This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on lunes, 03 de septiembre de 2012 at 09:22:57 p.m.

Artist: Noisestorm
Title: Solar
Tags: eoin o' broin dnb drum and bass
BPM: 175
Filesize: 7549kb
Play Time: 04:56
Difficulties Available:

1. Burning Trance (5 stars, 946 notes)

Download: Noisestorm - Solar
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LIKE A PHOENIX!

THIS IS TRULY GOING FOR APPROVAL (?) But I need a Taiko Diff, so I accept a Taiko Guest Diff /:D/

timing check

BPM:175,000 (Current)
Offset: 73 (+12 on current)

listo, a ver cuantas diff puedes juntar

Ni en pedo xD

i thought the writing was Uuuh~

No.

Este map va por buen camino . Me gusta, hiciste patterns curvos y eso.
Necesita ser pulido un poco, en algunas partes de la cancion, pero no vas mal
Solo eso muy general, cuando este terminado me dare una vuelta para modearlo.
Y buee... ya te deje 3 Estrellas. Suerte capo!!

Finished... waiting for mods! o/

Here's my mod, I hope it will be useful:
Nice map!

Stuff.

To Remember.

Here comes my mod.

[burning]
00:12:244 (8,9,10) - make like this http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/287766
00:58:873 (8,1) - distance may not fit ,And make them more beauty
01:38:644 (6) - end at 01:38:987

other seems fine.Good job.

Hello :O

[Burning Trance]
00:00:930 (6) - Place it higher
00:02:130 (2) - maybe move to 00:02:301? Sounds better
00:03:673 (x) - add?
00:06:415 (3) - I'm geek
00:07:615 (2) - move to 00:07:787
00:09:158 (x) - add?
00:12:244 (x) - add!
00:13:615 (x) - ^
00:14:987 (3) - ^
00:15:844 (3) - Place it higher like a 00:15:158 (1) -
00:17:730 (7) - in all such places you must add it
00:17:901 (9) - move to another place
00:47:901 (x) - u need it ._.
00:53:558 (1,2,3,4) - reduce the volume ;_;
00:59:387 (2) - =>
01:10:015 (6,8) - wry
01:36:073 (1) - clap in the middle
01:51:244 (x) - add?
01:52:187 (5) - ^
01:57:673 (5) - ^
02:03:672 (1) - spacing
03:02:130 (4) - closer

Sorry
It's very hard for me
To 'speak' in engleash(

Good luck with this

IRC Mod!

M4M =w=

Burning Trance
00:00:758 (5,6) - Shouldn't 5 like go 2 grids down and 6 3 grids up and 1 grid left?
00:02:815 (2,1) - Distance spacing is too smal >< Fix it :3
00:16:530 (1) - Put this more down so it won't overlap with slider 4
00:47:387 (5,6) - These circles overlap with Slider 1 D: Put somewhere else
00:53:558 (7,1) - Fix DS ><
01:36:415 (1,2) - Where is the clap? D:
02:11:044 (6,1) - Distance spacing is waaay too big >< Fix :c
02:41:901 (1) - Euh, put this more to the right so it will fit with the other circles
02:43:701 (8,9) - How about here a circle and at 02:43:787 a 1/4 slider
02:44:388 (6,7) - ^
03:05:901 (5,1) - WHAAT O_O Fix DS D:
04:11:044 (1,2,1,2,1) - ^

Good luck c:

Okay. FriendMod~
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HitSounds:

1. 00:00:073 (1) - Add a Whistle
2. 00:00:587 (4) - ^
3. 00:00:930 (6) - Add a Whistle in the Repeat and End of the Slider
4. 00:01:444 (1) - Add a Whistle to the End of the Slider
5. 00:02:130 (2) - ^
6. 00:03:500 (5) - Add a Whistle
7. 00:04:530 (3) - ^
8. 00:04:873 (4) - Add a Whistle in the Repeat and End of the Slider
9. 00:06:073 (2) - Add a Whistle to the End of the Slider
10. 00:06:930 (1) - ^
11. 00:07:615 (2) - ^
12. 00:08:301 (1) - Add a Whistle
13. 00:08:644 (3) - Add a Whistle to the End of the Slider

