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Camellia - Exit This Earth's Atomosphere [OsuMania]

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Protastic101

Maxus wrote:

Hello lamb meat tfw am lamb :/

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  • Welp, If i somehow suggest Ctrl+G , please move manually instead, since i know it can screwed HS.. Gotchu fam
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  1. 00:24:063 (24063|1,24107|0) - This flow is kinda inconsistent imo, since if you see 00:24:152 (24152|3,24196|2,24240|1,24284|0,24328|3,24372|2) - , they're 1 direction flow , while 00:23:887 (23887|0,23931|1,23975|2,24019|3,24063|1,24107|0) - it's reverse flow. I suggest to Ctrl+G this for flow consistency. good point, done
  2. 00:38:710 - I felt this stream structure is almost the same as the one at 00:35:887 - albeit the latter one have additional clap there. So my suggestion is to make something like http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8258564 , i think the stack can emphasize and build clearer structure towards additional clap. Cool idea. Applied like in the screenshot save for the end where I switched the stacks to be two notes long instead of three so that I could start 00:41:534 - with a [12] chord and avoid rearranging the dense handstream there.
  3. 01:20:710 - I expect this to be double LN because of how the emphasis went strong here, i think it's more important than make 01:21:063 - becoming big chord. I agree that the synth here stands out quite a lot. I would like to keep it as a single LN though because to me, it feels like the uptake of breath a conductor or someone would have before all the heavier instruments come crashing in at once at 01:21:063 - . In this way, there's a contrast between 01:20:710 (80710|1) - and 01:21:063 (81063|3,81063|2,81063|0) - , just as there is a contrast in intensity in the music because the LN has a much lighter feeling to it since the player is given ample time to prepare for it whereas the triple gives kind of a forced movement imo since the player has to time the release of an LN at the same time, so it feels more intense.
  4. 01:50:710 - The feeling og vocal here already quite different with the one at 01:49:299 - , so still using the same trill pattern that focusing on column 3 felt awkward imo, I kept it stacked in three for consistency since all sections similar to this follow a 2 measure stack and only changes when a synth transition is heard into the next measure, but I realized this wasn't true for the next measure after this, so I think it's fine to switch from two measures to switching every measure instead. Rearranged the stacks a bit too so they go col 3 -> 2 -> 4 now.
  5. 01:53:622 (113622|2) - I prefer if you make complete trill by moving this at col 4, you probably want to follow structure at 01:54:240 - but since they are separated by 1/4 jack, i think you can make them a bit different. moreover, the "cha cha" sound at 01:53:622 - 01:53:799 - already fit more than enough for trill. That's a good idea, but I was trying to differentiate the vocals and the 1/4 burst by way of note placement. I put 01:53:622 (113622|2,113799|3) - into different columns because they're not the same "pitch" really unlike 01:53:534 (113534|0,113710|0) - which is two vocal samples repeated. I did a similar thing at 01:54:240 (114240|0,114416|2) - since it's a low vocal followed by a higher pitched one.
  6. 01:54:240 (114240|0,114328|3) - I think make this at col 2 and col 1 will bring the structure more apparent here, since you can basically mirror 01:54:593 (114593|3,114681|1,114769|3) - which seems better imo. Similar reasoning to above. With your suggestion, there would be a mini stack in 01:54:328 - 01:54:504 - , but I'm only using stacks for the vocals here like with 01:54:593 (114593|3,114769|3) - , which is why I separated the notes on the 1/4 ticks a bit more so that they would be different. I did move 01:54:416 (114416|2) - to 2 though since I feel it's a bit more balanced that way.
  7. 01:56:357 (116357|3,116357|0) - Try making the double at 2-3? because you make the double at 01:54:946 (114946|3,114946|2,115299|2,115299|3,115652|2,115652|3) - being in the same column three times, so i thought you should make this double three times being in the same column too with 01:56:710 (116710|1,116710|2,117063|2,117063|1) - ok, cool
  8. 02:17:004 - Felt like you need to add note here, it felt a bit empty here, and i do think you can fit the consistency with 02:16:652 - too. Ah, you're right, I was mapping synths + vocals and I happened to miss that there. Added
  9. 02:37:299 - the 3,00x SV is rough to hit here since it gives illusion of hitting which causing 200 to appear for most part imo, and this is kinda spiking and the hardest SV in the diff imo, you can lower 3,00x to 2,00x and normalize thing? (i'm kinda bad calculate SV which requires 1/16 thing, sorry..) Aw, I kind of like the stop motion effect it has. I've reduced the sequence to 2.5x - 0.7x. That should hopefully be a little softer while still retaining an aggressive feel. If it still feels too strong, I can reduce it to 2.2x.
  10. 02:38:534 - The SV kinda rough having 1,9x and 0,1x , try consider 1,5x and 0,5x? yeah, agreed it's too strong lol, nerfed.
  11. 02:39:769 - This SV can be lowered to standard 1,25x and 0,75x here, since it occured in unstable note snap, i think you can do that, it still reflect the music too. 1.25x to 0.75x doesn't really retain the stutter effect anymore because of how fast the snaps are. I did 1.5x to 0.5x instead since it still shakes slightly but is stable enough to allow the player to read the 1/6 burst I think.
  12. 02:45:593 (165593|1,165769|2) - Felt like you can switch column to differentiate it a bit since the triple actually have different emphasis each other. Stacked the 1/2 on top of the previous triple so the chords are different now
  13. 02:49:652 - This jack kinda rough imo, I think you can use neater one to give more comfortable transition? like http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8258922 Cool pattern, thanks
  14. 03:24:769 - The same as 01:20:710 - , Make it 4-1 2-3 LN for it to fit the current pattern. Made it 4 - 1 - 2 since I'm not using a jump for the synth for the reason listed the first time it was mentioned.
  15. 03:44:534 (224534|2,224710|1,224710|0) - You should Ctrl+G to fit The ascending pitch here (welp, the hitsound also get wrong because Ctrl+G, so don't forget fix it) I'd like to avoid a 1/2 stack with 03:44:357 (224357|0) - , and so far the LNs in this section haven't been super accurate to pitch otherwise the feeling would be kind of repetitive since most of the synth is ascending throughout.
