1. Offsert are 25.584, 33.268 and 53.162
2. Does not fit new approval lines: 6 minutes of length and 18+ mil of score.so you should make it go for ranking? I'm not sure, cause the rule was added now... so i don't know if 2-diff mapsets are permitted.

1. 00:32:641 (9,10,11,12,13,1,2,3,4,5) - Use a more well-ordered mode to place them?
   
   SPOILER

   
2. 00:38:324 (1,2,3,4) - Was to be a diamond... originally. Equally space them?
3. [Rhythm]
   
   1. 00:31:694 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - No need to undermap a stream
   2. 00:38:088 (4) - Move in 00:37:930 (3) - . The stream isn't the logical
   3. 00:41:167 (3,4,5,6) - NO 1/4 Doublets when you don't need one.
   4. 00:47:483 (1,2,3,4,5) - How the stream should fit there?
   5. 00:52:378 (7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,15,16,1) - A jump will fit MUCH better. Is overmapped.
   6. I can say it's fastidiously overmapped. Were mai olde jumps ended? the stay particularly good in part you overmapped

AIBat v2.0 wrote:

Timing Sections
Inconsistency in uninherited (red) timing sections:

- [Knock It Off]
Red timing sections at:
00:21:589, BPM of 190.000
00:33:273, BPM of 190.000
00:53:167, BPM of 190.000

- [KS's Taiko]
Red timing sections at:
00:21:588, BPM of 190.000
00:33:272, BPM of 190.000
00:53:166, BPM of 190.000

Leorda wrote:

[General]
Inconsistent timing sections. You have to make it consistent on each diff ->Fix


[Knock It Off]
02:41:009 (6,7,8) - This note is touch the HP Bar ->Fix
02:59:165 (8) - Unsnapped slider ->Fix

Evil_Twilight wrote:

Knock It Off

00:32:705 (10,12) - 加兩條normal hitsound的綠線，音量我是用70%
00:34:679 (1) - 加clap
00:34:836 (2) - 拿掉clap
00:35:310 (4) - 加clap
00:35:468 (5) - 拿掉clap
00:37:204 (1) - 加clap
00:37:363 (2) - 拿掉clap
00:37:521 (3) - 加clap
00:37:836 (2) - ^
00:39:731 (1) - ^
00:39:888 (2) - 拿掉clap
00:40:362 (4) - 加clap
00:41:784 (9) - 加finish
00:42:100 (1) - 加clap
00:42:416 (5) - 拿掉clap
00:42:573 (6) - 加clap
00:43:047 (1) - 加finish
00:48:100 (7) - 加whitsle
00:54:888 (x) - 我會把 00:54:967 (5) 移到這裡然後加clap
00:55:046 (6) - 如果你有改上面的話這顆的clap拿掉
00:55:204 (7) - 如果你有改上面的話這顆加clap
00:55:363 (8) - 如果你有改上面的話這顆拿掉clap
00:55:520 (10) - 加clap
00:55:679 (1) - 加finish
00:56:941 (1) - 加clap
00:57:257 (3) - 拿掉clap
00:57:415 (x) - 我會把 00:57:494 (5) 移到這裡然後加clap
00:57:730 (7) - 如果你有改上面的話這顆加clap
00:58:046 (10) - 如果你有改上面的話這顆加clap
00:58:204 (1) - 加finish
00:59:467 (1) - ^
01:00:731 (1) - ^
01:01:362 (6) - ^
01:01:994 (1) - ^
01:03:257 (1) - ^
01:13:362 (1) - ^
01:23:467 (1) - 拿掉NC
01:23:783 (2) - 加NC
01:24:730 ~ 01:33:414 音效跟前面差不多
01:33:573 (1) - 加finish
01:38:625 (1) - ^
01:39:888 (5) - ^
01:43:678 (x) - 加顆note放finish
01:43:519 (9) - 有加的話這顆拿掉finish
02:01:520 (x), 02:01:836 (x) - 我會在這兩個地方加note，02:01:678 (5) - 這顆就刪掉
02:26:231 (10) - 加whistle --
02:26:310 (11) - 拿掉whistle | - 我會這樣下，後面也是
02:26:467 (11) - 加whistle --
03:06:099 (x) - 加顆note和finish，把前面kiai time的效果移到這邊，03:05:705 (11) - 這顆的finish就拿掉]

