happy30 wrote:

[General]
-Timing is off at some parts, I tried to fix it but I think it needs more opinions first: http://puu.sh/42cT
-Try to come up with some more tags?
- Are you sure about the title and artist? I'm getting multiple results here:
"Noruniru by Etsuko Yakushimaru and the Metro Orchestra"

[GeNormal]
00:39:502 (1,2,3,4,5) - Rhythm sounds weird, use some whites?

[Hard]
00:49:560 (8) - Maybe you can improve this slider, it's not identical to (7) and the way it overlaps (2) doesn't look good.

[Insane]
00:40:208 (4) - Move this a bit to the right
00:41:619 (6) - move this a bit up

happy30 wrote:

[General]
- Are you sure about the title and artist? I'm getting multiple results here:
"Noruniru"

gina91189 wrote:

[General]
-You got 2 .osb files, delete one
-Please resnap all the green lines that are related to kiai change

[toxizy]
00:11:443 – add a note? Sounds better, if you do, adjust the spacing by yourself please
00:22:737 – ^
00:54:125 (1) – too close to the previous
00:55:537 (1) – ^, try to keep spacings the same in Easy

[GeNormal]
00:06:855 (4) – nazi – up 1 grid (Lv.3)
00:11:443 (4) – why don’t you copy the previous one? Seems ugly right now. I would suggest like this: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/125794
00:30:876 (1) – too far from the previous
00:30:876 (1,2,3,4,5) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/125796 and http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/125797, I adjusted the spacings already.
00:36:574 (2,3) – I don’t like the way they overlapping.
01:06:478 (1,2) – this way fits better imo: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/125798

[Hard]
I’m fine with this diff

[Insane]
I’m fine with this diff too, but I think OD is too high, maybe OD-1 ?

Nice song <3

JauiPlaY wrote:

hihi~
some suggestions:

[General]
there are 2 osb files in the folder, delete them please.
you should add a scorebar-bg.png file in the folder.
and your scorebar-ki.png and scorebar-kidanger.png seems absolutely same. idk it's rankable or not, so you'd better find a MAT and ask about it.

[toxizy]
00:04:031(4) - move to 00:03:855 and repeat 1 more time may be better.
00:06:855(x) - add a note.
00:08:619(1,1) - remove new combo.
00:11:443(x) - add a slider, which ends on 00:12:502.
00:15:325(4) - same suggestion as 00:04:031(4).
00:18:149(x) - add a note.
00:19:913(1,1) - remove new combo.
00:23:443(2) - move to 00:23:090 and add a note at 00:23:796.
00:34:103(5) - new combo.
00:36:574(8) - ^
00:41:457(1) - remove new combo.
01:23:819(1) - ends on 01:27:701 like other diffs?

[GeNormal]
00:10:031(3) - remove the clap on the beginning of this slider.
00:30:876(1,2,3,4,5,6) - idk how to say about these -__- but it's unrankable for sure imo, maybe you should do something on it.
00:39:516(1,2,3,4,5) - sounds weird imo.
00:45:692(5) - add clap on the reverse arrow.
00:46:398(6,7) - clap.
00:59:596(3) - clap on the end of this slider.
01:00:302(4) - clap.
01:00:655 (5) - clap on the beginning of this slider.
01:06:831(x) - add a note.

[Hard]
00:48:144(4,5) - bad overlapping.
01:12:172(1) - quite noisy imo.

[Insane]
00:24:171(1) - try to overlap the reverse arrow is unrankable.
01:12:125(1) - move to 01:12:172.

still need working for me, especially the easy and normal diffs~
so
star~

Sakura Hana wrote:

[General]
Title is "Noruniru" also need to add (TV Size) at the end (god this is gonna be a long thread title X_X) Fixed

[Timing]
Go back to Selee's timing (2 red lines) there's no real need for so many red lines all beats are landing squarely on the metronome, i'd still suggest you get a timing expert like Doomsday, Lybydose, Alace, Derekku (and could mention many others), but imo the main reason it sounds off it's because during 00:29:796 ~ 00:39:502 rythm is hard to predict due to the softness and lack of consistency. I'll talk with anyone about timing

