Time Capsule wrote:

love it even more

A r M i N wrote:

have a quick gender change boi

Shiratoi wrote:

Monstrata wrote:

Cursed

00:33:329 (2) - overmapped. Do a 1/1 gap here and stack 00:33:503 (3) - with 00:32:457 (1) - 's tail so its not an awkward spacing. nah.. i kind of like it like this since i think its a bit awkward if i leave it out because im pretty sure theres bg noise that should be mapped Just because there is a bg sound there doesn't mean it should be mapped, especially since it's not even following what you're mapping to so far. Listen to the vocals, that's clearly the dominant rhythm and it's what you've been following with clickable sliders. 00:26:003 (3,4,5,1,2,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,1) - Everything up to here is more or less following vocals, aside from 00:30:887 (4) - .00:33:329 (2) - which are all poor rhythm choices. The rhythm in the intro is uncomfortable to map.
It's often red-tick rhythms, and leaves large gaps at times, with nothing much to fill. You are attempting to fill them by spamming 1/2 rhythm because thats a comfortable way to map. It doesn't work here. Really, you should experiment more with using 1/1 gaps and breaks, whether expressing them through larger spacing, or through stacks.
00:36:468 (4) - The white tick is mapped to nothing. Have a triplet beginning on 00:36:643 - . i tried to play around with it and do the rhythm suggestion as you said, but it really felt like somethings missing considering the beginning part had a consistent 1/2 rhythmThis is exactly what I mean. You're using "1/2 rhythm" as an excuse to map outside the vocal layer. Mapping 1/2 consistently is easy because you can use your regular aesthetics, structure, spacing etc... so it's natural to want to map that, but it's not going to work well here.

Just an aside but this song is a bit tricky on intro's cuz of the vocal rhythm. You should try and use more 1/1 rhythms, don't feel like you have to constantly fill up everything with 1/2 rhythms to the player has continuous flow going. The intro isn't that dense either so 1/1 rhythms are fine. In fact using full 1/2 rhythms makes the intro feel a bit too dense if you ask me. personally, i think its fine since it hits the necessary beats while still being consistent rhythm wise and flowing nicely so theres not really a playability problem because nothing is particularly hard to hit making it have a "calming" feel if you get what i mean :///Nothing being hard to hit doesn't make it calming at all. Simple rhythms, slower sliders (your slider velocity is already on the fast side) and focusing on simple layers in the music are what make something calming. Overmapping in the sense where you're no longer following the vocal layer in order to satisfy "1/2 rhythm continuation" will just cause the map to feel overly dense unnecessarily.

00:45:364 (2,3) - I would ctrl"G this rhythm instead. Emphasize the note on 00:45:364 - Actually 00:45:887 (4,5) - i would make this a slider as well. sounds better to me anyways. i think 00:45:538 - is where the stronger note of that high pitch noise Fair enough.

00:47:980 - this section is a good example of where 1/1 rhythms could have worked. Constantly spamming 1/2 gaps causes the section to feel much like the previous and next section in terms of density. If you listen, there is a drum on 00:48:329 - and all the white ticks that you can map to. nup the rhythm here in my opinion is a lot more dense since the player is constantly holding the slider which causes less emphasis on the instruments but more so the vocals (i think its more noticeable here 00:52:166 - ) + the little triplets are there to provide a little support to the instruments so its win-win situation i guess ?? Constantly holding the slider doesn't define density at all... Density is the number of audible notes per beat. if you have a 5 note stream,
thats a dense rhythm. A 9 note 1/8 stream, twice as dense. A 1/1 slider, not dense. In any case, if your objective is to follow vocals, dont map triplets like 00:53:387 (3,4) - 00:56:178 (3,4) - because they completely throw off your vocal focus since they force players to follow the instrument track. Because both instrument + vocals occur on the white tick, it causes people to believe you mean to follow the instrument track instead with the next slider, so when you skip the white tick and extend the slider to the red, it sounds out of place.

01:04:986 (2) - sounds overmapped to me D:. Tbh your treatment of triplets is a bit pushing it in terms of density. I don't think it's necessary to inject so much 1/4 rhythm into the intro. i hear a note xD + its also for consistency since i have a double every 1/2 beat after the downbeat Still feels too dense for me, especially since you space the triplets too. But okay.

thanks ! ill try to ask a few other people on what they think about the rhythm since it might play well to me but who knows about others

Naotoshi wrote:

[general]
good choice of cover to switch to!

