yuca]
baca
01:38:804 – add a note here
01:40:304 – ^, there’s a sound

[saymun]
01:20:804 (7,8,9) – I think this doesn’t fit, maybe delete 8 ? perhaps it’s weird to start on white tick
03:50:204 (5,6,7) – ^, maybe delete 6
03:58:229 (8) – move to x:216 y:204

Good luck you guys >_<
James
lol circles under sliders with AR9? this game is getting weirder and weirder....
its not even fun to play, everything including the rhythm makes it tiring wtf
Miya
AR 8 is better for me. More playable at AR 8. It's hard to read the rythim at AR 9.
Very hard for me. A lot of miss. Orz.
Frostmourne
for me , AR 9 is better much , jumping with AR 8 + BPM 200 is tiring and irritating :(
xsrsbsns

Frostmourne wrote:

for me , AR 9 is better much , jumping with AR 8 + BPM 200 is tiring and irritating :(
This, AR9 hands down.
those
Eh..
[Attention]
  1. I find AR8 fits better.
  2. Just by first playing, 00:01:004 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - appears to have no pattern in distance spacing, whatsoever. It's very untidy, so you should have come up with a pattern. This needs fixing.
  3. 00:17:804 (1) - Remove the new combo, it appears to be unneeded.
  4. 01:03:092 - and 01:04:304 - should definitely not be necessary.
  5. 01:22:754 (9,1,1,1) - REALLY bad anti-jumps.
  6. 02:53:954 (4,5,6,7,8,9) - Misleading.
Topic Starter
S o r d a

those wrote:

Eh..
[Attention]
  1. I find AR8 fits better.
  2. Just by first playing, 00:01:004 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - appears to have no pattern in distance spacing, whatsoever. It's very untidy, so you should have come up with a pattern. This needs fixing.okey,Fixed spacing used0.7
  3. 00:17:804 (1) - Remove the new combo, it appears to be unneeded.fixed
  4. 01:03:092 - and 01:04:304 - should definitely not be necessary.talked Suzully,if deleted this redline doesnt fit music so,I'll keep this
  5. 01:22:754 (9,1,1,1) - REALLY bad anti-jumps.ok,I call saymun
  6. 02:53:954 (4,5,6,7,8,9) - Misleading.I dont think so some players clear this part keep now
thanks for mod those~

