Neanmoins wrote:

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00:20:294 (1) - imo a 1/8 slider here fit the piano better than a 1/16 reverse slider Hmm, yea sure. Sounds better
00:40:285 - here is a tune change, so i think it deserves a note Maybe, but I tried adding note here before. It doesn't really work well with the obvious violin here 00:40:444 (1,2,3,1) -
01:38:745 - ^ (put it in a stream) I'm following the obvious triple sound at 01:38:509 (3,4,5) - and 01:38:824 (1) - . Doesn't feel right to connect them into a stream
04:40:723 - ^ Alright
01:06:917 - ^ (but this time it's a beat) Mentioned about ignoring this before, I guess is better to add a note here
03:20:305 (1) - this shape looks not quite well, try to make something like the img below:
Looks nicer than trying to blanket it LOL
03:20:612 - delete the red line This should be fine, I'm following the timing fron the ranked version. It might not affect anything in standard gameplay, but it will for other game modes
03:33:105 (2) - blanket It actually looks perfect to me, I changed the stack leniency instead
04:57:451 (3,4,1,2,3) - imo it's no need to follow those 1/8 and use the reverse sliders which are quite weird here, just keep your 1/4 stream for the piano
Yea, I think I should. Better than random breaking at 1/8 sliders >.>
quite nice bg!
gl

[ Pika ] wrote:

NM Queue~

00:06:805 (1,2,3) - might wanna make all of these separate combos because it's in 1/3 I think should be fine, NC spam doesn't feel right in a very slow and calm section
00:52:232 (2,3,4) - straight line OCD stuff (make these a straight line please) Sure, hopefuly is linear now
02:12:122 (1) - move this a little down and to the left for readability The stacks here should be fine
03:16:204 (2,3) - make (2) a curved slider that blankets (3) (it's a smooth note, doesnt really justify the angle slider) Sure
04:17:869 (2) - make this a curved slider (angle slider not really justified) For this should be fine as it is
04:22:738 (3) - stack this on top of 04:22:660 (2) - the sudden ds change can be a bit disorientating Remapped this section, the spacing isn't the problem, but the flow feels kinda weird
04:30:435 (2) - make this a curved slider (subjective) Made something similar
04:33:733 (1) - this is not symmetrical, the slider end is a little too long Suppose to be that way, making it symmetrical actually looks really weird for me
04:58:550 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4) - maybe make the ds from really big to tiny, it's a downwards glissando and all: one ridiculous ds makes it feel overmapped Yup, changed the spacing

mfw can't mod that much because there's already 3 pages of mods above me

Gokateigo wrote:

Hi from my queue o/
00:07:434 (1) - Move this slider to the position of this circle : 00:06:805 (1) - The reason why I didn't stack because 00:07:434 (1) - has rather loud piano which is not really similar to the previous (1) circle. Making it a little further emphasizes on the piano really well
00:10:591 (2) - Move this circle to the head of the following sliderhead like in the 2 previous patterns Maybe, but the current pattern should be fine as it is. Will consider though
03:35:618 to 3:50 : You should set the volume at 30-40% and increase it in this part like in the music Erm, 60% should be fine since it fits the intensity of the song. I'm not very good when comes to adjusting the volume perfectly following the music so I prefer it to have constant volume @@

Delis wrote:

m4m q thing

any source of long version for the title? I found https://diverse.direct/diverse-system/100sr-a013/ for the metadata that I assume you took the mp3 from it. Not really sure on this one, I took the metadata directly from the recently ranked version so it should be correct as it is

