TorNis wrote:

[Astom's Hard]
AR+1
00:27:329 (1,2,3,4,5) - Mess with sliders. Maybe something like that was intended? http://puu.sh/szJF
00:33:281 (1,2) - overlapping
00:54:710 (2,3) - ^
00:57:567 (1) - distance snap
01:11:615 (6,7,8) - mess with hitsounds, at 7 and 8 remove clap.
01:44:710 (1,2) - overlapping

This diff needs work on style & placement of objects.

eh... no changes at all

-Sekai- wrote:

Twice Thanks for checking my map and for your star :3

Byakugan249 wrote:

[Ya-chan's Normal]
why isn't there a SB element where it shows their name for Yasora? since Astom, Miya and Sekai have one, i think it wouldn't be fair for Yasora and it'd look weird if there's no name in this diff and the others have the name of the mapper on the map.

1. 00:28:519 (3,4,1) - Improve the blankets:
   
   SPOILER

   
   

   168,333,28519,2,0,B|219:363|276:328,2,100,2|0|2
   216,224,29948,1,2
   136,136,30424,6,0,B|167:79|256:100|256:100|284:36,1,200,2|2

2. 00:51:376 (1) - Remove new combo?
3. 01:05:424 Add a circle here?

1. 03:03:281 (2) - Start it with a finish?
2. 03:56:138 Add circle

1. AR +2 it's better since this is an hard..
2. Nothing to say, good job :3

1. Here I have especially found inconsistency about new combos, I suggest you to follow my advice :3
2. 00:24:710 (4) - New combo (Follow this and follow the next suggestions about combos. It's good since you used whistles here and since after this starts a new vocal section.)
3. 00:28:281 (3) - x312 y136 to create a blanket with next slider 00:28:519 (4)
4. 00:29:710 (5) - New combo
5. 00:30:424 (8) - New combo
6. 00:30:662 (1) - Remove new combo
7. 00:33:281 (7,1) - Exchange new combo
8. 00:35:424 (1) - Remove new combo
9. 00:36:138 (4) - New combo
10. 00:37:329 (1) - Remove new combo
11. 00:47:329 (1,2) - Exchange new combo
12. 00:48:757 (5) - Bad slider, use this code:
    

    448,256,48757,2,0,B|392:264|356:224|344:172|384:144,1,150

13. 00:51:853 (6) - Nazi, but improve this blanket >w<
    

    204,348,51853,2,0,B|264:312|256:236|212:208,1,150,0|2

14. 00:57:091 (4,5,6) - Yeah, maybe I'm annoying but I don't like the shapes of this 2 sliders xD make it in this way:
    
    SPOILER

    
    
    

    344,96,57091,2,0,B|284:152|192:128,1,150,2|0
    156,72,57805,1,0
    92,112,58043,2,0,B|40:172|60:264,1,150,2|0

15. 01:05:900 (3) - Finish at the end of this slider sounds good
16. 01:47:567 (7) - New combo
17. 01:48:519 (1) - Remove new combo
18. 02:00:900 (5) - Nazi, improve the overlap with 01:59:948 (3)
19. 02:01:853 (7) - New combo
20. 02:02:329 (1) - Remove new combo
21. 02:04:234 (6) - Remove this finish?
22. 02:04:710 (1) - Add finish here instead
23. 02:15:662 (1) - Finish at the end
24. 02:34:710 (2,3,4,5) -Edit in this way please, it's much better:
    
    SPOILER

    
    

    204,236,154710,1,0
    220,164,154948,2,0,B|260:168|276:208,1,75,4|0
    280,280,155424,1,0
    316,348,155662,2,0,B|360:324|360:264,1,75,0|0
    420,252,156138,1,4

25. 02:36:138 (6) - New combo
26. 02:36:615 (1) - Remove new combo
27. 02:42:805 (4) - Finish at the end
28. 02:44:710 (3) - Finish
29. 03:48:519 (1) - Remove this new combo..
30. 04:12:091 (1,2,3) - Improve the blankets:
    

    348,56,252091,6,0,B|404:72|412:124,1,75,0|2
    336,132,252567,1,8
    312,204,252805,2,0,B|268:192|256:136,2,75,0|0|2

Twice wrote:

[General]
If you have SB , you should close the letter box during break? ok

[Astom's Hard]

HP+1 eh... no
AR+1 or +2 -^

00:44:234-(1) cancel new combo no
00:44:710-(2) new combo -^
00:46:138-(1) cancel new combo -^

nice hitsound! thx ^^

Byakugan249 wrote:

[Astom's Hard]
00:23:281 (3) - maybe add a whistle at the end so that it'd make a nice whistle pattern. ok
00:30:424 (4) - this wave slider can look a lot smoother. it doesn't flow to my expectations IMO. improved a little
00:31:853 (3) - ^ -^
00:54:710 (2) - oh my i think you forgot to keep the whistle pattern going, so add a whistle at the beginning to keep the consistency in whistles. ok
00:55:186 (3) - same as above but ad it at the end. ok
01:28:757 (4) - maybe Ctrl+R because this looks too easy as this beginning is more like an introduction. doing Ctrl+R shows that it gets harder as it progresses. hmm.... not really a good reason for me but ok
02:17:091 (1) - correct me if i'm wrong but i think this is a combo bug. i'm not familiar with NC bugs so yea. anyways remove the NC because the lyrics are still going. ok, also fixed something else
03:11:853 (1) - ^ eh no this time
03:38:995 (1,1,1) - the lyrics are connected for this, so remove the NC for the 2nd (1) and the 3rd (1). Removed NC in 03:39:948
04:17:567 (1) - remove the NC for this. "In the past" is connected in vocals. ok

Nice mod, thx

Kurokami wrote:

Astom's Hard

1. ar+1 same as always, no
2. 02:24:710 (1) - put in to the previous combo no
3. 03:34:710 (4) - maybe this:
   SPOILER

   
   eh no

those wrote:

[General]
-I have offset (+16) of yours, at 19012. fixed
[Astom's Hard]
02:17:091 (1) - Remove NC done in previous mod

Chewin wrote:

Astom's Hard

1. AR +2 it's better since this is an hard.. no~
2. Nothing to say, good job :3 thx :3

1. I think you didn't remember to add the sliderborder
2. [Rhythm]
   
   1. forced 1/1 too much in some parts
   2. 00:20:916 (3) - Fission of this slider into
      
3. [Graphic]
   
   1. You can order objects better.... (nazi and non-nazi)
   2. 00:59:011 (1) - Curved slider here means better flow

1. i would've expected something around 3 star for a spread like this... (You did really jump some red ticks and maybe some part felt forcedly 1/1)
2. [Graphic]
   
   1. You can nazi(00:19:948 (3) is not fully blanketed, for example) in some part. I want lose time in useless nazi.
   2. 02:56:138 (1) - You can wiggle it better-
      
      SPOILER

      
   3. 02:57:567 (2) - I don't like the shape especially because of the placement.
   1. [Rhythm]
   2. 00:24:472 - I'm sure people will expect a note here while playing, because 00:23:757 (3,4,5) - follow piano
   3. 00:54:472 -Add a note Fun and Intuitive, you left with voice, you start with voice
   4. 01:00:424 (3) - Follow voice more with this(added a circle before, made it end on a different place, and made the spinner start before)
      

1. [Rhythm]
   
   1. 00:51:392 (3) - symmetry shouldn't come before rhythm in a rhythm game, so use one less repeat and add a slider the start in 00:51:869 ad follow voice to 00:52:345
   2. 01:01:631 (1) - Add a note here and make them spinner start 1/2 after?
      
2. [Hitsounds]
   
   1. 01:11:631 (7,8,9) - Remove the claps there. If you want.. the clap sounds at 01:11:551 (6) - and is an 1/6 note. And for curiosity there is a 1/12 bass hit too.

1. Sekai
   
   1. [Ghaphic]
      
      1. You could've nazi's more some part. Won't do useless nazi. (example: 00:48:773 (4) - Not precisely blanketed ) or better... there's TOO much to nazi ._.
         02:27:107 (5) - A different shape work better. Perhaps something curvier like this.
         
         SPOILER

         
   2. [Rhythm]
      
      1. Your 1st part could be better with some stops: the song is really really calm
      2. 02:27:107 (5) -+1/2 of length too.
      3. 02:28:773 - Add a note?it's linked to the drums
      4. 03:41:392 (1,2,3) - The Ctlr+Reversed flow better (hit-hit-slider)
      5. 03:44:964 - Add a note following the voice.
      6. 03:47:345 (2,3,4) - Ctrl+Reversed follow voice better
      7. 03:50:281 (4) - The piano is actually following 1/6
      8. 03:50:678 - You did follow voice much, so a note here is intuitive
      9. 04:06:631 (7) - The note I think you were to follow is an actual 1/12 note... Anything else is overmapped.
   3. [Combo]
      
      1. 00:36:154 (9) - an NC here shall be consistent, as you had used some short combos
2. Miya
   
   1. [Rhythm]
      
      1. 01:39:488 (2,3,4) - Putting attention to the lyrics, you can hear a slider-slider-circle (Ctrl+Reversed rhythm) fit better: it's a suggestion for either of you in your next maps
   2. [Graphic]
      
      • 01:49:250 - Disrespecting spacing in some parts, to obtain better graphic is really permitted

HakuNoKaemi wrote:

[Astom's Hard]

1. [Rhythm]
   
   1. 00:51:392 (3) - symmetry shouldn't come before rhythm in a rhythm game, so use one less repeat and add a slider the start in 00:51:869 ad follow voice to 00:52:345 bad reason, but changed to something else
   2. 01:01:631 (1) - Add a note here and make them spinner start 1/2 after? no
      
2. [Hitsounds]
   
   1. 01:11:631 (7,8,9) - Remove the claps there. If you want.. the clap sounds at 01:11:551 (6) - and is an 1/6 note. And for curiosity there is a 1/12 bass hit too. changed to something else

• SPOILER

  01:06:154 (1) - As well as the finish, you can place a clap there.
  All those new combos and no new combos should be check at the same time, so don't do them separately. And they don't really go with your bits from 1:12:821 to 1:14:726 so if you chose to accept them change the spacing here a bit so it doesn't look awkward how there is two combos in symmetrically spaced notes. Anyway, those combos are just an so ignore them if u feel like it.
  01:12:821 - No nc
  01:13:773 - nc
  01:15:202 - No nc
  01:16:154 - nc
  01:17:583 - No nc
  01:23:773 - no nc
  01:25:202 - Nc
  01:26:631 - No nc
  
  01:44:726 (1) - The end circle is lower than the start circle, fix plss by making symmetrical.
  01:46:631 - No nc
  01:47:583 - nc
  01:48:535 - no nc
  01:58:059 - ^
  01:59:488 - nc
  1:59:964 - No nc
  02:03:773 - ^
  02:05:202 - Nc
  02:05:678 - no nc
  02:15:202 - ^
  02:16:631 - nc
  02:17:107 - no nc
  02:28:535 - ^
  02:38:059 - ^
  Ill give up on your combos, i just hate them as they all sorta 2s when they meant to be bigger for some reason they in small numbers, but are probably rankable, so dont mind me
  04:22:821 - Make symmetrical

• SPOILER

  00:33:297 - Nc
  00:34:250 - No nc
  00:45:202 - Nc
  00:45:678 - No nc
  00:54:488 (2,3) - Maybe just snap the two?
  00:56:154 - Tall white tick, new combo!
  00:56:631 - No nc
  00:59:011 (1) - Make more symmetrical. Should have the ending circle the same height as the beginning one.
  01:00:916 (3) - Hmmmm... doesn't really suit. Make it so that its wider and smaller in height?
  01:12:345 - No nc, remember to put new combo on the tall white tick or, if thats where slider ends, AFTER the slider. Doesn't make sense otherwise.
  01:13:773 - nc
  01:15:678 - No nc
  01:24:726 - Nc
  01:25:202 - No nc
  01:50:440 - ^
  01:51:869 - Nc
  01:52:345 - No nc
  01:53:297 - Nc
  01:53:773 - No nc

• SPOILER

  00:46:154 - No nc
  1:43:297 - ^, and the shape isn't identical to the shape of (4), where as it should be, as it is the opposite.
  02:00:202 - No nc
  02:01:154 - New combo here instead of 1/2 later.

• SPOILER

  00:21:869 - nc
  00:48:059 (3,4) - Please unoverlap, it doesn't look nice at all.
  00:52:583 - No nc
  00:53:297 - nc
  01:00:678 - ^
  01:14:726 (6) - Remove circle and copy here slider (4) instead?
  01:52:821 - no nc, don't repeat, add a circle at 01:53:773 instead. Snap it with the start of the slider. Make it into a new combo.
  01:59:011 (1,3,5) - A bit too corwded here, any chance you could spread this out?
  02:07:583 - No nc
  02:09:011 - nc
  02:09:488 - no nc
  02:10:440 - nc
  02:15:678 - No nc. You see, the tall white tick is at the end so technically it shouldn't be erlier, can be put later though so...
  02:16:631 - Nc
  02:19:011 - ^, tall white tick
  02:19:488 - No nc
  02:30:440 - Nc, tall thie tick.
  03:12:821 (6,7,8) - The spacing here is a little bit odd, any chance of making it better?
  03:35:678 - No nc
  03:36:154 - Nc, tall white tick
  04:13:535 - Nc

Sprite,Foreground,Centre,"Yasora.png",320,240
_F,0,18876,18996,0,1
_M,0,18996,,503,404
_F,0,268519,268995,1,0

Jebok wrote:

Astom's Hard

• SPOILER

  00:46:154 - No nc
  1:43:297 - ^, and the shape isn't identical to the shape of (4), where as it should be, as it is the opposite.
  02:00:202 - No nc
  02:01:154 - New combo here instead of 1/2 later.

No changes

Yasora wrote:

@jebok: no change anything in my diff. sorry.

edit: my name is changed. sorry ;-;