00:25:574 - ur timing lines have different custom sets!! unrankable!!
ur diffname sucks!! imo! pick a better one!! im generic !!
make ur od higher or nobody will play it for pp!! also cuz its way too low for the difficulty of the map atm!! imo!

!

[cursed]
ok all ur blankets in the intro are off by like 5 pixels and its kinda tilting me can u fix them all thx

00:10:912 (2,1) - this jump is huge =( ctrl g on 1 and then 2 after it is fine i ctrl+g the 2 as well since i think it flows better like that

00:20:101 (1) - nibba this is the ugliest slider ive ever seen i think its kinda cute ;ccc
this isnt even a wub map y u hav wub sliders???

00:25:922 (2) - seems like it would be better as 2 clicks for vocals
also the bell hitsounds are ridiculously loud xd
actually do your hitsound volumes wtf...

haha..

2017-06-01 19:08 assimb: btw
2017-06-01 19:09 assimb: 00:25:922 (2) -
2017-06-01 19:09 assimb: make that end on the red tick
2017-06-01 19:09 assimb: make the slider longer
2017-06-01 19:09 assimb: this slider ending on the white tick sounds off
2017-06-01 19:09 Shiratoi: but the vocal on the red tick
2017-06-01 19:09 Shiratoi: ???
2017-06-01 19:09 assimb: what red tick
2017-06-01 19:09 Shiratoi: 00:26:446 -
2017-06-01 19:10 assimb: yea
2017-06-01 19:10 assimb: make the slider end there
2017-06-01 19:10 assimb: 00:25:922 - to 00:26:446 -
2017-06-01 19:10 Shiratoi: waat
2017-06-01 19:10 Shiratoi: why
2017-06-01 19:11 Shiratoi: 00:26:446 - is the same sound as 00:25:922 -
2017-06-01 19:11 Shiratoi: so wouldnt they be emphasized the same way
2017-06-01 19:11 Shiratoi: (slider head)
2017-06-01 19:12 assimb: ok yeah but the thing is there are no sounds at all in between
2017-06-01 19:12 assimb: so you cant really do that
2017-06-01 19:12 Shiratoi: ??
2017-06-01 19:12 assimb: there are no sounds on 00:26:271 -
2017-06-01 19:13 assimb: making your slider end there would be weird as hell
2017-06-01 19:13 assimb: oh and one more thing
2017-06-01 19:13 Shiratoi: uh huh
2017-06-01 19:13 assimb: 00:25:922 - has the bell sound + vocal while 00:26:446 - has only the vocal
2017-06-01 19:13 assimb: booim
2017-06-01 19:13 assimb: rekt
2017-06-01 19:13 assimb: no arguments left

00:31:155 (1) - don't like how you have a vocal on the slider end here despite focusing on the vocals in other surrounding areas.

00:37:783 (4) - same here. seems kinda meh fixed this one though xD

yea so this entire section has this weird issue where its not really clear what you're following. cuz if you're following vocals, you arent doing too good a job of that due to the slider end thing, and if you're following the flute, theres stuff like 00:32:376 - this triple 00:38:655 - this 1/1 slider etc getting ignored.
switching layers, if that's what youre doing, is also suboptimal since it makes it look like you arent following anything properly xd
so basically just decide what to follow and follow that properly i think that the whole problem with the vocal rhythm is that if i put a 1/2 slider, the sliderend of the 1/2 slider isnt supporting any sound. so in my opinion, this is a better way to map it instead of having high note density like in monstrata's mod since haha guess we saw the outcome of that mistake

00:49:294 (1) - can u make this thing even yea i can

00:58:364 (3) - seems like the hitsounding isnt following the mapping here, or rather, you should put a click here too to match the clap hitsound. or just remove the clap

01:09:701 (4,5) - probably shouldnt be a jump cuz 01:10:050 (6) - is the one you want to emphasize cuz it has a vocal on it

01:11:271 (4) - this is also kinda meh cuz you highlight vocals with the 1/1 sliders but then you put one as unclickable. again, switching layers, kinda lame.

01:14:585 (2,3) - these notes have no emphasis on them, should be different spacing from 4-5 or something

01:17:550 (3,4,5) - this looks like garbage cuz the path of entry is not the same direction as the curve so just ctrl g h j it and itll b ok

01:18:510 - could b nice to follow this thingy i tried sth dunno if it turned out right

01:20:341 (3) - mute slider end?

01:25:922 (2) - u had jumps for all the other 2, why not here too? yaya but since its the last one, i want to change it up plus theres no space but thats not important

01:33:771 - should b clickable cuz its the same drum as 01:33:946 - imo i tried listening to it as mcuh as i could but it sounds like a quieter version of 01:34:294 (2) - to me

01:34:992 (4) - could b nice to make this clicks cuz of vocals

01:40:225 (2,1) - stack mod nazi modder

01:36:736 (1) - btw putting a 1/3 stream here would be really cute 1/3 streams make me kms cuz >>>cant aim

01:45:806 (3) - would b nice to space this out more cuz its a dfferent clap! i think its fine for aesthetics :^( also since its the same vocal as well

01:49:992 (3,4) - meh wwhat is 4 following... might as well just make 3 a slider to follow the vocals with the holds theres this little instrument if you listen closely xD

01:54:178 (3) - remove clap from repeat plz

01:57:667 - would b more interesting to follow the flute here than just 1/2 spam imo,,, i think im going deaf or sth since i can only hear the 1/2 notes ?_?????? i tried putting the red ticks at a higher spacing though sicne its more emphasized imo

02:01:068 - circle plz

02:03:422 (2) - slider feels weird af here cuz offbeat and there is something loud on the white tick

02:04:643 (1,2) - i think actually putting doubles here would b a lot easier to read tbh..

02:32:550 (1) - wot whyd u stop mapping after u already started with more dense stuff lol i tried adding a note here 02:33:074 - so maybe itll work?

02:40:922 - http://puu.sh/wba5s/1a843ea869.jpg nicer rhythm imo!! yea i tried it and it sounded kinda weird imo since the white tick is where the noise starts. sort of like 02:42:318 (1,2) -

02:52:085 (1,2,3) - this pattern is done like you followed the vocals but its 1/2 beat off of following the vocals lol

03:23:480 - this wasnt kiaied over at the other time it happened cuz the first one had that 1/3 flute spam

03:36:736 (1,2) - can u blnket this better lol

03:39:527 (1,2,3) - this visual spacing looks small af i thought it was kinda large o-o

03:43:713 (1) - again could b cool to follow the flute instead of 1/2 spam this way brings more momentum imo~

03:55:922 (4,1) - now would have been a nice time to just switch all the way to vocal focus and put a red tick 1/1 slider

04:04:991 (3,4) - slider cuz no vocal on 4? but following instruments + would ruin consistency with my double + note thing

04:11:532 (9,1) - this is the only time you did this thing until now. all other examples of a 1/4 jump were off of a sliderend so this one is pretty out of place imo.

05:06:387 - this gap is cute but seems a bit drastic. how about mapping these white beats too with circles? that way you get the density lowering effect but it isnt as contrasting to the section all the instruments end here and its just the vocals so it would seem kinda weird imo

05:17:811 - would b nice to put a note here on the clarinet thing

05:36:648 (5,1) - same issue,, this one is fine imo since its the last kiai and i want to make it emphasized more than usual

06:03:618 (1) - the fact that this isnt rotationally symmetrical tilts me i tried my best

06:11:640 - u could make this a slider so that ppl dont lose acc on it!

06:17:720 (1) - blanket this around the previous circle plz - _ - but the stacks i worked so hard for 06:15:881 (2,1) -

lmk when you respond and we can talk further!

A r M i N wrote:

what i noticed by playing

imo offset is pretty bad (for the 2nd red point at least) I found 25596 to be much better


Also 01:43:037 (2) - fix dat

no kd

Shiratoi wrote:

[general]
good choice of cover to switch to!

00:25:574 - ur timing lines have different custom sets!! unrankable!!
ur diffname sucks!! imo! pick a better one!! im generic !! ya but u could do something cute retarded like "The Malicious Goddess of Fate and the Blooming White Lily" !! ok that would actually be really funny plz do this
make ur od higher or nobody will play it for pp!! also cuz its way too low for the difficulty of the map atm!! imo!

!

[cursed]
ok all ur blankets in the intro are off by like 5 pixels and its kinda tilting me can u fix them all thx

00:10:912 (2,1) - this jump is huge =( ctrl g on 1 and then 2 after it is fine i ctrl+g the 2 as well since i think it flows better like that

00:20:101 (1) - nibba this is the ugliest slider ive ever seen i think its kinda cute ;ccc
this isnt even a wub map y u hav wub sliders???

