1. Dispersion of Lights (5.23 stars, 1092 notes)

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19:22 Yamicchi: bấy bề
19:23 Shortthu: hế lu
19:23 Yamicchi: u know wot I want
19:23 *Yamicchi is listening to [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/1309612 Muzzy - Spectrum]
19:23 Shortthu: fast lul
19:23 Yamicchi: lul 1 and a half days
19:23 Yamicchi: no no make it 2
19:23 Shortthu: still faster than me
19:24 Shortthu: and better than me ofc xd
19:24 Yamicchi: faster yes
19:24 Yamicchi: better might not
19:24 Yamicchi: I rarely make minor issues, only major one
19:24 Shortthu: :thinking:
19:25 Yamicchi: minor issues is for modders to earn kudos
19:25 Yamicchi: lul
19:26 Shortthu: and what about me lol
19:26 Yamicchi: it's for you too
19:26 Yamicchi: xd
19:26 Shortthu: lul
19:26 Shortthu: ye
19:27 Yamicchi: can't even reach 5.25*
19:27 Yamicchi: I'm bad
19:27 Shortthu: overmap :^
19:28 Yamicchi: wut
19:28 Yamicchi: I don't
19:28 Shortthu: overmap to make it reach 5,25
19:28 Shortthu: LUL
19:28 Yamicchi: no no
19:29 Yamicchi: the extra icon is good but I'd rather not to overmap lul
19:29 Shortthu: xdxd
19:29 Shortthu: 01:22:464 (4) - this doesn't follow the vocal very well
19:29 Yamicchi: 02:18:151 (6) - epic hitsound
19:29 Shortthu: nice HS lo
19:29 Yamicchi: the whole slider is a "with"
19:30 Shortthu: hmm
19:30 Yamicchi: why did you think it didn't follow vocal well?
19:31 Shortthu: slider head not start when the vocal start?
19:31 Yamicchi: is it off?
19:31 Shortthu: off a bit
19:31 Yamicchi: oh ya
19:31 Yamicchi: it's on blue tick
19:31 Shortthu: xd
19:31 Shortthu: but why english LOL
19:31 Yamicchi: i don't biết
19:32 Shortthu: giống
19:32 Yamicchi: ha ha
19:32 Yamicchi: nãy giờ ngồi rảnh đi lụm lặt hitsound nên giờ vài chỗ nghe hoành tráng vcđ
19:32 Shortthu: nice hitsound :3
19:33 Yamicchi: all hail lordraika
19:33 Shortthu: đống hs + sb của ổng nhìn chả biết lấy cái nào luôn :c
19:33 Yamicchi: nhiều lắm
19:33 Yamicchi: nhưng mà
19:34 Yamicchi: nó vẫn có vẻ thiếu thiếu mấy cái bth
19:34 Yamicchi: mấy cái hoành tráng thì nhiều
19:34 Shortthu: 01:47:122 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 01:49:865 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - hai thằng này thấy giữ spacing sao 01:52:608 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - lại chuyển :v
19:34 Shortthu: 01:55:351 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - ở đây cũng giữ mà
19:35 Yamicchi: spacing tăng tí ấy mà :v
19:35 Shortthu: lul
19:35 Yamicchi: vẫn là tăng spacing ở 01:52:951 (3,5) -
19:35 Yamicchi: nhưng có điều lỡ tay làm hơi bị bự quá
19:35 Yamicchi: nhưng chơi ổn
19:35 Shortthu: okay
19:36 Shortthu: 02:08:551 (5,6) - ctrl + g seems better rhythm
19:37 Yamicchi: hmm
19:37 Yamicchi: idk
19:37 Yamicchi: 02:08:894 (6) - small violin here
19:37 Yamicchi: mà hầu như chỗ nào cũng mà ;v
19:37 Shortthu: lul
19:38 Shortthu: tại chỗ đó có vocal thì phải
19:38 Yamicchi: à vocal ấy hả
19:38 Yamicchi: kh chỗ đó đang kh theo vocal
19:38 Shortthu: nhưng mà nghe vocal rõ hơn
19:38 Shortthu: idk
19:38 Shortthu: lul
19:39 Yamicchi: yami học từ shoga đấy
19:39 Shortthu: oh
19:39 Yamicchi: follow nhạc luôn luôn ngầu hơn follow vocal
19:39 Shortthu: okok i'll remember
19:39 Yamicchi: ừa )
19:40 Yamicchi: lmt cũng vậy
19:40 Yamicchi: thích follow nhạc hơn
19:40 Yamicchi: 2 ông tướng đó y chang nhau
19:40 Shortthu: có mấy bài như bài thư đang map nhạc thì ít mà vocal thì nhiều lol
19:40 Yamicchi: 02:44:208 (6) - chỗ này nghe hitsound có cà trớn quá kh )
19:41 Shortthu: chỗ đó hitsound ngon mà :>
19:41 Yamicchi: )
19:41 Yamicchi: tại nó hơi trật tông
19:41 Shortthu: chắc cũng ổn
19:42 Shortthu: 02:31:522 (4) - thằng này kéo lên gần 02:31:179 (2) - giống như 02:31:351 (3,5) -
19:42 Shortthu: để nó ở dưới thấy kì kì
19:43 Yamicchi: 02:31:522 (4) - cái này 1 là cho dễ nhìn, 2 là để cho đúng spacing với cái dải drum đó, nên kh biết có nên overlap theo kh
19:47 Shortthu: :thonk:
19:48 Yamicchi: spec huydark tí hem
19:48 Shortthu: ok
19:48 Yamicchi: trưa nay Athy HR mém fc
19:48 Yamicchi: mới ngủ dậy
