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Hatsune Miku - Hitohira no

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zaczac
This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 2012年7月3日 at 5:42:32

Artist: Hatsune Miku
Title: Hitohira no
Source: NoriP
Tags: vocaloid season collection snow songs Butterfly short ver.
BPM: 95
Filesize: 5540kb
Play Time: 03:33
Difficulties Available:
  1. Hard (4.81 stars, 490 notes)
  2. Normal (2.44 stars, 216 notes)
Download: Hatsune Miku - Hitohira no
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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my first Ranked map!!!!

Normal:finished
Hard:finished


01/14 started?03/19 Pending
SPOILER
01/14 Selee's Timing help thank you!!
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Selee
1st timeline:
BPM: 95.000
Offset: 2548

2nd timeline:
BPM: 110.000
Offset: 24000

3rd timeline:
BPM: 110.000
Offset: 25091

4th timeline:
BPM: 110.000
Offset:81703

Use 1/4 beat snap divisor btw, not 1/3
Topic Starter
zaczac

Selee wrote:

1st timeline:
BPM: 95.000
Offset: 2548

2nd timeline:
BPM: 110.000
Offset: 24000

3rd timeline:
BPM: 110.000
Offset: 25091

4th timeline:
BPM: 110.000
Offset:81703

Use 1/4 beat snap divisor btw, not 1/3
thank you for your help~!! :)
Ruiz02160
hitohira no(Short ver) :arrow: hitohira no(Short Ver)

So cool song :D
Topic Starter
zaczac

Ruiz02160 wrote:

hitohira no(Short ver) :arrow: hitohira no(Short Ver)

So cool song :D
sorry I made mistake. fixed~ :)
terametis
ついったーからきました(照

5th timeline
BPM 85
Offset 203884

6th timeline
BPM 80
Offset 206707

7th timeline
BPM 75
Offset 209707

8th timeline
BPM 55
Offset 212907

適当にノート置きながら感覚で取ったので間違ってる可能性大です

タイトル: Hitohira no (Short Ver.)
まにまにとかも Manima niになってるのでこっちの方がいいかも

プレイして気になったとこが一つあったのでついでに
[Hard]
01:36:975 (3) このアンチジャンプは分かりづらいかも
Ruiz02160
[Hard]

00:24:021少し寂しい気がするので1.2のどちらかに一瞬KiaiTimeを入れてみるのはどうでしょうか。
01:10:091ここでNewComboに切り替えてるのであれば01:14:727など(他の場所)もNewComboに変えてみるのはどうでしょうか。
01:19:363 Spinnerが短いと思うので[01:20:181→01:20:727]まで伸ばしてみるのは如何でしょうか。
02:09:430DistanceSnapを用いて均等な距離感にすることをお勧めします。
02:14:066 曲調が盛り上がってるので[02:14:066~02:14:203]の間に一瞬[KiaiTime]を入れてみるのはどうでしょうか。(もう少し盛り上がりがあったほうがいいかも、という提案なので、その後の場所も応用させてみてください :D )
02:16:657 [02:16:248]と同様にスライダーの向きを同じ方向に向けたほうがいいと思います。
02:17:748 [同上です]
02:38:066 NewComboはどうでしょうか。
02:48:975 Volume70%→90%はどうでしょうか、それなりにHitsoundも盛り上がるので試してみてください。


Normal

00:57:272 座標を前置00:55:091と同様に[座標x128 y40→x128 y48]
01:10:909 NewComboはどうでしょうか。
01:13:091 ここでNewComboにしてみてそのあと01:16:363まで同色でどうでしょうか。
02:14:066 Hard同様少し何かしら盛り上がりを入れてみてはどうでしょうか。[Volume or Hitsound]
02:38:066 Hard同様NewComboはどうでしょうか
02:48:975 Hard同様にVolume70%→90%はどうでしょうか。


PS:とてもいい譜面だと思います!!ぜひRanked目指して頑張ってください!! :) :) :)
Topic Starter
zaczac

terametis wrote:

ついったーからきました(照

5th timeline
BPM 85
Offset 203884

6th timeline
BPM 80
Offset 206707

7th timeline
BPM 75
Offset 209707

8th timeline
BPM 55
Offset 212907

適当にノート置きながら感覚で取ったので間違ってる可能性大です

タイトル: Hitohira no (Short Ver.)
まにまにとかも Manima niになってるのでこっちの方がいいかも       Fixed!! :)

プレイして気になったとこが一つあったのでついでに
[Hard]
01:36:975 (3) このアンチジャンプは分かりづらいかも
Fixed!!!(x1.8にDSを修正)

timing help thank you !!!!<3 ついったーやっててよかった(照


terametis timing help and Mod thank you!!!
Topic Starter
zaczac

Ruiz02160 wrote:

[Hard]

00:24:021少し寂しい気がするので1.2のどちらかに一瞬KiaiTimeを入れてみるのはどうでしょうか。 2に入れてみました。Fixed~
01:10:091ここでNewComboに切り替えてるのであれば01:14:727など(他の場所)もNewComboに変えてみるのはどうでしょうか。 Fixed~!
01:19:363 Spinnerが短いと思うので[01:20:181→01:20:727]まで伸ばしてみるのは如何でしょうか。 そこに伸ばすと後ろの音と合わないのですいません・・・ でもSpinnerの短さは少しだけ調整しました!Fixed~!
02:09:430DistanceSnapを用いて均等な距離感にすることをお勧めします。 Fixed~!
02:14:066 曲調が盛り上がってるので[02:14:066~02:14:203]の間に一瞬[KiaiTime]を入れてみるのはどうでしょうか。(もう少し盛り上がりがあったほうがいいかも、という提案なので、その後の場所も応用させてみてください :D ) 一応ハードとノーマルはKiaiTime統一しておきたいので、一応保留で どちらにも合う場所が見つかったらKiaiTime入れてみます! :)
02:16:657 [02:16:248]と同様にスライダーの向きを同じ方向に向けたほうがいいと思います。 fixed
02:17:748 [同上です] fixed~
02:38:066 NewComboはどうでしょうか。 Fixed~
02:48:975 Volume70%→90%はどうでしょうか、それなりにHitsoundも盛り上がるので試してみてください。 90%は大きすぎる感じがしたので80%に修正しましたー!Fixed~ :)


Normal

00:57:272 座標を前置00:55:091と同様に[座標x128 y40→x128 y48] Fixed~
01:10:909 NewComboはどうでしょうか。 Fixed~!! :)(NC無かったら分かり辛かったですね・・)
01:13:091 ここでNewComboにしてみてそのあと01:16:363まで同色でどうでしょうか。 Fixed~
02:14:066 Hard同様少し何かしら盛り上がりを入れてみてはどうでしょうか。[Volume or Hitsound] すいません ハードと同じで合うところが見つかるまでは一時保留で
02:38:066 Hard同様NewComboはどうでしょうか Fixed~!
02:48:975 Hard同様にVolume70%→90%はどうでしょうか。 ハード同様に80%に上げました!


PS:とてもいい譜面だと思います!!ぜひRanked目指して頑張ってください!! :) :) :)
ganbarimasu!!

星ありがとうございます!!

Ruiz02160 thank you Mod and star~!! :)
popner
Hi ~ Mod request from My Queue.

Just suggestions:

[General]

Kiai Inconsistency in Kiai Times:
- [Hard] :
Kiai #1: Starts on 00:24:409, ends on 00:24:681 Not On Downbeat
Kiai #2: Starts on 01:21:681, ends on 01:38:203 Not On Downbeat
Kiai #3: Starts on 02:48:975, ends on 03:06:566
- [Normal] :
Kiai #1: Starts on 00:24:409, ends on 00:24:681 Not On Downbeat
Kiai #2: Starts on 01:21:703, ends on 01:38:203
Kiai #3: Starts on 02:48:975, ends on 03:06:566

[Normal]

02:48:430 (1) - close to end of spinner
00:24:745 - The break here is 16480 ms long, which is longer than the recommended 15000 ms.
01:39:157 - The break here is 15862 ms long, which is longer than the recommended 15000 ms.
03:06:630 - The break here is 15934 ms long, which is longer than the recommended 15000 ms.

