val0108 wrote:

いろいろdone!![attachment=0:d6e63]Hatsune Miku - Sakura Zensen Ijou Nashi (Lalarun) [Ijou Ari].osu[/attachment:d6e63]

y u c a wrote:

ヽ(･ω･*)ﾉ

General

Ijou Ari diffだけぷれびゅーポイントないよおおおお

Easy

00:37:835 (1) - ｽﾗｲﾀﾞｰの最初にフィニッシュ
00:55:549 (4) - これｽﾗｲﾀﾞｰにしたらいいかも

SPOILER

これか

01:24:692 - 音消し忘れ？
01:53:263 (1) - ｽﾗｲﾀﾞｰの頭にフィニッシュ
02:54:978 (1) - ^?

Normal

01:24:692 - 音最後消すの忘れてる？
02:50:121 (5) - ふぃにっしゅなし
02:50:406 (1) - フィニッシュ追加
03:02:906 -なんで青線でスピﾅｰおわってるんｗｗ

Hard

AR-1のほうがいいかもー
01:14:406 (1) - ふぃにっしゅ
01:24:692 - 最後音消すのわすれてる？
01:57:835 (1) - これのほうがいいかもかも

SPOILER

Ijou Nashi

00:18:978 (1) - ﾆｭｰｺﾝﾎﾞなし？
00:19:549 (5) - ﾆｭｰｺﾝﾎﾞ
00:19:835 (1) - ﾆｭｰｺﾝﾎﾞなし
00:23:549 (1) - ^
00:24:121 (6) - ﾆｭｰｺﾝﾎﾞとフィニッシュ

val0108 wrote:

[Ijou Ari]
omg.wtf!!

[Ijou Nashi]
00:20:478 (4,5) - 8/1置き・・・がいいんじゃないだろうか 変更
00:25:049 (6,7) - ^
03:09:621 (6,7) - ^
00:56:121 - Break
01:25:263 (1,2) - 音量ダウン
01:46:692 (6) - 切り替えし一回
01:48:406 (9) - ^
01:50:692 (6) - ^
01:51:478 (8,1) - ここどうだろうか・・・。普通に繋げてもいいんじゃない？ＢＰＭ２１０の連打を繋げるってだけで難しいと思う。 DS下げた！
02:09:978 (2) - もうちょっと上にずらすかして見やすくしたほうがいいかも。 02:09:263 (8) - をずらした！
02:22:406 (1,2) - 音量ダウン

[Hard]
00:10:406 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3) - 全部0.7置きでいいんじゃない？ 気に入ってるからとりあえずこのまま！
00:56:121 - Break
01:14:978 (3,3) - スライダー速度0.5 曲の鈴に合わせてるからとりあえずこのままで！
01:58:264 - note欲しい！ 加えた
02:18:978 (3,4) - もうちょっと２に近づけていいと思う
02:46:835 (4) - http://puu.sh/aeyZ こっちのほうが叩きやすいしリズムとれると思うよ。 ありがと！
03:03:835 (2,1) - 離そう 少し配置変更

[Normal]
00:56:121 - Break
01:14:978 (3,2) - ノート一個だけのほうがいい これもハードと一緒かな

[いーじー]
00:56:121 - Break

(ﾟ∀ﾟ=ﾟ∀ﾟ)[attachment=0:76e1f]Hatsune Miku - Sakura Zensen Ijou Nashi (Lalarun) [Ijou Ari].osu[/attachment:76e1f]

1. enable 'Display epilepsy warning' (the strobes are not nice as I expected, I may suggest remove the SB but up to you)
2. tag in [Ijou Ari]: Vocaliod <--fix this

1. 00:23:692 (7) - not really easy for reading at first attempt, try move the slider's body out a bit?
2. 03:08:264 (7) - ^
3. suggest OD8 for the high BPM, it could work better imo

1. 00:55:835 (1) - how about a note? as in Hard you changed this to a note, I thought you're considering a short slider might be too hard

1. 01:25:403 (T) - section not snapped. not a big deal though

Colin Hou wrote:

おまたせ！

Chinese New Year took me a couple of weeks, sorry for this orz. No problem~ 祝 新年!!