Burning Trance:

1. 00:00:073 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Move this pattern to x:72|y:56 [Grid lvl: 4]. This is for make a symmetry with the note (6) & (2). After of this move the note 00:00:758 (5) to x:256|y:272 [Grid lvl: 3]
2. 00:02:815 (1,2,3,4,5) - Erase this Pattern. And make a Copy-pasta with the pattern Nº1 [00:00:073 (1,2,3,4,5)] And put Ctrl+H & Ctrl+J - Don't forget add the NC And erase the Whistle from the note 00:03:329 (4).
3. 00:05:730 (1,2,3) - This Pattern is B.A.D. Try This

   00:05:730 (1) - x:204|y:268 / 00:06:073 (2) - x:128|y:208 / 00:06:415 (3) - x:96|y:120 [All in Grid lvl: 3]

4. 00:06:415 (3) - Add a Repeat - If you will add It. put a Whistle in the Repeat and End of the Slider
5. 00:09:158 (1) - Remove NC
6. 00:10:015 (3) - Add NC
7. 00:10:358 (4) - Move this note to x:256|y:328 [Grid lvl: 3]
8. 00:10:701 (5) - Put a Copy-pasta with the note 00:10:015 (3) And make a Ctrl+H
9. 00:11:044 (1,2) - Move this Notes to x:90|y:128 [Grid lvl: OFF] Is for make a Symmetry with the end of the Slider 00:09:330 (5). Look This
10. 00:11:558 (x) - Add a note in x:256|y:136
11. 00:11:730 (4,5,6,7,8) - If you make the Symmetry of the Previous-Previous Advice [00:11:044 (1,2)] Move this Pattern to x:345|y:68 [Grid lvl: OFF] After of have the pattern moved. put the notes in a Vertical row.. Like This But Don't use the Distance Snap. Because the first note are Unsgridded.
12. 00:12:330 (9,10,1) - This is so Confused. Please try make This

    00:12:330 (1,2) - x:448|y:280 / 00:12:587 (3) - x:344|y:248 [All in Grid lvl: 3]

13. 00:13:101 (4,5,6,7,8) - Erase this Pattern. And make a Copy-pasta with the pattern 00:11:730 (4,5,6,7,8) And put Ctrl+H & Ctrl+J
14. 00:13:701 (9) - Move this note to x:168|y:64 [Grid lvl: 3]
15. 00:13:958 (1) - Move this note to x:296|y:48 [Grid lvl: 3]
16. 00:14:473 (2) - Move this note to x:456|y:304 [Grid lvl: 3]
17. 00:14:987 (1,2,3,4,5) - Move this Pattern to x:332|y:148 [Grid lvl: 3] And move the note 00:15:501 (3) To the center (x:256|y:192 [Grid lvl: 3])
18. 00:16:530 (1) - Move this note to x:128|y:316 [Grid lvl: OFF] Is for make a Symmetry if you move the note 00:14:473 (2)
19. 00:17:215 (2,3,4,5,6) - Make This
20. 00:18:587 (2,3,4,5,6) - Erase this Pattern. And make a Copy-pasta with the pattern 00:17:215 (2,3,4,5,6) And put a Ctrl+H & Ctrl+R
21. 00:20:473 (1,2,3,4,5) - Erase this Pattern. And make a Copy-pasta with the pattern 00:14:987 (1,2,3,4,5) [Only if you changed to my Last Suggestion] And move the pattern to x:333|y:306
22. 00:22:015 (x) - Add a note in the same place of the Last note. Put a NC and a Finish.
23. 00:43:273 (10) - Erase this Slider And make a Copy-pasta with the Slider 00:42:587 (8) And put Ctrl+H & Ctrl+R
24. 00:44:644 (2) - Erase this Slider And make a Copy-pasta with the Slider 00:43:958 (1) And put Ctrl+H & Ctrl+J
25. 00:57:673 (1) - Move this note to x:360|y:64 [Grid lvl: 3]
26. 00:58:016 (3) - Move this note to x:332|y:244 [Grid lvl: 4]
27. 00:58:187 (4) - Move this note to The same place of the object 00:57:330 (6)
28. 00:58:358 (5,6,7,8) - Erase this Pattern. And make a Copy-pasta with the pattern 00:57:673 (1,2,3,4) And put a Ctrl+H
29. 01:01:444 (3) - Move this note to x:256|y:276 [Grid lvl: 4]
30. 01:01:787 (4) - Move this note to x:176|y:192 [Grid lvl: 4]
31. 01:02:473 (5) - Move this note to The same place of the object 01:01:444 (3)
32. 01:37:958 (7) - lol, I think this note is Out the Stream. Move this more close from the previous note.
33. 01:51:844 (3,4,2) - Dude' Why you never Centrate this.
34. 02:20:644 (5,6) - Nope.