1. this song needs sv change
2. 00:00:000 - 00:33:258 : 0.75x
3. 00:33:258 - 00:43:047 : 0.85x
4. 00:43:047 - 00:53:309 : 0.75x
5. 00:53:309 - 01:03:257 : 0.85x
6. 01:03:257 - 01:23:783 : 1x
7. 01:23:783 - 01:33:573 : 0.85x
8. 01:33:573 - 01:55:046 : break
9. 01:55:046 - 02:05:152 : 0.5x
10. 02:05:152 - 02:15:257 : 0.75x
11. 02:15:257 - 02:25:362 : 0.85x
12. 02:25:362 - 02:55:678 : 1x
13. 02:55:678 - 03:05:783 : 0.85x
14. 03:05:783 till end if u wanna map: 0.75x
15. also, kiai end at 02:55:678.
16. and why not map full song, it's approval anyways
17. because this 1.0x full song and sometimes 0.5x totally doesn't fit the song.

1. major problems
2. 00:38:784 (4) - fix shape plz
3. 00:40:442 - should be 1/4 here not next one
4. 01:08:309 (1) - what
5. 01:21:257 (2,3,4) - what's this
6. 01:42:574 (1,2,3,4) - it's 1/2, not 1/4.

疾走感を感じる！

Snowy Dream wrote:

[Knock It Off]
00:43:363 (2,3) - make the spacing a bit larger,ppl may be confused ,think that whether 1/4 or 1/2 ->但是，這應該也不是一次就能PASS的，所以RE幾次應該是沒問題的
00:44:626 (5,6) - as above ...
00:45:890 (5,6) - ...
...
01:25:994 (1,2) - move to (x:476 y:180)? being coverd with sliders looks bad ->這樣就沒有折返的感覺了
01:42:652 (2) - moving to 01:42:730 sounds better ->Fix
01:42:967 (4) - something as above ->Fix
01:42:415 (5) - needs a note here :< ->Fix
02:35:310 (4) - not so good... ->o:?
02:45:099 (7,8,9) - separate from the stream ->應該是不需要了
--------------------------------------------------
OK.That's all :3
Excellent Mapset

1. 00:25:205 (7) - 1grid↓
2. 01:14:546 (7) - remove this circle or move closer to previous slider, it's really hard to read.
3. 01:19:599 (7) - ^
4. 01:42:574 (1,1,1,1) - shouldn't jump here, it's seriously unbalance

Apricot wrote:

1. 00:25:205 (7) - 1grid↓ >Fix
2. 01:14:546 (7) - remove this circle or move closer to previous slider, it's really hard to read. >Fix
3. 01:19:599 (7) - ^ >Fix
4. 01:42:574 (1,1,1,1) - shouldn't jump here, it's seriously unbalance >Fix

1. BG3.jpg:
   
   
   1. Tweening effect works extremely well here - all you need to change is "0" to "2" like this:
      
      

      F,0,21573,22837,0,1

      to
      

      F,2,21573,22837,0,1

   2. The following line, the 0.9881329 could just be changed to 1 though, no need to set a decimal value like that:
      
      

       F,0,22837,28205,1,0.9881329
       F,0,28205,33258,0.9881329,0

2. BG GLOW2.jpg - you need to make this image glow once more on 01:23:783, just append this line after your looping code:
   
   

    F,0,83753,84099,1,0
    S,0,83753,84099,1,1.1

3. BG GLOW.jpg must still be present while it's doing the transition with BG2.JPG - the code is this:
   
   

    F,0,103362,104862,1,1

4. Do you need a pulse on 03:05:941? Would be much dramatic if it's not pulsing there so a stop will be formed~

1. 00:23:467 (3) - (optional) Put in ~x:155 y:8? I think it's better if the back-and-forth is arranged this way (gives more flow towards your next pattern)
2. 00:24:731 (3,4,5) - Move to ~x:391 y:295 to make these look correctly in play mode (due to stacking's nature)
3. 00:29:785 (3,4,5) - Same thing as above here, but after moving these three to the bottom-right don't forget to move (7) to the right a bit as well~
4. 00:32:942 (12) - Not really sure with the clap here... Perhaps try to put the clap in (11) instead to give a more authentic sound?
5. 00:34:205 (6) - ...imo this doesn't flow really well if (6)'s start is placed in a same height with (5)'s end - try to move it upward a bit and reduce the curve's angle:
   