[General]:

1. enable 'Display epilepsy warning' (the strobes are not nice as I expected, I may suggest remove the SB but up to you) remove!
2. tag in [Ijou Ari]: Vocaliod <--fix this

OK

[Hard]:

1. 00:23:692 (7) - not really easy for reading at first attempt, try move the slider's body out a bit? Change
2. 03:08:264 (7) - ^ Change
3. suggest OD8 for the high BPM, it could work better imo

OK

[Nomral]:

1. 00:55:835 (1) - how about a note? as in Hard you changed this to a note, I thought you're considering a short slider might be too hard

OK

[Ijou Ari]:

1. 01:25:403 (T) - section not snapped. not a big deal though

challenging and fun mapset, contact with me after fixing these.

Colin Hou wrote:

something I missed: preview of Normal: 161174 is different from others.

fix and I'll bubble

Colin Hou wrote:

黑喂狗！

Garven wrote:

Did some IRC modding.

SPOILER

13:55 <Garven> : 00:28:692 (1) -
13:56 <Garven> : How about ending it at 00:30:978 - ?
13:56 <Lalarun> : OK!
13:56 <Garven> : Applies to all difficulties
13:58 <Garven> : I am worried about how many 1/2 rhythms there are in this Easy though.
13:58 <Garven> : Especially with 01:16:692 (1,2,3,4) -
13:58 <Garven> : So many in a row
13:58 <Garven> : Maybe delete the 2 and 4
13:59 <Garven> : 01:35:549 (1) - Too soon after a spinner for an easy
13:59 <Garven> : 01:37:263 (3,4) - Kind of a tricky rhythm
14:01 <Lalarun> : hm
14:01 <Garven> : 02:19:549 (1) - End this at 02:21:978 - to allow for more recovery time
14:02 <Garven> : 02:32:692 (1) - Too soon after spinner
14:03 <Garven> : 02:34:406 (3,4) - Same as earlier
14:03 <Garven> : 02:36:692 (1) - End this at 02:39:978 -
14:04 <Garven> : 02:55:549 (2,2) - eeeh I really don't like these in Easy difficulties
14:04 <Garven> : 03:03:549 (1) - delete
14:06 <Lalarun> : OK!
14:06 <Garven> : 03:10:978 (1) - How about this rhythm here? http://puu.sh/nC0l
14:09 <Lalarun> : OK, thank you!
14:13 <Garven> : 02:19:549 (1) - End this at 02:21:978 -
14:13 <Garven> : In [Normal]
14:14 <Lalarun> : change~
14:15 <Garven> : 02:29:263 (4) - remove finish from the end
14:16 <Lalarun> : wow
14:16 <Lalarun> : thank you XD
14:16 <Garven> : 03:03:549 (1) - add new combo
14:17 <Lalarun> : 03:04:121 (2) - remove
14:17 <Lalarun> : ?
14:18 <Garven> : no, leave it
14:18 <Garven> : Only add on 1
14:18 <Lalarun> : OK
14:19 <Garven> : btw
14:19 <Garven> : Tick rate 2 sounds much better~
14:20 <Lalarun> : OK!
14:22 <Garven> : In hard
14:22 <Garven> : 02:19:549 (1) - End at 02:21:978 -
14:26 <Garven> : Ijou Nasi: 02:19:549 (1,2,1,2) - hidoi ;_;
14:27 <Garven> : 02:20:763 (1) - end at 02:21:978 -
14:28 <Lalarun> : hm
14:30 <Lalarun> : bad spacing?
14:31 <Garven> : I kept slide rbreaking.
14:31 <Garven> : 100's
14:35 <Lalarun> : wow XD
14:35 <Garven> : I have a suggestion for your storyboard too
14:36 <Garven> : Right now you have strobes going every two beats
14:36 <Garven> : I think if you have strobes during strong parts of the song, it would fit much better
14:37 <Garven> : So strobe at 02:41:264 - then 02:42:264 -
14:37 <Garven> : And follow that pattern
14:38 <Garven> : Follow that until 02:59:549 -
14:38 <Garven> : You can do a long long strobe here
14:38 <Garven> : and at 03:01:835 - and 03:04:121 -
14:39 <Lalarun> : hm,
14:39 <Lalarun> : Sorry
14:40 <Lalarun> : I can't SB
14:40 <Garven> : Who made this SB?
14:41 <Garven> : Because right now the strobe feels off-time
14:41 <Garven> : The strong rhythmica emphasis doesn't like every two beats during this part

