1. Hard (4.72 stars, 465 notes)
2. Insane (5 stars, 667 notes)
3. Normal (2.36 stars, 207 notes)
4. Taiko (4.94 stars, 1380 notes)

LKs wrote:

我对timing持保留意见
反正是不太对劲 但只一根红线确实不行

Normal

[00:34:181] slider shape 稍微改了一下
[00:14:724] 这部分的两个clap没什么用 加的也不在重音上 看看怎么改 改了
[03:07:272] 红线应该放这里 恩 改了
[04:52:489] 这slider的结尾没在喊声上 kiai截止的位置也不太对 干脆别压喊声 0.0修改 喊聲是用5%的音樂應該OK的

Hard

[01:24:136] 间距 虽然是设计 嗯. 是設計沒錯 所以我沒改
[04:40:129] 2345间距 fix
[04:52:541] normal这里还是kiai 这里怎么就给断了 都是spinner 修改Normal

Insane

1800w的分数没问题吧 OK的 應該還不會到app去

[00:53:004] 不要clap 嗯嗯
[03:18:835] 这里别人不可能知道是3/4 没音效没背景音没newcombo 加newcombo
[04:52:541] normal这里还是kiai 这里怎么就给断了 都是spinner 修改Normal

summary

歌+1
BG+1
摆放+1
游戏性+1
音效-2
timing-1
...這是分數是正的意思嗎lol 我音效很爛阿 需要有個有力的音效mod

第一任务是调整timing 现在的有问题 timing有調整了
然后是音效 S-clap不是很合这个歌曲 要用就用的规矩的24clap 否则就乱了 >_>

qinche wrote:

怎么不用N-normal替换clap，超合的……
SB做得真漂亮

超合的……超合的……超合的……

tutuhaha wrote:

呦呵~
图片不符合格式啊找人转个换？

Normal
HP3 OD3 AR4
00:32:112 - 这里太不适合normal了，我建议这里改成circle
然后滑条从00:32:526 拉到00:33:146
00:34:181 - 这个滑条拉成直的吧，弯的会与的note碰到一起。。有点挤有点难看
00:37:490 - 与1拉开点
00:48:247 - 往上一点
01:00:658 - 搞成与6的一个斜面平行?
01:24:653 - 如果mat在的话,他一定告诉你不许遮这个...太突然了我被说过TAT...
01:27:135 - 也是,与5空开点
01:32:100 - 同上
01:54:440 - 最简单的难度里这种排法最好不要用
02:22:675 - 和01:24:653一样
02:30:432 - 放在正中间呗
03:03:736 - .....太难了对于最简单的难度来说circle换到这里来slider从03:03:943开始
03:22:992 - 突然一个尖尖角有点不和谐
然后后面的问题大多与前面的问题重复,不是前面问题的问题,那不是问题╮(╯▽╰)╭【哦草好顺口溜

哦草这歌太长了,后面我稍微大概说一下
Hard
0 0孩子多些长Slider吧...太挤了小心摆成贪吃蛇......

Insane
01:03:967 - ...这什么鬼0口0.....还是正常的红线后重复吧
后面的节拍应该没什么问题了,我手残,不好对排版做出什么好的意见,但是00:39:450前面这段,我觉得你节拍没搞好,有些地方用slider拉到蓝线部分比在蓝线那里加个circle要好的多

没下视频...哦亲爱的你视频的音轨有没有被删掉啊太丫的大了啊...............校园网你要体谅T T
Good lucky~加油加油~

哦还有,我也觉得换成N的音效比较好

等我搬完家再改吧

SiU_LeAf wrote:

看到這些不知何時開始的MAP就想加上藍線了<_<((slap

[normal]
01:00:658 (7) - 因為是normal所以小葉覺得不要把Note放在Slider下面 那是跑掉了阿lol
01:20:102 (1) - 下1格 改了
03:52:159 (4,1,2) - 放在中間 不了 因為和下面同位置
Break Time很長.