   SPOILER

   
6. 00:39:258 (6) - Same as above, but downward this time (:
7. 00:40:678 (7,2,3) - Uhm, an antijump here doesn't really work well imo... I'd make the spacing consistent like this, it won't ruin your diamond pattern xD
   
   SPOILER

   
8. 00:41:704 (8) - (optional) Consider moving this leftward a bit (to form an arc), it flows better imo~
9. 00:43:047 (1,2,3) - Again, whyyyyy antijump >_< - if you can make (3) stacked to your next 00:43:836 (1) it'll get the song's feeling MUCH more, really :3
10. 00:47:468 (1,2,3,4,5) - Delete (4)? The rhythm feels better this way (the piano discontinued there though)
11. 00:51:100 (7) - Again here, rather than stacking to the previous triangle I suggest to stack to your next blue (1) xD
12. 00:52:363 (7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,15,16,1) - (optional) Uhm, it'll be more beautiful if the stream's second half is made encircling (6) imo (:
    
    SPOILER

    
13. 01:02:152 (2,3,4) - (optional) You can play with circular movement here, select all three and CTRL+R this AND
14. 01:02:704 (7,8) - CTRL+R this also~
15. 01:03:257 (1) - Why don't you add another bezier waypoint like this for extra twist? Flows great though xD
    

    120,236,63257,6,0,B|104:244|80:240|80:240|88:264|88:264|64:264|64:264|60:292|60:292|36:304,1,100,4|0

16. 01:07:046 (1,2,3,4,5) - Make these five encircle (9)? It'll be more attractive that way I think :3
17. 01:13:678 (2) - Stack to (3)'s end (instead of start) flows better imo, it's not a good place for a stack imo...
18. 01:18:888 (3,4,5,6) - This part's flow (especially (4,5)) can be improved by creating something antagonistic like this imo:
    
    SPOILER

    
19. 01:20:388 (5,6) - If you do above suggestion, don't forget to stack (6) to the previous (5) to avoid spacing confusion (:
20. 01:28:362 (6) - I highly recommend to stack this with (3)'s start instead - yes, now back-and-forth plays really well here :3
21. 01:31:835 (7) - (optional) Try to rotate it by -10° selection centre to avoid overlap?
22. 01:34:678 (x) - Rhythm - A circle is definitely required here, you can just put it stacked above 01:35:309 (4) though xD
23. 01:37:362 (1) - Put it in ~x:284 y:360, so it'll flow better with your previous slider (because it's not parallel)? Don't forget to adjust (2,3,4)'s angle though :3
24. 01:37:994 (5,6,7,8,9,10,11) - Why don't you make the stream's second half curved also, orz ._.
    
    SPOILER

    
25. 01:41:783 (3) - This somewhat hold slider can be counted as a slider speed change orz, I recommend a new combo on (3) - it won't hurt (:
26. 01:58:836 (2,3,4,5,6) - There are only quadruple (not quintuple) coming from the song... Yes, quintuple can be used, but the rhythm MUST be like this:
    
    SPOILER

    
27. 02:03:257 (4,5,6,7,8) - No need for another pentagon after your last one I think, I suggest a star-shaped jump instead~ (it fits the music very much and you'll just need to play around with CTRL+R)
28. 02:07:362 (9) - (optional) Put in ~x:368 y:336, so there'll be an accelerated spacing? Will be more intuitive this way imo (:
29. 02:09:888 (9) - Same here, try to apply accelerated spacing as well (it fits the synth :3)
30. 02:15:573 (2,3,4,5) - Try to use a manual-stacking like this? Looks more charming in play mode~
    
    SPOILER

    
31. 02:22:599 (9) - Please move to ~x:403 y:219, so the stream won't lose its bezier flow >_<
32. 02:27:889 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,10) - (optional) Actually you can play with parallelity here xD
    
    SPOILER

    
33. 02:35:152 (3) - Again, I don't really recommend to put this slider's start in the same x-axis with (2)'s start - I'd move this slider to ~x:340 y:148 instead...
34. 02:42:336 (1) - (optional) Move to ~x:366 y:302, AND:
35. 02:42:414 (2) - Move to ~x:320 y:321? An arc flows cute here I think (:
36. 02:51:178 (1,2,3) - (optional) (1,2,3) flows better like this I think: (a reason why it flows good is parallelity)
    