    I'm not sure what i have to mod in handstream part, so i will leave it to this.
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  1. 00:38:710 - This is pretty much the same suggestion i gave in x icon diff, I do think this will bring more variety and emphasis towards the music instrument too. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8258982 Instead of three note stacks, I just did two note stacks after every jump.
  2. 00:46:563 (46563|2,46607|3) - You should Ctrl+G here, the burst sound where it suddenly getting even more intense already occured at 00:46:475 - Good point, thanks
  3. 01:00:416 (60416|3,60593|1) - Do think you should switch column for pitch. nice catch
  4. 01:08:357 (68357|2,68534|0) - I do think this should be at col 2 and col 3 due to pitch too. done, and also rearranged a few of the following notes for pitch too
  5. 01:50:710 - The same with highest diff again. Simply by moving 01:50:710 (110710|1,111063|1,111416|1,111769|1) - at col 1 to differentiate already good here. shifted the 1/1 notes to col 1.
    [*[01:53:887 - I do think instead of ordinary pattern you can use trill instead http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8259068 nice looking patterns
  6. 02:29:799 (149799|0,149887|2) - Should switch column too for a bit pitch things Moved 02:29:799 (149799|0) - to col 4.
  7. 03:09:593 (189593|3) - Better change into LN cause i think the synth still quite apparent here. I disagree; I feel that 03:09:593 - served as a very sudden cut off to the synth since I don't hear anything else picking up except for the background synth which continues through the entire section.
  8. 03:49:475 (229475|1,229563|2,229652|0,229652|3,229740|1,229828|2,230181|1,230269|2,230357|0,230357|3,230446|1,230534|2) - I will say this is much better if you Ctrl+H here, mirroring the first two of stair pattern to form better structure instead of repeating same imo. True, the pitch also changes there too.
  9. 03:54:240 - Since this is a start of new double note chord, i find it awkward if you continued the 2-3 trill here, will be better if you try different trill form like http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8259140 Yeah, I thought so too. Changed to all be [14] followed by the 2-3-2 mini trill.
  10. 04:16:122 - I do think you should make this triple. I have no idea how I missed that lol
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  1. 00:45:769 - I expect this to be a bit more aggresive since the burst sound is rough sound here, http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8259166 cool pattern, has some really nice symmetry in it.
  2. 01:00:063 - Maybe you can try to follow a bit more pitch so it can be a bit differentiated with previous stair pattern http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8259184 ok
  3. 01:12:063 (72063|3,72240|0) - Ctrl+H for the same reason. done
  4. 01:50:710 - Same again as previous diff, But i will suggest http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8259190 instead. ooo, fun!
  5. 02:36:593 (156593|1) - Really minor, but i expect this to be in col 3 wkkw lol, understandable. There was a bit of left hand bias there to begin with.
  6. 03:53:181 (233181|1) - This should be at col.3 to follow consistency with 02:00:240 (120240|0,120240|3,120416|0,120416|3) - Oh righ,
    thanks for catching that.
  7. 05:03:416 - I felt this pattern kinda lack the exposure of right direction to stream. try http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8259259 Idk, I feel like your pattern has a bit too much of a left hand bias since col 4 doesn't really do anything for that measure. I think my pattern is fine since it's more balanced in that aspect and does contain symmetry with the 1-2-3 and then 4-3-2.
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  1. 00:35:357 (35357|3,35446|0,35534|1) - Try make this 2-4-1? Felt that it will makes the stream more firm in pattern planning. I feel like that gets a bit too heavy on columns 2 and 3 and doesn't give enough to col 1 and 4 in that case. I think the current pattern is fine then because it's mostly linear rolls in the measure while being balanced across all four columns.
  2. 00:46:563 (46563|1,46652|2,46740|3) - Felt like you can make it more rough for this strong burst sound by make it 3-2-4 (visual is more spreaded, so the accenting is stronger here.) good point, accepted.
  3. 02:03:504 - A bit same like before, i do think you can try http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8259325 nice
  4. 03:04:475 (184475|3,184828|0) - Recommend Ctrl+H here. Cool, and also arranged the following notes a bit better for pitch.
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  1. 00:14:357 - Don't think you should repeat same pattern here considering you use differentiation at 00:16:122 - , i will switch column of 00:14:357 (14357|3,14710|1) - instead. ok, nice
  2. 01:26:004 (86004|3,86357|1) - Switch column for pitch =w=)b
  3. 01:27:769 (87769|3,89004|0,89181|3) - make this col 2-4-1 for Pitch again. Pitch wasn't really a large focus of mine when I mapped this,
    sorry orz
  4. 02:13:299 - Too linear imo, doesn't get the instrument feeling here, maybe you can try move 02:13:475 (133475|2) - ? Moved to 1
  5. 04:44:004 - A bit underwhelming imo, try http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8259464 Understandable. Originally had some overlapping LNs but it was too hard for this level but too easy for the next one :/
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  1. 00:20:710 (20710|2,21063|1) - Since there's rising instrument atmosphere, why not making it at col 2-3- instead forming stair to the right direction? felt more intuitively correct imo. Interesting take on it; i like it.
  2. 01:49:299 - I do think you should further expand your trill here for the vocal. something like http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8259489 should work. fun idea, accepted
  3. 02:35:887 - The one hand trill kinda appear suddenly imo, i think you can sort of move 02:35:887 (155887|1) - to col 3. Moved to col 1 instead, and moved the note at 02:36:240 - to 3.
  4. 02:47:181 - Still think left column are too empty imo, i think you can balance it out with http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8259510 LN at 02:48:593 - was moved to 2 to avoid making two [23] chords since I tried to vary those in this section, but aside from that, accepted.
As I expect i can't point out much, nicely done. Thanks!
Solid lamb meat is solid, great job. call me back if you're done
Thanks a bunch for the check, I know it's a lot to go through orz. Hope my response is satisfactory!
Maxus
Grats for first quali lamb meat!
:Thumbs up:
Topic Starter
Protastic101