[hard]
00:47:419 (5) - 因為和(3),(4)同一spacing, 小葉覺得這會很誤導人的! 改了
01:52:992 (2,4,5) - 轉成grid 4, (2),(5)上1格和(4)下一格? 改了
04:11:188 - 據說Break Time不能長過30秒, 不過小葉也不清楚就是了 >_>加一個note

[Insane]
00:40:800 - 這裏開始小葉覺得聲音有點吵. 恩...我不想改呢
00:42:868 (6) - 小葉的話會這樣 http://puu.sh/4Veg 不 那是我故意的=w=
00:51:556 (4) - 把(3)旋轉180度取代現在的(4)?OK
00:59:830 (1) - 左1格 這是正方形阿lol
01:03:967 (4) - 小葉覺得這樣會幾好的 http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/139203 不...我不是很喜歡那樣的slider
02:57:944 (4) - 感覺對著(5)比較好. 不了因為http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/139530

先這樣, 以上只是小葉的感覺, 可以隨便無視, 盒子加油~!!

qinche wrote:

这kudosu受之有愧……其实我是觉得整体用soft sample，然后clap换成n-normal，偶尔为了加强音效感可以换normal sample然后用s-whistle来打音效。整体偏normal sample的话有点硬碰硬的感觉，她的vocal和背景音太强，执意用normal sample会太吵，尤其不适合加n-whistle。

这首歌切换点不多而且normal sample能用上的地方也不算多……

另外SB黑屏出字幕的那段，不移到中间吗？只有tasukete在中间满奇怪的。

这不要给kds了。加油~/

qinche wrote:

！？
这么高清的影片……
这么高清的影片……
这么高清的影片……
这么高清的影片……

Nymph_ wrote:

Hiyo~ Nymph here and request from: Kanon's mod queue~

General:
文件大小破20M了...是不是考虑视频再压缩一下.. 高畫質是要有所代價的...

预览点Preview time一个都没有设置呢... fix

Tag不写一点吗？试着搜了一下 没找到什么要写的..好吧我不管了.. 沒Tag可以寫阿;_;

Normal:

Issue/unrankable stuff
没什么大问题 就是一点我觉得不太好：breaktime是不是有点太长了？中间那里 还有后面那段只用1个NOTE隔开长Breaktime.我曾经有一次也是用这样的Note隔开breaktime 很多Modder都觉得不好 嘛 所以我也建议你别这么弄 修了一些

Beatmap design/suggestion
00:41:620 (1) - Nazi一下,Slidershape不太对称 不是什么大问题 只是提一下 也许中间往上一格 最右边往左一个 可能会更好看一点 fix
02:25:885 (1,2) - 我不太喜欢这样的重叠在这样的难度 后面也是一样 不过只是个人意见 這邊沒辦法改阿 ignore
04:03:732 (4) - 这个不知道会不会被吐槽... fix
04:26:075 (1) - 这样隔开估计肯定要被说 最好接着MAP吧 fix
04:39:315 (1) - 稍微往中间靠一点？或者转盘白线结束？现在这样对新手很容易MISS吧 转圈完了找不到什么的.. 修了一下
04:45:107 (4) - 去掉最后一次回返？跟的太紧有点没必要 fix

Hitsound
00:32:103 (4) - 前面是4白线下WHISTLE 这里是3的话 是不是把4也加上比较好？
00:35:413 (4) - whistle如何？
00:41:620 (1) - 尾whistle？
00:45:343 (4) - ^
01:14:720 (1,2,3) - 这种节奏 是不是24白线W比单加3好呢 我个人意见的话
后面似乎问题都不大 不过有几点建议：我觉得这个难度的HITSOUND太单薄 一是因为只有WHISTLE 不加CLAP的话 起码应该重音加几个FINISH 二是音量有点太低了 不太好听清，虽然音量已经飙到100可是还是不太爽..一些部分切换成NORMAL HITSOUND试试？觉得这两方面可以改进一下
音效fix
Hard:

Issue/unrankable stuff
还是Breaktime=A= fix

Beatmap design/suggestion
00:47:412 (5) - 这个Spacing的话估计有人会被坑 這沒關係 是Hard 不是Normal 如果都是同樣的spacing就無聊了
03:48:837 (3,4) - 似乎只有这里用了这样的下法 有点突然 ??節奏是一樣的阿
04:26:075 (1) - 从这开始继续MAP吧.. 恩

Hitsound
还是跟Normal一样的建议

Insane:

Issue/unrankable stuff

03:06:742 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5) - 哎去啊。。这里咋的了？为啥是蓝线起？全体往前一格啊！
03:42:015 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 这里我真心蒙了。。换SLIDER更好点吧。。1PC真心没读懂 lol 每首歌都1PC就讀懂就不好玩了阿
后面这里咋突然这么跳了...鬼畜神经觉醒了？ 我的感覺是後段要觸

Beatmap design/suggestion
困了 不仔细看了..

Hitsound
01:14:720 (1) - 这里小点声？ fix
01:22:788 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 这里降低点音量会很好听
02:19:058 (15) - clap有点违和 要体现变化的话 也许试试后4个NOTE都加whistle？
。。为啥这难度突然想起来用NORMAL HITSOUND。。
fix

先这些吧 NEW COMBO还有SPACING没仔细看..困了 先睡啦=A=

1. Timing: Your offset seems a bit too early. Try adding +9ms to your offset (Offset 244). Don't forget to add 9ms to your other red section as well!

