1. Oni (5,01 stars, 2012 notes)

1. you have a glitched SV, look in the .osu file and change "1.39838970233922" to "1.4"
2. if you want to lower the bg slightly, change "0,0,"satorare.jpg",0,0" to "0,0,"satorare.jpg",0,25"

1. 00:13:711 (57) - consider d since it emphasizes the following snare better
2. 00:16:408 (74) - ^ etc., unless you have a reason for this
3. 00:55:340 (276) - add finisher if you want
4. 01:07:306 (321) - / 01:07:981 (325) - consider making these consistent since it seems like the same pattern
5. 01:11:014 (343,344,345,346,347) - here your focus of the stream changes from melody to nothing, please fix it, consider mapping the melody 1/4 again 01:10:761 - there
6. 01:16:070 - / 01:16:913 - this stream's focus changes again, consider removing 01:16:492 - this and 01:16:660 - this to fix
7. 01:21:801 (418,419,420,421,422,423,424) - ^, stop that lol... I'm sounding repetitive, try to look for that yourself. It comes back.
8. 01:23:486 (433,434) - consider dd for the drums
9. 01:31:407 (500) - consider k for the drums, and then d 01:31:323 (499) - here to keep it like you wanted
10. 01:34:357 (524,525) - similar to above, hit ctrl+g here for the drums

1. 03:19:610 - the stream here is problematic because the mapping focus changes halfway through the stream. 03:19:104 (1179,1180,1181,1182,1183,1184) - this follows the melody, and past that follows the wubs. I would prefer you to fix this by removing notes before the wubs, that way this stream becomes made exclusively for the wubs. If you do this, also, end the stream 03:20:284 - here when the wubs stop, and map the following 3/4 pattern with the wubs.
   
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2. 03:22:306 - / 03:30:396 - / 03:33:093 - ^^^

Jonawaga wrote:

nm, remember to only apply what seems good to you!
[general]

1. you have a glitched SV, look in the .osu file and change "1.39838970233922" to "1.4" yeah... thanks aimod :c
2. if you want to lower the bg slightly, change "0,0,"satorare.jpg",0,0" to "0,0,"satorare.jpg",0,25" sure~

[owo]

1. 00:13:711 (57) - consider d since it emphasizes the following snare better Okay, I guess it's better for the vocal + snare, thanks.
2. 00:16:408 (74) - ^ etc., unless you have a reason for this Same.
3. 00:55:340 (276) - add finisher if you want it sounds much better with a finisher, thanks~
4. 01:07:306 (321) - / 01:07:981 (325) - consider making these consistent since it seems like the same pattern I didn't do that so it would be a ddkkddkkddkk repetitive spam, I did it diferently instead by adding a d on the next pattern.
5. 01:11:014 (343,344,345,346,347) - here your focus of the stream changes from melody to nothing, please fix it, consider mapping the melody 1/4 again 01:10:761 - there Fixed them both, added a d at the end of the first pattern and made
6. 01:16:070 - / 01:16:913 - this stream's focus changes again, consider removing 01:16:492 - this and 01:16:660 - this to fix Deleted the first one you mentioned, but kept the second one and changed it to d, since I can still hear a sound there.
7. 01:21:801 (418,419,420,421,422,423,424) - ^, stop that lol... I'm sounding repetitive, try to look for that yourself. It comes back. I'm mainly using that to emphasize the strongest parts of the song, the overmap isn't that bad at all... I guess I'll change a few and kept the rest, but thanks for noticing that anyway~
8. 01:23:486 (433,434) - consider dd for the drums Alright!
9. 01:31:407 (500) - consider k for the drums, and then d 01:31:323 (499) - here to keep it like you wanted seems much metter like this
10. 01:34:357 (524,525) - similar to above, hit ctrl+g here for the drums I feel like kdk fits way more since the loud sound is on the last note.

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1. 03:19:610 - the stream here is problematic because the mapping focus changes halfway through the stream. 03:19:104 (1179,1180,1181,1182,1183,1184) - this follows the melody, and past that follows the wubs. I would prefer you to fix this by removing notes before the wubs, that way this stream becomes made exclusively for the wubs. If you do this, also, end the stream 03:20:284 - here when the wubs stop, and map the following 3/4 pattern with the wubs.
   