[Skin]
Since u only got 1 scorebar colour, rename your scorebar-colour-0-png to scorebar-colour.png. Fixed

[Insane]
01:02:796 (1) - Hidden under another slider track and a hit burst, i recommend you move it Fixed

[Hard]
Why does kiai start later here? Fixed

[GeNormal]
Why is this diff slower than the easiest diff?
Hp drain +1 / +2 It's weird to have the same hp drain as the easiest diff when this one's supposed to have higher note density. Fixed
00:32:288 (3,4) - Hard to read correctly. Fixed
00:33:943 (6,7) - Hard to read which one's the slider. Fixed

[Toxizy]
Don't use slider speed changes on the easiest diff please.
00:24:149 (1) - This spinner is a bit too long and doesnt fit at all. Fixed

Good Luck!~

Megurine Luka wrote:

Hi. Mod as requested

[General]
Seeing none

[toxizy]
Better to use 1/4. I guess you use 1/3 and some notes seems off.
00:29:090 (3,4) - move 1 grid right
00:32:972 (4) - start from 00:32:796 and end at 00:33:502?
00:35:443 (3) - ends at 00:36:149
00:38:266 (2) - spacing
00:41:443 (2) - ^
00:42:502 (1) - ^
00:42:502 (1) - ends at 00:43:208
00:49:560 (1) - 1 grid down
01:20:462 (2) - start at 01:20:638 and change the spacing of next circle

[GeNormal]
I suspicious that you change the SV of something
look at this, you need to add a SV change back to 1.0x↓
00:34:119 (7) - sliders covered
00:39:502 (1) - ^(change SV back to 1.0x)
Also the sound effect is noisy in this pink combo part.
01:20:638 (1) - del nc

[Hard]
00:33:943 (1,2) - move them to (00:33:855&00:34:031)
01:23:462 (1) - add a green line to silence the end of the spinner
Nice map set and sound effect

[Insane]
00:33:943 (4,5) - as Hard
Good

I like the last two diffs. Deserve a star.

1. Anime, opening, and penguin aren't needed in the tags. Please remove them.
2. Since scorebar-bg.png is just a transparent image, you can simply use a 1x1 transparent image, you'd get the same effect, and you would save some file size. So I'd recommend you to do it.
   Here is a version of it: http://puu.sh/4cP1
3. scorebar-kidanger.png and scorebar-kidanger2.png seem pretty much identical. Perhaps you could make them slightly different, so that they are distinguishable. Here, I tried doing somthing (use it if you like it ):
4. Now, perhaps, since the colour of the hitcircle overlay is more like grey, you could use another colour for the slider border, something like this:
   
   SPOILER

   
   If you want to apply this, you have to open the .osu file and manually add the line SliderBorder to the code, under colours. Like this:
   

   [Colours]
   Combo1 : 255,255,0
   Combo2 : 168,230,253
   Combo3 : 255,128,255
   Combo4 : 255,0,0
   SliderBorder : 170,170,170

   And if you find any problems applying this, catch me on irc and I'll try to explain it better
5. I think the BPM should be 170,04. With that, at least most objects land on song's beats. Also, you wouldn't need two timing sections. Remember to resnap!
   Though some parts still seem to be off. I think that's because the lyrics are off themselves.

1. I reckon the difficulty's name should be Toxizy, with capital T. This is just for esthetical purposes, so I'm just mentioning it
2. 00:15:146 (4) - Well, let's say this can never sound well there :C The reasons are that the drums aren't there, they follow a weird pattern there where you would have to use 1/6ths. And secondly, the vocals are kind of offbeat there.
   Maybe something like this would be a better idea.
3. 00:28:378 (1) - This circle is way too close to the end of the spinner, imo. It won't be easy to play for new players. Could you please remove it?
4. 00:32:788 (4) - Now, this is at the same distance from (3) as (3) is from (2). I mean, you kept the distances the same. But, you didn't keep the same distance on the timeline:
   
   You know where I wanna get to, right? You shouldn't use the same spacing than before, and that "shouldn't" becomes a mustn't here, because it is the [url]easiest[/url] difficulty!
   Please use the correct spacing for this.