00:25:922 (2) - seems like it would be better as 2 clicks for vocals
also the bell hitsounds are ridiculously loud xd
actually do your hitsound volumes wtf...

haha..

2017-06-01 19:08 assimb: btw
2017-06-01 19:09 assimb: 00:25:922 (2) -
2017-06-01 19:09 assimb: make that end on the red tick
2017-06-01 19:09 assimb: make the slider longer
2017-06-01 19:09 assimb: this slider ending on the white tick sounds off
2017-06-01 19:09 Shiratoi: but the vocal on the red tick
2017-06-01 19:09 Shiratoi: ???
2017-06-01 19:09 assimb: what red tick
2017-06-01 19:09 Shiratoi: 00:26:446 -
2017-06-01 19:10 assimb: yea
2017-06-01 19:10 assimb: make the slider end there
2017-06-01 19:10 assimb: 00:25:922 - to 00:26:446 -
2017-06-01 19:10 Shiratoi: waat
2017-06-01 19:10 Shiratoi: why
2017-06-01 19:11 Shiratoi: 00:26:446 - is the same sound as 00:25:922 -
2017-06-01 19:11 Shiratoi: so wouldnt they be emphasized the same way
2017-06-01 19:11 Shiratoi: (slider head)
2017-06-01 19:12 assimb: ok yeah but the thing is there are no sounds at all in between
2017-06-01 19:12 assimb: so you cant really do that
2017-06-01 19:12 Shiratoi: ??
2017-06-01 19:12 assimb: there are no sounds on 00:26:271 -
2017-06-01 19:13 assimb: making your slider end there would be weird as hell
2017-06-01 19:13 assimb: oh and one more thing
2017-06-01 19:13 Shiratoi: uh huh
2017-06-01 19:13 assimb: 00:25:922 - has the bell sound + vocal while 00:26:446 - has only the vocal
2017-06-01 19:13 assimb: booim
2017-06-01 19:13 assimb: rekt
2017-06-01 19:13 assimb: no arguments left

meh i think 1/1 slider + circle sounds fine, you have a tick there anyway lol.. also please lower the hs volume in the intro -_-
00:31:155 (1) - don't like how you have a vocal on the slider end here despite focusing on the vocals in other surrounding areas.
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8276026 something like this rhythm, then you get a clickable vocal...
00:37:783 (4) - same here. seems kinda meh fixed this one though xD

yea so this entire section has this weird issue where its not really clear what you're following. cuz if you're following vocals, you arent doing too good a job of that due to the slider end thing, and if you're following the flute, theres stuff like 00:32:376 - this triple 00:38:655 - this 1/1 slider etc getting ignored.
switching layers, if that's what youre doing, is also suboptimal since it makes it look like you arent following anything properly xd
so basically just decide what to follow and follow that properly i think that the whole problem with the vocal rhythm is that if i put a 1/2 slider, the sliderend of the 1/2 slider isnt supporting any sound. so in my opinion, this is a better way to map it instead of having high note density like in monstrata's mod since haha guess we saw the outcome of that mistake 00:36:758 - would be a good time to just switch over to the flute then. the thing is, you didnt really address how the rhythm is pretty clustered in this part. stuff like 00:39:549 (1,2,3,1) - seems like vocal focus, 00:42:689 (2,3,4,5,1) - is on flute, etc. just follow one instrument the entire way. if you want an example i could map out an example rhythm focusing on one or the other, or we could just talk about it in game. but you probably know how to do that anyway lol

00:49:294 (1) - can u make this thing even yea i can

00:58:364 (3) - seems like the hitsounding isnt following the mapping here, or rather, you should put a click here too to match the clap hitsound. or just remove the clap

01:09:701 (4,5) - probably shouldnt be a jump cuz 01:10:050 (6) - is the one you want to emphasize cuz it has a vocal on it

01:11:271 (4) - this is also kinda meh cuz you highlight vocals with the 1/1 sliders but then you put one as unclickable. again, switching layers, kinda lame.

01:14:585 (2,3) - these notes have no emphasis on them, should be different spacing from 4-5 or something

01:17:550 (3,4,5) - this looks like garbage cuz the path of entry is not the same direction as the curve so just ctrl g h j it and itll b ok this still looks like garbage for the same reason xd

01:18:510 - could b nice to follow this thingy i tried sth dunno if it turned out right

01:20:341 (3) - mute slider end? mute them all wtf theyre all the same sound -_-

01:25:922 (2) - u had jumps for all the other 2, why not here too? yaya but since its the last one, i want to change it up plus theres no space but thats not important then just start the pattern a bit further up and left ?_? there isnt really a reason to break it just cuz its the last one...