Todo lo que sigue seria lo mismo de mover notas everywhere de aqui para alla pero pienso que de ahora hasta el final los lugares estan bien para si. So...
Good map. Bad places. Good Patterns. Bad Symmetry.
Si tienes dudas o quieres que el Mod sea mas largo por IRC mandame un PM In-Game y hablaremos al respecto ^^
PD: Star~
como quisiera tener una GD aqui.

[BURNIN]
00:17:730 - You may want to add a note here, I don't see the off-rhythm here as beneficial.
00:19:101 - ^
00:20:473 - Yeah not mapping kicks is a bad idea.
00:32:473 (7) - I don't personally find these fun to read. If you're going for stream jumps might as well space them out then and then crl-r
00:44:644 (2) - try to space these two mirrored sliders out a bit more but retaining symmetry so 00:45:330 (3) isn't so close.
01:05:901 (1) - What happned to this hitsounds to this entire section?
01:27:844 (1,2) - Space these out for the reason previously mentioned.
02:22:015 (9,10,11) - Erm yeah.
03:26:816 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - This is not readable without a higher AR.

There are parts of the map that is really solid, but there are others where I don't really know what to say. Overall, a little too many mirrored sliders. I guess you were going for that circular "Solar" feel but there is a point where these get a little over-done.

Nothing else much to say.

Dax, quiero tener hijos con vos ♥

Hmm, nada mal, solo no me gusta el hecho de que muchos patrones son similares a los usados en la version de shiirn, deberias diferenciar mas este map de los otros versiones :>

En realidad, me inspiré mucho en el mapa de Shiirn, pero todo lo que vez es obra de 5 o 6 días de puro esfuerzo y como 4 o 5 horas de mapping por día.

En cuanto al estilo, me gusta así, gracias por la reseña, pero me gustaría más que fuera un mod para hacer un poco más consistente lo que decís vos.

Hi there~~mod from queue~

Burning Trance

1. 00:03:844 (1) - I'd like to add a slider following , heard better
   
2. 00:09:158 (4) - consider to remove it?
3. 00:09:844 - and then add a note here?
4. 00:32:301 (6) - add a nc here because of the change of rhythm ?
5. 00:37:101 (5,6,7) - the beats here is weird because 00:37:787 - should be a note or start a slider, but now ur slider is cut by that.suggest to make a little change:
   
6. 00:38:987 (4,5,1) - here's also the same problem that u beats is against the music. Pay attention to the downbeat at 00:39:844 (2) - , here should be a start but not middle of a combo, and listen to the main melody from 00:38:987, i suppose it's better to change the beat like:
   