00:13:540 (3) - I would take a whistle on head for the piano but 00:13:226 (2) -, or idk if it's not. and 00:16:056 (4) - got no whistle even though the piano sound is much stronger, I prefer swapping the whistle between 00:15:741 (3) - and this. Kinda, reworked this whistle hitsound in the early parts
00:18:294 (2,3) - ^ ^
00:20:294 (1) - whistle? this definitely deserves the one imo lol this is everything I feel them out of place in slow part. ^
00:46:707 - you can consider reducing the volume by 10-20 here, whistles are loud in comparison with the music. I mean everything on 60% volume in this section could be considered. I think the current 60% is fine as it is. 10%-20% is too soft when the song obvious started became a little more exciting than before.
01:19:504 (1) - the kick sound on music should be 1/16, although 1/8 also works okay because it's the half of it. just a mention. Yea, but 1/16 kinda makes it a lot easier to break though. Keeping it simple 1/8 should be fine
01:31:677 (2,3) - this isn't good overmapping imo, I know you heard a tiny sound at the blue tick but if I had to say it's unnoticeable. one single 1/2 circle also works better towards the jump you made as well. Kinda, removed
01:41:729 (2,3) - same here. ^
02:30:342 (5) - without whistle sounds better to me, the melody and drums both stopped at 02:30:263 - and there's only strange small sound at the beat. you therefore don't really need to hitsounding it unless you got a reason. Yea, sounds good actually
03:00:656 (3) - I expected a whistle here for the drum. 03:01:284 (3) - 03:01:520 (6,7,8) - they also are good to be emphasized by whistle, as it's not really loud to be around.Yea, actually whistle does really sound good here. But 03:01:284 (3,7) - will be kinda forcing for me
03:13:064 (5) - finish for the obvious cymbal sound maybe.Sure why not
03:23:412 (1,2,3,1,2) - I thought it's something like: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7232252 lul. Overall pattern here seems really ugly, reworked it my own way. Nice suggestion though
03:34:362 - again, the volume setting makes hitsounds very loud in the part that the music is going quiet. decreasing volume by 10%? louder volume than the point I mentioned before would be allowed because the streams. I mentioned about this earlier. Should be alright
03:46:927 (1) - the finish should be on the head. Is already finish-ed though >.>
04:14:571 (5) - same as 02:30:342 (5) - Yea sure
04:20:383 (2) - it would look much better if the slider sharp was clearn, move the end point to make it even? Went back to the typical triangular slider instead yea
04:24:623 (1) - missing finish, I don't get if you actually did it on purpose, there seems so many of lack of finishes to me. Added finish-es in various part in the kiai, should be fine now
04:26:665 (1) - this isn't snapping on anything Kinda copied the rhythm from previous kiai without much of a thought. Fixed!
04:54:780 (4) - a nc is nice to make a jump looking more clearn with 04:53:524 (1) - Sure~

1. 00:15:112 (1,2,3,4) - based on previous patterns, i kind of expected the (1,2,3) to be equal spacing and the 3->4 jump to be a bit higher. kind of like 00:03:976 (1,2,3,1) - or 00:12:242 (1,2,1) - or 00:16:685 (1,2,3,1) -
2. 00:34:123 (1) - don't know how much you care, but this is nearly off screen on HR mod
3. 00:40:285 - no circle here for the violin? seems a bit odd seeing how you mapped the violins right after it. same suggestion at 03:27:950 - since you also skipped over the violin here
4. 01:22:168 (2) - forget a clap here by any chance?
5. 01:28:765 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - k this stream is really cool
6. 01:30:022 (1,1) - might look aesthetically nicer 01:30:022 (1) - was blanketing the slider end for 01:30:336 (1) -
7. 04:12:052 (1,2,3) - this was a bit confusing to read. it's hard to notice the (3) and its repeat when it's underneath all the stream notes
8. 04:34:984 (3,4) - the sharp vertical flow here is kind of unnatural to play imo. maybe try changing the direction of 04:34:827 (2,3) - to give better direction of flow?
   