    SPOILER

    
37. 02:53:309 (2) - CTRL+R? orz, your current slider formation is very allowing for a CTRL+R (:
38. 02:55:362 (3) - Refer to my suggestion on 02:35:152
39. 03:06:099 (1) - Uhm, a finish at least works here imo :3

Niva wrote:

Hi Rein~ Here's my promised mod, sorry for being quite late orz ._.
(length-wise it's not marathon enough orz... But let me try to mod: )

[General]

-> Add "records" to tags after "creation", the BMS label "creation records" are written in one union Fix

[Storyboard] Fix

1. BG3.jpg:
   
   
   1. Tweening effect works extremely well here - all you need to change is "0" to "2" like this:
      
      

      F,0,21573,22837,0,1

      to
      

      F,2,21573,22837,0,1

   2. The following line, the 0.9881329 could just be changed to 1 though, no need to set a decimal value like that:
      
      

       F,0,22837,28205,1,0.9881329
       F,0,28205,33258,0.9881329,0

2. BG GLOW2.jpg - you need to make this image glow once more on 01:23:783, just append this line after your looping code:
   
   

    F,0,83753,84099,1,0
    S,0,83753,84099,1,1.1

3. BG GLOW.jpg must still be present while it's doing the transition with BG2.JPG - the code is this:
   
   

    F,0,103362,104862,1,1

4. Do you need a pulse on 03:05:941? Would be much dramatic if it's not pulsing there so a stop will be formed~

[Knock It Off]

1. 00:23:467 (3) - (optional) Put in ~x:155 y:8? I think it's better if the back-and-forth is arranged this way (gives more flow towards your next pattern) Fix
2. 00:24:731 (3,4,5) - Move to ~x:391 y:295 to make these look correctly in play mode (due to stacking's nature) Fix
3. 00:29:785 (3,4,5) - Same thing as above here, but after moving these three to the bottom-right don't forget to move (7) to the right a bit as well~ Fix
4. 00:32:942 (12) - Not really sure with the clap here... Perhaps try to put the clap in (11) instead to give a more authentic sound? Fix
5. 00:34:205 (6) - ...imo this doesn't flow really well if (6)'s start is placed in a same height with (5)'s end - try to move it upward a bit and reduce the curve's angle: Fix
   
   SPOILER

   
6. 00:39:258 (6) - Same as above, but downward this time (: Fix
7. 00:40:678 (7,2,3) - Uhm, an antijump here doesn't really work well imo... I'd make the spacing consistent like this, it won't ruin your diamond pattern xD Fix
   
   SPOILER

   
8. 00:41:704 (8) - (optional) Consider moving this leftward a bit (to form an arc), it flows better imo~ Fix
9. 00:43:047 (1,2,3) - Again, whyyyyy antijump >_< - if you can make (3) stacked to your next 00:43:836 (1) it'll get the song's feeling MUCH more, really :3 well,but its good I think...
10. 00:47:468 (1,2,3,4,5) - Delete (4)? The rhythm feels better this way (the piano discontinued there though) Fix
11. 00:51:100 (7) - Again here, rather than stacking to the previous triangle I suggest to stack to your next blue (1) xD so,no change here
12. 00:52:363 (7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,15,16,1) - (optional) Uhm, it'll be more beautiful if the stream's second half is made encircling (6) imo (: Fix
    
    SPOILER

    
13. 01:02:152 (2,3,4) - (optional) You can play with circular movement here, select all three and CTRL+R this AND Fix
14. 01:02:704 (7,8) - CTRL+R this also~ Fix
15. 01:03:257 (1) - Why don't you add another bezier waypoint like this for extra twist? Flows great though xD Fix
    

    120,236,63257,6,0,B|104:244|80:240|80:240|88:264|88:264|64:264|64:264|60:292|60:292|36:304,1,100,4|0

16. 01:07:046 (1,2,3,4,5) - Make these five encircle (9)? It'll be more attractive that way I think :3 I want keep straight feel
17. 01:13:678 (2) - Stack to (3)'s end (instead of start) flows better imo, it's not a good place for a stack imo... Fix
18. 01:18:888 (3,4,5,6) - This part's flow (especially (4,5)) can be improved by creating something antagonistic like this imo: Fix
    