also thanks many guys!
I ask for some japanese players and xsrsbsns
guys said AR9 better for now
I think so keep it AR9
CXu
Star because~
Lissette
IRC modded
Topic Starter
S o r d a
thanks mod and star Liss~
10:22 *S_o_r_d_a is listening to (IA - Kisaragi Attention)[http://osu.ppy.sh/s/51765]
10:22 <S_o_r_d_a> : move to pend map
10:23 <Lissette> : o:
10:23 <S_o_r_d_a> : i already ask for you mod!
10:23 <S_o_r_d_a> : if you can IRC ?
10:23 <Lissette> : ok
10:23 <S_o_r_d_a> : thank you!
10:23 <Lissette> : i have to re-download, only have one diff
10:24 <S_o_r_d_a> : okey~
10:24 <S_o_r_d_a> : also sb have
10:25 <Lissette> : Astom showed to me :p
10:25 <S_o_r_d_a> : oh,I see:3 already you know my map SB
10:25 <Lissette> : yes XD
10:25 <Lissette> : i like it
10:25 <S_o_r_d_a> : <3
10:28 <Lissette> : lol im so baka
10:28 <Lissette> : xD
10:28 <S_o_r_d_a> : ehh why w
10:28 <Lissette> : i tought had more diffs
10:28 <S_o_r_d_a> : hmm?
10:28 <Lissette> : i didnt know was for approval
10:32 <S_o_r_d_a> : lol I see!
10:33 <Lissette> : 00:00:704 - to 00:09:704 - This part confuses me @.@
10:33 <Lissette> : i would follow the bass here
10:33 <S_o_r_d_a> : Hmm,I really like claps follow >_<
10:33 <S_o_r_d_a> : i can keep this?
10:34 <Lissette> : yeah, was a suggestion
10:34 <S_o_r_d_a> : ok ok
10:34 <Lissette> : maybe just add a note here 00:00:704 -
10:35 <S_o_r_d_a> : hmm,No! cuz not have clap Garven said you follow claps only or bass only
10:36 <S_o_r_d_a> : i heard clap sound its add note here
10:36 <Lissette> : ok then
10:37 <Lissette> : so hard i cant play it T.T
10:37 <Lissette> : ill have to see auto play XD
10:37 <S_o_r_d_a> : yes BPM so high >:
10:39 <Lissette> : 00:16:304 (2,3,4,5) - remove last note and move the sliders 1/2 beat later
10:39 <Lissette> : sounds and plays better to me
10:39 <Lissette> : (trying to play ><)
10:40 <S_o_r_d_a> : 5 remove ?
10:40 <Lissette> : tes
10:40 <Lissette> : yes*
10:40 <S_o_r_d_a> : typo moe >:
10:40 <Lissette> : D:
10:40 <Lissette> : would be like this http://puu.sh/FaOR
10:41 <Lissette> : moving the sliders after deleting last note
10:42 <Lissette> : also you can add a repeat to 00:17:054 (4) -
10:43 <S_o_r_d_a> : alright
10:44 <Lissette> : you will have to fix spacing after making the changes
10:44 <S_o_r_d_a> : yes,already fixed spacing make
10:47 <Lissette> : 00:18:254 (5) - move this so the spacing beetween 00:17:954 (4,5,1) - is the same
10:47 <Lissette> : i keep hitting this 00:18:554 (1) - early because of the spacing
10:49 <S_o_r_d_a> : hmm
10:51 <S_o_r_d_a> : bit changed spacing i want keep this cuz i dont change saymun's first part
10:52 <S_o_r_d_a> : if 1 change 00:19:454 (2,3,4) - need change spacing
10:52 <S_o_r_d_a> : if I change *
10:53 <Lissette> : no, only change 00:18:254 (5) -
10:53 <S_o_r_d_a> : hmm?Tell me i should move to 5
10:54 <Lissette> : example http://puu.sh/FaXZ
10:54 <S_o_r_d_a> : oh,I see
10:54 <S_o_r_d_a> : ok changed
10:57 <Lissette> : 00:55:154 - add note?
10:57 <Lissette> : this is yuca's part
10:57 <Lissette> : should i leave a post so everyone in this collab see the mod?
10:58 <S_o_r_d_a> : hmm i think yuca's style :3
10:58 <S_o_r_d_a> : no!
10:58 <S_o_r_d_a> : i fix irc~
11:00 <Lissette> : ok
11:02 <Lissette> : 01:02:354 - triplets would fit here
11:03 <Lissette> : and here 01:02:504 -
11:03 <S_o_r_d_a> : Hmm,yuca dont like triplets if you can please dont write add note yuca's part >:
11:04 <Lissette> : I like suggesting this type of things
11:05 <Lissette> : because sometimes mapper like it
11:05 <Lissette> : ):
11:05 <S_o_r_d_a> : hmm should change?
11:06 <Lissette> : I think yuca should decide
11:07 <S_o_r_d_a> : if i show this log yuca agree :3 also yuca will say No
11:09 <S_o_r_d_a> : you can other suggestion? >_<
11:10 <Lissette> : Ill say all what i think, you guys take what you like
11:13 <S_o_r_d_a> : yes>:
11:13 <Lissette> : lol dont make sad face~
11:13 <Lissette> : ^^
11:13 <S_o_r_d_a> : :D ok then gogo other things
11:15 <Lissette> : 03:19:454 (2) - remove note?
11:15 <S_o_r_d_a> : ok
11:22 <Lissette> : 02:36:704 - end kiai on top of a note
11:22 <Lissette> : basically for taiko mod
11:23 <Lissette> : players that play this on taiko mode
11:23 <S_o_r_d_a> : Hmm,I see ok
11:24 <S_o_r_d_a> : ok fixed
11:27 <Lissette> : add collab and collaboration to the tags
11:28 <S_o_r_d_a> : oh baka me
11:28 <Lissette> : i like the sb lyrics so much XD
11:28 <S_o_r_d_a> : yes!
11:28 <S_o_r_d_a> : ready for bubble?
11:29 <S_o_r_d_a> : if yes i ask for BAT move to pend
11:29 <S_o_r_d_a> : oh,submit map
11:32 <Lissette> : Lizbeth told she es going to mod it, so lets wait for her mod first
11:32 <S_o_r_d_a> : hmm double check?
11:32 <Lissette> : in case i misseed something
11:32 <S_o_r_d_a> : I see ok ok
11:33 <Lissette> : 4 eyes are better than 2 :p
11:33 <S_o_r_d_a> : lol you're right!
11:33 <S_o_r_d_a> : i dont have a time if Liz mod please fourm~
11:34 <S_o_r_d_a> : maybe you can say liz?
11:34 <Lissette> : what do you mean?
11:34 <S_o_r_d_a> : hmm I will go to PM12 part time job
11:35 <S_o_r_d_a> : if Liz will mod please write fourm
11:35 <S_o_r_d_a> : i should recheck ask you or Liz?
11:35 <Lissette> : oh i will tell her
11:35 <Lissette> : dont worry
11:35 <S_o_r_d_a> : ok ok
11:35 <S_o_r_d_a> : thanks for mod btw!
Garven
Just did some general IRC modding