01:33:771 - should b clickable cuz its the same drum as 01:33:946 - imo i tried listening to it as mcuh as i could but it sounds like a quieter version of 01:34:294 (2) - to me its like the same deep drum at 01:33:096 - 01:33:270 - owo

01:34:992 (4) - could b nice to make this clicks cuz of vocals

01:40:225 (2,1) - stack mod nazi modder

01:36:736 (1) - btw putting a 1/3 stream here would be really cute 1/3 streams make me kms cuz >>>cant aim wot does aim hav 2 do with a stream Lol.

01:45:806 (3) - would b nice to space this out more cuz its a dfferent clap! i think its fine for aesthetics :^( also since its the same vocal as well

01:49:992 (3,4) - meh wwhat is 4 following... might as well just make 3 a slider to follow the vocals with the holds theres this little instrument if you listen closely xD ya thats tru but you're following vocals in this section so mapping tiny little instruments that are inaudible as jumps is kinda weird,,

01:54:178 (3) - remove clap from repeat plz

01:57:667 - would b more interesting to follow the flute here than just 1/2 spam imo,,, i think im going deaf or sth since i can only hear the 1/2 notes ?_?????? i tried putting the red ticks at a higher spacing though sicne its more emphasized imo http://puu.sh/wcfUr/8fa95be169.jpg its the same flute rhythm thats been repeating since the start of the map tho..

02:01:068 - circle plz

02:03:422 (2) - slider feels weird af here cuz offbeat and there is something loud on the white tick

02:04:643 (1,2) - i think actually putting doubles here would b a lot easier to read tbh..

02:05:450 (4) - when did this quad get here... this is kinda tilt too Tbh.

02:32:550 (1) - wot whyd u stop mapping after u already started with more dense stuff lol i tried adding a note here 02:33:074 - so maybe itll work? y not just this? then u get clicks on everything cool!!! https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8276091

02:40:922 - http://puu.sh/wba5s/1a843ea869.jpg nicer rhythm imo!! yea i tried it and it sounded kinda weird imo since the white tick is where the noise starts. sort of like 02:42:318 (1,2) - ya but this followed the flute nicer =( also 02:42:340 (1,2) - sounds kinda shitty as sliders cuz 02:42:863 - has a higher / more important note so ur better off putting the slider start there instead..

02:52:085 (1,2,3) - this pattern is done like you followed the vocals but its 1/2 beat off of following the vocals lol ok now its weird cuz the rest of the patterns r also done like not following the vocals like at 02:46:526 - tbh i probably should have mentioned this earlier instead of one specific spot woops

03:00:479 (1) - tbh u shd add in those stupid fort cheering hitsound here to match the cheering thing in the song

03:23:480 - this wasnt kiaied over at the other time it happened cuz the first one had that 1/3 flute spam

03:36:736 (1,2) - can u blnket this better lol

03:39:527 (1,2,3) - this visual spacing looks small af i thought it was kinda large o-o ya but 2 and 3 are different spacing from 1 and thats like tilt city

03:43:713 (1) - again could b cool to follow the flute instead of 1/2 spam this way brings more momentum imo~ no shit it brings more momentum, it's a bunch of 1/2 jump spam, but it doesnt follow anything in the song... so following the flute is a lot better lol

03:49:316 (1,2) - i forgot to ask this last time but why is there a random jump here lol theres nothing on the red tick

03:55:922 (4,1) - now would have been a nice time to just switch all the way to vocal focus and put a red tick 1/1 slider

04:04:991 (3,4) - slider cuz no vocal on 4? but following instruments + would ruin consistency with my double + note thing

04:11:532 (9,1) - this is the only time you did this thing until now. all other examples of a 1/4 jump were off of a sliderend so this one is pretty out of place imo.

04:20:014 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - flute thing plz

05:06:387 - this gap is cute but seems a bit drastic. how about mapping these white beats too with circles? that way you get the density lowering effect but it isnt as contrasting to the section all the instruments end here and its just the vocals so it would seem kinda weird imo

05:17:811 - would b nice to put a note here on the clarinet thing 05:17:571 (2,3) - ok now this jump is fucking huge lo

05:36:648 (5,1) - same issue,, this one is fine imo since its the last kiai and i want to make it emphasized more than usual then u can make like a bigger spacing stream or smething, a random 1/4 jump that never repeats or occurs anywhere else is really weird..