   ~

   
2. 03:22:306 - / 03:30:396 - / 03:33:093 - ^^^ I don't really think I like changing it up, the melody sounds pretty much like a build up to the wubs and making it a single stream sounds much better to me. Plus, I did it consistently. If someone complains about this later I might really consider changing. Thank you!

I hope you get more ideas from this. Best of luck!

Vyiuri wrote:

[Oni]

00:19:104 (94) - is on porpuse? It's not the same as 00:13:711 (57) -, 00:16:408 (74) - and 00:21:801 (111) - oops, don't think so... fixed.
01:06:127 (314) - finish? alright.

Ctrl G 01:17:587 (392) - with 01:18:093 (395) - or 01:18:261 (396) - aw, I really think it sounds better the way I did, but thanks for the suggestion tho, if someone elses mention it I might change.

The next part after 02:10:845 (807) - it's fine, but try this to get open to new suggestions:
- 02:13:374 (823) - delete I don't really want to delete it, I added it to extend the previous sound.
- 02:16:070 (838) - move to 02:15:059 (832) - why, exactly?
- 02:15:227 (832) - change to k maybe as 02:11:183 (807) -, 02:12:531 (816) -, 02:13:879 (824) -, 02:16:576 (840) -, 02:17:924 (849) -, 02:19:273 (857) - did a small changes in some of them~

Do the same at 04:22:980 (1679) - if you like how it looks the above alright!

03:33:768 (1308) - k like the heart-pattern 01:04:778 (302,303,304,305,306,307,308,309,310) - ? Alright.
03:39:834 (1342) - here starts the strongest kiai! Add kiai and finish! I did the same here as I did to the first kiai. For me it feels much better starting the kiai the next tick since it's there where the SV stars.
03:39:497 (1340) - maybe add finish here too if you like kept due to consistency with the first kiai, won't really add it because K is something really stronger than D so I prefer not to overuse it~

Between 04:33:767 (1745) - and 04:55:340 (1889) - the finishers are a little mixed. I dont know if it's intentional but try a symmetrical way to do it! they are more solid. I'll put them down here:
- 04:33:767 (1745) - 1 (start) a
- 04:36:464 (1762) - 2 c
- 04:39:160 (1779) - 3 c
- 04:41:857 (1796) - 4 e
- 04:44:554 (1813) - 1 (middle) p
- 04:47:250 (1831) - 2 t
- 04:49:947 (1849) - 3 e
- 04:52:643 (1867) - 4 d
- 04:55:340 (1889) - 1 (end) !

An example is alternate finishers (with, without, with, without etc.) Thanks for that suggestion. I honestly don't know why I made that huge mess... maybe copy-paste issues.

I enjoy it although I cant pass it

1. k = kat d = don K = big kat D = big don
2. It's just suggestions/corrections, you are free to accept them or not.
3. If you accept my suggestions/corrections, apply also in similar parts.
4. If you don't accept my suggestions/corrections, clarify why you do not accept them.

[ Oni]

