yongtw123 wrote:

[Easyl]
Not bad at all!

[Normal]
A real minor thing: try to space objects evenly out. For exmaple, 00:09:899 (4,5,6), (6) is somehow sticking with (4). Although the spacing is absolutely correct, if I were you I would try to leave some space between (4) and (6). If you get what I mean, you may choose to fix all these type of occurrences in the diff.

01:54:661 (1) - finish at start? Done
02:21:169 (1) - remove finish? Done
02:27:995 (x) - add a note? Disaggree
02:32:757 (1) - finish at start? Done
02:56:883 (1,2) - it's clear that you are following the vocal, but it plays out awkward. IMO stick with the beat. Left it the way it is
02:58:788 (1,2) - ^ ^
03:05:376 (1,2,3,4) - ^ ^

[Hard]
00:43:233 (x) - add a note? Disaggree
00:44:185 (3) - i discourage this kind of crumpled slider because player can easily misjudge this for a shorter one. Changed its shape
00:58:788 (3,4,5,6) - (3,4) is x1.0 spacing, (4,5) is not. Fix? No, I want it this way ( (1,2) is a "?", (3,4,5,6) are two "!" )
01:00:375 (x) - add a note? Disaggree
01:10:693 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - this is a hard one 0.0 The diff is also [Hard]
01:12:122 (9) - new combo Done
01:40:693 (5) - ^ Disaggree
02:21:169 (1) - remove finish? Done
02:56:883 (1,2) - same problem with [Normal]. Again i'd stick to the beat. Your call though. Same as [Normal]

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Very nicely done for a first-timer!
I should leave a star. Thanks :3

Good luck!

CDFA wrote:

The waiter just took my table, he gave it jessica simps

SHIT

Hurd:
Personally, circle size +1. Idunno, in relation to the background, which is a close-up shot, the circles seem small. Idunno though, both are fine. Changed
00:18:947 (7) - Add whistle on beginning of slider? Done
02:00:375 (3) - Not moe! ? Left it the way it is
02:53:709 (3) - Kinda boring pattern :< Same

Nurmul:
01:04:661 (4) - Add clap on beginning of slider~. Done

Uusy:
01:57:995 (1) - Add clap at beginning of slider Done

STAR FOR YOU.

HellDawn wrote:

Easy

00:36:090- 1 grid left Done
00:39:423- 1 grid down Done
00:43:709- ^ Done
00:51:804- finish ? Done
02:21:090- start spinner Disaggree

Normal

00:22:756- clap? Done
00:47:995- 1 grid down Done
01:22:756- move to 236 - 140 better. Done, and fixed spacing afterwards
01:52:756- 2 grid up Done
02:00:375- 1 grid up Done
02:27:042- finish ? Disaggree
02:28:947- move to 376 - 220 Done, and fixed spacing

Nice diff

Hard

00:16:566- 3 grid right Done
00:57:518- <3 :3
01:09:899- 1 grid up Done
01:10:693- combos bit too clapclapclap. Tone down the clapping a bit? Removed some claps
01:15:614- 1 grid up Done

1. The offset needs +10ms

1. 01:37:519 (1) - Making a well-shaped slider shouldn't make the pattern less readable, I mean at the moment :
   1. Its beginning is under 01:36:091 (3)'s end. Which is less readable because of the hitburst and isn't really aesthetic (which isn't what you're are trying to do here, right ? ).
   2. Its end hides 01:40:375 (3) which causes the same thing as above.
   
   I suggest you to rearrange your pattern like this :
   
   SPOILER

   [img]osu.ppy.sh/ss/273234[/img]
   
2. 03:06:090 (1) - The reverse arrow of this slider is hidden by by the hitburst of the previous spinner. Reverses must be visible otherwise they would surprise the player who may combobreak. Thus you have to redo this slider and make its reverse visible !

1. 00:47:995 (3) - The first reverse arrow is hidden by 00:46:566 (5)'s hitburst. For the same reason as in easy, this needs to be visible
2. 02:21:169 (1,1) - I don't really like how this pattern sounds. I prefer it like this :
   
   SPOILER

   
3. 03:03:709 - I know you are only following the vocals here, however this feels really awkward not to have anything for more than 2 seconds (which is a lot!). That breaks the flow of the map. :/
   Consider adding some notes please.

1. 01:30:862 (7) - This isn't a good idea to put it at the center of 01:29:909 (1,2,3,4,5,6) because it is hidden by all the hitburst that surround it which hide it completely. Moreover the combo color of this pattern is orange which is the same as the 300-hitburst color in the default skin (which is used by most of the regular player). That make it even less readable. So please don't pu it at the center. >w<
2. 01:31:814 (2) - Its reverse arrow is hidden by the previous circles' hitbursts. As I already said in easy it has to be visible.
3. 01:37:528 (3) - She got a nice mustache here.
4. 02:21:179 (1,1) - Same as in normal.
5. 02:48:005 (1) - The reverse arrow is hidden here too. You know what you have to do
6. 03:18:481 (1) - ^

Kurai wrote:

General :

1. The offset needs +10ms

Done

Easy :

1. 01:37:519 (1) - Making a well-shaped slider shouldn't make the pattern less readable, I mean at the moment :
   1. Its beginning is under 01:36:091 (3)'s end. Which is less readable because of the hitburst and isn't really aesthetic (which isn't what you're are trying to do here, right ? ).
   2. Its end hides 01:40:375 (3) which causes the same thing as above.
   
   I suggest you to rearrange your pattern like this :
   
   SPOILER

   [img]osu.ppy.sh/ss/273234[/img]
   
   Changed it
2. 03:06:090 (1) - The reverse arrow of this slider is hidden by by the hitburst of the previous spinner. Reverses must be visible otherwise they would surprise the player who may combobreak. Thus you have to redo this slider and make its reverse visible ! Flipped it horizontally and put it at the same place, so now the reverse arrow is out of the hitburst

Normal :

1. 00:47:995 (3) - The first reverse arrow is hidden by 00:46:566 (5)'s hitburst. For the same reason as in easy, this needs to be visible Changed some patterns, now it's visible
2. 02:21:169 (1,1) - I don't really like how this pattern sounds. I prefer it like this :
   
   SPOILER

   
   Fixed
3. 03:03:709 - I know you are only following the vocals here, however this feels really awkward not to have anything for more than 2 seconds (which is a lot!). That breaks the flow of the map. :/
   Consider adding some notes please. Placed a 1/1 slider with reverse arrow in front of it

Hard :

1. 01:30:862 (7) - This isn't a good idea to put it at the center of 01:29:909 (1,2,3,4,5,6) because it is hidden by all the hitburst that surround it which hide it completely. Moreover the combo color of this pattern is orange which is the same as the 300-hitburst color in the default skin (which is used by most of the regular player). That make it even less readable. So please don't pu it at the center. >w< Changed the pattern
2. 01:31:814 (2) - Its reverse arrow is hidden by the previous circles' hitbursts. As I already said in easy it has to be visible. Fixed
3. 01:37:528 (3) - She got a nice mustache here. Lol xD
4. 02:21:179 (1,1) - Same as in normal. Changed
5. 02:48:005 (1) - The reverse arrow is hidden here too. You know what you have to do Changed it's position a bit downwards, now it's clearly visible
6. 03:18:481 (1) - ^ I changed the pattern, but I'm not sure whether it's visible enough now =/

This map is great ! You did a good job :3

IceBeam wrote:

hi Hi *wave*

[Easy]
02:21:179 (1) - why would you try to snap this spinner with her lyrics? just start it from the next downbeat (02:21:338) Okay, fixed
03:31:814 (1) - you might want to silence slider end You mean spinner? Done

also,that's not required,but better avoid to map outro part in your next maps,especially when the music is fading out
finishing it at 03:26:099 could be better,but nvm,that's just a friendly suggestion for the future In my ears it would have sounded strange finishing at 03:26:099. But I'll keep it in mind in future.

[Normal]
02:21:179 (1) - well again Again fixed
02:28:005 - it felt uncomfortable to play because of this gap,add a note here please Done
03:07:052 (4,1) - uh,why would you snap these notes with 1/6? there's nothing to take with the music honestly,even rhytm sounds okay,but I think you should fix it. If you don't want to make a 1/1 rhytm,then use something like this:

SPOILER

Used your suggestion and fixed that part (I hope it looks okay :S)

[Hard]
00:24:671 (6) - not a big deal but I wish it was placed somewhere between 00:24:195 (5) and 00:25:147 (1) Changed it's position, but I'm not sure, because it's on the sliderpath now
01:14:512 (1,2) - that's pretty big jump mostly because I didn't expected it here..so it doesn't really fit well with the rest of the map Flipped (2) horizontally, so the jump is smaller, and fixed the distance of the following notes
02:21:179 (1) - um,you got it Um yeah
02:35:941 (5,6,7,8,9) - spacing is a bit incorrect here,02:37:052 (9) should be a bit farther,fix it please Not been sure about what "a bit farther" means, but I changed it. If it's still incorrect, tell me
03:03:084 (4) - I'd change this to a circle and started a slider from 03:03:243 Changed
03:05:385 (1,2,3) - again 1/6 snapping :s how about to making some rhytm instead?

SPOILER

Changed as you suggested (hope this looks okay, too)
03:32:608 (2,3) - move them a little farther,otherwise looks like a 1/3 spacing between them and 03:31:814 (1) Same as above with "a bit farther", but I changed it

well,that's it
a damn good map for a newbie,especially for 1/3 song

call me back after fixes