1. Supernazi - the preview point here is 1ms bigger than anywhere else. Hopefully you don't mind how pointless this is, and just change it before you start to hate me. D:
2. 00:40:782 (1,1,1,1) - These 4 are extremely confusing. Possibly because they are snapped wrong, they should be on 1/3 ticks instead of 1/4. I strongly suggest to remove these 4 though and make 2 sliders instead (because of a few suggestions ahead). This will be critical because you want your score below 18m.
3. 01:15:330 (3) - Due to the video background this note is extremely hard to spot, especially if you have hitbursts there. If possible try to move it somewhere else. This is just a suggestion and player's feedback.
4. 01:36:225 - Remove this break, it's too short. You can already see the arrows before you complete the spin, making it redundant.
5. 02:21:530 (4) - Same thing, due to the video background this note is really difficult to spot. If possible you should change it's place to somewhere more visible. Also a suggestion and player's feedback.
6. 02:25:254 (4) - This slider sounded wrong. Try this: start the slider at 02:25:357 but have it end at 02:25:668. Don't forget to increase the spacing between it and the note before. This sounds much better.
7. 03:18:835 (1,2,3,4,5) - This felt kinda weird. They are easy to hit and they are readable, but they don't somehow follow the music, atleast I can't tell they are. I suppose they are alright because they don't impair gameplay, but maybe follow the music better if you feel like it? Like: 03:19:042 - , 03:19:248 - , 03:19:869 - , 03:20:076 - and then remove 03:19:972 (4). That sounds much better to me atleast. I understand that your score is very near 18m, but if you change some stuff into sliders (I already suggested to change those awkward 1/6 1/3 into sliders at the start, and I will do that at the end too), you might still end up below 18m.
8. 03:42:005 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Completely unreadable. With better spacing it could be readable, but I really suggest to use sliders here for various reasons.
9. 04:52:545 (1) - Add finish? You have it in other diffs.
10. If you changed all those circles to sliders like I told you, and changed that part with 1/3s into the stuff I suggested, you will be at 17 994 222 score which is still allowed. Just felt like saying.

1. Since you used OD6 in insane, use OD5 here?
2. 00:46:988 (4,5) - This spacing seems wrong. It's too confusing. You should fix it.
3. 01:05:400 (1) - Add finish? You have a finish in both normal and Insane.
4. 01:43:879 (4) - Fix the position? 2 grids down.
5. 04:32:685 - The map is rather easy, so why not map this break too? It felt kinda silly heh.

1. 01:05:193 (1) - You have a normal finish in insane and no finish in hard, maybe use a normal finish here too? Or use a soft finish in insane?
2. 02:02:705 (1) - End this spinner at 02:06:015?
3. 02:20:496 (2) - Add whistle at the start of the slider? Might also consider removing whistle from 02:19:255 (1) then.
4. 02:34:150 - Break this long is unrankable. A maximum of 20 seconds per break is allowed. Considering how you handled it well in your other diffs, you should map this the same way. This looks like half of your map is covered in breaks and that's bad.
5. 03:52:137 (4,1,2) - This pattern is too confusing for a normal. Due to low AR it's very difficult to say in which direction you should go first, and on top of that the slider 4 is a double repeater which is handled in a really bad way. Try splitting that into 2 sliders and then think of a better pattern for the sliders 1 and 2.
6. 04:37:650 (1,1) - The slider is coming too soon after the spinner for a normal diff, you need to shorten the spinner.

1. This diff has different offset than other diffs. Please use the same offset as other diffs.
2. 03:07:664 - Add a d?
3. 03:08:492 - Add a d?
4. 03:09:319 - This sounded strange to have nothing here and have a k at 03:09:423. Add a k here too?

lolcubes wrote:

Hello there!
Red is stuff you must fix, green is minor nazi stuff and blue are just some comments.

[General]:

1. Timing: Your offset seems a bit too early. Try adding +9ms to your offset (Offset 244). Don't forget to add 9ms to your other red section as well!

[Insane]:

1. Supernazi - the preview point here is 1ms bigger than anywhere else. Hopefully you don't mind how pointless this is, and just change it before you start to hate me. D:
2. 00:40:782 (1,1,1,1) - These 4 are extremely confusing. Possibly because they are snapped wrong, they should be on 1/3 ticks instead of 1/4. I strongly suggest to remove these 4 though and make 2 sliders instead (because of a few suggestions ahead). This will be critical because you want your score below 18m.
3. 01:15:330 (3) - Due to the video background this note is extremely hard to spot, especially if you have hitbursts there. If possible try to move it somewhere else. This is just a suggestion and player's feedback.
4. 01:36:225 - Remove this break, it's too short. You can already see the arrows before you complete the spin, making it redundant.
5. 02:21:530 (4) - Same thing, due to the video background this note is really difficult to spot. If possible you should change it's place to somewhere more visible. Also a suggestion and player's feedback.
6. 02:25:254 (4) - This slider sounded wrong. Try this: start the slider at 02:25:357 but have it end at 02:25:668. Don't forget to increase the spacing between it and the note before. This sounds much better.
7. 03:18:835 (1,2,3,4,5) - This felt kinda weird. They are easy to hit and they are readable, but they don't somehow follow the music, atleast I can't tell they are. I suppose they are alright because they don't impair gameplay, but maybe follow the music better if you feel like it? Like: 03:19:042 - , 03:19:248 - , 03:19:869 - , 03:20:076 - and then remove 03:19:972 (4). That sounds much better to me atleast. I understand that your score is very near 18m, but if you change some stuff into sliders (I already suggested to change those awkward 1/6 1/3 into sliders at the start, and I will do that at the end too), you might still end up below 18m.
8. 03:42:005 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Completely unreadable. With better spacing it could be readable, but I really suggest to use sliders here for various reasons.
9. 04:52:545 (1) - Add finish? You have it in other diffs.
10. If you changed all those circles to sliders like I told you, and changed that part with 1/3s into the stuff I suggested, you will be at 17 994 222 score which is still allowed. Just felt like saying.

[Hard]:

1. Since you used OD6 in insane, use OD5 here?
2. 00:46:988 (4,5) - This spacing seems wrong. It's too confusing. You should fix it.
3. 01:05:400 (1) - Add finish? You have a finish in both normal and Insane.
4. 01:43:879 (4) - Fix the position? 2 grids down.
5. 04:32:685 - The map is rather easy, so why not map this break too? It felt kinda silly heh.

[Normal]:

1. 01:05:193 (1) - You have a normal finish in insane and no finish in hard, maybe use a normal finish here too? Or use a soft finish in insane?
2. 02:02:705 (1) - End this spinner at 02:06:015?
3. 02:20:496 (2) - Add whistle at the start of the slider? Might also consider removing whistle from 02:19:255 (1) then.
4. 02:34:150 - Break this long is unrankable. A maximum of 20 seconds per break is allowed. Considering how you handled it well in your other diffs, you should map this the same way. This looks like half of your map is covered in breaks and that's bad.
5. 03:52:137 (4,1,2) - This pattern is too confusing for a normal. Due to low AR it's very difficult to say in which direction you should go first, and on top of that the slider 4 is a double repeater which is handled in a really bad way. Try splitting that into 2 sliders and then think of a better pattern for the sliders 1 and 2.
6. 04:37:650 (1,1) - The slider is coming too soon after the spinner for a normal diff, you need to shorten the spinner.

[Taiko]:

1. This diff has different offset than other diffs. Please use the same offset as other diffs.
2. 03:07:664 - Add a d?
3. 03:08:492 - Add a d?
4. 03:09:319 - This sounded strange to have nothing here and have a k at 03:09:423. Add a k here too?

Here you go, a solid mapset with some issues, but it looks okay. Should probably get more mods before asking for a recheck though.
Kudo star because I liked how insane played and the song was pretty nice.

1. PreviewTime要一致，其实主要是hard的时间轴没有对齐

1. 00:26:724 - 多余的绿线
2. 04:45:727 - 加个note？
   没了....找不出什么东西可改...

1. 00:38:300 (2) - 建议换成一个来回然后00:38:929 和 00:39:136 分别放个note
2. 00:51:333 (6) - 也是换成一个来回 00:51:962 处放个note
3. 02:13:462 (6) - OMG这是什么 怕是触手都会断吧
4. 02:57:949 - 歌声从这里开始的 推荐在这加note起步

1. 00:40:791 - 来个NC吧
2. 00:58:169 (8,9,10,1) - 你看这样改怎么样，因为你前面的00:56:927 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - 的节奏而言 我觉得你把00:58:272 (9,10,1) - 删掉，从00:58:375 - 加个note，00:58:479 - 加个note，00:58:582 到 00:58:789 slider，00:58:893 和 00:58:996分别来个note
3. 00:59:203 (14,15,1,2,3,4) - 节奏意义有点不明，我推荐这里的红白时间线上都排上note然后用跳感觉好些
4. 01:01:168 - 加个note
5. 02:12:230 - 多余的绿线