06:03:618 (1) - the fact that this isnt rotationally symmetrical tilts me i tried my best

06:11:640 - u could make this a slider so that ppl dont lose acc on it!

06:17:720 (1) - blanket this around the previous circle plz - _ - but the stacks i worked so hard for 06:15:881 (2,1) - ya but that pattern is like yelling at u to blanket it =(

lmk when you respond and we can talk further! i feel like we might need to talk more after this..!

Naotoshi wrote:

[general]

ur diffname sucks!! imo! pick a better one!! im generic !! ya but u could do something cute retarded like "The Malicious Goddess of Fate and the Blooming White Lily" !! ok that would actually be really funny plz do this yes LOL

[cursed]

yea so this entire section has this weird issue where its not really clear what you're following. cuz if you're following vocals, you arent doing too good a job of that due to the slider end thing, and if you're following the flute, theres stuff like 00:32:376 - this triple 00:38:655 - this 1/1 slider etc getting ignored.
switching layers, if that's what youre doing, is also suboptimal since it makes it look like you arent following anything properly xd
so basically just decide what to follow and follow that properly i think that the whole problem with the vocal rhythm is that if i put a 1/2 slider, the sliderend of the 1/2 slider isnt supporting any sound. so in my opinion, this is a better way to map it instead of having high note density like in monstrata's mod since haha guess we saw the outcome of that mistake 00:36:758 - would be a good time to just switch over to the flute then. the thing is, you didnt really address how the rhythm is pretty clustered in this part. stuff like 00:39:549 (1,2,3,1) - seems like vocal focus, 00:42:689 (2,3,4,5,1) - is on flute, etc. just follow one instrument the entire way. if you want an example i could map out an example rhythm focusing on one or the other, or we could just talk about it in game. but you probably know how to do that anyway lol nah.. i still think its fine because 00:42:340 - 00:42:340 - is where the flute actually starts to go over the vocals. even if i follow vocals, its just an extended sound which wouldnt provide much playability imo + i think it provides a nice transition when the vocals finally fade out here 00:45:130 -

01:17:550 (3,4,5) - this looks like garbage cuz the path of entry is not the same direction as the curve so just ctrl g h j it and itll b ok this still looks like garbage for the same reason xd okay now i have no idea what youre talking about

01:25:922 (2) - u had jumps for all the other 2, why not here too? yaya but since its the last one, i want to change it up plus theres no space but thats not important then just start the pattern a bit further up and left ?_? there isnt really a reason to break it just cuz its the last one... i dunno i kind of like this better cause if i continued the pattern, the slider would feel really out of place imo and since theres a 1/1 pause in between, the previous circle already disappears so readability isnt an issue

01:36:736 (1) - btw putting a 1/3 stream here would be really cute 1/3 streams make me kms cuz >>>cant aim wot does aim hav 2 do with a stream Lol. i feel like this is just personal preference ;c its the same sound so mapped same way ?_?

01:49:992 (3,4) - meh wwhat is 4 following... might as well just make 3 a slider to follow the vocals with the holds theres this little instrument if you listen closely xD ya thats tru but you're following vocals in this section so mapping tiny little instruments that are inaudible as jumps is kinda weird,, nuh since the kiai is just repeating the same rhythm, i dont want to ruin it with this note

01:57:667 - would b more interesting to follow the flute here than just 1/2 spam imo,,, i think im going deaf or sth since i can only hear the 1/2 notes ?_?????? i tried putting the red ticks at a higher spacing though sicne its more emphasized imo http://puu.sh/wcfUr/8fa95be169.jpg its the same flute rhythm thats been repeating since the start of the map tho.. still really sounds like 1/2 imo.. especially here 01:58:037 - and 01:58:735 -

02:52:085 (1,2,3) - this pattern is done like you followed the vocals but its 1/2 beat off of following the vocals lol ok now its weird cuz the rest of the patterns r also done like not following the vocals like at 02:46:526 - tbh i probably should have mentioned this earlier instead of one specific spot woops

03:00:479 (1) - tbh u shd add in those stupid fort cheering hitsound here to match the cheering thing in the song ??_??