1. 00:08:618 (6) - You should place a new combo here, and remove it from the next circle. It works better imo.
2. 00:10:030 (4) - Why is the distance from (3) soo small? This is really confusing, please place it somewhere further from (3). And also, add a new combo~
3. 00:15:676 (7) - The new combo should be here, and not in the next circle, in my opinion.
4. 00:39:497 (1) - This part here feels like... Too overloaded with finishes. I suggest that you remove the one here (beggining of the slider). It will sound a little better~
5. 01:22:049 (4) - No, please. I will not mention some places where you didn't use DS correctly, but this isn't just fine. Please use the normal DS for this, 1,0x.

1. 00:11:795 (6) - Since this combo is quiet long, I'd suggest adding a new combo to make it shorter and more consistent with the rest of the combos.
2. 00:34:557 (3) - The slider ticks simply don't sound well on half beats.... Maybe... Maybe you could use Slider Tick Rate 2 in all the difficulties

1. I guess it's fine...

narakucrimson wrote:

Hi there! Just picked this at #modreqs

[General]

1. Anime, opening, and penguin aren't needed in the tags. Please remove them.
2. Since scorebar-bg.png is just a transparent image, you can simply use a 1x1 transparent image, you'd get the same effect, and you would save some file size. So I'd recommend you to do it.
   Here is a version of it: http://puu.sh/4cP1
3. scorebar-kidanger.png and scorebar-kidanger2.png seem pretty much identical. Perhaps you could make them slightly different, so that they are distinguishable. Here, I tried doing somthing (use it if you like it ):
4. Now, perhaps, since the colour of the hitcircle overlay is more like grey, you could use another colour for the slider border, something like this:
   
   SPOILER

   
   If you want to apply this, you have to open the .osu file and manually add the line SliderBorder to the code, under colours. Like this:
   

   [Colours]
   Combo1 : 255,255,0
   Combo2 : 168,230,253
   Combo3 : 255,128,255
   Combo4 : 255,0,0
   SliderBorder : 170,170,170

   And if you find any problems applying this, catch me on irc and I'll try to explain it better
5. I think the BPM should be 170,04. With that, at least most objects land on song's beats. Also, you wouldn't need two timing sections. Remember to resnap!
   Though some parts still seem to be off. I think that's because the lyrics are off themselves.

[toxizy]

1. I reckon the difficulty's name should be Toxizy, with capital T. This is just for esthetical purposes, so I'm just mentioning it
2. 00:15:146 (4) - Well, let's say this can never sound well there :C The reasons are that the drums aren't there, they follow a weird pattern there where you would have to use 1/6ths. And secondly, the vocals are kind of offbeat there.
   Maybe something like this would be a better idea.
3. 00:28:378 (1) - This circle is way too close to the end of the spinner, imo. It won't be easy to play for new players. Could you please remove it?
4. 00:32:788 (4) - Now, this is at the same distance from (3) as (3) is from (2). I mean, you kept the distances the same. But, you didn't keep the same distance on the timeline:
   
   You know where I wanna get to, right? You shouldn't use the same spacing than before, and that "shouldn't" becomes a mustn't here, because it is the [url]easiest[/url] difficulty!
   Please use the correct spacing for this.

[GeNormal]

1. 00:08:618 (6) - You should place a new combo here, and remove it from the next circle. It works better imo.
2. 00:10:030 (4) - Why is the distance from (3) soo small? This is really confusing, please place it somewhere further from (3). And also, add a new combo~
3. 00:15:676 (7) - The new combo should be here, and not in the next circle, in my opinion.
4. 00:39:497 (1) - This part here feels like... Too overloaded with finishes. I suggest that you remove the one here (beggining of the slider). It will sound a little better~
5. 01:22:049 (4) - No, please. I will not mention some places where you didn't use DS correctly, but this isn't just fine. Please use the normal DS for this, 1,0x.