19:48 Yamicchi: omg
19:48 Shortthu: hoyl
19:49 Yamicchi: là sáng này con đang giữ AR9.4 chưa đổi thành 9.2 ấy
19:49 Yamicchi: op
19:49 Shortthu: athy god
19:49 Yamicchi: 2digit player be liek
19:49 Shortthu: tru
19:49 Shortthu: <- can't AR 10
19:50 Yamicchi: I can but not pretty well
19:50 Shortthu: :3
19:50 Yamicchi: đang tắt nhạc nghe hitsound
19:51 Shortthu: music 25%
19:51 Yamicchi: đấy
19:51 Yamicchi: 1 trong những lí do
19:51 Yamicchi: mà Yami toàn map dnb
19:51 Shortthu: oh :3
19:51 Yamicchi: )))
19:51 Yamicchi: cái slider đó
19:51 Yamicchi: works everytam
19:52 Shortthu: lol
19:52 Shortthu: đoạn đầu yami silence cả slider slide lẫn slider tick hả
19:53 Shortthu: unrankable lo
19:53 Yamicchi: why unrankable
19:53 Shortthu: nhớ trước đọc criteria chỉ được silence một trong hai
19:55 Yamicchi: đâu có silent hết đâu
19:55 Yamicchi: chỗ nào v
19:55 Shortthu: khúc đầu mấy cái slider art ấy
19:55 Yamicchi: cái sliderslide và slider end mà cùng câm thì đó h yami làm quài mà
19:56 Yamicchi: có slider start vẫn để 10%
19:56 Shortthu: slider slide + slider tick á
19:56 Yamicchi: à
19:56 Yamicchi: ok vậy để tick
19:56 Shortthu: ok
19:56 Shortthu: chắc phải giảm xuống 10%
19:56 Shortthu: 20% vẫn thấy lớn :v
19:56 Yamicchi: ừa lớn thật
19:57 Shortthu: nãy chơi mới để ý cái này
19:57 Yamicchi: nào
19:57 Shortthu: cái vừa nó đó lul
19:58 Yamicchi: à ok ok
20:02 Shortthu: 03:29:979 - chỗ này cũng có tiếng (insert tiếng chỗ đó here) và chỗ này 03:32:722 - cũng có tiếng đó sao thấy khác nhau thế
20:05 Yamicchi: 2 cái đó khác nhau hay khác với phần khác?
20:05 Shortthu: làm khác nhau ấy
20:05 Yamicchi: cho map thêm vị :v
20:05 Shortthu: lol
20:06 Yamicchi: mà cũng kh biết có đc làm vậy kh
20:06 Yamicchi: nếu mà nghiêm trọng quá thì sẽ ráng sửa :v
20:06 Yamicchi: đã ghi nhânj
20:06 Shortthu: ok xd
20:06 Shortthu: tại mấy chỗ khác âm giống nhau thấy yami cũng làm giống slider shape / pattern
20:07 Yamicchi: đấy
20:07 Yamicchi: minor issues
20:07 Yamicchi: )
20:07 Yamicchi: à kh cái này major issues chứ nhỉ
20:07 Shortthu: =)))
20:09 Shortthu: chiều nay rảnh xem mấy cái video của ông pishifat
20:09 Yamicchi: ừm hửm, học đc gì kh
20:09 Shortthu: chắc là có
20:09 Shortthu: giờ xem map của yami mới thấy rõ
20:09 Shortthu: xd
20:10 Yamicchi: chỗ nào v )
20:10 Shortthu: toàn map
20:10 Shortthu: LOL
20:10 Yamicchi: LOL
20:10 Yamicchi: rốt cuộc cái video nói về cái gì ))
20:10 Shortthu: xem nhiều video mà
20:10 Shortthu: xd
20:10 Yamicchi: à à
20:10 Yamicchi: quào
20:11 Yamicchi: áp dụng bài học lẹ dữ
20:11 Shortthu: =)))))))))
20:11 Yamicchi: yami chưa coi cái nào
20:11 Yamicchi: nên kh biết nó ra sao
20:11 Shortthu: oh
20:11 Shortthu: 05:44:208 (1,2) - hai cái slide shape này overlap ổn không :v
20:11 Yamicchi: miễn là kh quá 50%
20:11 Yamicchi: kh bị che quá 50% là ổn
20:12 Shortthu: okay
20:12 Yamicchi: learnt from Smoothie World senpoi since Beastmode
20:12 Shortthu: OwOb
20:12 Yamicchi: chỗ đó tính vẽ thành cái logo assasin's creed
20:12 Yamicchi: mà thấy tào lao vcl ))
20:12 Shortthu: =)))))))))
20:12 Shortthu: 05:48:322 (1) - thằng này =))))))))))))))))))))
20:13 Yamicchi: )))))))))))
20:13 Shortthu: chỗ cong đó yami tính sửa không :v
20:13 Yamicchi: ai cũng bị dụ
20:13 Yamicchi: mà kh ai choke
20:13 Yamicchi: buồn
20:13 Yamicchi: cong nào
20:13 Shortthu: chỗ bị dụ đó
20:13 Shortthu: lol
20:13 Yamicchi: lol không
20:13 Yamicchi: có bị phàn nàn cách mấy cũng kh :v
20:13 Yamicchi: nhìn vui bome
20:14 Shortthu: "it's intentional dude"
20:14 Shortthu: =))))))))))))
20:14 Yamicchi: kh biết có bao nhiêu skin có cái vệt mờ mờ này mà kh ai nhận ra http://puu.sh/w8CXZ/39611f1065.jpg
20:14 Yamicchi: )))))))
20:14 Shortthu: https://puu.sh/w8D1T/0ac6ea68d7.png có nà
20:14 Shortthu: nhưng mà chơi đâu ai để ý
20:14 Shortthu: qua rồi mới để ý :v
20:15 Yamicchi: tại mấy bạn ngốc ahihi
20:15 Shortthu: lol
20:15 Shortthu: ok done
20:15 Yamicchi: ok thanks :3
20:15 Shortthu: khúc cuối hình như yami cũng silence cả 2 tick + slide
20:16 Yamicchi: tại yami xài cái file slidertick câm á
20:16 Yamicchi: xóa rồi
20:16 Shortthu: okay

