sick map
bretty good map probox
liking how it's coming along.sweet surrender feels like it's trying too hard to be technical though,so work on getting that stigma off.
hope to see this with a leaderboard some day! good luck
storyboard
could go with a bit of background movement.like the bg should move as though there's a parallax shenanigans going on
Fanzhen's Extra
00:12:618 (1) - these sliders would be a bit nicer if the slider ends were silent.
00:23:118 (1,2,1,2) - should be gradually shrinking in slider velocity
00:33:618 (1,2,3) - instead of copying 00:30:618 (1,2,3) ,should this not copy 00:24:618 (1,2,3) ?it would make the section seem a lot more varied,especially since you use a different style every single iteration of the section anyways.
00:38:868 (3,4) - four short sliders instead of two 1/2 sliders might match the music a bit better.
00:45:618 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - this should gradually shrink,but not like in my recommendation in sweet surrender.instead because the spacing is already kinda high in 00:44:868 (1,2,3,4) ,so it would only be fitting that it counter-acted on what 00:44:868 (1,2,3,4) did before it.
00:52:555 (2) - can be like 00:52:368 (1) before it.
01:01:743 (5) - should either be spaced a bit more or use a short slider to differentiate it from 01:01:368 (1,2,3,4) preceding it.
01:02:493 (1,2) - a long slider might do the trick better than two beats here.
01:04:368 (1) - would have interesting flow if ctrl+g'd
01:04:930 (3) - having an important sound so close to 01:04:649 (2) feels a bit odd.maybe change this
01:06:243 (1) - don't see why this needs an nc.
01:08:493 (1) - this can be two beats in the same stack as 01:08:305 (2,3) ,as this delivers the rhythm better and differentiates 01:08:586 (2,3,4) more.
01:10:368 (1) - seems a bit lazy.
01:39:149 - this sound goes unmapped
01:51:524 - pretty important sound here too unmapped
02:00:243 (4) - this can be 1/2 instead of 3/4
02:08:118 (3) - not sure how i feel about this being here
03:36:055 (1) - maybe nc here.
00:23:118 (1,2,1,2) - should be gradually shrinking in slider velocity
00:33:618 (1,2,3) - instead of copying 00:30:618 (1,2,3) ,should this not copy 00:24:618 (1,2,3) ?it would make the section seem a lot more varied,especially since you use a different style every single iteration of the section anyways.
00:38:868 (3,4) - four short sliders instead of two 1/2 sliders might match the music a bit better.
00:45:618 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - this should gradually shrink,but not like in my recommendation in sweet surrender.instead because the spacing is already kinda high in 00:44:868 (1,2,3,4) ,so it would only be fitting that it counter-acted on what 00:44:868 (1,2,3,4) did before it.
00:52:555 (2) - can be like 00:52:368 (1) before it.
01:01:743 (5) - should either be spaced a bit more or use a short slider to differentiate it from 01:01:368 (1,2,3,4) preceding it.
01:02:493 (1,2) - a long slider might do the trick better than two beats here.
01:04:368 (1) - would have interesting flow if ctrl+g'd
01:04:930 (3) - having an important sound so close to 01:04:649 (2) feels a bit odd.maybe change this
01:06:243 (1) - don't see why this needs an nc.
01:08:493 (1) - this can be two beats in the same stack as 01:08:305 (2,3) ,as this delivers the rhythm better and differentiates 01:08:586 (2,3,4) more.
01:10:368 (1) - seems a bit lazy.
01:39:149 - this sound goes unmapped
01:51:524 - pretty important sound here too unmapped
02:00:243 (4) - this can be 1/2 instead of 3/4
02:08:118 (3) - not sure how i feel about this being here
03:36:055 (1) - maybe nc here.
Sweet Surrender
00:22:555 (2,3,4) - would look pretty dope if 00:22:743 (3,4) were moved to overlap the peaks of the slider superseding it.though i can't make it look good for shit,you're like 10x more experienced than i am.
00:47:118 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - don't get why it's spacing more.it would be nicer if instead the stream was spacing less into the kiai.
00:49:836 (2) - why doesn't this overlap 00:49:836 (2) ? is it like flow or something and i'm just too stupid to notice
00:52:368 (3) - should be a slider.
00:55:368 (1,2,3,4) - would look bretty cool if 00:55:461 (2) and 00:55:649 (4) had ctrl+g on them and would go with the 'wub' more
00:56:305 (1,2,3) - a bit dangerous if this is getting ranked.the cross screen triples by rrtyui was already pushing it,this spits in its face.if it's not getting ranked than who cares disregard this.
00:59:305 (2,2) - having these replaced with straight sliders like pic related looks cool af (don't copy this though this is shit and wouldn't flow well with 00:59:868 (1,2) ):
01:00:618 (1) - maybe nicer as a slow slider instead
01:04:649 (2) - there's an important sound on the tail of this slider.not sure if you wanna shorten the slider and add a beat next to 01:04:930 (3) or something but it should at least be notable.like maybe a little hook on the end of the slider to show there's an important sound around there (again don't copy line for line any shit i do).
actually,this map has a lot of problems with putting slider ends on important sounds.not sure if you wanna clear those up or that would take too long and be too tedious.