03:39:527 (1,2,3) - this visual spacing looks small af i thought it was kinda large o-o ya but 2 and 3 are different spacing from 1 and thats like tilt city thats not what DS is telling me

03:43:713 (1) - again could b cool to follow the flute instead of 1/2 spam this way brings more momentum imo~ no shit it brings more momentum, it's a bunch of 1/2 jump spam, but it doesnt follow anything in the song... so following the flute is a lot better lol same thing as last time i guess

04:20:014 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - flute thing plz ~

05:36:648 (5,1) - same issue,, this one is fine imo since its the last kiai and i want to make it emphasized more than usual then u can make like a bigger spacing stream or smething, a random 1/4 jump that never repeats or occurs anywhere else is really weird.. but its actually not that hard imo.. compared to other 1/4 notes, spacing here is kinda eh

lmk when you respond and we can talk further! i feel like we might need to talk more after this..! same..!

rickyrox3 wrote:

AGH AIMod so many unsnapped objects

lasagna

Naotoshi wrote:

adjusted some flute shit cuz yuikonnu's was different

Bonsai wrote:

hides

Mir wrote:

Other issues:
- 00:10:708 - Shouldn't start the 1/8 at 00:10:438 - cuz here there's just 2 1/4 notes until 00:10:708 - idk man im pretty sure the 1/8 are in the right spot unless im going deaf
- 02:06:452 - From here there are a lot of jumps.. but the song is only doing 1/1 drums and the only constant 1/2 are very quiet hi-hats, so in my opinion so many jumps here (in fact a whole section of purely jumps) is pushing it a bit for intensity. What you could do instead is use a lot more sliders at higher spacing in order to represent this buildup more appropriately. i think its fine.. the 1/2 drum noise isnt really quiet either. the section here in general is pretty loud (more emphasized than the vocal kiai imo) so i think the rising spacing provides good intensity for a map that has roughly the same spacing in the other kiais

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  00:08:248 (3) - uhh, try to shape this slider better | https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8612292
  00:27:914 (2) - lo l ^
  00:29:658 (1) - why am I so gay for slider shapes? | that's just an alternative, the way you mapped it is fine but uhhh https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8612309
  00:31:228 (5) - NC, there's a new section
  00:34:019 (1) - you know ehh
  00:38:728 (2) - you can stack it better to 00:38:030 (3) -
  00:45:530 (3) - CTRL+G? The way you mapped it flows a bit bad :v
  01:17:274 (1,2,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,6) - this pattern looks weird as fuck, I can't really explain it though. Maybe you could remap it with a few kicksliders?
  01:42:042 (2) - Stack it better to 01:40:995 (1) -
  01:55:647 (3) - ^
  02:00:356 (7,8,1) - There's almost no sound for a triplet here, you should map a simply stacked triplet, it doesn't make sense this way
  02:44:484 (1) - Either remove this NC or add one in 01:20:763 (5) -
  03:00:530 (1) - l o l why this hitsound?
  03:13:088 (1) - how about changing it with this shape? | https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8612360
  03:22:158 (5) - Do a complete jump, this slider here doesn't fit, the sound is the same of 03:21:460 (1,2,3,4) -
  03:22:507 (6,7) - and maybe increase the spacing between these circles
  03:23:553 (1) - yuiko♥ my sweet angel♥
  03:23:553 (1,1,1) - silence the sliderends
  03:25:647 (1) - ^
  03:27:042 (1) - ^
  03:31:228 (1) - ^ | not gonna mention them anymore, but silence every sliders like this one
  03:34:716 (3,4,5,6,7) - how about using some kicksliders? streams doesn't really fit here, imo
  03:49:019 (1) - what's the point of putting a NC here? remove it :v
  03:49:367 (1,2) - there's no sound for 2 circles, you should use a slider
  04:00:530 (1) - to 04:11:693 (1) - nice overmaps
  04:12:391 (3) - uhh, this overlap isn't that cute, try to re-arrange the pattern without making 04:11:693 (1,3) - overlap
  04:16:577 (4) - how about using 2 sliders connected with a circle? It would fit much better here | http://i.imgur.com/IGQouNN.png
  04:34:368 (2) - you're not following the vocal properly, what's the point of a 1/1 slider here?
  05:01:403 (3,4) - ugh, why did you put that circle?
  05:05:937 (4,1) - a slider would fit much better, I don't also understand why you didn't map the section after this one
  05:08:205 (5,6,7) - a bit too spaced tbh :v
  05:24:252 (1) - s i l e n c e
  05:32:799 (2,3,4) - There's almost no sound, what's the point of this spacing :v the alternation doesn't fit the song very well also
  05:31:053 (8,1) - a kickslider or a triplet between these two objects would be cool
  05:36:810 (1) - HAAAAsilence
  06:01:751 (8) - a kickslider would fit well, and if you put it don't make it overlap with 06:01:401 (6) -
  06:14:712 (1) - silence the sliderend
  06:15:922 (2) - ^
  oh and a preview point with yuiko would be sooo cute. xd.