[Hard]

More than three unique slider speeds are used in this map.
01:36:975 (3) - Unsnapped slider (end).
00:24:745 - The break here is 17050 ms long, which is longer than the recommended 15000 ms.
01:39:157 - The break here is 16432 ms long, which is longer than the recommended 15000 ms.
03:06:630 - The break here is 16504 ms long, which is longer than the recommended 15000 ms.


GL~
Topic Starter
zaczac

popner wrote:

Hi ~ Mod request from My Queue.

Just suggestions:

[General]

Kiai Inconsistency in Kiai Times:
- [Hard] :
Kiai #1: Starts on 00:24:409, ends on 00:24:681 Not On Downbeat
Kiai #2: Starts on 01:21:681, ends on 01:38:203 Not On Downbeat
Kiai #3: Starts on 02:48:975, ends on 03:06:566
- [Normal] :
Kiai #1: Starts on 00:24:409, ends on 00:24:681 Not On Downbeat
Kiai #2: Starts on 01:21:703, ends on 01:38:203
Kiai #3: Starts on 02:48:975, ends on 03:06:566 Fixed~ :) (unification Kiai time)

[Normal]

02:48:430 (1) - close to end of spinner Fixed~(spinner delete)
00:24:745 - The break here is 16480 ms long, which is longer than the recommended 15000 ms. Fixed~
01:39:157 - The break here is 15862 ms long, which is longer than the recommended 15000 ms. Fixed~
03:06:630 - The break here is 15934 ms long, which is longer than the recommended 15000 ms. Fixed~

[Hard]

More than three unique slider speeds are used in this map. Fixed!!!!
01:36:975 (3) - Unsnapped slider (end). Fixed!
00:24:745 - The break here is 17050 ms long, which is longer than the recommended 15000 ms. Fixed~
01:39:157 - The break here is 16432 ms long, which is longer than the recommended 15000 ms. Fixed~
03:06:630 - The break here is 16504 ms long, which is longer than the recommended 15000 ms. Fixed~



GL~
popner thank you Mod~ ;)
YTYuyu
Alright let's see what I can find. found this on #modreqs

General:
i guess it's clear.

Normal:
00:04:442 - add a circle to follow vocals?
00:05:074 (4) - make this a NC because of new lyrics.
00:06:969 - same as 00:04:442
00:09:495 - ^
00:17:705 (1) - since you have the whistle at the end, add a finish at the beginning.
00:33:818 - oh c'mon you can add notes over this break right? it'd look fun if you do so.
01:19:636 (6) - having something like this is unrankable because the arrows appear before the note is hit. so remove the break because i think it's unnecessary.
01:28:793 (4,5,6) - maybe replace this for a 1/1 slider or a 1/2 repeat slider to make it easier or fun for players?
02:17:339 (5) - maybe add a repeat or a circle to follow vocals?
02:31:248 - extend the break till 02:31:521 because that's where the vocals start.
02:39:430 - same as 00:33:818
02:50:066 (1,2,3,4,5) - change up this pattern because going back and forth looks boring IMO
02:56:066 (4,5,6) - same as 01:28:793
02:57:703 (2) - add a finish at the beginning to go in sync with the vocals?
03:06:703 - add a spinner and end it till 03:09:157 to follow the long pause in vocals.
03:09:703 - if you follow the suggestion above, add a 1/1 slider here
03:10:793 - if you follow both suggestions then add a spinner and end it till 03:12:410

