00:13:121 (13121|5,13212|4) - ctrl j to compliment the disconnected motion of 00:13:212 (13212|1,13303|2,13394|0) -
00:16:121 - pretty sure there's a cymbal here different from other previous sounds Pretty unique so i believe it deserves a double. With that said, you can go for
https://puu.sh/wXOYs/2cbe367d75.png 00:18:303 (18303|6,18303|5,18348|4,18394|3,18439|2) - ungodly loud hitsounds here, use a volume line or decrease individual note volumes your call
00:19:030 (19030|1,19212|2) - swap col because 00:19:212 (19212|2,19212|3) - is weird to play
00:20:667 - current pattern is quite heavy on the left hand so
https://puu.sh/wXPeM/3f0f838cf8.png00:22:121 (22121|1,22121|0,22303|1,22303|2) - considering that all previous patterns by far are rather comfy this is very out of place. Consider
https://puu.sh/wXPlm/82db107690.png but before you apply 00:22:303 - versus 00:23:394 - explain the chord size difference
00:23:212 - this vs the previous section i kinda understand. But you should at least try to maintain the LNs for the "ii-guu" vocal because it looks like the ln trills earlier are more focused on the vocals while 00:23:576 (23576|4,23576|0,23758|3,23758|1,23939|4,23939|0) - aren't LNs at all. Fix will assume that you would want the earlier ii-guu to be as similar to the current while maintaining the LN layer:
https://puu.sh/wXPx4/5e3bfa9483.png00:24:303 (24303|0,24485|3,24485|2,24667|4,24667|1,24667|5,24848|2,24848|3,25030|0) - pattern is abnormally heavy on the left hand
00:25:030 (25030|5,25030|0,25030|6,25212|0,25212|4) - must contain double jacks for consistency with the rest
00:25:758 (25758|5) - could be in 3 to compensate for the heaviness on the right hand
00:27:758 - like 00:16:121 -
00:29:939 - same argument with the hitsounds if you fixed the previous one
00:33:758 (33758|6,33758|5,33939|5,33939|4,34121|3,34121|6,34303|5,34303|4) - probably ass to play for right thumb idk
00:35:939 (35939|6,35939|5,36121|3,36121|4,36303|1,36303|2,36303|5,36485|4,36485|3) - kinda like previous but for right thumb this time
kinda weird how 00:38:121 (38121|0,38485|0,38848|0,39212|0,39576|0) - is stacked but 00:39:576 (39576|6,39939|6,40303|5,40667|0,41030|0,41394|6,41758|6,42121|0) - is everywhere
00:46:030 (46030|6) - to 1 so that the left side isnt super ass to read
00:46:848 - i love this section great idea!
01:12:303 (72303|3) - now i know youre intentionally going for adjacency with the doubles but if this goes to 3, this part would feel more even to play
01:45:030 (105030|6,105121|5,105212|2,105212|4,105303|1,105394|0) - you mostly used trills for the rap vocal so something as comfy as this would 10/10 throw people off i guess. If you think a full trill would be too repetitive, minitrilling somewhere should work
01:47:030 (107030|0,107076|1,107121|2,107167|3) - shift to the right once for balance
01:49:394 - same complaint as previous with the stacks
02:18:667 (138667|0,138848|1) - should play better if swapped
02:53:576 (173576|6,173758|5) - swap like ^