14:33 <Garven> : 02:11:549 (1) - Hrm, feels weird. Might be better having it like this: http://puu.sh/nCg0
14:34 <Garven> : 02:20:692 (1) - end this at 02:21:978 -
14:34 <Garven> : 02:19:549 (1) - end this at 02:20:692 - and start 02:20:692 (1) - at 02:20:835 -
14:36 <val0108> : 02:11:692 (2) - done
14:39 <Garven> : That's all for your diff
14:39 <val0108> : 02:20:692 (1) -
14:39 <val0108> : done
14:39 <val0108> : but,02:19:549 (1) - not change
14:40 <Garven> : Hm, okay

Lalarun wrote:

Garven wrote:

Did some IRC modding.

SPOILER

13:55 <Garven> : 00:28:692 (1) -
13:56 <Garven> : How about ending it at 00:30:978 - ?
13:56 <Lalarun> : OK!
13:56 <Garven> : Applies to all difficulties
13:58 <Garven> : I am worried about how many 1/2 rhythms there are in this Easy though.
13:58 <Garven> : Especially with 01:16:692 (1,2,3,4) -
13:58 <Garven> : So many in a row
13:58 <Garven> : Maybe delete the 2 and 4
13:59 <Garven> : 01:35:549 (1) - Too soon after a spinner for an easy
13:59 <Garven> : 01:37:263 (3,4) - Kind of a tricky rhythm
14:01 <Lalarun> : hm
14:01 <Garven> : 02:19:549 (1) - End this at 02:21:978 - to allow for more recovery time
14:02 <Garven> : 02:32:692 (1) - Too soon after spinner
14:03 <Garven> : 02:34:406 (3,4) - Same as earlier
14:03 <Garven> : 02:36:692 (1) - End this at 02:39:978 -
14:04 <Garven> : 02:55:549 (2,2) - eeeh I really don't like these in Easy difficulties
14:04 <Garven> : 03:03:549 (1) - delete
14:06 <Lalarun> : OK!
14:06 <Garven> : 03:10:978 (1) - How about this rhythm here? http://puu.sh/nC0l
14:09 <Lalarun> : OK, thank you!
14:13 <Garven> : 02:19:549 (1) - End this at 02:21:978 -
14:13 <Garven> : In [Normal]
14:14 <Lalarun> : change~
14:15 <Garven> : 02:29:263 (4) - remove finish from the end
14:16 <Lalarun> : wow
14:16 <Lalarun> : thank you XD
14:16 <Garven> : 03:03:549 (1) - add new combo
14:17 <Lalarun> : 03:04:121 (2) - remove
14:17 <Lalarun> : ?
14:18 <Garven> : no, leave it
14:18 <Garven> : Only add on 1
14:18 <Lalarun> : OK
14:19 <Garven> : btw
14:19 <Garven> : Tick rate 2 sounds much better~
14:20 <Lalarun> : OK!
14:22 <Garven> : In hard
14:22 <Garven> : 02:19:549 (1) - End at 02:21:978 -
14:26 <Garven> : Ijou Nasi: 02:19:549 (1,2,1,2) - hidoi ;_;
14:27 <Garven> : 02:20:763 (1) - end at 02:21:978 -
14:28 <Lalarun> : hm
14:30 <Lalarun> : bad spacing?
14:31 <Garven> : I kept slide rbreaking.
14:31 <Garven> : 100's
14:35 <Lalarun> : wow XD
14:35 <Garven> : I have a suggestion for your storyboard too
14:36 <Garven> : Right now you have strobes going every two beats
14:36 <Garven> : I think if you have strobes during strong parts of the song, it would fit much better
14:37 <Garven> : So strobe at 02:41:264 - then 02:42:264 -
14:37 <Garven> : And follow that pattern
14:38 <Garven> : Follow that until 02:59:549 -
14:38 <Garven> : You can do a long long strobe here
14:38 <Garven> : and at 03:01:835 - and 03:04:121 -
14:39 <Lalarun> : hm,
14:39 <Lalarun> : Sorry
14:40 <Lalarun> : I can't SB
14:40 <Garven> : Who made this SB?
14:41 <Garven> : Because right now the strobe feels off-time
14:41 <Garven> : The strong rhythmica emphasis doesn't like every two beats during this part