    SPOILER

    
19. 01:20:388 (5,6) - If you do above suggestion, don't forget to stack (6) to the previous (5) to avoid spacing confusion (: Fix
20. 01:28:362 (6) - I highly recommend to stack this with (3)'s start instead - yes, now back-and-forth plays really well here :3 Fix
21. 01:31:835 (7) - (optional) Try to rotate it by -10° selection centre to avoid overlap? Fix
22. 01:34:678 (x) - Rhythm - A circle is definitely required here, you can just put it stacked above 01:35:309 (4) though xD Fix
23. 01:37:362 (1) - Put it in ~x:284 y:360, so it'll flow better with your previous slider (because it's not parallel)? Don't forget to adjust (2,3,4)'s angle though :3 Fix
24. 01:37:994 (5,6,7,8,9,10,11) - Why don't you make the stream's second half curved also, orz ._. Fix
    
    SPOILER

    
25. 01:41:783 (3) - This somewhat hold slider can be counted as a slider speed change orz, I recommend a new combo on (3) - it won't hurt (: Fix
26. 01:58:836 (2,3,4,5,6) - There are only quadruple (not quintuple) coming from the song... Yes, quintuple can be used, but the rhythm MUST be like this: I dont understand here....your rhythm is a little weird
    
    SPOILER

    
27. 02:03:257 (4,5,6,7,8) - No need for another pentagon after your last one I think, I suggest a star-shaped jump instead~ (it fits the music very much and you'll just need to play around with CTRL+R) Fix
28. 02:07:362 (9) - (optional) Put in ~x:368 y:336, so there'll be an accelerated spacing? Will be more intuitive this way imo (: Fix
29. 02:09:888 (9) - Same here, try to apply accelerated spacing as well (it fits the synth :3) Fix
30. 02:15:573 (2,3,4,5) - Try to use a manual-stacking like this? Looks more charming in play mode~ Fix
    
    SPOILER

    
31. 02:22:599 (9) - Please move to ~x:403 y:219, so the stream won't lose its bezier flow >_< Fix
32. 02:27:889 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,10) - (optional) Actually you can play with parallelity here xD Fix
    
    SPOILER

    
33. 02:35:152 (3) - Again, I don't really recommend to put this slider's start in the same x-axis with (2)'s start - I'd move this slider to ~x:340 y:148 instead... no change~_~
34. 02:42:336 (1) - (optional) Move to ~x:366 y:302, AND: Fix
35. 02:42:414 (2) - Move to ~x:320 y:321? An arc flows cute here I think (: Fix
36. 02:51:178 (1,2,3) - (optional) (1,2,3) flows better like this I think: (a reason why it flows good is parallelity) I want this pattern all same as above
    
    SPOILER

    
37. 02:53:309 (2) - CTRL+R? orz, your current slider formation is very allowing for a CTRL+R (: Fix
38. 02:55:362 (3) - Refer to my suggestion on 02:35:152 like above
39. 03:06:099 (1) - Uhm, a finish at least works here imo :3 Fix

...uhm, overall I see a really creative patterns (02:46:836 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) for example) on this map, but on the same time I also see there's still much space for improvement >_<

Good luck Rein (:

Kawayi Rika wrote:

Hi ~ Rein ~

Mod time for my luck Queue ~



Red : Must be fixed
Pink : Should be fixed
Purple : Just suggestions

[Knock It Off]

1. 00:32:626 (9) - Add new combo looks better. Fix
2. 01:35:941 - Add a circle,don't break beat here. Fix
3. 01:40:599 - Add a circle sound better. 這邊我想比照前面的節奏，而且這個效果音其實很小，我覺得沒有必要表現出來
4. 01:59:704 - ^ 這個地方沒有音效啊:O
5. 02:04:520 - ^ Fix
6. 02:09:415 (8,9,10) - Change same spacing? 這邊的間距是刻意的
7. 02:24:098 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11) - sound weird to me,try like this rhythm. 換了另一種旋律
   

Hope this can help you ~

Good luck and fight ~

1. 00:41:152 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - These are streams for some reason. There's NO reason for these to be. The song has no instruments playing on blue ticks at the time.
2. 00:42:968 (10,1,2) - Transition from 1/4 to 1/2 with the same spacing with little to no indication of it beforehand. New combos aren't magic.
3. 00:44:152 (3,4,5,6) - Oh now it's in the same combo! Come on!
4. 00:47:468 (1,2,3) - Hold on, NOW the overlapping circles are streams? Even though the previous bits made it clear that spacing didn't matter?
5. 00:53:309 to 00:58:204 - Any streams placed in this portion are overmapping. The song is constant 1/2 here, there's no need for streams!
6. 01:01:995 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - Okay, this doesn't fit at all. First, it's overmapped, second, it doesn't fit anyway. This is a classic breakdown part in BMS songs, a part where there are very few beats in the music. This is NOT the time to be streaming! The drumroll stopped at 01:01:994 - !
7. 01:03:257 to 01:22:204 - Any streams in here are blatantly overmapping. The song is 1/2 only in this portion.
8. 01:04:520 (1,2,3,4) - This is miserable to play. The player has to stream from the right to the left, then REVERSE direction to reach the 3, then REVERSE again to get the 4. The fact that the streams are spaced out doesn't help either.
9. 01:07:678 (7,8,9,10) - Again with the direction changes. These are a pain!
10. 01:08:309 (1) - uh... ok
11. 01:09:414 (7,1,2,3,4) - These don't even fit the music at all! There shouldn't be streams here! Same goes to all other times this happens.
12. 01:13:678 (2,3,4) - What a confusing combo. Again, something that doesn't need to be.
13. 01:22:757 (4) - This isn't on the right spot in the timeline. There's no beat on this blue tick. There IS a beat that is skipped on 01:22:678 -
14. 01:23:783 and a long while later - So many streams that don't fit the music. There are whole sections devoted to streaming where they don't fit at all.
15. 01:25:994 (1,2) - Why is this a pause again? It fit 01:23:467 (7,1) - because there the music was completely gone! Now there's a possible beat at 01:26:152 - so why leave it out?
16. 01:28:836 (2,4,5) - Ok wait. Antijump, THEN STREAM JUMP? What is this I don't even, this doesn't read or play well! The stream is overmapped anyway.
17. 01:32:309 (1,2,3,4) - What a mess, as soon as the hitbursts start going it becomes a nightmare to read.
18. 02:20:310 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Harshly accelerated streams are a pain to read and play. It doesn't help that it's near the top of the game screen where the approach circles are harder to see. Besides, the stream should start with the drumroll, at 02:20:625 - !
19. 02:24:730 - Again with the cool BMS pauses. STOP MAPPING STREAMS HERE!!!
20. 02:25:599 (4,7,11) - These 1/4 sliders start on blue ticks. This is as confusing as kicksliders on blue ticks - it doesn't let the player play the beat.. 02:26:625 (1,2,3,4) - are great because they start on white/red, NOT blue.
21. 02:31:125 (3,4) - Blue tick 1/4 sliders again...
22. 02:34:440 (4,5,6,7) - These hitbursts make 02:35:310 (4,1,2,3,4,5) - a confusing mess. Can't see much with all the hitbursts.
23. 02:37:046 (3) - Any sane person would call this unrankable. The only visible part of this slider is a tiny TINY PIECE OF EDGE near the top. TINY, SO TINY
24. 02:37:204 (4) - This one is pretty bad too. Remember, map with default skin on.
25. 02:42:494 (3,4) - Blue tick 1/4 sliders.
26. 02:45:810 (4,7) - Again with the 1/4 blue tick sliders.
27. 02:51:336 (3,4) - AGAIN WITH THE BLUE TICK SLIDERS

Charles445 wrote:

This is not a formal mod. This is my thoughts as a player who enjoys super insane maps. I do not expect KD, all I want is for you to read this and understand what I am saying.

This is one of the most awkward, random, overmapped, and confusing maps I have ever played.

It seems like everything is placed to mess you up.

