Hi, you requested. Only cup-platter since that's what I stated in my rules.
I’ll continue with the other two diffs later on. Have to sleep.
Good Luck~
Platter:
- 00:13:947 (2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2) –etc. What bothered me here is that the only object that I see repeatedly for a long time is a ½ straight slider. More variety would have been nice even if the music is monotonous here. That doesn’t mean you should use the same slider over and over again. Perhaps try sliders with curves, circles and a few 1/1 sliders. Just anything that looks different.
- 00:16:420 - 00:17:738 - 00:19:057 – etc. Another thing that I want to point out is that you placed the slider’s end on a downbeat (big white tick) and that’s usually not a good idea since the rhythm isn’t being followed correctly then. What would be better is to place a circle here: 00:17:573 – and start the slider on the big white tick: 00:17:738 – I demonstrate in the pic below.
You’ll also have a bit more variety of objects then if you add the circles in. - Another thing that bothered me from 00:13:782 – to 00:22:683 – is that you used hyperdashes but the music don’t really support them. The music remains consistent in the beginning part so adding hyperdashes where there are no strong sounds that stand out , don’t support the music. Also, the hyperdashes feel random and for a Platter it’s better to have consistent hyperdashes and hyperdashes that is used with a strong sound since this diff is an introduction for hyperdashes. I suggest not using any hyperdashes in the beginning of the diff. (The place that I pointed out before)
- 00:34:881 (1) –You add the new combo here and that’s inconsistent with your previous NC’ing patterns. I actually support the NC here because I feel that’s the strongest beat and the NC should usually be on the downbeat (big white tick) but just make sure your combo’s are consistent, so either remove the NC here and add it here instead: 00:35:211 (2) – or add NC here: 00:24:332 (3) – and remove it here: 00:24:661 (1) – I like the latter option better tbh.
- 00:34:059 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1) –Hmm, since you also used this kind of pattern in Rain, I think it would be better to not make a stream but a different kind of pattern just to show that Platter isn’t similar to Rain.
Something like above. So basically follow the beat that can be heard clearly in the foreground and rather not follow the beat in the background. - The kiai bothered me the most because the way you chose to follow the rhythm is a bit uncomfortable. I’m struggling to find the structure and consistency. For example: 00:58:617 (2) – here I suggest placing the first circle since the vocal change happens here (on the big white tick) and not here: 00:58:453 – So perhaps you can try something like this instead:
Imo,the pattern above follows the music/rhythm better (not sure if you’ll agree) I think you will improve your rhythm if you try focusing on the big white tick more. - This pattern/rhythm can be improved too: 00:59:442 (1,2) – You’ll hear that there’s a strong kind of beat here: 00:59:936 – but it looks like you’re ignoring it. Starting a slider on that big tick or adding a circle would be better for rhythm. This happens a lot and not only in the kiai. This is also something that you usually start learning and getting used to as you map more.
- I also want to add that you should be careful about where you use your hyperdashes in this diff. At most places the music don’t really suggest a hyperdash but you still add one. Examples are: 00:57:299 (1,2) - 01:00:101 (3,4) - 01:04:716 (7,1) – etc. Places that are great for hyperdashes in a Platter is the downbeats (big white ticks) and that’s why it’s important to map them out correctly otherwise you won’t really be able to get nice places for hyperdashes. Examples are: 00:58:617 - 01:03:892 - 01:05:211 – etc. These places are great for hyperdashes.
Salad:
- 00:24:331 (9) –A new combo should be added here instead for consistency with 00:34:880 (1) – So add new combo here: 00:24:332 (9) – and remove new combo here: 00:24:661 (1) – This kind of combo’ing happens in other places as well, like: 00:29:606 (5) - 00:40:155 (5) – etc. Just make sure your combo’s remain consistent.
- 00:13:782 (1,2) - 00:15:101 (1,2) - 00:21:694 (1,2) – This anti-flow feels a bit uncomfortable, especially for beginners. I like this flow: 00:19:057 (1,2) - 00:20:376 (1,2) – I suggest doing the same with the other three. It’ll then also be consistent. The same goes to the similar patterns at the end of the diff.
- 00:53:342 (2) –The new combo should be here instead since the beat here is stronger and it’s also on the big white tick, so add NC here and remove NC here: 00:53:013 (1) –
- 00:54:661 (6) –Same as above. Add NC here and remove NC here: 00:54:991 (1) –
- 01:01:255 (1,2,3,4,1,2) –Doublecheck the spacings here. You may not have more than two consecutive dashes, so make sure that you make some of the spacings a bit smaller. Right now I’m struggling to catch all the patterns here without using the dash-button. This applies to the other similar cases too.
- 01:02:573 (1,2) –Also, you can make the spacing here a bit smaller. Right now it’s a bit big and the music isn’t really intense here so smaller spacing will fit better. It’s also inconsistent with 01:13:123 (1,2) – At 01:13:123 (1,2) – the spacing is smaller which is correct.
Cup:
- 00:45:760 (3) – The new combo should be here instead since the strong beat is here: 00:45:431 –and also for consistency. So add NC here and remove it here: 00:46:420 (1) –
Good Luck~