14:33 <Garven> : 02:11:549 (1) - Hrm, feels weird. Might be better having it like this: http://puu.sh/nCg0
14:34 <Garven> : 02:20:692 (1) - end this at 02:21:978 -
14:34 <Garven> : 02:19:549 (1) - end this at 02:20:692 - and start 02:20:692 (1) - at 02:20:835 -
14:36 <val0108> : 02:11:692 (2) - done
14:39 <Garven> : That's all for your diff
14:39 <val0108> : 02:20:692 (1) -
14:39 <val0108> : done
14:39 <val0108> : but,02:19:549 (1) - not change
14:40 <Garven> : Hm, okay

Thx Garven~

Fixed!

Garven wrote:

[All difficulties]
I still think Tick rate 2 would fit this song better. Changed

[Normal, Hard, Ijou Nashi]
00:28:692 (1) - End this at 00:31:978 - OK

[Ijou Ari]
Tick rate is still 0.5. Change to at least 1, but 2 is better~

val0108 wrote:

lららんがOK!しか言ってなくて萌えた。

Garven wrote:

Ack, a few more things, sorry:

[Hard]
01:34:978 (1) - New combo
02:32:120 (1) - New combo

[Normal]
03:03:549 (1) - Remove new combo

[Easy]
01:36:121 (1) - New combo
02:33:263 (1) - New combo
02:41:263 (1) - New combo
03:04:121 (1) - New combo

If someone else asks you to add new combos to the notes at 03:03:549 - in any of your difficulties, refuse them. The way the combo works in this phrase the new combo shouldn't be applied until 03:04:121 -

Garven wrote:

Rebubbled!

Dangaard wrote:

Some few things should be fixed

[Easy]
02:54:406 (2,1) - there is a timing overlap here wow.thanks XD

[Normal]
You should increase HP by 1 and OD by 2　fixed

[Hard]
Increase OD by 1 fixed

[Ijou Nashi]
Increase OD by 1 fixed
00:14:406 (9,10) - sounds like there is missing a beat after these fixed

[Ijou Ari]
Increase OD by 1fixed

Dangaard wrote:

I think you forgot to increase OD in Hard

Colin Hou wrote:

iloveteemobutofcoursenotthisone;w;\\rebubbled

Derekku wrote:

Unfortunately, we'll have to unrank this since there are at least two major issues.

[Ijou Ari]
00:28:692 (1) - Yes, this sounds good, but making crumbled sliders to abuse slider speeds (e.g. hold sliders) has been unrankable for the past year or two.done
00:55:835 (1) - Personally, I'd change this so a 1/4 slider; 1/8 makes this feel like a hold slider as well.I think the sound of here to be 1/8.and no change.I'll ask you
01:39:549 (1) - Second repeat is 100% invisible.done

I haven't looked through the rest of the mapset, but overall it seems pretty solid (good job!). Let's get this re-ranked quickly! (: