Next Time you map something try to use the same pattern when having the exact same musical pattern or at least a slight alteration.
00:15:600 - apply same pattern as 00:10:800 (13,14,15,16,17,18) - and even if you don't - be more creative - I can help you with that if needed
00:25:200 - apply same pattern as 00:20:400 (23,24,25,26,27,28)
00:30:000 - use the same pattern as in the beginning
after everything is consistent I may have another look at what to improve
Perfectly fine how it is.
00:06:000 and 00:06:150 - add Don bc of music - also sounds better
00:20:250 - add Don - again music, also consistency
00:34:800 and 00:34:950 (18) - ^
Really well placed 1/16 I would say
I hope I can help you ^^