UNDEAD CORPORATION - Setsugetsu Ouka no Kuni

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Nyantiaz
This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on Wednesday, March 21, 2018 at 7:47:15 PM

Artist: UNDEAD CORPORATION
Title: Setsugetsu Ouka no Kuni
Source: 東方Project
Tags: Touhou Piano Gensoukyou kara chou Koutetsu Juutei Bakuon 幻想郷から超鋼鉄重低爆音 C78 ZUN Three Moon Fairies Sangetsusei 東方三月精 ~ Strange and Bright Nature Deity 1 Team Shanghai Alice A Land Resplendent With Nature's Beauty 上海アリス幻樂団 Gengakudan Yukimura Hirano Sunny Milk Luna Child Star Sapphire byby CutEddie
BPM: 110
Filesize: 3022kb
Play Time: 00:57
Difficulties Available:
  1. Basic (1.08 stars, 46 notes)
  2. Medium (1.33 stars, 53 notes)


Download: UNDEAD CORPORATION - Setsugetsu Ouka no Kuni
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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first ranked owo(^・ω・^✿)!!

Basic by me
Medium by me
Hitsounds by Gabe (after disqualification)

Thanks to Nozhomi and Hailie for nominating!

November 2018: I love just looking back at this and seeing how far I’ve come as a mapper, and seeing all the support and mods I got. I still remember when I first couldn’t even change slider velocity, and here I am today with 4 ranked maps and 2 ranked GDs. I look back and this and I just feel this nostalgic kinda feeling, you know? Probably no one will see this, but I'll just leave a message here for my future self and if anyone else does happen to see it. Hopefully in the future I’ll be even more successful as a mapper, as it's my dream in this game! (Well that, and be a good player too). I will NEVER forget about this map and my experiences as a mapper from here to now. Without this map, I'd have quit mapping. Thank you all who contributed to this as well! Love you all. ❤️
FlexxicE
Easy:
00:08:303 (1) - According to the ranking criteria you should avoid 1/1 sliders with multiple reverses

Storyboard:
The blacked intro and outro could need a bit stretching, because it would look better with a fully filled screen and a bit smoother transition could be needed, because new players could get suprisied. Also the frost and greyscale image need a bit adaption.

All in all it looked fine for me but it's also my first mod, hope I could help.
Joe Castle
hi! im here from #modreqs to see if i can help you with you map!
lets see what you have:


Easy:

1. 00:00:667 (1,1) - make a bit more of spacing between this objects. they are a bit too close

2. 00:06:667 (4,5,1) - add a bit more of spacing here too

3. 00:08:303 (1,2) - a bit more spacing between this objects too

4. 00:13:758 (2,1) - add a bit more spacing here too

5. 00:16:485 (2,3,4) - this should have equal spacing (and add a bit more of spacing between them too)

6. 00:24:667 (5,6,1,2) - this should have the same spacing between them too

7. 00:29:576 (3,4) - separate them a bit more

8. 00:32:849 (1,2,3) - make this objects have the same spacing between them

9. 00:36:667 (5,6) - add the same spacing you made between 00:34:485 (3,4)

10. 00:39:394 (1,2,3) - this objects should have the same spacing between them

11. 00:45:940 (1,1) - separate this a bit more, they are too close of each other

12. 00:49:212 (3,4,5) - try this http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8290845 and make them have the same spacing between them


Normal:

1. 00:13:212 (1,2) - in this part, just a straight line doesnt fit, try doing this instead https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8290773 it will flow with the piano way better

2. 00:29:576 (4,5,6) - this objects should have the same spacing between them, since the third slider is a bit far from the circle.

3. 00:32:849 (1,2,3) - try doing something like this http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8290797 it will flow a bit better in that way

thats all, i hope this mod helps you uwu
Topic Starter
Nyantiaz

FlexxicE wrote:

Easy:
00:08:303 (1) - According to the ranking criteria you should avoid 1/1 sliders with multiple reverses fixed (i think)

Storyboard:
The blacked intro and outro could need a bit stretching, because it would look better with a fully filled screen and a bit smoother transition could be needed, because new players could get suprisied. Also the frost and greyscale image need a bit adaption. i don't understand what you mean D: as for the black however i think it is fullscreen

All in all it looked fine for me but it's also my first mod, hope I could help. you did. thanks!
Topic Starter
Nyantiaz

Joe Castle wrote:

hi! im here from #modreqs to see if i can help you with you map! whatever you say helps. thanks!
lets see what you have: alright


Easy:

1. 00:00:667 (1,1) - make a bit more of spacing between this objects. they are a bit too close fixed i think

2. 00:06:667 (4,5,1) - add a bit more of spacing here too idk if it's fixed or not but i tried

3. 00:08:303 (1,2) - a bit more spacing between this objects too i updated before viewing this mod so i think it's fixed

4. 00:13:758 (2,1) - add a bit more spacing here too according to ds i can't really space this anymore, i think it's fine though

5. 00:16:485 (2,3,4) - this should have equal spacing (and add a bit more of spacing between them too) fixed

6. 00:24:667 (5,6,1,2) - this should have the same spacing between them too fixed

7. 00:29:576 (3,4) - separate them a bit more fixed i think

8. 00:32:849 (1,2,3) - make this objects have the same spacing between them fixed i think

9. 00:36:667 (5,6) - add the same spacing you made between 00:34:485 (3,4) fixed?