   SPOILER

   just a rough idea, you can probably make the flow here much better by placing around a bit more
   
9. 04:40:952 (1,1,1,1,1,1) - this is also really cool

Doormat wrote:

hey, m4m, sorry it's kinda late lol had some irl stuff to take care of

[ONE DIMENSION]

1. 00:15:112 (1,2,3,4) - based on previous patterns, i kind of expected the (1,2,3) to be equal spacing and the 3->4 jump to be a bit higher. kind of like 00:03:976 (1,2,3,1) - or 00:12:242 (1,2,1) - or 00:16:685 (1,2,3,1) -
   Yea alright, made (1,2,3) equal spacing
2. 00:34:123 (1) - don't know how much you care, but this is nearly off screen on HR mod
   Hmm, lowered down a little. Hopefully it's fine now
3. 00:40:285 - no circle here for the violin? seems a bit odd seeing how you mapped the violins right after it. same suggestion at 03:27:950 - since you also skipped over the violin here
   I tried putting circle here before, seems like it doesn't work really well because the violin here it too soft compared to the obvious ones later. So putting a circle here really feels odd to play along with the strong violins
4. 01:22:168 (2) - forget a clap here by any chance?
   Seems like it >.>
5. 01:28:765 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - k this stream is really cool
   Thanks~
6. 01:30:022 (1,1) - might look aesthetically nicer 01:30:022 (1) - was blanketing the slider end for 01:30:336 (1) -
   Wanted to do that in the first place, not sure why it went off the grid lel
7. 04:12:052 (1,2,3) - this was a bit confusing to read. it's hard to notice the (3) and its repeat when it's underneath all the stream notes
   Kinda, I guess I've been stacking a little too much
8. 04:34:984 (3,4) - the sharp vertical flow here is kind of unnatural to play imo. maybe try changing the direction of 04:34:827 (2,3) - to give better direction of flow?
   
   SPOILER

   just a rough idea, you can probably make the flow here much better by placing around a bit more
   
   Yea, definitely flows better
9. 04:40:952 (1,1,1,1,1,1) - this is also really cool
   Thanks~

pretty cool, hope this helps!

1. what about changing S sample sections to S:C2 and add a silent sliderslide hitsound? sounds better at slow parts

1. 00:05:547 (2,4) - somehow i feel whistles should be added to 00:05:862 (3,5) - instead according to piano, similar to 00:08:378 (1,2) -
2. 00:30:715 - 30% volume sounds better on 5
3. 00:37:953 (1) - consider rearranging shape a bit to avoid the unnecessary overlap here
4. 00:40:285 - why not map into the violin sound? it sounds kinda soft but it's similar to 00:29:610 (2) - imo
5. 00:40:922 (1,2) - swap nc? or is it arranged this way intentionally according to the pattern
6. 00:52:243 (2,3,4) - i feel it is intended to be straight and even spacing here?
7. 01:06:661 (2,3) - mind turning into a slider? rhythm change is a bit hard to detect here..
8. 01:37:561 - 01:47:613 - finish?
9. 01:38:346 - add whistle here instead of 01:38:503 - ? fits the kickslider pattern and it's similar to 01:35:676 (1,2,3,4) - and some other spots
10. 01:40:074 (1,1) - sharp turn at slider feels bit forced to play and inconsistent with your other similar patterns, sth like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7375108 might flow better, tho it would need some adjustments on the latter objects
11. 01:48:399 (1) - should be 1/8 instead? not quite sure cuz theres sth wrong with my audio device
12. 01:48:556 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - imo the stream should be arranged in a way similar to 03:02:064 (2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - cuz music turns at 01:48:870 -
13. 02:00:493 - why only this one is normal sample while rest are all additions?
14. 02:20:912 (9,10) - what about turning them into a kickslider so it's more obvious that u r following 02:20:912 - 02:21:069 - the two sounds
15. 02:21:069 (1) - I'd suggest converting the shape a bit so that it looks visually better with 02:21:540 (4) - https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7375310, mayb personal preference tho
16. 04:05:141 (9,10,1,2,3,4) - ^
17. 02:21:697 (5,6) - should be less spaced like 02:05:676 (4,5) - etc. imo
18. 02:30:257 (4,5) - strong beats ends at 02:30:257 - so even if theres some minor sound at 02:30:336 (5) - a circle doesn't really fit in this case. consider turning 4,5 into a kickslider instead
19. 04:14:486 (4,5) - ^
20. 03:03:006 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - 03:03:634 (5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4) - <- i think streams should be divided this way instead cuz 03:03:634 - is same sound as 03:02:378 - and 03:03:006 -
21. 04:48:491 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4) - ^
22. 03:15:570 (1,2,3) - why in this section some of the slider tails are muted, like 03:20:299 (1) - 03:25:639 (1) - but not all? feels inconsistent
23. 04:26:581 (10,1,2) - dunno how other testplays turn out but this stream is too sharp to turn for me ;;
24. 04:42:209 (1) - 1/4 here
25. 04:57:209 (8,1) - no turns in stream?
26. 04:58:387 (7,5,6) - minor, making them same visual spacing as the stream would be nice
27. 04:59:801 - the ending sound isnt that quiet, 20% volume doesnt really fit

