ErunamoJAZZ wrote:

hi

[Insane]

1. 00:19:286 (2,3) - In previous stacks the next note was close, but here is a jump. Maybe consider unstack? made the spacing closer
2. 01:07:816 (6,1) - 02:27:051 (1) - Please, consider a spacing of 1.3x, because 1.2 feels a bit close after a stream and its a bit strange for me in play. it seriously changes nothing but its visual so i prefer them as is :/
3. 01:25:816 (2) - vs 01:30:933 (2) - .... When I see a stack in this way, I usually think that plays as the second one. You did some unstacks like in 01:00:580 (5) - but then other stacks are like 01:11:169 (1,2) - xD, idk, could be cool if make this more readable.
   Of course, Its how I feel this, so ask more opinions pretty sure they're okay because eh if I made the stacks different for every rhythm the map will be underwhelming too much
4. 01:18:933 - You are ignoring some nice drums here. so its been differentiated from the second chorus, and the last.
5. 02:33:404 (2) - 02:49:992 (2) - 03:25:992 (3) - but then 03:27:933 (4) - 03:39:933 (2) - and then 03:42:580 (2) - xD i don't get the point at all lol

[Normal]

1. 00:00:581 (1) - you used this shape here, but never again xD yes
2. 00:09:933 (2,3) - This change was unexpected ^^U changed
3. 00:53:875 (4) - why not just repeat the previous slider?, people usually complain about this thats boring since i already used too many reverses here lol
4. 01:20:345 (2,3) - vs 01:21:757 (5,6) - why are different? to give them variation
5. 03:21:051 (3,4,5) - Its interesting, because in previous patters the circle is not stacked over slider tail, but its the unique in this way. ye

[Easy]

1. 00:10:463 (3) - is not very close?, I think you will use 1.1x here. oops
2. 01:30:933 - 01:39:404 - add break between? ( I played this with FL, and... rip xD) deleted these circles
3. 01:53:522 - Its better if make this clickable!, 01:52:816 (3,4) - Ctrl+G or so this is intentionally made the sliderend coming to the beat so feels clearn to flow the next 3/2 slider
4. 02:38:698 (1,2) - This could be a bit confusing since (2) body is very close to (1) tail: changed
   
   SPOILER

   
5. 02:45:757 (3,1) - Little overlap. thats really unnoticeable and not worthy changing the slider shape for it
6. 03:19:286 - missing clap? yes

Nice song, good luck n.n

Asuka_- wrote:

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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dEozIPft74I
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Easy
00:20:345 (1,3) - このoverlapはあんまり要らないような気がするので、避けたほうが無難かと... ok
01:18:933 (3) - ここに何らかのHitsound入れませんか？ easyプレイヤーがデフォスキンでここ叩くとき何もHSがないのはちょっと寂しいです。normal sample付けました

Normal
good!　


Insane
01:18:933 (3) - 多分意図的だと思うんですけど、やっぱりここ3連打の方が似合うんじゃないでしょうか？　一応topdiffなので拾った方が良いかもなぁっていう印象です。（自分ならこんな感じとかにするかもｗ https://i.gyazo.com/fb82410e23256c4efce ... 2b89a7.png 1番サビでundermapping (聞くとわかりますが、01:18:757 - からの5連打が正式な音なので), 2番サビでちゃんと音を拾い、ラスサビでovermapping (7連打)の構成が気に入ってるのでこのままがいいです。
01:23:169 (3,4) - ここ形対称にしませんか？　プレイしててなんか気になりました。（ただの行稼ぎ）少し違う感じにしました

02:25:639 (1,2,3,4) - ここが少し違和感ありました。

　　02:25:639 (1,2,3) - プレイしててここが完全に重なってるので、視覚的にも体感的にも流れが止まってて少し違和感ありました。
　　01:06:580 (4,5,6) - こんな感じに少しずらすと体感的に結構変わると思います。
　　あと02:25:992 (3,4) - が少し近すぎるかなという印象を受けました。サビの部分なのでもっと飛ばした方が流れて良いかもしれません。
　　（124:236あたりとかどうでしょう？）

低arでごちゃごちゃになっちゃったけど　こんな感じです。　https://i.gyazo.com/078c536e7ca18d96e54545c8c59d6ff4.png 02:25:639 (1,2,3) - ここは今のままスタックさせてる方が目的とした流れと合うので(02:24:580 (6,7) - の配置に合うように置きました)代わりに02:26:345 (4,5,6,7,8) - を離して流れを維持する形にします。

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PandaHero wrote:

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[Insane]
You have red and green line on the 03:59:000 with different volume lvl (10 and 13%) o fixed
00:50:875 (7) - mm, it will looks better if you make it with the same curve like you did on 6 k
01:00:228 (4,5) - I guess you can move it a bit left for better flow modified with the previous slider
01:05:345 (4,1) - I'm not a big fun of such small spacing on the vocal, but okay I used to do it in every my single map lol that's quite cool to represent them in a tiny spacing
01:08:169 (2,1) - same here
01:08:345 (1) - looks not very nice, better make it as a usual wave slider this is ok for my mapping here (xsrs fan)
01:14:698 (3) - this follow point trigger me, put nc here please k
01:15:404 (1,2) - too small spacing for this clap sound imo wtf u emphasis?? tbh both are intended to highlight the vocal expressions there better
01:18:228 (1,2) - ^
01:51:228 (3) - you can improve this wave a bit tiltttttttttttttt remade
02:18:051 (4) - move it to X:332 Y:164 for creating cool Elvis' pattern fuk elviz also the spacing was intentionally made to be a triangle to avoid the pattern exactly
02:18:933 (1) - too curve x_x its rly ok
02:49:639 (1) - I would like to put soft sliderwhistle on this slider, not a normal one may be too weak for the guitar or whatever the sound
03:35:698 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - this stream looks not very beautiful for me :c intentionally mapped random shape
03:42:228 (1,2) - stack note with slider's end, please o u got me