Hikan wrote:

100%

Stingy wrote:

First mod in English incoming

[Dispersion of Light]

<3~

1. 00:42:665 (1) - Yo this blanket lowkey isn't 10/10 perfect and the way to fix it if you care is to pull the first node down a little and adjust it coolio
2. 00:42:665 (1,1) - Stack <3~
3. 00:56:208 (1) - Fix end blanket please
4. 00:56:208 (1,1) - Stack
5. 01:08:380 (2,1) - Stack
6. 01:13:180 (2,3) - Yamicchi stack please
7. 01:16:604 (3,1) - Adjust pleeease
8. 01:22:464 (4,1) - I personally think this sounds better as just one slider, even though there are 2 words here well ya can't fix that
9. 01:34:779 (2,4,5) - Stack ;/
10. 01:43:865 (5,5,6) - I find it odd that you don't just stack like you did with the other pattern. I think it's fine as it is, I'm just a little... I don't even know ,w, yea for the diversity
11. 01:51:922 (4) - I know what you're doing here, but I think you should scoot this out just a little bit more from under the slider. This will help visibility with 01:52:437 (6) - true, good one
12. 01:53:465 (6,5) - Stack
13. 01:54:837 (5,5,6) - I think it is fine how it is, but maybe you can stack here if you want, just to clean things up a little bit.
14. 02:04:951 (2,4) - Stack
15. 02:12:322 (4,1) - wtf stack
16. 02:26:037 (4,1) - Stack
    dude what's up with your stacks 99% of my mod is stacks
17. 02:36:151 (1,3) - Stack
18. 02:43:522 (3,6) - Move (6) up to make the blanket a little nicer c:
19. 02:53:294 (3,1) - Don't have to move them but imma just let you know that they're touching :v shh, they're in love
20. 02:57:065 (1,2) - Stack
21. 02:57:579 (3,4) - Stack
22. 03:04:951 - 03:15:922 - Okay finally something I think is important. This section needs to either be spaced a lot wider with more note density or you need to calm down 03:15:922 - 03:24:151 - this. I don't have any cool applications to help me with diffspikes, but I'm sure it would be huge. Yes, the music does get a tad more intense, but I really think the map shouldn't increase difficulty by THAT much. OK I thought about this too but if I adjust any of them, the parts will become the same intensity with other different parts, which is why I can't. Also the calm part is fine for such a long map and lots of jumps, like a place where players rest up a bit. And the intensity of the second part emphasized itself better with the way I'm mapping so there's nothing to be worried about
    Okay so I'm done with stacks now. PLEASE make sure to go back through your slider+note stacks! I know that sometimes osu! will "un-stack" them, but this is just a friendly reminder to do so~ ok...
23. 03:24:151 (9) - Shiirn says to NC and so do I NC please
24. 03:27:751 (3,4) - jk here's a stack ;; okay for real I'm done now
25. 03:34:951 (6,2) - Move (6) to the right just slightly to tuck under (2) better
26. 03:37:694 (6,3) - (6) is a tiny bit off move it to look 10/10
27. 03:40:608 (1,1) - Woot blanket better please :3
28. 03:53:808 (4,1) - HOLY MOTHER OF STACK PLEASE
    Okay so I have no more energy ;; I am really sorry for having a bad mod... I tried to notice more "structural" things but your style is really basic (not in a bad way!) and there isn't much to say about it.
    Please remember to fix all of your stacks. I made sure that I got every stack up until I stopped modding so fix those and continue from there.