Mark101 wrote:

fuck soraru

[The Malicious Goddess of Fate and the Blooming White lmao kys]

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  00:08:248 (3) - uhh, try to shape this slider better | https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8612292 okay mom
  00:27:914 (2) - lo l ^
  00:29:658 (1) - why am I so gay for slider shapes? | that's just an alternative, the way you mapped it is fine but uhhh https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8612309 naw
  00:31:228 (5) - NC, there's a new section
  00:34:019 (1) - you know ehh
  00:38:728 (2) - you can stack it better to 00:38:030 (3) -
  00:45:530 (3) - CTRL+G? The way you mapped it flows a bit bad :v i actually kind of like this flow xd
  01:17:274 (1,2,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,6) - this pattern looks weird as fuck, I can't really explain it though. Maybe you could remap it with a few kicksliders? well i tried to make it neater with less overlaps and such :v
  01:42:042 (2) - Stack it better to 01:40:995 (1) -
  01:55:647 (3) - ^
  02:00:356 (7,8,1) - There's almost no sound for a triplet here, you should map a simply stacked triplet, it doesn't make sense this way theres a sound + to make it the same length as 02:01:577 (5) - for aesthetics
  02:44:484 (1) - Either remove this NC or add one in 01:20:763 (5) -
  03:00:530 (1) - l o l why this hitsound? amazing
  03:13:088 (1) - how about changing it with this shape? | https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8612360
  03:22:158 (5) - Do a complete jump, this slider here doesn't fit, the sound is the same of 03:21:460 (1,2,3,4) - naw since its to add emphasis to 03:22:507 (6,7) -
  03:22:507 (6,7) - and maybe increase the spacing between these circles
  03:23:553 (1) - yuiko♥ my sweet angel♥ same ♥
  03:23:553 (1,1,1) - silence the sliderends
  03:25:647 (1) - ^
  03:27:042 (1) - ^
  03:31:228 (1) - ^ | not gonna mention them anymore, but silence every sliders like this one
  03:34:716 (3,4,5,6,7) - how about using some kicksliders? streams doesn't really fit here, imo i think its nice :v
  03:49:019 (1) - what's the point of putting a NC here? remove it :v so its easier to read cause it looks like 1/2 for a non kiai section
  03:49:367 (1,2) - there's no sound for 2 circles, you should use a slider
  04:00:530 (1) - to 04:11:693 (1) - nice overmaps thanks
  04:12:391 (3) - uhh, this overlap isn't that cute, try to re-arrange the pattern without making 04:11:693 (1,3) - overlap i think its fine minor problem
  04:16:577 (4) - how about using 2 sliders connected with a circle? It would fit much better here | http://i.imgur.com/IGQouNN.png mm ive been mapping the offbeats like this and i dont want to ruin the consistency
  04:34:368 (2) - you're not following the vocal properly, what's the point of a 1/1 slider here? i think its following the vocals fine since the vocals arent very emphasized for each beat theyre just kind of together ?_? if you get what im saying
  05:01:403 (3,4) - ugh, why did you put that circle? cuz theres a sound
  05:05:937 (4,1) - a slider would fit much better, I don't also understand why you didn't map the section after this one nah the instruments stop after this point so i think notes are more appropriate
  05:08:205 (5,6,7) - a bit too spaced tbh :v but its basically been the same xD
  05:24:252 (1) - s i l e n c e
  05:32:799 (2,3,4) - There's almost no sound, what's the point of this spacing :v the alternation doesn't fit the song very well also nah since i was following the piano pitch for these jumps so i think its kinda cool to match that twinkle sound too
  05:31:053 (8,1) - a kickslider or a triplet between these two objects would be cool
  05:36:810 (1) - HAAAAsilence
  06:01:751 (8) - a kickslider would fit well, and if you put it don't make it overlap with 06:01:401 (6) - but the sound isnt the piano D:
  06:14:712 (1) - silence the sliderend
  06:15:922 (2) - ^
  oh and a preview point with yuiko would be sooo cute. xd.

Good luck with ranking! Fuck, I'm never gonna rank Redo.