goodbye wrote:

add KiritanP (きりたんP是Doriko的P名

[KPY]

开头钢琴段我觉得既然你80%都跟了钢琴为什么有些地方又要滑掉?

00:03:445 (5) - 减掉一个折返
00:04:160 (6) - add a note
00:09:636 (2) - 改成1/2slider
00:12:017 (3,4) - 这两个都后移1/2
00:12:969 (1) - 改成1/2slider或者折返或者slider+note make it on purpose
00:16:779 (2) - 减掉折返 换成两个note或者1个都随便你
00:18:683 (7) - ^ 這個加了折返感覺會自然一點
00:52:255 (4) - 还是补个note比较好不然很空

00:59:398 (x) - add note 不行啦..這裏人聲off掉了,打起來會對不上vocal.
00:59:874 (x) - ^Same.
01:00:350 (x) - ^..
01:00:826 (x) - ^..
01:01:064 (x) - 往后移1/2
01:02:017 (x)- add note

01:10:826 (4) - 增加1/2长度 并且如果是我这里会用0.5x I'm follow the vocal here.
01:14:636 (7) - ^^
01:15:350 (2) - a明显在红线 我觉得没道理这样带过去 改成1/2slider+note吧
01:21:064 (4) - 整个都是跟随vocal走可是为什么要在这里反而带掉?跟前面的方法类似就不多说了
01:27:255 (1,2,3,4) - 这边加的很违和 想加2连这样的也不是这么加的 改成这样

SPOILER

01:33:207 (8) - 结束的地方后移1/2 spin随着改
01:45:469 (9) - 后移1/4或者删掉 加在这里违和感
01:47:731 (4) - 这边开始的节奏是轻快 而钢琴是长重音 感觉整个反掉了 大概这样加比较贴

SPOILER

02:13:683 (8) - 增加1/2长度 同前面一样 這裏我跟vocal.
其他都跟前面一样 不多说了

02:24:993 (7,8,9) - 这边也是违和感 7带掉了红线的重音和wo的起音 8带掉了钢琴的音 Fixed in another way.
02:42:255 (2,3,4,5,6) - 同前面一样 我搞不懂你这么下的原因

02:58:440 (1) - i是轻的ma是重且长音 为什么要带掉

wmfchris wrote:

[general]
Tag vocaloid? :3 It can't be searched via "vocaloid" Fixed
close countdown in [Dis] Fixed
Why naming the diff [KPY] in your own map? xD Because disoy use dis as his diff's name,so I use kpy to comsistent.

[timing]
02:53 - You moved the beat 4 ms backward with a red line... try to move all notes before 02:53 4 ms backward and delete that red timing line?
More uncertainty about the later red line, try to find some timing expert for it? woll be checked by other one.

[KPY]
00:20:584 (1) - remove finish here...? Fixed
00:33:917 (1) - + finish...? Seem bad if I add it.
00:48:914 (4) - [Nazi] up a bit Fixed
00:50:584 (5,6,7) - a (o~o)oo (slider-triplet) rhythm fits with (2,3) better than triplet-slider? X.It's fine now.
00:52:965 (3) - it should be louder than usual? ._. Fixed
01:06:298 (4) - finish as you have done in next next combo? Fixed
01:37:727 (8) - +whistle also to fit the melody X,a clap is more appropriate
01:41:536 (8) - ^ ^
01:48:917 (7,9) - +whistle? Fixed
02:00:584 (6,7) - why only 3 ticks for (6) and 5 ticks for (7) 0.0 X.add a new combo may better.
02:21:298 (4) - remove finish, put a whistle there? Fixed
02:46:156 (4,5,6) - try triplet-slider? and (7,8,9) still feels a bit odd to me orz X.It's fine.

wcx19911123 wrote:

[Relaxing]
00:36:779 (3) - voice down ? Fixed
01:33:921 (1,1) - too far Fixed

1. Creator's Words
   10年後の私へ 今は幸せでしょか？
   ↓
   10年後の私へ 今は幸せでしょうか？
   
2. Tags
   Add "KiritanP" to Dis's one.

1. 00:14:874 (2) - How about changing it like this?
   
2. 02:24:874 (4) - ^

1. 00:15:826 (4,5) - I know you put them following chorus. However I think that players can't hear the chorus while playing so I recommend you to put it following piano.
   
2. 00:52:017 (5) - Add whistle at start of slider?
3. 00:59:636 (1) - Remove whistle?

1. 00:05:112 (x) - Add a note.
2. 01:21:064 (4) - How about this pattern to follow vocal?
   
3. 01:35:945 (x) - Add a note and stack (3) and it with 01:36:064 (4)?
   
4. 01:51:540 (6) - New combo?
5. 03:19:714 (6) - lol variable BPM? It's hard to hit but it's playable imo

Suzully wrote:

[General]

1. Creator's Words
   10年後の私へ 今は幸せでしょか？
   ↓
   10年後の私へ 今は幸せでしょうか？ Fixed
   
2. Tags
   Add "KiritanP" to Dis's one. Fixed

[Relaxing]

1. 00:14:874 (2) - How about changing it like this?
   Fixed
2. 02:24:874 (4) - ^ X.not here sorry.

[KPY]

1. 00:05:112 (x) - Add a note. Fixed
2. 01:21:064 (4) - How about this pattern to follow vocal? X.I think it's okey here.
   [attachment=2:26ffc]screenshot133.jpg[/attachment:26ffc]
3. 01:35:945 (x) - Add a note and stack (3) and it with 01:36:064 (4)? X,orz..no.
   [attachment=1:26ffc]screenshot134.jpg[/attachment:26ffc]
4. 01:51:540 (6) - New combo? Fixed
5. 03:19:714 (6) - lol variable BPM? It's hard to hit but it's playable imo I have to do that due to offset changed T_T

spboxer3 wrote:

[Relaxing]
00:08:683 (2) - 有點跑掉0.0? 往右上各1個grid試試看(size 4) X,一直都沒開grid排..

[KPY]
AR=7比較剛好 Fixed.
00:03:445 (5) - 要斜的還是直的0.0? 因為只差一格grid(size 4) X,和直的沒差.
00:18:683 (6) - lol奇怪圖形阿...其實我是覺得有點不適合啦 換了.
01:00:112 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 這邊做成正方形會更漂亮 X,1.2.3.5是正方形阿..
02:40:112 (4,5,6) - 這個沒有做的很好看 問題應該是出在(5)上 其實也沒差啊..
03:21:694 - 可以放些note到03:23:645 -再放些轉盤...結尾改到03:25:523 -這樣比較比較合適[IMO] X,因為Timing不確定,所以不map是比較好..

xykbear wrote:

皮肤文件缺少hit300g.png和spinner-metre.png
spinner-circle.png没有对准中心。我调了半天就是差那半个像素。最好重新做下吧～

xykbear wrote:

[KPY]
00:22:493 (1) - remove finish here ? Fixed
00:33:921 (1) - finish X.
00:38:683 (5) - 把finish改到开头的圈上 X.
01:02:017 (6) - remove finish Fixed
01:40:588 (4) - finish at start X
//结尾那堆红线略感莫名其妙 你移走他看看,timing會有差.

SPOILER

kanpakyin wrote:

01:20:826 (3,4) - switch these two notes around so combo 4 starts at 01:20:826 and combo 3 starts at 01:21:540? X,totally not agree.

SPOILER

winber1 wrote:

Oh yeah, I think you should skin the reverse arrow. The one I'm using is almost invisible, especially during kiai time. Obviously it depends on the skin, but you never know what skin someone will be using :/

if not, you can always just add the template ones lol. it'll look kinda bad tho i guess. Leave to karenying,however player can removed the skin by themselves,so I thin k it's not a problem.

KPY

00:51:540 (2) - sounds better if you end this slider at 00:51:779 imo X.
01:20:826 (3,4) - switch these two notes around so combo 4 starts at 01:20:826 and combo 3 starts at 01:21:540? X,totally not agree.
01:42:493 (1,2,3) - perhaps follow the piano? X,nah.
03:13:678 (1) - move combo 1 up so it isn't stacked on top of combo 2? X,It's follow the lyric.