05:17 S o r d a: : nene garven
05:17 Garven: : ?
05:17 : *S o r d a is listening to (IA - Kisaragi Attention)[http://osu.ppy.sh/s/51765]
05:17 S o r d a: : kore ask again mod T_T
05:19 S o r d a: : i want bubble this >A<
05:22 Garven: : Overall the patterns feel weak.
05:22 Garven: : Most of your object placement feels random at best so it doesn't have a lasting impression
05:22 Garven: : Even just the beginning
05:22 Garven: : 00:01:004 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) -
05:22 Garven: : You have a strong consistent rhythm
05:22 Garven: : It's quite simple, and has a lot of time gaps
05:22 Garven: : You can do a lot with something like this
05:23 Garven: : But it looks like you just kind of placed things with distance snap and called it good.
05:23 Garven: : 00:10:004 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3) - Even smaller things like this particular curve
05:23 Garven: : You could try to either integrate the curve of the stream into the curve of the slider (5) or visaversa
05:24 Garven: : 00:10:604 (1,2,3,4) - Then the curve here feels unnatural since the 2 sticks so far higher than where you want to move the cursor from the
05:24 Garven: : flow from the 1 slider
05:24 Garven: : 00:15:104 (1,2) - After these jumps 00:16:154 (1) - Felt really really close
05:25 Garven: : 00:17:504 (1,2,3,4) - THe problem arises when you do attempt at a solid looking pattern here: The jumps feel almost too far apart for a
05:25 Garven: : descending part in the music.
05:25 Garven: : muzukasii eigo gomen. nihongo de dekinai ._.
05:26 S o r d a: : hmm,garven if you can write fourm T_T
05:26 Garven: : Haha
05:26 Garven: : Too lazy though D:
05:26 S o r d a: : dont mind about that baka me english ><
05:26 S o r d a: : ohhh
05:26 Garven: : Haha
05:26 Garven: : I'll see if I can post these up as kind of a guide of what I would be pointing out

And continuing from there:

00:19:454 (2,3,4) - hitsounds feel too quiet for an ascending part in the music
00:18:554 (1,2,3,4,1) - The transition from the slow slider into large 1/2 jumps to normal close distance snap feels unnatural and disrupts your flow
00:25:004 (2,3) - The jump feels much better going from 2 -> 3 instead of 1 -> 2. It fits the strings and feels a lot better to me while playing. This applies to this particular musical expression throughout the map.
00:28:604 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - Such a transition-like part in the music feels broken when you use stacks. I'd rather keep moving instead of pausing and just playing the rhythm.
00:34:304 (1,2,3,4,5) - I see why you did the increased spacing, but I don't agree with it's use here. It makes transitioning to 00:35:354 (1,2) - this spacing feel awkward, then going immediately into another jump
00:39:104 (1,2,3) - This felt great to play until 00:40:304 (1,2) - where the spacing suddenly goes really down again.
00:42:929 (2) - I'm not hearing this in the music
00:43:679 (8) - ^
00:57:854 (1,1,1,1) - Not a fan of new combo spam.
00:59:504 (5,6) - Spacing feels way too close after the previous notes.

In general the chorus (kiai sections) felt a little slow spacing-wise, but I might be biased for faster SV for that q:

Well, I think I'll stop here for now. Use these points as a guide for what I would be looking for. A lot of this map is just not very good for me due to spacing changes that don't reflect what's going on in the music consistently.
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