As requested,
Remember that everything is just suggestions unless stated otherwise[
General]
- Source should be
Grisaia no Meikyuu http://vndb.org/v7723 and put
LE LABYRINTHE DE LA GRISAIA in tags instead. LE LABYRINTHE DE LA GRISAIA is just the French translation of グリザイアの迷宮(Grisaia no Meikyuu).
- 18+ visual novel so consider these tags
hentai eroge game visual novel opening Don't need to add if you don't want to, but I recommend
opening atleast.
- I recommend putting the red timing point at -326 so that the menu pulse work properly for the part you didn't map. No need to resnap anything, do this before new mp3 in below suggestion.
- mp3 feel low quality for me and it makes some of the finish not sound too good. Can you use a 192kbs instead? Here's one I encode
http://puu.sh/fGoY I got a offset of -331 (-5 from current), but please check it since I'm horrible at timing. Resnap the preview point too if you want.
- I suggest lowering the volume of the custom hit clap a little and get the default finish and lower it by a bit as well and put in folder. Then increase all timing section by 10-20%. Hit clap + finish feel too loud compare to the hit normal and whistle to me.
That should be all.
[
Normal]
00:13:669 (5) - Sound better to do whistle at begin instead of finish since the finish feel late because it should be on the blue tick (00:13:569) and make it sound weird.
00:14:869 (1,2) - I like it more if you do a slider starting at 00:14:469 and ending it where (2) is. Feel a little weird to have a space between (5) from previous combo & (1).
00:16:869 (x) - Should be something here imo, consider adding a hit circle.
00:17:869 (2) - Add whistle at end of slider to follow bell sound, without this whistle, the finish on the next note sound weird.
00:20:469 (1,2) - Recommend a slider so that you emphasize only the down beat here.
00:26:869 (1,2) - ^, may be better to do slider starting on (2) and ending at (3) instead, since the accent here is different.
00:33:269 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Don't really like this pattern, doesn't feel like it's following anything. Please take a look at it.
00:46:469 (x) - Feel really flow breaking to have a space here, I recommend making 00:46:069 (1) a slider and ending it here.
01:05:669 (1) - Add whistle, feel weird to hit this note without it.
01:35:069 (2) - Don't think you should have clap at begin for the same reason as 00:13:669.
The part at kiai time and after, amazing flow! But the part before could be better I think, but pretty good in general.
[
Hard]
00:11:569 (3) - Looks better if you curve it a bit
http://puu.sh/fGBT00:25:269 (3) - Why no whistle on the repeat and end? I recommend adding them since they sound great here and I recommend removing the whistle from the begin since it cut out the finish.
00:27:069 (1,2) - since boku for me is one word, I prefer a slider here to represent this and something about the hit circle make them play weird for me.
00:28:269 (5) - Whistle/finish at begin
00:29:069 (7) - ^
00:30:869 (4) - ^
00:31:469 (5,6) - Whistle for both
00:41:269 (5) - Why no whistle at end?
00:44:469 (4) - There should be a finish at the end of this slider.
00:45:469 (5) - Keep this slider at default speed (1.0x), a drum roll is something that feel to me fast & intense and not slow and calm. it really makes hitting 00:46:269 (1) feel weird due to the slowdown.
00:47:669 (4) - I don't see a reason for no whistle at end.
00:49:069 (2) - *
Follow all before denying Whistle at the begin and of this slider
00:50:069 (3) - * Whistle here
00:50:469 (2) - * Remove whistle from here **
00:50:869 (4) - Sound a lot better to have whistle at end.
00:56:469 (6) - Should be finish at end.
01:01:269 (4) - Sound weird to have no hitsound on the down beat, I recommend whistle or reduced volume finish.
01:04:269 (3) - Soft finish at 60-80% volume instead, if you want to do something like this, copy the normal-hitfinish and rename it soft-hitfinish. The normal-hitsound sound really weird here.
01:06:869 (4) - *I recommend whistle, sound weird to have no hitsound on downbeat.
01:07:269 (5) - *Whistle at end
01:07:669 (6) - *Whistle on repeat **
01:08:469 (3) - Whistle sound better on end rather than the repeat.
01:10:069 (3) - The normal hitsound you used here doesn't sound good, I recommend removing it completely, or try 60% volume soft sc1 and use claps.
01:10:869 (4) - Sound better with whistle at end, going to stop mentioning them, but for all similar rhythm, sound better to put something at end in general.
01:19:669 (2) - *Whistle at begin
01:20:269 (1) - *Whistle here ** - to emphasize vocal
01:25:269 (5) - No whistle for this slider?
01:26:069 (6) - No clap here?
01:29:069 (4) - No whistle on repeats to follow bell sound?
Nice flow and rhythm here, hitsound is quite solid, but I feel you're missing a lot of hitsound and I see no reason to not put them there so I recommend checking your hitsound a bit.
[
Insane]
00:08:869 (5,6,1) - Feel like you should snap these notes to higher distant snapping
00:11:069 (1,2) - ^ current spacing almost feel like an anti jump (due to the spacing of the notes before) and this part doesn't really feel you should use this low spacing to me.
00:11:269 (2) - Sound better if you put whistle here (do not remove clap).
00:14:869 (3) - Whistle at begin.
00:16:069 (3) - ^
00:17:069 (8) - Can you use higher distant snapping? I always accidentally hit it after the stream and it'll lead nicer to the jump.
00:18:669 (5) - Hmm, I think it feel nicer to curve this, but just a preference.
00:20:369 (T) - I recommend 50% volume as it's calmer then the previous part.
00:24:469 (1) - Feel like there should be whistle at begin
00:25:069 (2) - Whistle here if you follow previous suggestion
00:30:369 (3) - Whistle at end
00:33:469 (1) - Jump for this note since music changes from the rather calm part to a lot more intense here and the spacing feel too close for me. 2.0x distant snap seems good.
00:49:069 (2) - This slider straight doesn't really fits with the feel of the music here for me. Here it feel really smooth while when you leave the slider straight, it feel a bit jagged/not so smooth so I suggest curving it.
00:59:069 (2,3) - Feel a bit unnatural to hit these notes where you put it, try putting it here?
http://puu.sh/fGQD01:13:669 (2,4) - Should put whistle on the begin even if there is claps.
01:20:069 (7) - Can you move this somewhere else/unstack from 01:19:269 (5)? I always think this is going to be a hit circle for some reason. But it's fine, may be just me.
01:35:469 (9) - Move here
http://puu.sh/fGRB so that it's more of a diamond shape?
Nice as usual, can't mod Insane too well right now so may have miss some stuff I wanted to mention. Didn't check finish sound, but for example at 00:13:369 (5), may be better to do whistle at end instead since finish sound late compare to the music.
No real issues, starred!
Good luck!