[Hard]

1. 00:11:795 (6) - Since this combo is quiet long, I'd suggest adding a new combo to make it shorter and more consistent with the rest of the combos.
2. 00:34:557 (3) - The slider ticks simply don't sound well on half beats.... Maybe... Maybe you could use Slider Tick Rate 2 in all the difficulties

[Insane]

1. I guess it's fine...

I'm sorry to say this, but I didn't like it. And I'm saying this in a constructive way: next time, I'd like to see more elaborated patterns, and more consistent mapping.
Since the map doesn't have critical errors, I'll star it.
And that will also be my way to show you support, so that you can keep getting better!
*Thumbs up*

• make sure that your KIAI is snaped.For example in first diff ,which offset = 43913 should equal to 43903

• 00:03:854 (4) - I think this slider is hard for a beginner
  00:10:029 (3) - new combo?
  00:21:321 (3) - new combo?
  00:36:493 (1) - 1 grid down for align to 00:35:435 (3)
  00:48:138 (3,1) - 00:49:549 (1) will be covered by 00:48:138 (3)'s "300"
  01:01:194 (4) - new combo?
  01:01:899 (1) - remove new combo?
  01:22:048 (3) - new combo?
  01:23:812 (1) - silent this?

• 00:07:206 (5) - extend this to 00:08:265
  00:10:029 (1) - extend this to 00:11:088
  00:11:441 (2) - move to 00:11:264
  00:39:493 (1) - this slider's end is unsnaped
  00:40:551 (3) - this slider's end is unsnaped
  01:24:165 (1) - silent this?

• 01:23:459 (1) - silent this?

• 00:37:376 (3) - Uhnn..Ugly
  01:12:873 (3,5) - these notes aren't stacked well
  01:23:459 (1) - silent this?

Weiren wrote:

General

• make sure that your KIAI is snaped.For example in first diff ,which offset = 43913 should equal to 43903

Toxizy

• 00:03:854 (4) - I think this slider is hard for a beginner
  00:10:029 (3) - new combo?
  00:21:321 (3) - new combo?
  00:36:493 (1) - 1 grid down for align to 00:35:435 (3)
  00:48:138 (3,1) - 00:49:549 (1) will be covered by 00:48:138 (3)'s "300" Add "300" in skin.Now there is no overlaping on 300. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/128908
  01:01:194 (4) - new combo?
  01:01:899 (1) - remove new combo?
  01:22:048 (3) - new combo?
  01:23:812 (1) - silent this?

GeNormal

• 00:07:206 (5) - extend this to 00:08:265
  00:10:029 (1) - extend this to 00:11:088
  00:11:441 (2) - move to 00:11:264
  00:39:493 (1) - this slider's end is unsnaped
  00:40:551 (3) - this slider's end is unsnaped
  01:24:165 (1) - silent this?

Hard

• 01:23:459 (1) - silent this?

Insane

• 00:37:376 (3) - Uhnn..Ugly
  01:12:873 (3,5) - these notes aren't stacked well
  01:23:459 (1) - silent this?

star
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EasyModder 1.3
Program By Weiren

Kytoxid wrote:

[General]

I'm a bit unsure of the timing; I'd have mapped the whole song with a single 170.00 BPM section. I'm not a timing expert though, so I'll echo Sakura's words to find someone good at it. I definitely feel that 170.04 is wrong though, 01:01:194 sounds quite off. Regardless,

You could also delete the .osb and full submit again.

I'd add about a second of lead-in time, so that the player has at least 2 seconds to get ready.

[Toxizy]

00:28:731 (1,2,3) - Move this combo up a bit so it doesn't cover up the next one? Looks better, plays easier.
00:30:848 (1) - Probably can move this down a grid to line it up on the center line with 3.
00:30:848 (1,2,3,4) - I'd avoid having patterns that come back and cover themselves with the hitbursts, especially on the easiest difficulty.
00:44:256 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2) - These three combos are packed too closely, like what I said before. Just select all of the notes in the editor, and you can see that they're all on top of each other, and the glowing circles are a big blob. Spread them out a bit?
00:49:549 (1,2,3) - I'd avoid hiding the slider heads, but whatever. I do recommend moving the 3 out a bit so that it's not completely covered and only half-covered, like the 2 is right now.
01:01:194 (1,2,3,4,5) - This is clumpy too.
01:20:636 (2) - Looks a bit funny.

Overall, the only real issue here was that I thought the notes were too tightly packed and hard to read for an Easy. I'd also recommend not using so many slider points, like at 01:16:402 (3); it can look better with the right number of points. See http://www.tinyurl.com/delicioussliderguide for more details.

[GeNormal]

00:20:968 (1,1) - A bit close for a 3.5-star normal after a fairly short spinner.
00:29:083 (1,2) - Stack this, or make it into an extra repeat?
00:40:551 (3) - I'd shorten this to a 1/2 slider, still with only 1 repeat.
01:03:664 (5) - You could tighten this slider up to be a bit more smoothly symmetrical. Try doing it like this? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/130208

[Hard]

00:34:553 (3) - This section definitely feels weird with the time, I'd actually put it all 1/4 later, but huh.
00:49:902 (1) - Move this a grid left to line up with 3 and the endpoint of 2 better?
01:12:168 and 01:23:320 - These timing sections don't do anything. (the inherited one on 01:12:168, not the red one)
01:19:930 (2,3) - Very cool hitsounds here. O_o okay

[Insane]

00:22:556 (5) - Really unpredictable length, I recommend not scrunching this one up, since it's not 3/2 like the previous scrunched up one.
00:28:907 (5) - Not in line with 3,4?
00:29:613 (1,2) - Move the 0.75x section back, and replace these two notes with a slider? It'll help the transition into the 0.75x.
00:44:609 (2) - Grid snap the points so it's perfectly horizontal?
00:50:255 (2,3,4) - I'd use grid snap and line these up so that they're vertically straight.
00:57:665 (10) - Stack this right under 8?
01:13:579 (5,6) - Move these up a bit so that 6 ends up right under 4, and 5 to its immediate right.

Most of these are just because of how you tend to place notes without using grid snap and a bit haphazardly, since many of them are just because the notes are in an awkward spot where it's either hard to read or just one or two grids away from a much "better" spot. (straight line with one note that's a grid out of line, or a square with one of the corners just a bit off, or something like that). Overall, a good map with a cool skin. Make sure you get the timing looked at.

Starred.

Rukarioman wrote:

Toxizy:
00:59:782 (1,2,3) - This increased spacing confused me. And it would confuse beginners.
01:01:899 (2,3,4) - ^
01:18:484 (4) - I think this overlap with the sliderbody looks kinda bad.
01:27:658 - This timing section here is unsnapped and screws up the sound of the spinner.

GeNormal:
00:12:852 (1) - The same comment about the overlap like in Toxicy.
01:27:658 - Same thing about the end sound of the spinner.

Hard:
01:27:658 - Same thing about the end sound of the spinner.

Insane:
01:27:658 - Same thing about the end sound of the spinner.

I've read the last page of the thread and already saw some conversations about the timing. I'm pretty unsure of it too though. Maybe get this one checked out by someone more professional with timing. I asked Derekku and Doomsday but they are don't modding this idk why

frost-b-spec wrote:

thx reqs~

[Insane]
1.22.541(8~11) - i think not fit...(ex.slow tempo:1.22.718circle and 1.23.071circle) i think sound pretty good.So..don't change

[Hard]
0.35.082(4~6) - x0.0 spacing and offgrid don't change

[Normal]
0.32.436(4) - x0.0 spacing and offgrid don't change
0.41.6410(4) - spacing Fixed
0.46.373(6,7) - ^ Fixed
1.22.012(4~7) - why x0.5 spacing?? Fixed

