[ L u k a s ] wrote:

Rhythm isn't good

MariahCarey wrote:

christmas is merry

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1. 00:10:495 (3,4) - This part has the same melody of the next section at 00:16:421 (3,4) - so I would make them the same since both section are initially following the same rhythm structure. Also, if I can give you a tip I would choose second section rhythm because it's more appropriated for the easiest diff of the mapset (1/2 slider with small breaks are kinda meh imo);
2. 00:41:791 (1) - Would add soft finish here instead than drum to emphasize the cymbals in the music (I guess this applies to the next diffs as well so I won't mention it again);
3. 00:44:754 (5) - I would add NC here and remove it from 00:46:235 (1) - instead, looks more logical. Apply this to 00:50:680 (5) - as well if you agree;
4. 01:21:791 (1) - This slider is too pushed upside and HP bar covers it, and it's very bad and ugly, try to replace it properly;

1. 00:28:272 (1) - Would flow better if directed on the right instead than left so it connects better the previous part to the upcoming slider: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9687711
2. 00:35:309 (5,6,1,2) - I think this is pretty confusing and kinda bothered me tbh and I explain you why: 00:35:124 (4,5,6) - the spacing between these can be kept even if I think it's a bit exagerated compared to the previous elements so I would just stack the (5) with 00:34:013 (1) - 's tail, but the problem is the fact that after the jump between 00:35:309 (5,6,1) - that are currently snapped 1/2 the following part 00:35:865 (1,2) - is snapped 1/1 but still have the same spacing of the previous 1/2. So, I highly suggest you to reduce the spacing between 00:35:309 (5,6,1) - so that the 1/2 snapping will have a different spacing (smaller) than the next 1/1 (that can be kept in this way but it will be bigger than the previous part as it should actually be);
3. 01:18:272 (1) - Too much repeats considering the previous one: remove two (so end it on the white tick) and add a circle on the new empty red tick (so 1/2 after the new tail snap);
4. Not a fun of so much random exagerated changes of spacing in the hard diff but well

1. 00:32:161 (2) - NC for consistency with 00:35:124 (1) - because of change of SV;
2. 01:18:087 (6) - NC because of flute sound? It would even avoid this only long combo of the whole map;
3. 01:29:847 (4,5) - I would make them more linear with the previous slider since they are actually slighly directed more on the left;
4. 01:31:976 (1,2) - (Personal taste) I would try something else here because I don't like this pattern/overlap to be honest xD Map has been so clean so far but this kinda bothered me a little :c;
5. 01:37:347 (3) - There should be addition: soft and clap on this slider's tail like you did for 01:31:421 (3) - ;

1. 00:18:828 (3) - Would add whislte on head to emphasize the vocal higher pitch (it makes the section look empty), same for 00:24:754 (3) -
2. 00:35:680 (4) - Place to 176|368 to follow the same logic you did for 00:34:754 (1,2) - ? (Placing circle on the same direction of slider's tail);
3. 00:40:186 (4,5,6) - Why is this 1/6? Just snap it 1/4 like the Insane diff please, looks more appropriated;
4. 00:54:013 (2,3,4,5) - I would avoid this since on the next section at 00:57:347 (2,3) - I would have expected the same pattern to be consistent, so just use normal spacing or the same rhythm of second part or 1/2 sliders :\
5. 00:58:828 (2,3,4,5) - What about making the pattern like this? Cursor movement is much more flowing than the current placement: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9687880 (up and down movement);
6. 01:22:902 (4) - I would overlap it with 01:21:791 (1) - 's tail instead, flow would be more way better;

Chewin wrote:

hello there I like this song

General

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Normal

1. 00:10:495 (3,4) - This part has the same melody of the next section at 00:16:421 (3,4) - so I would make them the same since both section are initially following the same rhythm structure. Also, if I can give you a tip I would choose second section rhythm because it's more appropriated for the easiest diff of the mapset (1/2 slider with small breaks are kinda meh imo);
   good idea
2. 00:41:791 (1) - Would add soft finish here instead than drum to emphasize the cymbals in the music (I guess this applies to the next diffs as well so I won't mention it again); good idea
3. 00:44:754 (5) - I would add NC here and remove it from 00:46:235 (1) - instead, looks more logical. Apply this to 00:50:680 (5) - as well if you agree; the nc's here follow the vocal phrasing and i think the interjection from violins/bells warrants an nc here (same for next ojne too)
4. 01:21:791 (1) - This slider is too pushed upside and HP bar covers it, and it's very bad and ugly, try to replace it properly; i think its fixed now

Winter Break

1. 00:18:828 (3) - Would add whislte on head to emphasize the vocal higher pitch (it makes the section look empty), same for 00:24:754 (3) - yes
2. 00:35:680 (4) - Place to 176|368 to follow the same logic you did for 00:34:754 (1,2) - ? (Placing circle on the same direction of slider's tail); wanted the change of direction here to further emphasise the bass kick/cymbal right after
3. 00:40:186 (4,5,6) - Why is this 1/6? Just snap it 1/4 like the Insane diff please, looks more appropriated; i think its 1/6 in the music? is it ok to simplify this here to 1/4? im not 100% sure
4. 00:54:013 (2,3,4,5) - I would avoid this since on the next section at 00:57:347 (2,3) - I would have expected the same pattern to be consistent, so just use normal spacing or the same rhythm of second part or 1/2 sliders :\
5. 00:58:828 (2,3,4,5) - What about making the pattern like this? Cursor movement is much more flowing than the current placement: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9687880 (up and down movement); cool idea, i didn't really think to make a similar flowing jump pattern
6. 01:22:902 (4) - I would overlap it with 01:21:791 (1) - 's tail instead, flow would be more way better; agre

1. 00:28:272 (1) - Would flow better if directed on the right instead than left so it connects better the previous part to the upcoming slider: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9687711 ok
2. 00:35:309 (5,6,1,2) - I think this is pretty confusing and kinda bothered me tbh and I explain you why: 00:35:124 (4,5,6) - the spacing between these can be kept even if I think it's a bit exagerated compared to the previous elements so I would just stack the (5) with 00:34:013 (1) - 's tail, but the problem is the fact that after the jump between 00:35:309 (5,6,1) - that are currently snapped 1/2 the following part 00:35:865 (1,2) - is snapped 1/1 but still have the same spacing of the previous 1/2. So, I highly suggest you to reduce the spacing between 00:35:309 (5,6,1) - so that the 1/2 snapping will have a different spacing (smaller) than the next 1/1 (that can be kept in this way but it will be bigger than the previous part as it should actually be); did a thing, i hope its good now
3. 01:18:272 (1) - Too much repeats considering the previous one: remove two (so end it on the white tick) and add a circle on the new empty red tick (so 1/2 after the new tail snap); the song supports this extended repeat and i think its readable enough tbh with the nc, but if not i think i can reuse the previous rhythm if you want
4. Not a fun of so much random exagerated changes of spacing in the hard diff but well

Chewin wrote:

@DavidEd yea I prefer you use the same rhythm at 01:18:272 (1) it's much more better imo!

could be confusing for some, so sure

Sinnoh wrote:

gratz~