Hard:
00:02:548 (1,2,3,4) - again with going back and forth. change up this pattern. same reason as before. it's ok to use these patterns, but don't use them constantly.
00:38:181 - add notes here to make it fun?
00:50:181 (1,2,3,4) - make this an anti-jump instead. IMO this challenges players.
01:23:884 (3,4) - why claps at the end of (3) and the beginning of (4). this ruins the consistency you're following.
02:30:975 (1) - replace this for a 1/1 slider to make it easier, a 1/2 repeat slider to make it fun, or 3 circles. same reason as the 1/2 repeat
02:39:430 - same as normal.
03:06:430 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - i find it odd that the notes are at the blue line. it makes it even harder for players to hit. try to do something that flows better. i'd give you a screenshot but i don't have time >.<

This is the best I can do. GL :D
LunarSakuya
よ~

Normal

02:07:248 (4) - Start slider at 02:07:521 instead, fits vocals
02:17:066 (4) - Delete
02:17:339 (5) - Add reverse
02:19:521 (1) - Spacing
02:51:157 (3,4) - Move somewhere else for variety in pattern
02:52:793 (1) - Make curvy slider http://puu.sh/lG6C and try to blanket (5) (and there's supposed to be a NC oops xD)
02:59:339 (1) - Delete one reverse

Hard

00:34:227 (4) - Don't stack, confusing at first
00:36:409 (4) - ^
00:54:000 (3) - Spacing

01:12:818 (3) - Pull out to make triangle http://puu.sh/lG9N
01:19:091 (1) - Start spinner earlier, right after (7)
01:22:112 - Add note
01:36:702 (2) - Feels a bit odd
01:48:975 (3) - NC

02:56:066 (5) - Spacing


Beautiful song and background <3 Good luck!
Edit:Byaku why you ninja me
Topic Starter
zaczac

LunarSakuya wrote:

よ~ よ~\:D/

Normal

02:07:248 (4) - Start slider at 02:07:521 instead, fits vocals
02:17:066 (4) - Delete
02:17:339 (5) - Add reverse
02:19:521 (1) - Spacing
02:51:157 (3,4) - Move somewhere else for variety in pattern
02:52:793 (1) - Make curvy slider http://puu.sh/lG6C and try to blanket (5) (and there's supposed to be a NC oops xD)
02:59:339 (1) - Delete one reverse

Hard

00:34:227 (4) - Don't stack, confusing at first
00:36:409 (4) - ^
00:54:000 (3) - Spacing

01:12:818 (3) - Pull out to make triangle http://puu.sh/lG9N
01:19:091 (1) - Start spinner earlier, right after (7)
01:22:112 - Add note
01:36:702 (2) - Feels a bit odd
01:48:975 (3) - NC

02:56:066 (5) - Spacing


Beautiful song and background <3 Good luck!
Edit:Byaku why you ninja me
all fixed~ :)
LunarSakuya thank you Mod~ :3
Topic Starter
zaczac

Byakugan249 wrote:

Alright let's see what I can find. found this on #modreqs

General:
i guess it's clear.

Normal:
00:04:442 - add a circle to follow vocals?
00:05:074 (4) - make this a NC because of new lyrics.
00:06:969 - same as 00:04:442
00:09:495 - ^
00:17:705 (1) - since you have the whistle at the end, add a finish at the beginning.
00:33:818 - oh c'mon you can add notes over this break right? it'd look fun if you do so.
01:19:636 (6) - having something like this is unrankable because the arrows appear before the note is hit. so remove the break because i think it's unnecessary.
01:28:793 (4,5,6) - maybe replace this for a 1/1 slider or a 1/2 repeat slider to make it easier or fun for players?
02:17:339 (5) - maybe add a repeat or a circle to follow vocals?
02:31:248 - extend the break till 02:31:521 because that's where the vocals start.
02:39:430 - same as 00:33:818
02:50:066 (1,2,3,4,5) - change up this pattern because going back and forth looks boring IMO
02:56:066 (4,5,6) - same as 01:28:793
02:57:703 (2) - add a finish at the beginning to go in sync with the vocals?
03:06:703 - add a spinner and end it till 03:09:157 to follow the long pause in vocals.
03:09:703 - if you follow the suggestion above, add a 1/1 slider here
03:10:793 - if you follow both suggestions then add a spinner and end it till 03:12:410