Maxus wrote:

Grats for first quali!
:Thumbs up:
Thanks fam <3

For real though, thanks to everyone who supported this map and stuff.
Surono
Prolamb!!!11

]:-() gratzz demm
Arzenvald
finally :o grats!
Kyousuke-
CONGRATULATIONS PROT!!
LIT MAP 🔥🔥
AyeAries
Finally! Congrats :)
Oscyy
D:
Syadow-
Gratz protato \o/
pw384
should be 9.8m/s^2
congratz!
zigizigiefe
Congratz o:
Note:I have concerns about the hardest diff of the mapset.01:20:710 (80710|1) - I can't hear piano sound on the song but there is custom hitsound on this note.Can you explain please :/
Topic Starter
Protastic101

zigizigiefe wrote:

Congratz o:
Note:I have concerns about the hardest diff of the mapset.01:20:710 (80710|1) - I can't hear piano sound on the song but there is custom hitsound on this note.Can you explain please :/
The synth drowns it out a bit, but the piano continues onwards until 01:20:887 - . The same goes for the four notes at 03:24:593 - to 03:25:122 - . Try listening with 0% hitsound, it's present. Additionally, see 03:13:299 (193299|1,193475|2,193652|0,193828|3) - or 01:08:887 (68887|2,69063|1,69416|2,69593|1) - . I say this because in both slow sections, the same piano phrase is repeated twice, and the notes I highlighted above correspond to the same part of the musical line that the note you highlighted is part of.
Alsty-
Finally, you deserve it m8!

Congratulations! owo)b
Adri
Did anyone notice the typo in the title ? Atomosphere
Rivals_7

Adri wrote:

Did anyone notice the typo in the title ? Atomosphere
blame camellia tbh
Maxus
more like their stylistic choices

http://cametek.jp/planetshaper/

Adri
Ok nvm, didn't look further than youtube's recommendation when searching for a song x)

I hope this gets ranked, this is a really good map.
Fontes
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I apologize for my carelessness.
Nwacher
Nwacher :v
Sandalphon

Fresh Chicken wrote:



How did I miss this 10 months ago, classic
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