1. 00:01:408 (1) - I would remove the finisher because the sound is not stronger. It hear like 00:04:104 (12) - .
2. 00:03:936 (10,11) - There haven't sound , can be remove and follow better the flow I guess
3. 00:28:542 (156,164,173,181) - I don't know why you changed this to kat if the sound is the same than 00:25:846 (139) - . Maybe for variability, but I think is better keep the don
4. 00:39:076 (215) - Feels a bit overmapped, I think you can remove to keep the consistency with 00:06:464 (20,21,22) -
5. 00:39:160 - From here you leave follow the dnb instrumental, because should be dkdkdk until 00:44:554 - . Maybe you want follow the vocal, but I think dkdkd fit good with the vocal too
6. 00:55:340 - Replace the finisher with a slider until 00:56:014 - like you made in 00:58:037 -. Have the same sound
7. 00:58:037 (282) - I think is fine if you extend the slider until 00:58:711 - to follow better the synthesizer
8. 01:04:778 (302,303,304,305,306,307,308,309,310) - This stream don't convince me, how about kkdkddkdk?
9. 01:06:464 - You follow the melody background, I would remove some to make a break and follow better the melody (like 01:08:318 (327,363) - )
10. 01:07:643 (323) - don? the sound is low
11. 01:16:913 - ~ 01:24:666 - I think is better if you make emphasizes there 01:16:913 (388,391,394,397,400,402,404) - with a finisher and 01:17:587 (392,399) - change to don
12. 01:25:003 (442,443,444,445,446,447,448,449,450,451,452,453,454,455,456,457,458) - The stream don't convince me, try using
13. 01:31:407 (500) - I would change to don following the melody
14. 01:35:284 (532) - Change to kat to vary a bit
15. 01:36:632 (543,544,545,546,547,548,549) - Hmmm, why not ddkdkkd
16. 01:48:599 (647,649,650) - I think the finishers falls there, not 01:48:767 (648) -
17. 01:51:969 - 01:53:823 - This fit better with the vocal I guess
18. 01:55:846 (700) - Remove to follow the vocal
19. 02:21:464 (873) - This haven't sound, remove
20. 02:58:627 (1073,1074,1079) - I don't listen sound, remove
21. 03:21:632 (1205) - This finisher is so hard to play after a 1/6 pattern, consider remove the finisher

gaston_2199 wrote:

Hi!
NM from my queue ~
Some clarifications:

1. k = kat d = don K = big kat D = big don
2. It's just suggestions/corrections, you are free to accept them or not.
3. If you accept my suggestions/corrections, apply also in similar parts.
4. If you don't accept my suggestions/corrections, clarify why you do not accept them.

[ Oni]

1. 00:01:408 (1) - I would remove the finisher because the sound is not stronger. It hear like 00:04:104 (12) - . I hear it stronger than the beat you gave as an example. Plus, it's really good to emphasize it as it is the first beat of the song. Might change it later if someone else complains about it, but rather keep it for now~
2. 00:03:936 (10,11) - There haven't sound , can be remove and follow better the flow I guess Okay, guess I overmapped it a bit too much, heh.
3. 00:28:542 (156,164,173,181) - I don't know why you changed this to kat if the sound is the same than 00:25:846 (139) - . Maybe for variability, but I think is better keep the don I guess you've linked the wrong pattern, but yes, I did that to get some variation. She says "torawarete" and that "re" I hear that both d and k are suitable, so I changed it for better variation!