Hard:
00:02:548 (1,2,3,4) - again with going back and forth. change up this pattern. same reason as before. it's ok to use these patterns, but don't use them constantly.
00:38:181 - add notes here to make it fun?
00:50:181 (1,2,3,4) - make this an anti-jump instead. IMO this challenges players.
01:23:884 (3,4) - why claps at the end of (3) and the beginning of (4). this ruins the consistency you're following.
02:30:975 (1) - replace this for a 1/1 slider to make it easier, a 1/2 repeat slider to make it fun, or 3 circles. same reason as the 1/2 repeat
02:39:430 - same as normal.
03:06:430 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - i find it odd that the notes are at the blue line. it makes it even harder for players to hit. try to do something that flows better. i'd give you a screenshot but i don't have time >.< hmm...


This is the best I can do. GL :D
almost fixed~
Byakugan249 thank you Mod~
Ruiz02160
忘れてました
(Short Ver)→(Short Ver.)
Topic Starter
zaczac

Ruiz02160 wrote:

忘れてました
(Short Ver)→(Short Ver.)
(´・∀・`)fixed~~
Kawayi Rika
Hi ~ Lizsig ~ :)

Mod time for my Queue ~

Red : Must be fixed
Pink : Should be fixed
Purple : Just suggestions

[General]


  1. 01:21:703 - Remove this unused green line, and red line add KIAI time.

[Hard]


  1. 00:12:021 (4) - Move 2 grid down(symmetry).

[Normal]


  1. 00:25:091 - Change break time to here.
  2. 01:17:454 (2,3,4,5,6) - Try like this rhythm,sound much better.
  3. 02:04:248 (4) - Move 2 grid left(symmetry).
  4. 02:05:339 (1) - Move 2 grid up(symmetry).

That's all ~

Good luck ~
Topic Starter
zaczac

Kawayi Rika wrote:

Hi ~ Lizsig ~ :)

Mod time for my Queue ~

Red : Must be fixed
Pink : Should be fixed
Purple : Just suggestions

[General]


  1. 01:21:703 - Remove this unused green line, and red line add KIAI time.

[Hard]


  1. 00:12:021 (4) - Move 2 grid down(symmetry).

[Normal]


  1. 00:25:091 - Change break time to here.
  2. 01:17:454 (2,3,4,5,6) - Try like this rhythm,sound much better.
  3. 02:04:248 (4) - Move 2 grid left(symmetry).
  4. 02:05:339 (1) - Move 2 grid up(symmetry).

That's all ~

Good luck ~

all fixed~


Kawayi Rika thanks your Mod~ :)
spboxer3
from #modreqs

[general]


  • Settings
  1. 01:21:703 - you still not remove green line and add kiai to red section.

[Normal]


  • Settings
  1. unused green line:
    00:23:863 -
    01:37:657 -

Overlaps
(Some overlaps of notes/sliders in this diff don't look good. Here is a list of beats that overlap eachothou could space them farther apart.)
  1. 03:02:612 (2,4) -
mapping
  1. 02:07:521 (5) - NC. It's too over combo in this part. It's easiest diff for your map. so I think you need add NC for this way

[Hard]


  • Settings
  1. unused green line:
    00:23:863 -
Overlaps
(Some overlaps of notes/sliders in this diff don't look good. Here is a list of beats that overlap eachothou could space them farther apart.)
  1. 00:34:227 (4,1) -
mapping
  1. 00:08:232 (3) - remove whistle at reveerse and add at slider end?
  2. 01:24:975 (6) - clap?
  3. 02:30:975 (1) - finish at slider end?
  4. 03:05:066 (4,6) - clap?


red is unrankable issue. bule is need to discuss. Black is just suggest.

good luck :P
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