Relaxing

00:34:636 (1,2,3) - Combo two sounds really weird imo right now. Try something like this?:

SPOILER

[attachment=0:221d6]screenshot068.jpg[/attachment:221d6]

X.It quite good now i think.
00:55:826 (x) - sounds better if you add a note imo Fixed
01:17:255 (7) - idk if you should use this in the easiest diff. i guess it's ok. X,it's fine.
01:51:064 (5) - use normal hitsound with only finish? Finxed in another way~

• 
  spinner-circle.png中间那个黑圈位置不在最中心 稍微调一下
  三分多钟的歌加个Break Time吧

• 
  00:01:541 (1): 开头+Finish
  00:16:779 (4): New Combo
  00:48:207 (2): 开头+Clap
  01:15:826 (6): 这里+Whistle
  01:17:255 (7): 建议重复+1 然后把Finish移到最后
  02:14:874 (4): 这里的Whistle换成Finish
  02:22:493 (3): New Combo

• 
  00:31:064 (1): 这里感觉用Normal的Finish音效更好点
  01:42:255 (3): 这里+Whistle
  01:49:160 (2): 这里+Clap
  02:34:874 (2): ^
  02:06:302 (2): 其实这里降音反而感觉有点奇怪
  02:51:540 (3): 这里也不推荐降音

• 
  00:01:541 (1): 开头+Finish
  02:00:588 (1): 重复+1 后面的②重复减一往后拖1/4拍
  01:47:255 (2): 这里+Clap
  01:54:874 (6): 拖到⑧的位置
  02:07:017 (6): New Combo 后面的①去掉New Combo
  02:18:207 (1): 这里+Whistle
  02:25:350 (8): 这里+Clap
  03:13:678 (1): 还是最好不要与②重叠了

impossiblexu wrote:

[General]

• 
  spinner-circle.png中间那个黑圈位置不在最中心 稍微调一下Leave to karenying
  三分多钟的歌加个Break Time吧 Easy加了,KPY難度就算了..Dis他自己決定

[Relaxing]

• 
  00:01:541 (1): 开头+Finish Fixed
  00:16:779 (4): New Combo Fixed
  00:48:207 (2): 开头+Clap X
  01:15:826 (6): 这里+Whistle Fixed
  01:17:255 (7): 建议重复+1 然后把Finish移到最后 Fixed
  02:14:874 (4): 这里的Whistle换成Finish Fixed
  02:22:493 (3): New Combo Fixed

[KPY]

• 
  00:01:541 (1): 开头+Finish Fixed
  02:00:588 (1): 重复+1 后面的②重复减一往后拖1/4拍 X故意的..
  01:47:255 (2): 这里+Clap Fixed
  01:54:874 (6): 拖到⑧的位置 X,這樣跳會很怪..
  02:07:017 (6): New Combo 后面的①去掉New Combo Fixed
  02:18:207 (1): 这里+Whistle Fixed
  02:25:350 (8): 这里+Clap Fixed
  03:13:678 (1): 还是最好不要与②重叠了 Fixed

Astom wrote:

Hi~

[SB]
Try to make karenying take a look on his .osb file next time D:
[attachment=0:16df3]Wotamin - Letter song (kanpakyin).osb[/attachment:16df3]
Any problem with this file tell me please

[Skin]
-Actually use a white spinner background is a bad idea, and if you add the soft colour of your circles and kiai... well looks bad, is pretty hard of see at playing, some suggestions of circle colour
102,142,238
247,87,91
253,248,153
233,197,112 Fixed
-spinner-circle is not perfectly centered, is that on purpose (btw the center is 333x333). Already fixed.
-I suggest force default skin to fill missing elements.

[KPY]
-I wonder why there are so many jumps... most of them haven't support in the song. Most of the jump I was putting on accent point,they are fair enough for the most difficult diff.
-00:46:302 (8) - pretty bad shape. Fixed.

KanaRin wrote:

[Relaxing]

00:06:779 (4) - Hmm~ I guess the whistle should be here. Add a clap instead of.
00:07:255 (1) - Remove the whistle. Fixed
00:45:350 (5) - Huh.. Remove finish here? Fixed
01:10:112 (1) - Finish here? sounds better. X.
01:13:921 (4) - ^ Fixed
02:09:160 (5) - New combo? X
02:11:064 (1) - Remove New combo. X
02:12:969 (5) - New combo. X
02:15:350 (1) - Remove New combo. X
02:24:874 (2) - Don't suggest 1/2 here. I suggestion : http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/105283 X.

[Insane]

00:48:683 (1,2,3) - Don't jump here?... Just use slider / small spacing. X.It fit the music
00:52:493 (1,2,3) - ^ ^
01:06:302 (4) - New combo / Ctrl + H follow the spacing.Fixed
02:20:826 (2,3,4) - Jump is fine.. But make them easily ^
02:27:731 (6) - New combo? ^