10. 00:39:394 (1,2,3) - this objects should have the same spacing between them fixed

11. 00:45:940 (1,1) - separate this a bit more, they are too close of each other fixed

12. 00:49:212 (3,4,5) - try this http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8290845 and make them have the same spacing between them nice! fixed


Normal:

1. 00:13:212 (1,2) - in this part, just a straight line doesnt fit, try doing this instead https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8290773 it will flow with the piano way better it does flow better! i had a little hard time with the slider shape but.. fixed

2. 00:29:576 (4,5,6) - this objects should have the same spacing between them, since the third slider is a bit far from the circle. did you mean 4,5,6? if so, fixed

3. 00:32:849 (1,2,3) - try doing something like this http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8290797 it will flow a bit better in that way fixed i think,
i didn't understand what you did there


thats all, i hope this mod helps you uwu it did! thank you so much! :D
FlexxicE
I made screenshots of the parts I mean, you can see them in the box below. As you can see in them, there are some uncovered bars on the left and right side of the original background. Also for a bit more smoothness you could change these images to slowly fade in and fade out again, so that they are longer visible.

I hope I made it more understandable this time :D



Topic Starter
Nyantiaz

FlexxicE wrote:

I made screenshots of the parts I mean, you can see them in the box below. As you can see in them, there are some uncovered bars on the left and right side of the original background. Also for a bit more smoothness you could change these images to slowly fade in and fade out again, so that they are longer visible.

I hope I made it more understandable this time :D



I had no idea! Thanks for telling me this :o
Cris-
#modreqs

General: Your mapset had some problems with SB (you can see this on AiMod), fix this please.

Easy
Imo this needs more DS (1,2x maybe)
  1. 00:05:031 (3) - NC
  2. 00:23:031 (4) - ^
  3. 00:08:303 (1,2,3) - Bad flow, i suggest put 2 above 00:07:758 (5) and 3 right down from this
  4. 00:51:940 (5) - Remove and start spinner here
Normal
  1. 00:13:212 (1,2) - Fix blanket
  2. 00:22:485 (2) - Put this directly to the tail of 1
  3. 00:29:576 (4) - NC?
  4. 00:37:758 (1) - I suggest put this above from 00:34:485 (3)
  5. 00:51:940 (3) - Same on easy (remove and put spinner here). Imo emphasizes better
GL~
Sidetail
[general]
as a post-sber myself (SB maker of 1 and 2 Just as a reference xD), i can give you some tips on reducing load for sb

you tried to use sb/circle (which doesn't exist (atleast not in the folder))

your "thank.png" is faded out for entire time... and your "for playing.png" / "kawaii.png" is out of bound.

and your sb isnt very efficient (usages of black.png while you can just fade off the bg), so i fixed it for you: https://puu.sh/weUOV/98f099a71b.zip (make sure you back up your current files (osb & sb folder) , so that you can go back to it if you dont like it and those extra sprites.)

^ on top of that sb, you just need to add "thanks for playing owo" pictures on there

[normal]
00:16:485 (2) - bend this so that it fits nicely with 00:17:576 (3) - and offers more flow
00:26:849 (1,2) - not sure why these need vol boost since i dont see a reason for it..

good. I like it.

[easy]
check AiMod (there is some distance things to perhaps fix)
00:06:667 (4,5,1) - I do think you can make DS just enough big so that objects dont touch. Its just things that drives me nuts
00:08:303 (1,2,3) - ^ yeah it doesn't look very nice. hope you fix it!
00:35:576 (4,5) - this should've been switched around circle-> slider feels better, ending on downbeat with sliderend seems odd
00:40:485 (2,3) - ^
00:52:485 (1) - have the spinner start at 00:52:212 so that players have just a bit more time to spin (you did it on normal actually)

hope that helps. if you need help with sb or questions in general, just ask me
Topic Starter
Nyantiaz

Cris_1 wrote:

#modreqs yay :D

General: Your mapset had some problems with SB (you can see this on AiMod), fix this please. only thing i saw was it needs an epilepsy warning, so i added that

Easy
Imo this needs more DS (1,2x maybe) thanks but i think i'll keep at the ds rn
  1. 00:05:031 (3) - NC fixed
  2. 00:23:031 (4) - ^ fixed
  3. 00:08:303 (1,2,3) - Bad flow, i suggest put 2 above 00:07:758 (5) and 3 right down from this i think it's fine where it is, but if a few more mods come about this i'll TRY to fix it
  4. 00:51:940 (5) - Remove and start spinner here i feel something needs to be clicked here
Normal
  1. 00:13:212 (1,2) - Fix blanket tried to fix it
  2. 00:22:485 (2) - Put this directly to the tail of 1 i don't understand what you mean here
  3. 00:29:576 (4) - NC? fixed
  4. 00:37:758 (1) - I suggest put this above from 00:34:485 (3) to me it's fine where it is
  5. 00:51:940 (3) - Same on easy (remove and put spinner here). Imo emphasizes better
GL~ thanks!
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