Hikan wrote:

so lets talk about your map

00:13:694 - không thấy có gì đáng để 5% bởi vì bản thân sliderhead bọn nó cũng không có tiếng rõ ràng rồi, dùng chung một volume là được, nhưng để hitsound nào nghe yếu chút vì sliderhead tap như loz. Suggestion: https://puu.sh/waFv5/e44efa1a7a.wav , volume 25% đi với cái hs này nghe rất ổn
đoạn này nếu nghe tick rate nhiều quá thì có thể chia đôi bpm đi? xuống còn 83,5 thôi, ngược lại tăng gấp đôi velocity lên vì đang intro nên chưa cần phải nghe 1 đống sliderart ăn kèm tick như vậy hmmm không hiểu ý lắm chỗ hitsound nhưng cũng có thêm thắt chút rồi. Còn cái chia đôi bpm thì thiết nghĩ không cần, vì cái slidertick nó cũng kh đến nổi là quá to, vả lại để slidertick cho combo nó nhiều nhiều tí owo
01:45:751 (2,4) - stack, đẩy slider (4) vào circle (không phải đẩy circle vào slider) thì sẽ trọn vẹn hơn fck stacks
tương tự, không mention nữa
01:57:065 - 02:08:037 - inconsistent dữ bây cái đầu là tại vì nhạc nó rất là chìm về sau vocal, cho nên mới map vocal. Cả đoạn sau thì nhạc nó lên rồi nên không theo vocal nữa
03:21:751 (3,4) - blanket nhỏ quá có vẻ mất thẩm mỹ đẹp mà man
03:24:151 (1) - nc for what, 03:23:808 (5) - thấy cái này đáng nc hơn vì đổi góc lớn, với lại basssss cũng to hơn consistent combo. Với lại đa số cũng là NC ở đó trước khi vào break, mod của th Stingy có đề cập tới chuyện đó, Shiirn cũng có nói
03:42:322 (1,2,3,4,5) - star? well làm star kh đc vì chỗ này phải thể hiện đủ spacing snare và spacing theo pitch, nên thôi làm 4 objects trong star, 5,6 giữ
03:47:465 (1,2,3,4) - bend nó lại, làm ăn ncc hết space loz
03:49:179 (2,3) - improve blanket còn kek gì nữa mà improve??? ???
03:51:237 (5) - cái này làm kick thì intense hơn hitsound theo nhạc thôi :< kh làm trái
04:34:608 (3,5) - như trên, blanket hẹp, không phải lỗi nhưng nó xấu chòi má hình như nó là cái blanket hẹp đẹp nhất map luôn á man
04:39:237 (6) - 04:47:465 (6) - improve blanket nốt đ hiểu nốt, ổn rồi mà
05:41:637 (1,1) - https://puu.sh/waIlt/7bd4081541.png :c , sửa đi, xấu thấy me k man
05:57:237 (1) - same, 05:52:437 (1) - đẩy slider tail cái này lên là đủ chỗ để sliderart cái dưới
bị điếc nên bắt aesthetic thôi sry

I deserve this kudosu.