Garden wrote:

General

1. what about changing S sample sections to S:C2 and add a silent sliderslide hitsound? sounds better at slow parts
   Yea, does sound a lot better

ONE DIMENSION

1. 00:05:547 (2,4) - somehow i feel whistles should be added to 00:05:862 (3,5) - instead according to piano, similar to 00:08:378 (1,2) -
   Yea, followed the strong piano does sound better
2. 00:30:715 - 30% volume sounds better on 5
   Sure
3. 00:37:953 (1) - consider rearranging shape a bit to avoid the unnecessary overlap here
   Kinda, remade the slider
4. 00:40:285 - why not map into the violin sound? it sounds kinda soft but it's similar to 00:29:610 (2) - imo
   Stated before about this, this violin here is too soft compared to 00:40:444 (1,2,3,1) - . Doesn't really feel right to make this part as if the violin is as loud as 00:40:444 (1,2,3,1) - . Ignoring it seems to worked well for me
5. 00:40:922 (1,2) - swap nc? or is it arranged this way intentionally according to the pattern
   Yea, I kinda did this for the triangular pattern, similar to what I've done here 03:28:578 (1) -
6. 00:52:243 (2,3,4) - i feel it is intended to be straight and even spacing here?
   Seems a little of yea LOL. Hopefully is better liao
7. 01:06:661 (2,3) - mind turning into a slider? rhythm change is a bit hard to detect here..
   Yup, slider is definitely better here
8. 01:37:561 - 01:47:613 - finish?
   Sure
9. 01:38:346 - add whistle here instead of 01:38:503 - ? fits the kickslider pattern and it's similar to 01:35:676 (1,2,3,4) - and some other spots
   Sure, applied to rest of the section too. Hopefully is nice enough
10. 01:40:074 (1,1) - sharp turn at slider feels bit forced to play and inconsistent with your other similar patterns, sth like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7375108 might flow better, tho it would need some adjustments on the latter objects oo, nice catch. Yea, looks like this is the only one that's inconsistent >.>
11. 01:48:399 (1) - should be 1/8 instead? not quite sure cuz theres sth wrong with my audio device
    Not sure how it ended up at 1/6 actually LOL
12. 01:48:556 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - imo the stream should be arranged in a way similar to 03:02:064 (2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - cuz music turns at 01:48:870 -
    Alright, seems a lot nicer now
13. 02:00:493 - why only this one is normal sample while rest are all additions?
    Not sure either, missed this I guess
14. 02:20:912 (9,10) - what about turning them into a kickslider so it's more obvious that u r following 02:20:912 - 02:21:069 - the two sounds
    Seems to follow the piano a lot better yea
15. 02:21:069 (1) - I'd suggest converting the shape a bit so that it looks visually better with 02:21:540 (4) - https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7375310, mayb personal preference tho
    Your suggestion looks good
16. 04:05:141 (9,10,1,2,3,4) - ^
    ^
17. 02:21:697 (5,6) - should be less spaced like 02:05:676 (4,5) - etc. imo
    Really nice suggestion, thanks!
18. 02:30:257 (4,5) - strong beats ends at 02:30:257 - so even if theres some minor sound at 02:30:336 (5) - a circle doesn't really fit in this case. consider turning 4,5 into a kickslider instead
    Always thought this was alright since it wasn't that obvious. 1/4 slider does seem to fit nicely actually
19. 04:14:486 (4,5) - ^
    ^
20. 03:03:006 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - 03:03:634 (5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4) - <- i think streams should be divided this way instead cuz 03:03:634 - is same sound as 03:02:378 - and 03:03:006 -
    yea, I remapped the entire streams here
21. 04:48:491 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4) - ^
    ^
22. 03:15:570 (1,2,3) - why in this section some of the slider tails are muted, like 03:20:299 (1) - 03:25:639 (1) - but not all? feels inconsistent
    Wasn't aware of this, fixed the volume~
23. 04:26:581 (10,1,2) - dunno how other testplays turn out but this stream is too sharp to turn for me ;;
    Hmm, from past testplays I've seen this part seems rather fine though
24. 04:42:209 (1) - 1/4 here
    Sure
25. 04:57:209 (8,1) - no turns in stream?
    I think this one should be fine as it is >.>
26. 04:58:387 (7,5,6) - minor, making them same visual spacing as the stream would be nice
    Moved a bit to avoid overlaps
27. 04:59:801 - the ending sound isnt that quiet, 20% volume doesnt really fit
    Increase to 50%