[Easy]
0.19.909(2) - copy (1) Fixed

Nice

1. IMO You need a spinner-clear, spinner-osu and spinner-spin in your file to complete the skin-spinner set, futhermore section-fail if you want maintain the cute skin that you have now~ btw if you want put some comboburst... Moe Comboburst 1 Moe Comboburst 2 Penguin Penguin <333
2. IMO The slider border it is best if it is white
3. The combo colour 2 maybe it would be best in white, because pink+pinkhitcircle it looks pretty strong
4. 01:27:658 - Move this inherited timing section to 01:27:570 for the hit of this spinner not heard, in all diffs please :3

1. 00:30:848 (1,2,3,4) - This pattern sounds a bit weird and is confusing mmm, my best solution would be move this pattern 1/1 earlier and after delete (1), don't forget fix the spacing of 00:31:201 (1) and 00:34:023 (1) ~
2. Pretty job~

1. Mmm Rare form of placing new combo buut anyway haha
2. example 00:07:206 (5) - remove new combo then...
3. 00:08:618 (1) - ... remove new combo here~
4. 00:20:968 (1) - IMO this spinner is needless, futhermore should begin here 00:21:321, instead I would put this from 00:21:321
5. 00:34:023 (7) - New combo time, then..
6. 00:36:846 (9) - ... new combo here
7. 00:42:492 (1) - Add 1/1 to the lenght of this spinner? :>
8. 01:15:308 (2,3,4,5) - (3), (4) and (5) sounds a bit weird and feels that they have been placed only by placing, I suggest the following: remove (3) (4) and (5) after add a repet to (2), now put a slider in 01:16:366 and that ends in 01:17:072, put a repeat in this new slider and yup~
9. 01:24:129 (1) - IMO this spinner should be begin after same the others diffs, 1/1 earlier would be ok, yes, remove (7)~

1. 00:05:971 (1) - New combo are needless because the pattern is symmetric and is easy to read~
2. 00:52:725 - This inherited timing section not are snapped correctly, also check the others
3. Well made ^^

1. 00:03:148 (1) - ok, remove this new combo?
2. I was expecting something more hard (more jumps and streams) but not is a problem ^^

Kenezz wrote:

Etsuko Yukushimaruuu! <33
Kenezz's Bakamod~

General

1. IMO You need a spinner-clear, spinner-osu and spinner-spin in your file to complete the skin-spinner set, futhermore section-fail if you want maintain the cute skin that you have now~ btw if you want put some comboburst... Moe Comboburst 1 Moe Comboburst 2 Penguin Penguin <333
2. IMO The slider border it is best if it is white
3. The combo colour 2 maybe it would be best in white, because pink+pinkhitcircle it looks pretty strong
4. 01:27:658 - Move this inherited timing section to 01:27:570 for the hit of this spinner not heard, in all diffs please :3

Toxizy

1. 00:30:848 (1,2,3,4) - This pattern sounds a bit weird and is confusing mmm, my best solution would be move this pattern 1/1 earlier and after delete (1), don't forget fix the spacing of 00:31:201 (1) and 00:34:023 (1) ~
2. Pretty job~

Thanks ^^
GeNormal

1. Mmm Rare form of placing new combo buut anyway haha
2. example 00:07:206 (5) - remove new combo then...
3. 00:08:618 (1) - ... remove new combo here~
4. 00:20:968 (1) - IMO this spinner is needless, futhermore should begin here 00:21:321, instead I would put this from 00:21:321
5. 00:34:023 (7) - New combo time, then..
6. 00:36:846 (9) - ... new combo here
7. 00:42:492 (1) - Add 1/1 to the lenght of this spinner? :>
8. 01:15:308 (2,3,4,5) - (3), (4) and (5) sounds a bit weird and feels that they have been placed only by placing, I suggest the following: remove (3) (4) and (5) after add a repet to (2), now put a slider in 01:16:366 and that ends in 01:17:072, put a repeat in this new slider and yup~
9. 01:24:129 (1) - IMO this spinner should be begin after same the others diffs, 1/1 earlier would be ok, yes, remove (7)~

Hard

1. 00:05:971 (1) - New combo are needless because the pattern is symmetric and is easy to read~
2. 00:52:725 - This inherited timing section not are snapped correctly, also check the others
3. Well made ^^

Insane

1. 00:03:148 (1) - ok, remove this new combo?
2. I was expecting something more hard (more jumps and streams) but not is a problem ^^

Ok, That's All
I Hope to helps you~
Go go rank this, Penguin penguin~~
btw, the anime is good?

Elly-chan wrote:

[General]
Folder looks good, cute little skin~

[Easy]
HP -1. OD +1?
Ok.

[Normal]
HP -1? Isn't really a problem though.
00:24:320 (break) - Why is there a break here.
01:13:544 (3) - new combo? then remove nc from 01:14:602
00:36:846 (1) - Remove new combo? Ah? Kenezz said "00:36:846 (9) - ... new combo here"
Very well done.

[Hard]
Looks Boxy-ish to me, but that's just me, so yeah. Very good otherwise, couldn't find a problem.

[Insane]
HP Drain -1?
00:53:254 (2) - change that sliders shape.
try something like this prolly http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/132073 (LOL MC DONNALDS)
00:59:429 (10) - start NC here and remove on 00:59:959 .
01:21:836 (7) - new combo?

Great map.

OzzyOzrock wrote:

[General]
BPM is probably 170 flat.Im not sure...So im waiting pro taimer

[Easy]
Fast slider speed for low distance spacing...

00:03:854 (4) - Would probably look better if alligned with (3)
But look at the rest of the sliders and such, you probably don't care lol.

but yes, I really don't like the SV with the DS...
[GeNormal]
Some sliders here could easily be made better
00:10:029 (1,2) -


00:21:321 (1) - Pretty short spinner. Maybe you should replace it with a slider.

I guess it's alright...
[Hard]
This diff is very boxy.

But other than that, it's actually good.
[Insane]
00:53:254 (2) -


Some parts feel overdone with some triples, but it should be ok.

pieguy1372 wrote:

General:

-Add a section-fail.png?
-BPM: 170 Offset: 1561 (where it is)

Toxizy:

00:13:911 (2) - too close to (1) Nope
00:31:200 (4) - New combo?
00:50:961 (2) - Too close to (1)?Nope http://puu.sh/4xAk

GeNormal:

00:07:206 (1) - Remove the whistle from the body of this slider?
00:07:206 (1,2,3,4) - this? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/133218 (note that 4 is stacked under (1))
00:10:029 (5) - New combo?
00:14:969 (6) - Make this a flipped version of (5)?
00:29:613 (2) - Stack under the start of (1)?
00:43:903 ~ 00:52:372 - How come the spacing here is lower than in the next section? Maybe you could change it?~ Nope
01:03:664 (5) - End it 1/2 earlier?it sounds badly

Hard:

00:24:496 (1) - I think you could do something more interesting instead of this slider
00:25:908 (3) - ^
00:27:319 (2) - ^
01:02:605 (7) - Add clap? (Then, remove it from (8))
01:04:016 (4) - perhaps end it 1/2 earlier, and place a beat where it ends?~
01:22:541 (6) - I recommend ending it at 01:22:894, then placing beats at 01:23:071 and 01:23:247 Nope.i dont like how its sound

Insane:

00:53:254 (2) - I'm not sure I like this slider, but feel free to keep it as is
01:01:194 (1) - The clap here should be on the start, not the end
01:01:899 (3) - ^
01:02:605 (5) - Add a clap
01:19:542 (7) - Remove the finishes on the start and the repeat Nope
01:20:601 (2) - Remove finishNope
01:21:483 (6) - ^Nope

nice map and cute skin~

Shulin wrote:

All opinions/suggestions form playing your map ~

General:

-- I think soft hitsounds sound better at 00:29:266 to 00:39:149 and from 01:13:913. Normal is either too loud or doesn't sound right.

Toxizy:

-- Not sure slowdowns on an Easy is a good idea, new players might get confused. Fixed

00:52:384 (3) - Ending it at 00:53:266 sounds better.

Normal:

00:39:502 (1) - Kinda hidden by 00:36:855 (1) - I think you should make it more visible.
00:41:619 (4,5) - Rhythm?! No idea what you're following here. Maybe make the spinner start earlier? =S
01:03:678 (5) - Sounds weird. I suggest ending it at 01:05:796 if you can.
01:06:855 (2) - End at 01:07:031
01:14:619 (4) - New combo?

Hard:

00:24:502 (6) - New combo?
00:29:266 to 00:39:149 -- too loud, soft hitsounds might work better, or at least reduce the volume =P
00:34:561 (3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4) - Honestly I thought the slowdown felt weird and didn't play right.
01:12:149 (1,2,3) - Overlap is ugly, also this bit is harder than insane.

Insane:

-- Resnap all notes.

00:12:852 (1,2,3,4) - Doesn't stack properly in game.
00:29:613 (1) - Remove new combo?
00:29:966 (2) - New combo here.
00:29:972 to 00:39:678 - Soft hitsounds might be better than really quiet normal ones. Nope
00:41:081 (1,2,3,4,5) - Random stream, doesn't follow the song and doesn't make sense. Nope

That's all ~

The 08 team_Bourdon wrote:

Hello~~
just give some suggestion~

Toxizy
00:08:619 (2) - make this slider balance with behind.
00:16:737 (2) - right 1 grid? x:224, y:248
00:19:913 (1) - delete New Combo?
00:36:502 (1) - this slider end at 00:37:560?
00:38:972 (3) - delete this circle? use the previous slider (2) end to 00:38:796, and do a repeating?
00:50:972 (1) - delete New Combo
00:52:384 (2) - add a New Combo
00:54:149 (1) - delete New Combo
01:02:266 (3) - down 1 grid? x:184, y:168
01:16:384 (3) - make it more beautiful, and delete the behind whistle sound
01:23:796 (1) - do a gradually lower sound?

GeNormal
00:11:443 (2) - down 5 grid? x:216, y:136
00:13:560 (3) - up 1 grid? x:328, y:216
00:23:443 (5) - dont do a repeating slider, just do a straight away slider?
00:29:619 (2) - delete this circle and use the previous slider do one more repeating
00:34:031 (1,1) - it can be very nice slider. please make it more beautiful
00:41:972 (6) - down 1 grid? x:208, y:72
00:44:266 (1) - too far from the previous spinner, make it close a bit...
00:50:619 (3,4,5) - make it more beautiful
00:56:972 (5) - up 6 grid? x:248, y:176
01:20:619 (3) - add a New Combo
01:23:796 (1) - do a gradually lower sound?

Hard
00:08:443 (2) - make it like this? --> http://puu.sh/4C3b
00:10:384 (3) - up 2 grid? x:256, y:184
00:17:266 (4,5,6) - down and right 2 grid? x:224, y:104
00:20:266 (7) - make it more beautiful
00:25:208 (5) - right 1 grid? x:240, y:288
00:46:384 (8) - just suggest, slider end at 00:46:737?
01:23:443 (1) - do a gradually lower sound?

Insane
00:11:266 (4) - make it like this? --> http://puu.sh/4C3T
00:13:737 (1) - down + right 1 grid? x:72, y:232
00:13:913 (2) - ^ x:136, y:246
00:14:090 (3) - up + right 1 grid? x:136, y:264
00:21:325 (2) - looks very ugly. make it like other pattern...
00:37:384 (3) - make it more beautiful... ---> http://puu.sh/4C4o
00:53:266 (2) - ^ --> http://puu.sh/4C4M
01:02:266 (4) - this slider behind grid like this? x:264, y:160
01:16:384 (8) - ugly slider = = make it more beautiful
01:23:443 (1) - do a gradually lower sound?

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Good Luck~ and star

Snowy Dream wrote:

[Toxizy]
00:19:913 (1) - spacing error. (not 0.68x , should <0.66x)
00:56:972 (2) - spacing.


[GeNormal]
00:29:619 (2) - suggest moving to 00:29:796
00:52:031 (5) - not look good. put sliders like this (just suggest )

SPOILER

01:05:796 (6) - spcing?


[Insane]
00:24:149 (1) - jump or make the spcing equal previous
00:52:737 (1) - this slider looks not so good
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Nice map~ That's all.