wmfchris wrote:

[General]
kiai time: they should be same for both of your diffs and should start and end on downbeat.

[Hard]
Fix the kiai time as stated.
00:16:322 (3) - try clapping at the end
00:48:049 (1) - down 1 grid lv4
01:02:293 (2) - new combo
01:55:818 - ^?
02:10:495 (1) - whistle?
02:50:854 (8) - clapping in the middle sounds a bit odd to me

*In your diff it seems that your NC pattern refers to your placement, but better fits the accent of the song as well orz.
*I can't get your logic between one clap and two consecutive claps... but the rest of the hitsounds are well used.

[Normal]
- I want to point out that generally each combo are too long, and the intervals are unstable (3 bars or 4 bar, etc.) as I mentioned, NC referring to the song is more important than referring the pattern (not meaning NC to notify spacing change)

Maps are quite nicely done. Besides problem mentioned above, what bothers me is that you repeat quite a lot in the mapset, and there's really no highlighted section corresponding to the song. If such stuffs can be improved I think your map has quite a lot of potential, so good luck there~

Kawayi Rika wrote:

Hi ~ W h i t e ~

Mod time for my Queue ~

Red : Must be fixed
Pink : Should be fixed
Purple : Just suggestions

[General]

1. Remove AudioLeadIn pls.

[Hard]

1. AR-1 will be better with this song.
   
   Skip add finish
   
   and fix it thx!!
2. 01:43:732 - Add finish.
3. 01:29:919 - Unsanped KIAI time line.
4. 01:57:545 - ^
5. 02:38:984 - ^
6. 02:52:365 - ^
7. 02:52:797 - ^
8. 03:06:610 - ^

That's all ~ nice map ~

Good luck ~

Odaril wrote:

..if your mapset has two difficulties, one of them cannot be insane.

BeatofIke wrote:

[General]
*Offset is late. Try changing it to 7020, assuming that your Universal offset is 0. If you do, make sure you change the offset and re-snap all the timing sections in all difficulties.

Good Map otherwise. No kudosu please.

Before Offset is 7020 but not good...

Jacob wrote:

Odaril wrote:

..if your mapset has two difficulties, one of them cannot be insane.

Even though you have a normal and a hard, the hard is 4.98 stars and has an insane ranking. This may be an issue.

Remove "w_h_i_t_e" from the tags in your normal difficulty.

ikari_kyon wrote:

add W_h_i_t_e to tags? people with spaces on their user names always add those tag type

Jacob wrote:

[Normal]

The combo changes listed below are to keep the combos consistent. It's very recommended that you fix them.

00:26:034 - Remove NC
00:27:761 - Add NC
00:29:488 - Remove NC
00:31:214 - Add NC
00:32:509 - Remove NC
00:34:804 - Remove clap
01:05:315 - Remove NC
01:05:747 - Add NC
01:06:826 - Remove NC
01:13:085 - Add clap
01:15:675 - ^
01:16:920 - Remove clap
01:18:265 - Remove NC
01:21:718 - ^
01:22:149 - Make it so that the reverse arrow of this slider is at 01:22:581. The current slider doesn't fit. Make sure to fix the spacing of the notes after it. If you do this, consider adding a note at 01:23:444.
01:23:660 - Add NC
01:24:308 - Remove NC
01:24:739 - Make the reverse arrow of this slider at 01:25:171. If you do that, try adding a note at 01:26:034.
01:32:941 - Remove NC
01:33:372 - Add NC
01:42:869 - Remove NC
01:44:164 - Add NC
01:45:920 - Remove NC
01:47:185 - Add NC
01:48:912 - Make the slider here like the one before it. Also, remove NC.
01:50:639 - Add NC
01:51:070 - Remove NC
02:14:380 - ^
02:18:811 - Add NC
02:16:538 - Remove NC
02:21:286 - ^
02:21:718 - Add NC
02:31:646 - Remove NC
02:32:077 - Add NC
02:33:804 - Remove NC
02:35:962 - Add NC
02:36:394 - Remove NC
02:37:689 - Remove this note.

can't mod hard right now, too busy

no kudosu

Ch1ka wrote:

Hi, W h i t e. I love 07th Expansion, so I'm here.
If it wouldn't be helpful, don't give kudosu.

[General]
Why White in tags? And add zts in tags, he is composer.

[Normal]
01:01:430 (3) - Asymmetrically relatively to (2)
02:37:689 (2) - Isn't it excess? It would be better without that circle.

[Hard]
00:12:221 (5) - Add NC
00:13:085 (1) - Remove NC
00:26:898 (2) - Not perfectly symmetrical slider (nazi)
00:30:351 (2) - ^
00:31:214 (4) - ^
00:32:077 (1) - ^
00:33:804 (7) - ^
00:36:826 (7) - ^
01:29:272 (5) - Clap?
02:37:689 (1) - Isn't it excess? It would be better without that circle.

Good map and awesome song. GL and bye.

I delete White in tag... It's last

wcx19911123 wrote:

from my queue

[General]
Normal is totally an Easy diff imo , I strongly suggest to add a diff between them

[Normal]
01:23:444 (3,4,1,2) - if you rename this to Easy diff , plz change this to 2 repeat sldiers
01:34:236 (2,3) - ^
01:38:984 (4,1) - this anti-jump play very odd to me , why not use 1.0x spacing here?
01:50:639 (1,2) - if you rename this to Easy diff , plz change this to slider
02:16:970 (2,3) - ^

[Hard]
01:49:128 (3) - change to 1/6 slider?

diffs are fine , but plz add a diff between this 2 diffs , or the diff spread is really bad. the scores jump from 0.7m to 8.5m..
if you fixed the diff spread , then feel free to call me back

val0108 wrote:

woo!!woo!!woooooo!! .

Ormax wrote:

Hi!So,just a little mod,some suggestions :3

[Normal]

01:00:567 (2,3) - Those look better if placed like this: http://puu.sh/mk3u
01:05:747 (2) - and 01:06:826 (3) - The gap between them is a bit confusing.Maybe add a note on 01:06:610 - ?
02:16:106 (3,4,5) - This is kinda hard to read,guess a note on 02:16:322 - would make it easier.

[Hard]

01:28:408 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - This pattern seems deformed (by distance snap?), maybe you should try moving 01:28:193 (8) - a bit and then making it look like this: http://puu.sh/mk9H ?
02:38:121 (1) - This slider is a bit rotated and looks strange...

So,that's all,hope something will be usefull ._.
Good luck,i'm waiting for this ranked :3

wcx19911123 wrote:

if I recall, the Normal is only 0.7m scores when I modded this map..
uh.. now is 2m, maybe it's my fault when I modded it last time..orz
anyway, the diff spread is fine now, so
bubbled

LunarSakuya wrote:

I see an OSB file and I don't think you're using a Storyboard? Delete it? xD sorry

Jacob wrote:

LunarSakuya wrote:

I see an OSB file and I don't think you're using a Storyboard? Delete it? xD sorry

This isn't unrankable. In fact, it's discouraged to point this out in a map. Especially a bubbled one.

• 
  The source should be "Umineko no Naku Koro ni Chiru" because this song is from Umineko EP8.

1. 01:07:042 (4) - Don't stack a circle under the end of slider on the easiest diff. Newbie cannot read it.
2. 01:42:869 (1) - Add finish to the end.
3. 02:16:538 (4) - It's better not to use 1/2-beat-length slider which has two repeats on Normal diff. Or at least avoid making it overlap with the previous note.
4. 02:35:962 (3) - The same reason as above, please don't stack it.

1. 01:43:732 (1) - Add finish to the top.

happy30 wrote:

The offset is a little late. Try -6 (7036)
Also, try adding a few more tags? (frederica bernkastel lambdadelta chiru)


Nothing else is wrong in the map so PM me for a rebubble once you've fixed the offset/tags

Suzully wrote:

Hello old bubble o/

[General]

• 
  The source should be "Umineko no Naku Koro ni Chiru" because this song is from Umineko EP8.

[Normal]

1. 01:07:042 (4) - Don't stack a circle under the end of slider on the easiest diff. Newbie cannot read it.
2. 01:42:869 (1) - Add finish to the end.
3. 02:16:538 (4) - It's better not to use 1/2-beat-length slider which has two repeats on Normal diff. Or at least avoid making it overlap with the previous note.
4. 02:35:962 (3) - The same reason as above, please don't stack it.

[Hard]

1. 01:43:732 (1) - Add finish to the top.

After fix, send me PM or catch me in game please.
Oops only 10 mins have passed since happy's o.o
The offset seems fine to me though.

happy30 wrote:

remove chiru from the tags (since you've added it in the source now )

happy30 wrote:

okay lets do it again

Suzully wrote:

Enjoy your first ranked!

bbj0920 wrote:

축하드립니다!
비긴 오스님의 첫 랭곡을 진심으로 축하드립니다!!! ㅋㅅㅋ