1. Không hiểu sáng nay tôi ăn phải cái gì mà thấy map chậm chậm, cho lên AR 9.4 hay 9.5 có được không? XD
2. Ở 00:45:151 mới là bắt đầu một đoạn nhạc. Vậy tôi nghĩ 00:42:665 (1) nên là 1 circle + 1 spinner. Chứ không thì 00:39:922 (1) nó hụt hẫng lắm
3. 01:16:604 (3) - Đuôi slider off music, nhưng trước và sau đều có âm.
4. 01:20:750 (1) - ^
5. 02:31:179 (2,3,4) - Đoạn này tôi thấy ông chỉ làm để cho cái map nó khó hơn thôi, tôi không nghe thấy gì ở đuôi slider cả.
6. 02:31:694 (5) - Nếu đoạn trên đã làm kiểu kick thì đoạn này âm cũng na ná, làm theo luôn đi?
7. 02:40:608 (5) - Có âm mạnh, stream nên gấp khúc ở đây
8. 02:41:294 (5) - ^
9. 02:55:008 - strong kick
10. 02:55:180 (4) - Âm này quá nhỏ so với 02:55:008 -, không nên map giống 02:54:665 (2) -, dễ bị mất nhịp tụt acc
11. 02:57:922 (4) - 03:00:665 (4) - ^
12. 03:04:608 (4) - Âm mạnh đều, thành jump tôi thấy hay hơn
13. 03:39:065 (4) - 03:41:808 (4) - 03:44:551 (4) - ^x2
    Đoạn sau đó kiểu extra, ngoại trừ việc thấy nó khó và khó chịu ra thì mình không biết nói sao :v
14. 04:55:865 (6) - Đầu slider không có âm, đuôi slider là big tick??? Nên chuyển 5 thành slider, đuôi của 6 thành circle và NC.
15. 04:56:379 (1) - Nếu sửa theo ý tôi ở trên thì chỗ nào bỏ NC
16. 05:01:351 (5) - Chuyển thành 2 circle và thêm NC vào đít
    Ôi moá, chả hiểu được quy luật NC nữa, âm mạnh âm nhẹ đảo lộn hết...
17. 05:49:522 - Troll slider?

noz1995 wrote:

Đã biết người ta không hiểu tí gì về mod extra mà còn nhờ :<

1. Không hiểu sáng nay tôi ăn phải cái gì mà thấy map chậm chậm, cho lên AR 9.4 hay 9.5 có được không? XD 9.2 là vừa rồi ông ạ )
2. Ở 00:45:151 mới là bắt đầu một đoạn nhạc. Vậy tôi nghĩ 00:42:665 (1) nên là 1 circle + 1 spinner. Chứ không thì 00:39:922 (1) nó hụt hẫng lắm tui kh hiểu ông đang nói gì luôn :v
3. 01:16:604 (3) - Đuôi slider off music, nhưng trước và sau đều có âm.
4. 01:20:750 (1) - ^ tui cũng kh thấy 2 cái này nó có vấn đề lắm, nhưng nếu ai nói gì thì tui sẽ cố tìm cách sửa
5. 02:31:179 (2,3,4) - Đoạn này tôi thấy ông chỉ làm để cho cái map nó khó hơn thôi, tôi không nghe thấy gì ở đuôi slider cả. Ừ đâu có gì ở đuôi slider đâu, tui làm vậy cho cái hitclap thôi, cả map đều làm thế, để cho nó có cái đặc trưng riêng
6. 02:31:694 (5) - Nếu đoạn trên đã làm kiểu kick thì đoạn này âm cũng na ná, làm theo luôn đi? kh sửa cái slider này, nhưng có sửa cái khác :v cho hợp lí hơn
7. 02:40:608 (5) - Có âm mạnh, stream nên gấp khúc ở đây
8. 02:41:294 (5) - ^ ok fine
9. 02:55:008 - strong kick wubbing
10. 02:55:180 (4) - Âm này quá nhỏ so với 02:55:008 -, không nên map giống 02:54:665 (2) -, dễ bị mất nhịp tụt acc [color=#FF0000wubbing[/color]
11. 02:57:922 (4) - 03:00:665 (4) - ^
12. 03:04:608 (4) - Âm mạnh đều, thành jump tôi thấy hay hơn thật ra sliderend nó xuống sâu hơn
13. 03:39:065 (4) - 03:41:808 (4) - 03:44:551 (4) - ^x2
    Đoạn sau đó kiểu extra, ngoại trừ việc thấy nó khó và khó chịu ra thì mình không biết nói sao :v
14. 04:55:865 (6) - Đầu slider không có âm, đuôi slider là big tick??? Nên chuyển 5 thành slider, đuôi của 6 thành circle và NC. violin :v
15. 04:56:379 (1) - Nếu sửa theo ý tôi ở trên thì chỗ nào bỏ NC
16. 05:01:351 (5) - Chuyển thành 2 circle và thêm NC vào đít
    Ôi moá, chả hiểu được quy luật NC nữa, âm mạnh âm nhẹ đảo lộn hết...
17. 05:49:522 - Troll slider? troll slider ))

Bye. Không thân!

Hokichi wrote:

Shit mod incoming

Nice slider art.
Are you sure you wanna go with the slider border color and combo colors? They don't really match to me tbh.

Unused hitsounds:
drum-hitwhistle.wav 04:31:008 -
normal-hitclap5.wav k

Wave hitsounds with possible delay > 5ms:
normal-hitclap5.wav
normal-hitfinish.wav didn't even reach 3ms?
soft-hitfinish10.wav
soft-hitfinish11.wav these are not called delay tho, it's fade in effect

Pls check uwu

01:23:235 - Spinner should start here instead (?) the sound is actually go on from 01:23:495 - so
01:51:922 (4,6) - Why didn't you stack like b4? Like 01:37:522 (2,4) - firstly I didn't stack because I wanna give players some better vision of the pattern, secondly because this part has more intensity than the previous, so stacking is not a good idea
03:15:579 (5,6,7) - Can be hard, but since it's Extra, so meh. Something like 04:07:694 (6,7) - is better using 1/4 slider for a specific triples is not my type
04:45:065 (1,2) - Bad blanket uwu can't see it tho
04:46:951 (3,5,1) - Please stack visual stuffs

K, very short mod cuz I suck
Your map is gud.

Mombei wrote:

From my modding queue

[Dispersion of Lights]

For this map, I'm going to take an unusual route and analyze types of issues on their own. I usually wouldn't do this, but this map is clearly divided in sections that have distinct types of flaws.

Let's get started.

Rhythm Issues

[00:06:837 - 01:07:008]
Many of the sliders here are off rhythm-wise. The song barely has any delay on those sounds, but they are placed a whole 1/2 late. I've tried it myself and normalizing the rhythm so all sliders end up on a red tick makes the map a lot more intuitive to play, and it doesn't sound half bad.
Namely, these sliders are 00:13:865 (2) - 00:15:065 (1) - 00:16:608 (2) - 00:22:094 (2) - 00:34:437 (1) - 00:35:637 (2) - 00:38:551 (2)
Please be careful with 00:34:437 (1) - it's actually too long and should end on 00:35:465 - while 00:35:980 (2) - should start on 00:35:637 - and be long enough to end on 00:36:837 . The same applies for almost all instances of this error. Ok so I checked them with 25% playback rate and fixed 00:09:580 (1) - 00:20:551 (1) - 00:37:008 (1) - 00:35:808 (2) - and that's all I found are late. I also tried to move them 1/2 gap earlier and the others seem off much more than where they are atm so, that's all I changed. I mainly heard the changes in the pitch are mostly on blue ticks, but the press in the rhythm are all fine, that's why I decided to change just 4 of them. The 00:37:008 (1) - is definitely not starting on 00:35:637 - because you can clearly hear the brrr sound starting on red tick tho

[01:07:694 - 01:30:126]
Although loosely, the vocals are followed, but the rhythm doesn't have a proper structure.
Take 01:07:694 (1,2,1,2) - Here there's a click and then a release on every... syllable I guess? Why are 01:07:694 and 01:08:380 special, and get a click?
The answer is that they're not and this rhythm structure is wrong.
Emphasis should be an all syllables, but it's fair to keep a slider for a prolonged sound, or to fill in the gap. Therefore, this is the correct rhythm structure for this pattern. But I bet you're going to say something like "this part is calmer so, so"- don't.
If you don't want to give this section a lot of intensity (which you wouldn't with that pattern anyways, because the song is so slow), you can use a passive version of this rhythm, like this. Point is, as it stands, that rhythm is wrong.

On to 01:09:751 (1,2,3)
3 doesn't even land on a notable sound. 1 should be shorter and 2 should take 1's tail's place. 3 should be longer. here
You're giving slidertails too much importance and ruining the tactile feedback from the patterns because of it.

01:13:180 (2,3,4,1,2,3) - exact same.

Yes I'm using sliders to express the prolonged vocal. And if you work on songs much you'll find what words have more intensity than others, even tho the pitch, the rhythm and the sound in behind is the same, because that's where the artist "press" the intention of those who listen to the song in. I believe you can recognize the one I'm talking about is the "see", that's why it's clickable. 01:09:065 - is a sliderend for sure, because the pitch is going down and it help emphasize the "through" better, and I believe that's fine. 01:10:780 (2,3) - with these I think you can understand that I'm expressing the change in the pitch through a circle and a slider for a prolonged vocal. So did I make it clear enough to you?

01:22:464 (4) - should go all the way to the red tick before 01:23:150 (1). "with" ends on the red tick. the vocal is already a bit off itself, so I'm just simplifying the rhythm with 1/1 gap, and I don't get why you want me to end the slider on red tick, while there's a bigger change on white tick,
where I'm ending it on (actually blue tick but as I said the vocal is off so I can't blame it tho)

[01:34:437 - 02:18:322]
There aren't any notable rhythm flaws in this section. Well structured.

[02:21:065 - 03:24:151]
There aren't any notable rhythm flaws in this section. It's hard to mess up a 1-2 drum-snare structure, I guess.

