hii m4mThanks!00:02:715 (9,1) - suggest either spacing this out a lot, or directly stacking it
it is a re-occurring style so ill keep it as it is
00:01:881 (6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - spending so much time in the same area of the playfield isn't really something you wanna do, try to move around and use the full playfield to your advantage
Right now i have idea how to change this but for now ill keep it as it is!
00:11:048 (8) - omg jumpscare storyboard
it's quite an intro after all~
00:17:715 (5,2,4) - maybe have the slider end of 00:18:381 (4) - continue the in straight line with 00:17:715 (5,2) - to make it more tidy
00:24:381 (1,2,3,4) - how come the rhythm is different here. i'd just make this the same as the other patterns, such as 00:21:715 (1,2,3,4,5) - or 00:27:048 (1,2,3,4,5) -, since it's the same sounds afterall
00:40:715 (2,3) - such a dramatic change in spacing without any justification in the music, suggest moving 00:40:881 (3) - up further, and rotating to maintain the blanket on 00:41:381 (5) -
00:48:715 (1,3,5) - when doing stuff like this try to keep the overlaps consistently spaced it looks much prettier
00:51:048 (6) - ctrl+g would be much better flow from previous slider. the following notes may need to be adjusted if you agree to that change
01:03:881 (1) - unnecessary nc
Well they are different triplets and drums make them apart from each other so im keeping this
01:05:215 (11) - i think it would make more sense to end the stream here on the vocals. 01:05:215 (11,12) - just change these 2 notes into a 1/4 slider like 01:05:381 (13) - and space appropriately.
01:06:548 (13) - same here
01:07:465 (8,1) - this is so out of place and defies your previous spacing logic
01:20:381 (1,2) - the intensity of the music increases so much here so your spacing between 1/2 beats should increase in stead of decrease. like look how spaced you made these 01:19:548 (6,7) - compared to the spacings in the climax
Moved father from each other!
01:31:215 (2,3,4) - i think it would be better to space these like the previous pattern
Spaced farther from each other but the triplets remain the same
02:08:881 (3,4) - the spacing and flow here could be improved a lot
Stacked 3 on top of 4!
02:49:215 (1,1,1) - there's a lot of ncs that just don't seem to be following anything. try to choose a strong repetitive beat to nc on.
Sorry i forgot to update it this was changed~
03:04:548 (2,3,4,2,3,4) - again i think these should be spaced out to match that first pattern you made in the first kiai
Made it farther for a jump!
03:17:048 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - nice idea! i think to improve it 03:17:048 (1,2,3) - these shouldn't be stacked since that implies the intensity isn't changing which contradicts what you do with the following notes. just give them a slight spacing.
Thanks! And Done so!
03:17:381 (5) - also i think it's best if every single note increases in spacing, since having this 5 equally spaced from it's previous and next note implies those sounds are equal in intensity, but they aren't. so yeah just ensure every note gradually increases in spacing, but I wouldn't go beyond a ds of 1.1x
03:25:715 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - 1-2 jumps here don't make sense since the rhythm is 1-2-3 1-2-3 1-2-3. you hitsounds even follow the 1-2-3 rhythm
Changed into triangle jumps!
03:39:048 (1) - there's a strong finish sound at the start of this spinner. but spinner starts don't provide any feedback. so it's best to place a circle here then start the spinner a 1/4 beat later like
03:49:381 (1) - it's good that you made this consistent with the intro, but like I said earlier i think it's a little messy, suggest just stacking it under 03:49:048 (9) - Stacked~
03:54:715 (1) - i don't think it's a good idea to ignore the strong sound on the big white tick after this note. in fact i don't think this should be a break at all. since the next vocal section here 04:00:381 (1) - is pretty much same thing but isn't a break.
Added a part!
04:32:381 (6) - the direction of this slider is almost unpredictable, try not to stack sliderends and sliderheads. pretty sure this is unrankable
Changed it's slider end postion, though i would need some future help if this becomes an unrankable slider
04:49:881 (4,5) - and 05:05:215 (4,5) - these stacks look a little out of place since you usually don't use stacks for these sounds in this kiai
good luck !