[Normal]
You use ds here in the way I can't understand D: how, the closer spacing for 1/2s and the rest is simple

00:09:051 (1,2,3,4) - rhythm here is a bit confuse me, also I don't like how you missed strong piano sound on 00:11:169 (5), but I have no idea how to make it better >_< fixed
00:24:051 (2,3) - will be better to stack them wanted to show some variety here :/
00:29:698 (3) - mm, why you didn't make it as a 2 note? o.o to avoid the rhythm being too repetitive
00:32:522 (3) - same. I want to see your selfie consistency. my nudes r expensive af
01:30:228 (6,7) - better make here the same thing as you did here 01:28:816 (2,3,4) there's a bunch of 1/4 beats there that the slider covers these better, 3 1/2 circles make the rhythm a bit confusing
01:51:051 (1,2) - too hard to understand for newbies imo, I would recommend you to stack them this looks quite similar to the stacked one so not too much problematic? let's see if people would complain it
02:06:228 (2) - move it to X:272 Y:188 for aesthetic. Then move 02:07:639 (1) - somewhere changed in a different way
03:14:698 (2,3) - can you stack please thanks nope lol
03:38:698 (4,5,6) - note+1/2 slider was better. Or reverse slider, yes. let me have some spicy pattern in the climax

[Easy]
00:17:522 (1,2) - can you have better flow here? uh
00:37:286 (1,2) - and here this is ok thats some kind of friendly pattern for beginners i suppose


Sorry for useless nazi mod, good luck with this map, take my star ~

Karen wrote:

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00:23:169 (1,2,3) - enable stacking view, the stacking is ruined here o
00:28:816 (1,2,3) - ^ ok
00:45:757 - finish? ye
02:37:286 (1,2) - looks too easy here, how about increasing the spacing like 02:35:875 (3,4) - this let's leave an edgy pattern here
02:49:992 - this is a strong beat but it's still kinda strange to have a circle here because it's too soft, i'd suggest to remove the circle and extend the slider here, strong beats on slider tails have fantastic feelings i just rather prefer having strong beats on sliderends so why not
03:01:286 - where is the finish i already had additions set soft so it ran away?? no idea
03:11:169 (5) - i personally dislike the sliderbody whistle if it's not on purpose please remove it? it's intentional to make somewhat different effect for a longer slider, it worked in skins i used for playing so ye
03:30:933 (1,3) - avoid the stack? hmm just for noob hd players like me, it's a bit annoying o ok
03:42:228 (1,2) - avoid this stack too because this is the only 3/4 slider in this part, it would be easily read as 1/1 slider+circle because of 03:39:404 (1,2) - this stacked by a mod then unstacked by a mod again

Easy
01:02:698 (1) - i don't think it's acceptable in the lowest diff, use a simple shape

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ErunamoJAZZ wrote:

hi

[iyasine's Hard]

1. 01:07:463 (7) - This could be a surprise for some players, because 00:33:228 (5) - was before, and both look like same (and 01:13:286 (4) - is after). A possibility is to make this more noticeable, my suggestion is something like this: some fixed!
   
   SPOILER

   
   Or maybe without red node, like you did in 01:18:757 (7) -
2. 02:26:522 (7) - ^, etc. hmm keep it!
3. 03:10:463 - This velocity change felt a bit sudden, even if here is not at 1.0x yet. I wanna do a suggestion:
   03:10:816 (3) - could be at 1.0x, I mean, keep 03:10:463 (2) - and 03:11:169 (1) - at 0.75x. Then the velocity in the log slider could be less sudden. some fixed!
   

Nice song, good luck n.n

Asuka_- wrote:

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ritaさんじゃないすかああああ
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iyasine
00:29:875 (3,4) - ここはds飛ばさない方が良いと思います。　Ａメロで穏やかな曲調なので、ここだけ妙に飛んでるのは見た目的にもあんまり良くない気がします。。fixed!
02:17:169 - clapないっす fixed!
02:34:286 (1) - めっちゃhpbarです okです
01:18:228 (5) - 　02:37:286 (1) -　03:35:169 (5) - 　同じ音なのでNC統一させた方が良いと思います。fixed!

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PandaHero wrote:

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[iyasine's Hard]
00:05:522 (5,1) - personally I don't like this kind of overlaps, it looks dirty, but it's not really a problem ok~fixed!
00:10:110 (4,5,6) - these sliders dosen't follow piano in right way imo, try cirlce+1/2 slider+1/2 reverse slider instead https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8795875 awesome!
00:49:992 (4,5) - why you put it sooo close, make it as 00:49:110 (2,3) oh...miss , fixed!
01:24:228 (5) - better make this slider straight and this 01:24:580 (7) - curve like 5, because of vocal on 6 i really like that
02:49:992 (1,1,1) - wtf is that nc spam o.o T.T
03:07:639 (2,3) - will be better to continue follow piano here, as you did before 03:05:169 (2,3,4) hmm...new
pattern
03:27:228 (3) - maybe make it as a 2 notes? goooood!


Sorry for useless nazi mod, good luck with this map, take my star ~

Karen wrote:

hello there

iyasine
02:17:169 - clap ok!

confirm the timing

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