7. All right.. the following parts still has similar issues that i really don't recommend to overuse 1/2 beats, despite they're easy to put, that's not very suit for the music. Now when i mod through ur map, the sense u make me felt is " i wanna make a map hard enough, jumps and streams and blabla so on", but not "i wanna make a map which can express the feeling of music". Anyway, till here, it's a good map that if u wanna a rank that's really enough, even better than many others. However, imo, for app means make a map inspired but not only longer and harder than normal ranked map. Shiirn's solar is a great map not due to the difficulty but the sense he expressed. i'm not ask u to follow his beats or patterns but i think u can learn something from that.
8. 00:48:587 - i'd like to add a note here, and also 00:49:273 -
9. 01:00:930 - here're some blanks but no change in music, so maybe u'd better consider here again. Compared with, 01:05:901 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - is really a good use of blanks.
10. 01:21:501 - still suggest to add note and some other similar place, won't mention it again
11. 01:37:273 - add a note?
12. 02:09:673 (3) - i'd like to reduce 2 repeats and add note at 02:10:015 - & 02:10:187 -
13. 02:35:730 (5,6) - imo, this stack may break ur flow so consider to make them like this?
    
14. 02:41:215 (5,6,7,8) - two sliders is better than notes here imo.
15. 03:05:558 (5,1) - omg this jmp is....it must be madness....
16. 04:10:873 - add a note here?
17. 04:54:758 - ^

that's all and gl

/from Queue

[General]

none

[Burning Trance]

00:00:758 (5,6) - try CTRL+R and adjust the place
00:11:730 (4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - try http://puu.sh/pwgU and the same as following rhythm
00:59:387 (2) - try http://puu.sh/pwhK
01:00:073 (4) - try http://puu.sh/pwhS
01:26:473 (1,2) - try http://puu.sh/pwih
01:29:215 (1,2,3,4) - leave with each other. Try not overlap


Basically I'm not going to continue. Just one advice and I hope you can change your map based on it.

"Try not overlap part of the notes." That will make your map looks messy. And what you need to do is to make your map clean.

That's all and good luck!

hi ^^

Good luck ^^

request from All map will be modded


good luck

Hi o/


Good work,maybe you need just a bit of work on the pattern but for the rest good map!

Hi~
These are all suggestion.

[Burning Trance]
Because these are AR9, somehow it is possible to read.
But spacing of them are very hard to read.

00:01:101 (6)　　　　　remove whistle on reverse arrow
00:06:687 (3)　　　　　add whistle on slider's end
00:12:244 (9)~(10)　Hard to read. I suggest stack to (1).
00:13:101 (2)　　　　　This anti-jumping is very confusing.
00:30:244 (1)~(8)　　How about this?00:44:644 (2)　　　　　copy&paste (1). Ctrl+H Ctrl+J
02:23:901 (1),(2)　　Switch New combo. If possible I suggest design changes.
04:10:873 (x)　　　　　add note
That's all.

I wish your map is Ranked.
bye~

Here are my suggestions =]
[Burning Trance]

1. 00:47:901 (X) - Add a note?
2. 01:12:244 (5,6) - Ctrl + R?
3. 01:52:701 (1,2) - Ctrl + R?
4. 02:01:958 (4,5) - Changing this to
   SPOILER

   
   ?
5. 02:03:330 (4,5) - Change it like in 02:01:958 (4,5)
6. 02:09:673 (3) - I think it would be better if it is like this:
   SPOILER

   http://puu.sh/q3u6
7. 02:22:015 (9) - New combo?
8. 03:00:758 (X) - Add a note?
9. 03:01:101 (1,2,3,4) - These sliders are not identical, I think it is better to rotate the first slider to make the other three, i.e. copy the first slider and rotate it for 30 degree to get the second slider and so on
10. 03:05:558 (5) - I think it plays better to stack it to 03:05:473 (4) -
11. 03:05:901 (1,2,3,4) - replace it with exactly the same pattern in 03:05:215 (1,2,3,4,5) and reflect along y-axis?
12. 03:24:073 (4) - right 1 grid
13. 04:02:815 (1,2,3,4) - Making these sliders parallel? They are not parallel now.
14. 04:29:730 (5,6) - Ctrl + R?

There are just suggestion~ good map =]
Good luck =]

Time to take over the page.