01:05:305 (1,2) - a bit overmapped. 01:05:305 (1) shouldn't exist.
01:10:555 (1) - shouldn't this be linked with 01:10:180 (1,2) before it?like take out the nc and put it on 01:10:743 (2) ,move it closer towards 01:10:368 (2) or something,just make it not a part of 01:10:555 (1,2) .
01:26:118 (1,2,3,4,1,2) - a bit overmapped.just stress the beat on 01:26:118 (1,3,1) and you're good.
01:29:118 (1,2,1,2) - this might be cooler if it was like a horizontal version of 01:27:618 (1,2,1,2,1,2) .
01:57:618 (1) - why can't the spinner start here?
02:05:493 (2) - this should be a bit shorter so that it ends on the blue tick before 02:05:868 (1) .like use a smaller slider velocity there.
02:11:774 (1) - maybe make this like 02:11:493 (1) .
02:12:055 (1) - move the nc from here to 02:12:243 (2) .
02:24:618 (2) - there's no nc here?
02:35:868 (1,2,3,4) - this can just be a normal stream
02:36:993 (5,1,2) - these can be like two short sliders and the nc can start on 02:37:368 (3) instead.
02:39:993 (5,1,2) - same dealio here.
02:54:805 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - i think this is overmapped a bit.
03:04:368 (3) - this could be a short slider unless you wanted to follow 03:03:805 (1,2,3) before it.
03:06:618 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - needs a bit of cleaning.especially since 03:07:086 goes unmapped.
03:12:618 (4) - feels weird not having that be an nc
03:15:618 (4) - then again,if it's a pattern,i guess it's fine
00:47:118 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - don't get why it's spacing more.it would be nicer if instead the stream was spacing less into the kiai.
00:49:836 (2) - why doesn't this overlap 00:49:836 (2) ? is it like flow or something and i'm just too stupid to notice
00:52:368 (3) - should be a slider.
00:55:368 (1,2,3,4) - would look bretty cool if 00:55:461 (2) and 00:55:649 (4) had ctrl+g on them and would go with the 'wub' more
00:56:305 (1,2,3) - a bit dangerous if this is getting ranked.the cross screen triples by rrtyui was already pushing it,this spits in its face.if it's not getting ranked than who cares disregard this.
00:59:305 (2,2) - having these replaced with straight sliders like pic related looks cool af (don't copy this though this is shit and wouldn't flow well with 00:59:868 (1,2) ):
01:00:618 (1) - maybe nicer as a slow slider instead
01:04:649 (2) - there's an important sound on the tail of this slider.not sure if you wanna shorten the slider and add a beat next to 01:04:930 (3) or something but it should at least be notable.like maybe a little hook on the end of the slider to show there's an important sound around there (again don't copy line for line any shit i do).
actually,this map has a lot of problems with putting slider ends on important sounds.not sure if you wanna clear those up or that would take too long and be too tedious.
01:05:305 (1,2) - a bit overmapped. 01:05:305 (1) shouldn't exist.
01:10:555 (1) - shouldn't this be linked with 01:10:180 (1,2) before it?like take out the nc and put it on 01:10:743 (2) ,move it closer towards 01:10:368 (2) or something,just make it not a part of 01:10:555 (1,2) .
01:26:118 (1,2,3,4,1,2) - a bit overmapped.just stress the beat on 01:26:118 (1,3,1) and you're good.
01:29:118 (1,2,1,2) - this might be cooler if it was like a horizontal version of 01:27:618 (1,2,1,2,1,2) .
01:57:618 (1) - why can't the spinner start here?
02:05:493 (2) - this should be a bit shorter so that it ends on the blue tick before 02:05:868 (1) .like use a smaller slider velocity there.
02:11:774 (1) - maybe make this like 02:11:493 (1) .
02:12:055 (1) - move the nc from here to 02:12:243 (2) .
02:24:618 (2) - there's no nc here?
02:35:868 (1,2,3,4) - this can just be a normal stream
02:36:993 (5,1,2) - these can be like two short sliders and the nc can start on 02:37:368 (3) instead.
02:39:993 (5,1,2) - same dealio here.
02:54:805 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - i think this is overmapped a bit.
03:04:368 (3) - this could be a short slider unless you wanted to follow 03:03:805 (1,2,3) before it.
03:06:618 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - needs a bit of cleaning.especially since 03:07:086 goes unmapped.
03:12:618 (4) - feels weird not having that be an nc
03:15:618 (4) - then again,if it's a pattern,i guess it's fine
bretty good map probox
liking how it's coming along.sweet surrender feels like it's trying too hard to be technical though,so work on getting that stigma off.
hope to see this with a leaderboard some day! good luck