get those things confirmed and call me

Kencho wrote:

Sorry man, it seems still very difficult for me, I can't judge this map at all.

Garden wrote:

1

Linada wrote:

aaa hype :3

Albatross wrote:

I am fucking hyped for that I love the song and the beatmap is pretty good.
Oh nicee, didn't really expect anyone to mod this map randomly >.> Thanks~
Few things (It's just my opinion):
00:29:443 (1,2,1) - Maybe difficult to read for the first times playing I also needed my time to read that perfectly to go down for the slider.
The overlap works perfectly fine as it is though, seen quite a lot of testplays, this part shouldn't be much of a problem

00:35:702 (2,1,2,1,2) - Also difficult to read (doesn't mean it's bad, it's still great to play)
Similar to what I've mentioned

01:37:443 (7) - You snap many sliders after 1/4 streams in 1/8 (also doesn't mean it's bad), be careful that it will not be too confusing
If you're talking about the 1/8 slider, it should play perfectly fine as it fits the 1/8 part of the song. I left a small 1/8 gap making sure the player doesn't break this part very easily

01:53:425 (1,2,1,2) - Not easy to read, but smooth following (clockwise).
Purposely didn't stack the duplets so that it would be easy to read though

01:55:938 (1,2,3,4) - Another double's
Similar stuff

01:58:294 (1,2,1,2,3) - Looks like an placing error (the circle after the slider)
This is fairly intentional. Since there's sound at 01:58:530 (2) - but is not as significant as the 01:58:608 (1,2,3) - , therefore the spacing of 01:58:530 (2,1) - makes sure that the (2) note is really different compared to others

02:09:289 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - That's good, but look what will be better (normal streams or slider streams right now)
This is fine, tons of streamy maps also uses 1/8 slider stream. 1/4 seems very weak in emphasize the strong intensive piano here, and holding down 1/8 repeat slider feels dull and weak.

02:16:435 (7,1) - 02:18:948 (4,1) - Hard following
Not really a huge problem, is not that hard to follow

02:21:854 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - Stepped stream
Similar to ^

02:29:315 (4,1) - Hard followup
^

03:04:655 (4,1) - Hard followup
^

03:53:518 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - Slider stream
Similar to what I've mentioned easier

04:26:581 (10,1) - Space stream follows after the normal stream, hard followup
This is fine, the space stream really helps in emphasizing the intense part of the song

04:40:952 (1,1,1,1,1,1) - Looks good, but you can also make that more epic like bigger sliders (I hope that's understandable)
Maybe, but wanna keep this simple as it is though


This is a great map! Your timing is unbelievable and your positioning is very well!
All I wrote should not be a critic, just some tips or "hints". Be careful about the follow up from the spaced streams with the sharp angels.

I really hope this will be ranked sometimes! I like the song and the map!