General

1. It is very clear that you're attempting to mimic Shiirn's map and make it longer. Unfortunately, the map both strays too far away and much too close to the original, creating sections that play terribly and sections that are borderline plagiarism. Streams in the map are randomly placed at times. Spacing is all over the place, and not in a good way. Huge sections are copy pasted making the map look lazily constructed. Clear beats are often skipped in favor of the more obscure. Remember, for an approval map, undermapping is unnecessary.
2. The background isn't centered at all. This is extremely ugly and easy to fix.

Burning Trance

1. 00:11:558 - A clear drumroll starts here yet nothing is there.
2. 00:12:930 - Again, emptiness where beats could be. The spacing here is horrible as well (the next object appears to come 1/2 later, but it is actually 1/1
3. 00:13:615 (7,8) - This stack does not play well as it requires the player to press then press and hold. This would be better as either three presses or one press and hold.
4. 00:14:301 - Emptiness.
5. 00:14:987 (1,2,3,4,5) - This does not follow the beat intuitively. The (1,2) should be duplicated for (3,4), leaving the (5) a repeat slider. http://puu.sh/q9aq Also, these objects are not symmetrical.
6. 00:16:358 (5,1,2) - This is a great example of how the spacing hurts the map. The distance from 5 to 1 makes 1 to 2 an antijump.
7. 00:17:044 - Emptiness.
8. 00:18:415 - Emptiness.
9. 00:19:787 - Emptiness again. This happens a lot.
10. 00:20:473 (1,2,3,4,5) - Again, doesn't follow the beat intuitively and isn't symmetrical.
11. 00:30:244 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - This is a time where irregular spacing is more frustrating than beneficial.
12. 00:32:987 - This particular section's spacing is a very small 0.8x. This map is made for experienced players - this spacing will bore them. Turn it up a bit. This goes for the rest of the map as well.
13. 00:38:987 (4,5) - These sliders are remarkably ugly.
14. 00:51:673 (6,1,2) - Observe how these contrast with 00:45:330 (3,4,5,6). Beats are nearly identical yet shifted 1/2 for seemingly no reason. Doesn't feel right like this. Having the sliders start on the white ticks feels better during gameplay.
15. 00:54:930 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - This entire section is virtually identical to Shiirn's. The beat and hitsounds are nearly the same. The funny part is this section is actually quite nice, besides (1,2) and (4,5) not being properly symmetrical.
16. 01:00:415 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - This section is filled with nasty antijumps and undermapping.
17. 01:03:501 (3,4,5) - This flows terribly. The 3 slider requires the player to not move to the left, making 3 to 4 a large jump with a sharp change in direction. Then, the player has to turn around AGAIN at 4 to 5. Frustrating, doesn't play well, and the rectangular nature of the objects is bland.
18. 01:07:273 (6) - Ugly slider. Make it curve better.
19. 01:11:215 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Antijumps that look like streams. At least have them not overlapping each other.
20. 01:13:958 (1,2,3,4) - Antijumps that are better off not overlapping.
21. 01:22:187 - Emptiness.
22. 01:23:730 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - These look and play awkwardly.
23. 01:26:987 - Emptiness.
24. 01:27:673 - Emptiness.
25. 01:28:358 - Emptiness.
26. 01:29:044 - Emptiness.
27. 01:30:587 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - This sure looks familiar... oh wait, this is what Shiirn does at 00:57:675 (1,2,3,4,5,6).
28. 01:33:158 - Emptiness.
29. 01:37:273 - Emptiness.
30. 01:37:444 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6) - This stream needs reworking. The sliders are not placed in intuitive locations.
31. 01:51:330 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2) - Again, these antijumps would be better not there.
32. 01:53:730 (1,2,3,4,5) - Again, this pattern could follow the beat better.
33. 01:59:215 (1,2,3,4,5) - Same pattern, should follow the beat better.
34. 02:01:443 (2,3) - No need for antijump.
35. 02:02:815 (2,3) - Antijump not needed.