4. 00:39:076 (215) - Feels a bit overmapped, I think you can remove to keep the consistency with 00:06:464 (20,21,22) - Yeah, it's a bit inconsistent but I like it since it's emphasize the beginning of a new section. Rather than removing it I remade other patterns so it wouldn't look so inconsistent.
5. 00:39:160 - From here you leave follow the dnb instrumental, because should be dkdkdk until 00:44:554 - . Maybe you want follow the vocal, but I think dkdkd fit good with the vocal too Yeah, I know they barelly change anything on that part, but keeping k d k d k d would be rather boring and I like to variate it while creating a crescent emphasis, I feel that doing that is really better than a whole d k d k d k pattern~
6. 00:55:340 - Replace the finisher with a slider until 00:56:014 - like you made in 00:58:037 -. Have the same sound woops, forgot doing that, thanks!
7. 00:58:037 (282) - I think is fine if you extend the slider until 00:58:711 - to follow better the synthesizer I tried doing that already but I don't really like how it sounds. The red mark feels really empty when I do that :c
8. 01:04:778 (302,303,304,305,306,307,308,309,310) - This stream don't convince me, how about kkdkddkdk? Didn't do exactly how you told me to but remade it a little~
9. 01:06:464 - You follow the melody background, I would remove some to make a break and follow better the melody (like 01:08:318 (327,363) - ) I tried that already but doesn't sound really nice, since it skips a lot of strong beats.
10. 01:07:643 (323) - don? the sound is low It was really sounding weird and inconsistent, remade some patterns.
11. 01:16:913 - ~ 01:24:666 - I think is better if you make emphasizes there 01:16:913 (388,391,394,397,400,402,404) - with a finisher and 01:17:587 (392,399) - change to don I really tried to emphasize by adding a finish, believe me, but it plays REALLY awkwardly. I'd rather not add a finish instead.
12. 01:25:003 (442,443,444,445,446,447,448,449,450,451,452,453,454,455,456,457,458) - The stream don't convince me, try using Yeah, it might sound a little better, changed a feel things, but rather keep my original stream's essence since my objective there is to make it less emphasized (with d) as the stream starts with a lower volume and increase its emphasis with k as it gets louder.
13. 01:31:407 (500) - I would change to don following the melody Well, I clearly hear a kat there :c
14. 01:35:284 (532) - Change to kat to vary a bit same there, but for don.
15. 01:36:632 (543,544,545,546,547,548,549) - Hmmm, why not ddkdkkd Alright changed it and a few other patterns for consistency.
16. 01:48:599 (647,649,650) - I think the finishers falls there, not 01:48:767 (648) - These beats are stronger than the previous ones, so I'd rather keep it there~
17. 01:51:969 - 01:53:823 - This fit better with the vocal I guess Oh, that wasn't supposed to follow the vocal, it's supposed to follow the instrumental. I only follow the vocal here: 01:54:666 (688,689,690,691,692,693,694,695,696,697,698,699,700,701,702,703,704,705,706,707,708,709,710,711) -
18. 01:55:846 (700) - Remove to follow the vocal Same as mentioined above. I usually use two 1/2 k to emphasize the next pattern!
19. 02:21:464 (873) - This haven't sound, remove It has, a really low one but it has.
20. 02:58:627 (1073,1074,1079) - I don't listen sound, remove These are even clearer than the previous one o_o
21. 03:21:632 (1205) - This finisher is so hard to play after a 1/6 pattern, consider remove the finisher They're 1/4 now!