Pentori wrote:

hi!

consider using hp 6? its a pretty streamy map so u have plenty of hp gain, and its 6.8 stars

Pentori wrote:

hi!

consider using hp 6? its a pretty streamy map so u have plenty of hp gain, and its 6.8 stars
As explained above

[General]
some whistles at the start don't really feel like they're taking into account the songs melody. whistles such as 00:03:032 (2) - 00:04:290 (2) - 00:09:950 (1) - feel like they're placed just to have whistles on white ticks. i feel like it'd be better to give feedback on the most prominent sounds only, so i dont think the whistles are necessary. others include 00:13:226 (2) - 00:14:483 (1) - 00:15:741 (3) - 00:16:999 (2) - 00:18:294 (2) - 00:19:628 (2) - though you can do what works for you.

Yea, does sound nicer without forcing whistle on white ticks here

and if im not mistaken, isn't stuff like 01:11:017 - 01:13:530 - etc. missing a clap in every kiai?

It was suppose to have claps on 01:10:859 - but since it's covered by extended slider so I leave it aside. I simplified the hitsounding scheme for most of the part in this map, following simple rule like having claps on every two white ticks. I tried follow closely with claps on snares, but it sounds rather off and inconsistent as almost throughout the maps I've been using claps on two white ticks.

02:15:571 - 03:59:801 - i didnt really like how you randomly started introducing claps here >< this is still a build up section, so having the claps kinda ruined it
I think the introduction of claps fits nicer to show that this part becomes more intensive and stream heavy compare to the softer part from 02:10:231 (1) - 02:14:472 (2) -

[ONE DIMENSION]
00:29:443 - how come the hitsound volume jumps around so much here? it makes 00:30:400 - sound really loud compared to 00:31:016 . you should probably just stick to one volume
Not sure why either, made them consistent 30% volume
00:40:444 - ^ also just seems to get really quiet
^
01:08:975 (1,2) - rhythm seems quite awkward cause 01:09:367 (2) - doesn't actually exist. the melody starts from 01:09:446 - so it doesnt make much sense to prioritise 01:09:367 (2) - over 01:09:289 . could probably try a rhythm where 01:09:289 - is a clickable kickslider or something
Yup, made 01:09:289 - clikable
01:14:629 (2,3,4) - should probably reduce the spacing between 01:14:786 (3,4) - for proper emphasis
Reduced the spacing but kept the spacing 01:14:629 (2,3,4) - similar
01:15:414 (1,2,1,2,3) - the emphasis just seems so weird imo, it sounds like 01:15:571 (2,1,2) - is grouped together and 01:16:043 (3) - is accented in the music yet this is mapped to give priority to 01:15:571 (2) - instead. also the 1/4 on 01:16:200 (1,2,3,4,5) - kinda comes out of no where
Reworked this section
01:17:928 (7) - 01:18:556 (3) - 01:19:341 (9) - there are so many sounds covered by this pattern that barely receive any recognition. stuff like 01:18:006 (8) - 01:19:341 (9) - is just stuck in the midsts of a stream, perhaps using kick slider jumps could give them nice emphasis. and the way that 01:18:242 (1,2,3) - is designed/comboed makes 01:18:556 (3) - seem like it belongs to 01:18:242 (1,2) - yet these are very different :c
I guess the stream is fine since 01:17:928 - 01:19:341 (9) - doesn't really have prominent sound like 01:18:242 (1,2,3) - that needs 1/4 slider to emphasize it. As for second point, I made 01:18:242 (1,2,3) - equal spacing
01:25:938 (3) - clap should be on 01:26:095 (4) . listen closesly to the snares
I made this point about the claps in the statement above. Keeping the simple hitsound scheme which is claps at every two white ticks. If I were to follow the snares at 01:26:095 - , it will sound really off