36. 02:04:701 (1,2,3,4,5,7) - Again, same pattern that Shiirn used before.
37. 02:05:901 (6,7,1,2,3,4) - Awkward/Bad spacing
38. 02:08:301 (3,4,5) - Then suddenly a stream? In the midst of all these antijumps?
39. 02:09:673 (3) - This having more than one repeat is unexpected.
40. 02:10:358 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6) - This is awful. Not only are the sliders in unintuitive locations, but there is a random, ridiculous stream jump in the midst of it.
41. 02:21:930 (8,1) - These should not create a stream jump.
42. 02:23:901 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - The spacing on this is awkward.
43. 02:24:073 (2) - This is stuck underneath the middle of a previous slider. It'd be way better if it was either underneath the endpoint or the starting point.
44. 02:25:444 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Pattern with frustrating spacing because of the jump.
45. 02:28:015 - Emptiness.
46. 02:32:130 - Emptiness.
47. 02:33:501 - Emptiness.
48. 02:34:187 - Emptiness.
49. 02:34:873 - Sure is empty around here.
50. 02:36:415 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Unnecessary antijumps, silly jump, bad section.
51. 02:38:301 - Emptiness.
52. 02:38:987 - Emptiness.
53. 02:43:101 - Emptiness.
54. 02:43:701 (8,6) - Random 1/4 sliders during a stream will make it frustrating to play.
55. 02:47:387 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - The same Shiirn pattern with linear sliders.
56. 02:51:330 - Emptiness.
57. 02:52:701 - Emptiness.
58. 02:54:244 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - These antijumps add nothing to the map. That jump is bad too.
59. 02:58:701 (2,3,4,5) - Better off not being antijumps.
60. 03:03:330 (6,7,1) - NASTY antijump.
61. 03:05:215 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4) - The stream jumps shouldn't be there.
62. 03:11:901 - Emptiness.
63. 03:17:387 - Emptiness.
64. 03:22:873 - Emptiness.
65. 03:26:816 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - Then suddenly, insanely spaced jumps for no reason! This could very well kill the map entirely. Turn down the spacing by a lot.
66. 03:49:101 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4) - This is almost identical to what shiirn did. However, shiirn's version avoids the unnecessary circle to slider stream jump which is better. Regardless, you should think of something new instead.
67. 03:51:158 (3,4) - These sliders are getting covered up by the previous hitbursts. Make them easier to see.
68. 03:55:787 - Emptiness.
69. 04:01:273 - Emptiness.
70. 04:01:444 (1,2) - Increase the spacing between these two.
71. 04:04:187 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - This pattern again?! Bad antijumps, bad jump, bad bad bad.
72. 04:06:758 - Emptiness.
73. 04:08:301 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - This would be better without irregular spacing.
74. 04:10:530 - Emptiness.
75. 04:10:873 - Emptiness.
76. 04:11:044 (1,2,1,2) - The spacing between these is a little too big.
77. 04:11:730 (1) - Remove new combo.
78. 04:18:244 (2,3,4,5) - Better off not antijumps.
79. 04:19:615 (2,3,4,5) - Better off not antijumps.
80. 04:28:701 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Enough with the antijumps!
81. 04:31:444 (1,2,3,4) - No need for antijumps here.
82. 04:37:101 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Oh look it's this pattern again. We just saw this 33 seconds ago. It is still bad for the same reasons.
83. 04:39:673 - Emptiness.
84. 04:45:158 - Emptiness.
85. 04:45:501 - Empty
86. 04:45:844 - Empty Empty
87. 04:46:187 - Empty Empty Empty
88. 04:46:530 - Empty Empty Empty Empty
89. 04:55:273 (5,1) - Make it so the spacing isn't so ridiculous. (Disclaimer - I like the ending, but I know this will screw up a LOT of players. No need to have it so harsh.)
    
    Oh, and when designing a map for osu! and CTB, try not to make the CTB parts so obvious.
90. 00:35:044 (3,4,5,6) - Obvious CTB manipulation.
91. 00:50:644 (1,2,3,4) - Obvious CTB manipulation.
92. 01:22:358 (1,2,3,4) - Obvious CTB manipulation.
93. 04:41:215 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Extremely obvious CT manipulation. This doesn't play well in standard.