That's all, good luck~

ghm12 wrote:

uwu desculpa pelo mod longo embora tu tenha pedido algo curto
mais de um timing na mesma sugestão é porque a pattern é a mesma quando a música faz loop

consider hp5 since you told me to do so on my maps and its a marathon so why not OK

a posição do bg tá linda igual vc?

00:03:936 - 00:09:329 - deletar essas? não tem nenhum som, e deixar vazio aqui deixa bonito porque 00:06:464 - tem algo okay
00:06:632 - esse som não existe não mesmo
00:12:025 - tecnicamente esse também não mas pode deixar porque combina com o som de fundo. mudaria a pattern pra kkd por conta do mesmo som tho vdd
01:05:958 - d D é feio grr, mas nao sei se k D ficaria bom por ser K k D. up to you ~ mudei pra k k d
01:09:329 - inverte de k d pra d k? feels better s
01:09:666 - 01:12:363 - ddk fica melhor tanto pra melodia quanto pelo fato da ultima nota ser forte vou deixar dkk então
01:11:014 - aaa não gostei muito disso, tenta ddkkd ou kdkkd segunda opção
01:12:700 - eu sei que falei pra deixar isso k, mas se tu aceitou 01:12:363 -, deixa isso d pra dar ênfase pra próxima nota ué mas ele ja ta k e o outro ja ta d
01:15:059 - isso tá legal, mas acho que dkkkddk fica mais gostosinho fiz de outro jeito, n sei se vc vai gostar
01:16:070 - vê se essa nota katsu fica legal fica
01:16:660 - deixa isso k só pra diferenciar as últimas três notas (as duas primeiras que não são da melodia k, as que são ddk) okay
01:16:913 - essa parte eu realmente acho que tu deveria usar katsu apenas onde tem o som de prato, exceto partes como 01:18:767 - que casou bem com a melodia. pra referência, torna don 01:17:587 - 01:20:284 - eu não sei, eu realmente gostei do jeito q eu fiz, misturando o som de fundo com os pratos, acho que vou deixar assim mesmo ;w;
01:26:267 - stream acabando em kk é feio, deixa isso don ah sim, achei q vc tinha pedido pra eu tirar o ultimo k, já ia te bater
01:30:986 - acho que deletar essa nota e colocar um d em 01:31:492 - fica mais cool. se fizer isso, torna 01:30:902 - don s
01:41:688 - ^ s tb
01:36:632 - eu diria pra usar kdkkddk aqui, mas tu já usou bastante durante o kiai. acho que coisas como kdkkkdk, ddkkddk ou ddkdkdk ficariam mais legais okay
01:47:840 - don aqui? acabar em kk é feio.. vdd
01:49:104 - aqui vem a mesma história. não sei se K k D ficaria bom, mas K d D parece estranho pra mim também. up to you as always esse eu vou deixar porque combina mais que o outro imo
01:53:992 - 02:04:778 - kkd aqui ficaria cute porque dois primeiros sons diferentes do último, e último grave fica cute mesmo
01:55:340 - 02:05:958 - ^ fica
02:08:823 - aqui não faz tão mal, mas eu deixaria d pra ser ddkkd 1/2. se quiser "seguir vocal", faz d k d k k d daqui 02:07:981 - certo ( a partir daqui só vou dar reply nos que eu não aceitei, porque cansei de clicar no botão azul sadsafds)
02:21:464 - tecnicamente esse som não existe, mas dá pra deixar a nota. só que tem aquilo né, sou fag com d D é fag mesmo ):<
02:24:160 - 02:29:554 - 02:34:947 - 02:40:340 - acho que katsu ficaria legal pra manter k d d k k d / dar ênfase pra última
02:25:846 - 02:31:239 - colocaria um don só por causa do som inconsciente que tu seguiria no fundo. é o que diferencia o início da música pra parte de agora
02:26:941 - 02:32:334 - tornaria aqui k só pra fechar kdkkd
02:48:261 - katsu aqui ficaria cooler fica nada, o som é bem grave pra mim
02:59:301 - 03:10:087 - deletaria essa (eu pelo menos não ouço) e deixaria atrás kkd
03:16:913 - 03:27:700 - acho que esse início funciona melhor como dkkdk do que dkdkk
03:20:115 - 03:30:902 - aqui katsu não funciona? muito d seguido me dá agonia desculpa
03:26:183 - aqui tem som de katsu e dá ênfase, pode recusar os outros k D mas aceita esse........
03:38:739 - honestly, eu escuto o som começando daqui. talvez ficaria feio, mas dkkddk é uma opção viável nessa parte (mesmo que comece em snap estranho, o som é inesperado então kinda fits) eu sei que ficaria, então prefiro deixar assim mesmo, já tentei outras patterns e não gostei muito. eu gosto da ideia de kkkkk pra diferenciar, porque é um som que não aparece na musica toda e não é uma pattern q usei tb
03:39:834 - tu não acha que o kiai poderia começar aqui dessa vez? a diferença dessa parte pra 01:28:037 - é que este tem um impacto mais forte, enquanto aquele não. se seguir, tira o finisher do 03:40:172 - e coloca em 03:39:834 -
03:43:037 - 03:53:823 - ideia igual a de 01:30:902 -
03:48:767 - igual a de 01:15:059 -
03:59:975 - d? :c
04:06:127 - 04:16:913 - kkd, mesmo motivo de antes (to com preguiça de pegar o timing mas to falando da mesma parte)
04:07:475 - 04:18:261 - ^
04:20:284 - ideia igual de 02:08:823 -
04:33:599 - k D é bonito.. para de frescura..........
04:35:115 - 04:40:509 - d k k ddk aqui fica mais fitting com a melodia de fundo
04:38:318 - 04:43:711 - ddk pra melodia só ^
04:48:599 - what about kkd k ddk aqui? se sim, coloca d aqui 04:48:430 - fica mais cute
04:59:975 - 05:10:761 - eu sinceramente tornaria isso d pra dar ênfase pro katsu seguinte
05:05:958 - k D por favor uwu! nãããão aaaaaaaaaaaaaah!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
05:16:745 - ^ opcional tho se é opcional já sabe né...

algumas das sugestões também podem ser aplicadas em outros lugares, mas é mais por eu ser fag de pattern. exemplo é no fim dá pra usar dkkdkdkdk em uns dkdkkdkdk etcetc

gl fofo