[03:26:894 - 04:10:779]
03:29:294 (7) - No matter how many times I listen to this and play it out, this slider should be 2 circles, period. no I'm not following the rhythm here, it's just simply kicks and snares
03:51:922 (2) - Either give 03:52:265 - a clickacle object or be consistent with this and make 03:52:437 (3,4) - 03:52:951 (1,2,3) - 03:53:294 (3,4,5) - groups of 3. There is too much variation in composition for a section that's literally identical all the way.
03:54:322 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5) - Same applies. ok so I understand what you're trying to say to me in this part, but believe it or not, this is somehow the best way to map it. Yes consistent is mostly good, but not 100% in this situation. It's a long section and there's only kicks/snares all the way, which is what I'm following. Expressing them by different patterns will give the section some diversity and by that it won't be boring when players play it tho.

[04:10:437 - 04:32:722]
04:29:979 (1,2,1,1,1,1,1) - Simplifying rhythms is a thing, but this is bad. =
04:30:322 (1) - This should not be the start of the slider. Replace with a circle.
04:30:494 - This should be the start of the first slider. You put the most important drum on a reverse arrow. Give it a click.
04:31:694 - 04:32:208 - should have clicks.
this is what this rhythm should look like funny how you're explaining every line by the next line lol ok so here's my turn to explain. I'm following the violin here, I'm not simplifying the rhythm at all. Those drums are not what I intended to follow,
that's why the hitsound helped me. And because I'm following the violin, each slider start has an increase on the pitch, and that's make the current pattern I'm using

[04:32:722 - 05:16:694]
There aren't any notable rhythm issues in this section; although there are inconsistencies, it is nothing worth mentioning.

[05:41:637 - 06:03:237]
this one's ok too.

Object placement issues

Yup, we're doing this again.

[00:06:837 - 01:07:008]
Well, there isn't any spacing and the sliders don't make sudden 180* turns, so I suppose this section is alright


[01:07:694 - 01:30:126]
01:09:751 (1,2,3) - Is there a reason to break implied cursor movement from 1's slider body? No? thought so. Make them play into each other, perhaps it would be easier for you if you changed 1's slider shape. well I don't think there are anything bad about it. I mean when (1) is completely faded away, the (3) is not even faded in yet, so making (2) going somewhere then return to (3) is just a simple pattern which you can find in most of the osu! beatmaps tho
01:15:233 (1,3) - either ovelap slidertail and head, or blanket 3's sliderbody to 1's slidertail. This overlap just looks bad. yea it might look bad but not to me. And as I explained above about the fade in fade out thingy, you can read that again and I believe that's all I wanna explain
01:18:693 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1) - What's with this? The pattern itself is meh, but why is 01:20:750 (1) - further away as if it were a pattern on its own? You should either normalize the pattern by placing the last 1 as you have all other objects in this pattern, or change the pattern entirely to maybe look good. fixed

[01:34:437 - 02:18:322]
01:35:465 (4,5) - Again, no reason to break circular flow. And even if you want to, this overlap looks bad. Use this blanket instead good idea but no, this is just a small thing in a dnb map and I believe like 90% of players feel ok with this. Have you seen other wubby maps, where overlap takes all the credit?
01:39:923 (1,2,3,4,5) - If you're going to revert circular flow for every instance of this pattern, then why do these play into each other? Be consistent with flow choices. diversity stuff again. It only seems a bit off compare to others so Imma keep it in mind if someone else complain about it again
01:42:665 (1,2,3) - 2 is a lot further away from 1 than 3 even though 1 and 3 are the same sound. Normalize spacing. I'm following the violin, which is 2 and 3 are the same instead so
01:43:865 (5,5,6) - Another half-overlap. Either use an hexagrid or overlap them properly it's my choice, and I don't feel like it's bad
01:46:608 (5,3) - Again? 5 is already faded away when 3 appears tho. Look, not all overlap need to be fixed and you should remember that

Okay, I think you have a misconception about overlaps and object placement. You're NOT making it easier for players to see these. You're making visual clutter. It is something a map does not need and should avoid. This happens sooo many more times throughout the whole map. I'll point some out for you, but the solution is always the same; either use an hexagrid structure or perfectly overlap them. Half-assed overlaps make a map look bad. You should be able to tell where they are since you probably placed them that way on purpose.

01:51:922 (4,6,4) - either overlap all of them or space them evenly. This is clutter. Ok you're not paying attention. 01:51:922 (4,6) - is in a different pattern than 01:53:122 (4) - tho
01:57:065 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - 6-7-8 plays awfully after 3-4-5. You should follow circular flow and avoid 180* turns in flow (without a reason, that is) will keep this
02:00:322 (5,2,4,1) - Clutter not
02:03:579 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - This sort of thing only looks decent when the spacing is minimal unecessary tho
02:06:151 (6,1,2,3,4,5,6) - Clutter absolutely not
02:15:579 (1,2) - Make this barely aesthetic bu placing 2 on an hexagrid, like this then the spacing would be so wrong, so no
02:16:608 (5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5) - Clutter. This sort of visual progressions should be done with minimal spacing as I've shown you. If you space them too further apart it will just look unpolished and bad.
If I make the gap same for mostly all objects, they're fine. Not that big gap is always bad tho