This mod doesn't point out everything. Hopefully it will set your map in the right direction.

I quite like how some slider do play, but there are things quite impossible in standards and you maybe centered it TOO MUCH around the center that many notes seems to appear at the same place. (Drop symmetry in some parts, Avoid overlapping too many notes (even a bit distant)
I do think some parts are a bit easy for an extra-like diff, but it's not a problem.
I didn't play Shiirn version of the map, but making it too similiar... yeah it's bad " Don't use others mapping styles, Take them as examples and create yours "

Ps: played, and you have even copied the reason O_O

^ Real Mod.

Perdón hombre... tu mapa está muy bien hecho, no puedo hacer nada, así que acá tenes una estrella.

Oh well, hi from mod queue :3

Tried to mod, but everything seems fine~

M4M

00:01:444 (1,2) - Maybe make rhythm like this ? http://puu.sh/sI9u
00:02:815 (1) - whistle.
00:32:987 (1) - Head slider add finish.
00:46:358 (6) - it's not symmetric triangle like 00:45:330 (3,4,5).
00:55:958 (3) - remove clap tail slider. (cuz like after this rhythm.)
00:57:330 (6) - ^
02:11:387 (5) - end of slider add finish.
02:47:044 (3) - remove clap tail slider. (similar above reason.)
04:13:444 (3) - ^
04:14:815 (3) - ^
04:42:073 (6,8) - 1 grid up.

That's all I can find.

From .:Let those mod those maps:.

If you're expecting a mod like the one Charles gave you, PM me. Otherwise I'll give you something general cuz this really needs a lot of work.

From .:Let those mod those maps:.

[General]
I don't even know where to start with this one. It's obvious you've been influenced by Shiirn's version of this song, but it's also obvious you're trying to map like him and not too much like him. However, you fail to understand basic concepts like spacing, time between objects, and irregular patterning, and thus I still feel it's too early for you to try to make a map for approval.
I'm not sure how much of Charles445's mod you took into consideration, but I'm just going to point out a bunch of stuff cuz someone needs to rip this apart in order for it to be rebuilt.
I recommend you storyboard because over four minutes of the same background is boring. You also need to fix the background image because an off-centre celestial body like this when seems to want to be in the centre is extremely ugly.