1. 00:41:152 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - These are streams for some reason. There's NO reason for these to be. The song has no instruments playing on blue ticks at the time. Fix
2. 00:42:968 (10,1,2) - Transition from 1/4 to 1/2 with the same spacing with little to no indication of it beforehand. New combos aren't magic. Fix
3. 00:44:152 (3,4,5,6) - Oh now it's in the same combo! Come on! Fix
4. 00:47:468 (1,2,3) - Hold on, NOW the overlapping circles are streams? Even though the previous bits made it clear that spacing didn't matter? Fix
5. 00:53:309 to 00:58:204 - Any streams placed in this portion are overmapping. The song is constant 1/2 here, there's no need for streams! Fix
6. 01:01:995 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - Okay, this doesn't fit at all. First, it's overmapped, second, it doesn't fit anyway. This is a classic breakdown part in BMS songs, a part where there are very few beats in the music. This is NOT the time to be streaming! The drumroll stopped at 01:01:994 - ! Fix
7. 01:03:257 to 01:22:204 - Any streams in here are blatantly overmapping. The song is 1/2 only in this portion. Fix
8. 01:04:520 (1,2,3,4) - This is miserable to play. The player has to stream from the right to the left, then REVERSE direction to reach the 3, then REVERSE again to get the 4. The fact that the streams are spaced out doesn't help either. Fix
9. 01:07:678 (7,8,9,10) - Again with the direction changes. These are a pain! Fix
10. 01:08:309 (1) - uh... ok :)
11. 01:09:414 (7,1,2,3,4) - These don't even fit the music at all! There shouldn't be streams here! Same goes to all other times this happens. Fix
12. 01:13:678 (2,3,4) - What a confusing combo. Again, something that doesn't need to be.
13. 01:22:757 (4) - This isn't on the right spot in the timeline. There's no beat on this blue tick. There IS a beat that is skipped on 01:22:678 - Fix
14. 01:23:783 and a long while later - So many streams that don't fit the music. There are whole sections devoted to streaming where they don't fit at all.
15. 01:25:994 (1,2) - Why is this a pause again? It fit 01:23:467 (7,1) - because there the music was completely gone! Now there's a possible beat at 01:26:152 - so why leave it out? Fix
16. 01:28:836 (2,4,5) - Ok wait. Antijump, THEN STREAM JUMP? What is this I don't even, this doesn't read or play well! The stream is overmapped anyway. Fix
17. 01:32:309 (1,2,3,4) - What a mess, as soon as the hitbursts start going it becomes a nightmare to read. Fix
18. 02:20:310 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Harshly accelerated streams are a pain to read and play. It doesn't help that it's near the top of the game screen where the approach circles are harder to see. Besides, the stream should start with the drumroll, at 02:20:625 - ! Fix
19. 02:24:730 - Again with the cool BMS pauses. STOP MAPPING STREAMS HERE!!! Fix
20. 02:25:599 (4,7,11) - These 1/4 sliders start on blue ticks. This is as confusing as kicksliders on blue ticks - it doesn't let the player play the beat.. 02:26:625 (1,2,3,4) - are great because they start on white/red, NOT blue. Fix
21. 02:31:125 (3,4) - Blue tick 1/4 sliders again...
22. 02:34:440 (4,5,6,7) - These hitbursts make 02:35:310 (4,1,2,3,4,5) - a confusing mess. Can't see much with all the hitbursts. Fix
23. 02:37:046 (3) - Any sane person would call this unrankable. The only visible part of this slider is a tiny TINY PIECE OF EDGE near the top. TINY, SO TINY Fix
24. 02:37:204 (4) - This one is pretty bad too. Remember, map with default skin on.
25. 02:42:494 (3,4) - Blue tick 1/4 sliders.
26. 02:45:810 (4,7) - Again with the 1/4 blue tick sliders.
27. 02:51:336 (3,4) - AGAIN WITH THE BLUE TICK SLIDERS

tl;dr the entire thing is overmapped and a pain to play and definitely not ready.
You can do much better than this.

The map can be improved and I do want to help.
Focus on mapping to the boundaries of the song, not the player. If the song is crazy enough, there is room for insanity.

Oh and while I'm here CS6 is a silly circle size that nobody uses because it is unfair to players. Those who do use it normally find their maps ignored

CSY the corrupt wrote:

[Knock It Off]

01:02:468 (5) - NC ->FIX
01:07:836 (8,9) - 虽然我觉得不是很有所谓但8稍微错开一点9的结尾还是好点比如这样http://puu.sh/1jLa5,我觉得这个还是视乎前后整体排版而定,有时没啥问题可以用,但有时会显得比较乱 ->這邊我會再看看
01:12:888 (8,9) - ^
01:13:678 (2,3) - ^
01:18:730 (2,3) - ^
01:41:783 (1,1) - 我知道这个意思但貌似实际上效果看不太出来,换个普通点的大约是这种?http://puu.sh/1jLhP ->這個其實只是我想要1/2BPM但是不想加綠線的原因
从02:25:362 - 到03:04:520 - 中间有些空出的地方感觉有点突兀,可以考虑加个note连上它们,或者结尾改成1/4的slider比如http://puu.sh/1jMLe ->期間的停頓是我故意的

Sun Rainbow wrote:

伤心的发现 我的SB没了