[02:21:065 - 03:24:151]
02:22:779 (1,2) - Inconsistent spacing with 02:23:122 (3,4) - 02:23:465 (5,6) - , which are inconsistent with 02:23:808 (1) . What's the point of a reverse spacing progression if you're just going to put a CS jump right after? It just throws players off. There's no reason to have the map be unintuitive. Having less spacing for each 1-2 is fine but here it's too extreme. Being consistent here is absolutely wrong in many ways dude. Don't you notice the pitch in rhythm? And the (1) slider is because it's a strong beat. What's the point of DnB if you can't even emphasize the rhythm and or the drums?
02:25:522 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - I get the pattern, but at least make it look good consistent spacing between 12 and 34 is not my type
02:27:751 (3,2) - Clutter not tho
02:28:437 (2,3) - Missed overlap what do you mean?
02:29:294 (1,2) - These should play into each other. Either rearrange or ctrlG 2 those 2 are different in rhythm and pattern, so no
02:30:322 (4) - Uncomfortable flow. You should ctrlG 5, flip it and blanket definitely not a good idea. 02:30:494 (4,5) - down pitch. 02:30:837 (5,6) - up pitch. That's why I choose the pattern, to express the correct pitch using the correct spacing emphasis
02:32:037 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - Again, use minimal spacing for the best effect ok so lemme say something. The big gap I'm using for the whole map satisfies me and maybe satisfies others too, so I'm not gonna change it. And my opinion is that you should mod more DnB map to know why I'm saying this. Trust me if you go on complaining about these you might get your head blown when you mod other maps.
02:33:408 (1) - This is much better off as a blanket that it is as a part of the progression I don't get what you mean. Is there anything wrong not to blanket this?
02:34:437 (4) - Missed overlap/blanket with 02:33:237 (4) 02:33:408 (1,2,3,4) - seperated pattern, the only connection is the (1) so don't ask me why again.
02:34:779 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - This actually looks ok but apply the same changes just to be consistent see, I'm using the small gap because the spacing of the 8 objects is basically huge. Using big gap would be a huge mistake. Now you know why I chose to map like that?
02:58:094 (5) - This would be a lot better if it was just a smaller version of the other 2 sliders rather than a cut version.here well it's because the spacing. I wanna keep those consistent due to the rhythm of the song tho. Besides I think the cut version looks funnier

[All other sections]
Object placement issues are pretty much the same across the map. Unjustified changed in circular flow - visual clutter - inconsistent spacing
I believe you got the gist of what you should be doing. the gist got it, the work nah xd xd

At last, I am done. This took quite a lot of effort so if you're just going to ignore you I'll actually chase you down irl.

Thank you for using my queue

-Space- wrote:

hi m4m!

delicious slider art, loves it so much teehee :3

Dispersion of Lights

Can't fault your choice of slider art, works really nicely and makes the music come to life with the amount of effort you've put exasperating each note.

I do have a couple of minor suggestions though for potential improvement:

00:17:808 (1,2) - Perhaps a copy-paste would work well here, they're already similar shapes to begin with and since the difference is only pitch the music isn't really giving much variation. not really a fan of copy paste at this part, so I changed the slider shape

00:45:151 (1) - Also this could cause a bit of confusion, especially on tick-less skins. well the tail doesn't make players move a lot enough to slider break, so I think this might be fine

02:03:579 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - This is the only pattern I had a bit of an issue with in the overall buildup section, it works nice but I think two equilateral triangles that expand would work better, I will include a screenshot of my example too! true, I ran out of idea here. Fixed

Triangle

With these scaling outward and in a clockwise direction it creates a nice circular flow into the upcoming slider and is a nice pattern to have aesthetically since it holds a recognisable shape in gameplay.

04:21:065 (5,1) - Consider moving 04:21:407 (7) this a touch more downward in order to avoid an overlap between the two sliders. oops my bad

05:05:637 (1,2) - This particular stack feels like it's not a good indication of the increment of bass at this area, to me it feels like you should expect a jump on the intensity of said bass especially with that string instrument coming into play also. Although this is really situational due to the stacking pattern you use after this - I would still consider the string instrument in this scenario though, see if you can get something to work ^^ well I was thinking to make those easier a bit then increase the intensity one by one, i'm mainly following the kicks so stacking may not be a bad idea, but if I receive more complaints i will do sth for sure

05:44:208 (1) - For this slider why not have something right at the beginning to show that the strings are extremely amplified here, so much more than any other place in fact. idk because the slider represent the whole sound of violin here. You said it's extremely amplified here but I find it the same for the whole slider. If you want me to express the amplified part I already did by making it clickable like that, other than that idk what to do :<

Slider

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05:52:437 (1) - Bring the anchor I highlighted up two grid spaces, perfect circles boi coolio

puush is down, enjoy gyazo

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gimme gimme kds and this to rank