[Burning Trance]
HP6 please.
00:00:073 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - What is this mapped to?
00:02:815 (1,2,3,4,5) - And this?
00:04:873 (4) - 00:05:558 should be a circle or a beginning of a slider to signify "Ooh".
00:11:730 (4,5,6,7,8) - Music doesn't justify (7) here.
00:14:473 (4) - Why kickback when you've been using streams all this time? It doesn't fit.
00:14:987 (1,2,3,4,5) - Too closely spaced. In addition, the rotation of 00:15:673 (4) - makes it awkward.
00:19:787 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - What's the point of this different note pattern when the music doesn't change?
00:28:873 (3) - Spacing awkward. Much better if it's nearer (1) and top left corner. Take care to space properly for 00:30:244 (1).
00:29:558 (4) - Take ^ and apply 180 degree rotation.
00:32:301 (1,2,3,4) - Don't understand your hitsounding
00:38:301 - Add circle.
00:40:358 (5,6) - You're not mapping to the "Ooh ooh" with this.
00:41:044 (1,2,3,4,5) - Star looks horrible. Make a regular one with 144 degree rotations about the origin. Also, 00:41:558 (4,5,6) - has awkward spacing. And so does 00:41:901 (6,7).
00:43:787 - Add circle.
00:43:958 (1,2) - Poor spacing.
00:47:901 - Add circle.
00:49:273 - Add circle.
00:50:644 (1,2,3,4) - You used this pattern fifteen seconds ago, and it's even less effective right now.
00:51:330 (5,6,1,2) - These sliders seem randomly placed; I don't mean on the map, I mean at this current time.
00:53:558 (1,2,3,4) - Hitsounds?
00:54:930 (1) - Finish head.
00:57:673 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - What is this I don't even.
00:59:387 (2,3) - (2) doesn't lead into (3) very well.
01:00:415 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - Too much space. Need more sliders or circles.
01:07:787 (7,8,9,10,1) - Recommend you increase spacing here.
01:22:187 - Add circle.
01:22:358 (1,2,3,4) - No thanks.
01:23:730 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Boring pattern.
01:26:987 - Add circle, stack to (2) perhaps, or centre but you'll have to space out (1,2).
01:33:158 - Add circle.
01:37:444 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6) - Completely mapped wrong. Second part should start at 01:38:130, but not possible since you decided to kickback (7). In addition, at 01:38:815 there should be a circle, but that's not possible due to 01:38:644 (6).
01:48:415 - Spinner from here to 01:49:444 would be nice. You have 0 spinners right now.
01:50:301 - Add circle.
01:50:815 - Add circle.
01:51:673 - Add circle.
01:52:187 - Add circle.
01:53:044 - Add circle.
01:53:558 - Add circle.
01:55:787 - Ad- you know what I wanna say.
01:56:301 -
01:57:158 -
01:57:673 -
01:58:530 -
01:59:044 -
02:01:273 -
02:01:787 - and for every space until 02:09:673.
02:17:215 (1,2,3,4) - Spacing is too small.
02:22:015 (1,2,3,4) - Don't understand your hitsounding. Positioning is a bit better though.
02:23:901 (1,2,3,4,5) - You used a star here at this position, and 02:24:758 (6,7) - is very similar. Remap.
02:25:444 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Boring pattern.
02:28:015 - Add circle.
02:32:130 - Add circle.
02:33:501 - Add circle.
02:36:415 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Bad, bad spacing, bad pattern.
02:39:158 (1,2,3) - Sliders seem to be going in random directions. This randomness is bad.
02:43:273 (3) - New combo.
02:43:873 (10,1) - Unreasonable.
02:44:644 (1) - to 02:49:958 (4) - reminds me of Shiirn's map. It's almost an exact rip.
02:51:330 - Add circle.
02:52:701 - Add circle.
02:54:244 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Please no.
02:56:644 (3) - Make slider, continue with what you did with (1,2).
03:02:987 (4,5,6,7) - Why aren't you making these stand out at all?
03:26:816 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1) - Begins to look like an approval map.
03:39:501 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - Real hard not to compare with Shiirn's version.
03:49:101 (1,2) - Fix obvious stream spacing problem.
03:55:787 - Add circle.
04:01:273 - Add circle.
04:04:187 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Mhm. Yeah.
04:06:758 - Add circle.
04:15:158 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Stacking pattern doesn't match.
04:41:215 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Er, what is this?
04:45:158 - Add circle.

This is just a basic rundown. You've got a long way to go. Best of luck.

Edit post is the best way :3

Re-mapped some parts on my own accord

Thanks those, I really need more mods like that.

WOW how beauty map!!

Thank you Strawberry :3

[Suggestion]

The ds in this map are clutter, I thnik you can check all the ds by yourself one more time.

[General]

If you don't have SB, tick the letter box during breaks.
And delete the .osb

[Burning Trance]

00:06:415-(3) let it return to 00:06:758

00:15:673-(4) slider end move to x:248 y:224

00:20:015 add a note on white line ?

00:45:367-(2) you can use ctrl C (1) + ctrl V + ctrl H + ctrl J to make it orderliness.

00:46:358-(4) ^

00:47:901 add a note

00:49:444-(1) you can make it more far with 00:49:273-(4)

00:52:015 - you can change the slider to a note

00:52:358 - move the slider to 00:52:178 then makes it return.

02:19:958-02:21:158 (1)-(8) not cool /.\

02:22:701-02:23:901 give me more originality!

02:43:873-(8) 02:43:958-(1) this ds....

03:58:701-(1) to (8) not cool /.\

04:02:815-(1) to (4) ctrl C + ctrl V

thats I can find , good luck :3!