Will continue replying to the mods in a moment when I got time

01:27:037 (2,3,4) - with patterns like 01:25:781 (2,3,4) - you made 4 stand out a lot, yet in this pattern the sound is the loudest but doesn't really get any emphasis at all. why not make this a slider extending from 01:27:352 - to 01:27:587 - ? the sound at 01:27:509 (1) - is relatively weak and can be skipped
Fixed, but made 01:27:352 (4) - 1/2 slider instead of 3/4
01:29:079 (1) - 01:29:708 (1) - dont think there are claps here
Yea, removed the claps
01:29:943 (4,1) - curve could look nicer with the shape of the stream
Hopefully is better now
01:30:022 (1,1) - idk dont u find the spacing here too small to have a proper effect? 01:40:074 (1,1) - seems like a much better alternative
Adjust the spacing a little, but it should be fine as it is
01:31:121 (5) - clap?
01:33:477 (4,1) - clap should be on 1
01:35:990 (3,4) - clap on 4. yea gonna stop pointing these out, see if u can double check hitsounds
Stated before regarding the clap hitsound. Wanted to keep the hitsound scheme simple, claps every 2 white ticks. Following the snares sounds really odd to me

01:50:441 (1,2) - would be nice to do something different here, since theres no sound on 01:50:755 - compared to the previous ones
Alright

01:59:236 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - maybe a ctrl g'ed version of this would be more appropriate. after all, the pitch is lowering not rising
Alright

02:00:493 (1,1) - similar to points raised earlier, i reckon 02:00:493 (1) - could do with more spacing to stress it further and yea there isn't really anything on 02:00:807 (1) - so covering it with a slider end would express how the music momentarily stops
Good point, fixed!

02:05:205 (1,2,3,4,5) - the fact that u previously had slider streams for the piano 02:03:320 (1,2,3,4) - makes 02:05:205 (1,2,3,4,5) - way too overemphasised. same for 02:06:462 (1,2,3)
Not sure why suddenly I changed 02:03:320 - to 1/4. Converted them to 1/4 streams. Keeping the 02:05:205 (1,2,3) - following the 1/2 beat here

02:05:676 (4,5) - also it'd be nice to differentiate this with 02:06:933 (4,5) - since with the latter one has the piano supporting it
Both doesn't seem like it has clear piano though

02:07:718 (1,2,3) - 3 has piano but 1 and 2 dont. so i dont see the need for all of them to be kicksliders
The 3rd 1/4 slider is following the loud 1/2 beat. Prefer keeping the pattern a little consistent with the previous instead of following the piano

02:19:655 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - every 3rd note is emphasised here 02:19:891 (4) - 02:20:126 (3) - yet this is mapped like an ordinary stream in groups of 4. maybe you could reconsider the patterning/hitsounds
Nice one, fixed!

02:23:346 - pretty strong piano here, this would play better as a quintuplet
Sure

02:25:938 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - think u could do a better job at mapping the change in piano here, this sounds nothing like 02:25:310 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) . the things to highlight here would be 02:25:938 - 02:26:095 - 02:26:409 .
Hopefully is better now >>

02:36:618 - well, since this is really similar to the first kiai, the same points apply
Changed to quintuplet stream

03:00:336 (3) - could do a better job at emphasising this
Current one should be fine, emphasizing on the 3 1/2 beats

03:05:362 (1,2) - what calls for this to be a kick + circle when the others are 1/2 sliders? would make more sense to represent each equally imo
Not sure why I did this either. Simplify back to 1/2 slider

03:08:032 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - im not really sure where these 1/4s are coming from. its pretty much the same as whats represented by 03:07:090 (3)
Simplified this section

03:24:349 (1) - should end on red tick? sounds is much more dominant there
Yea, sounds better

03:41:895 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - piano sounds like 1/3 here
Hmm, alright fixed

04:03:884 - ye same as what was mentioned previously for this section
Fixed

04:23:361 (1) - the sound this is clicked on is really weak, and the slider end is much more dominant. think u could do a better job at representing this
Should be better now

04:24:617 - other points mentioned about the kiai previously apply here

04:40:952 (1,1,1,1,1,1) - all the sounds are identical here, so having a finish only on 04:40:952 (1) - and a clap on 04:41:581 (1) - felt quite strange. why not use a whistle + finish for all of these?
Whistle does sound nice, but finish is quite noisy tho

04:42:209 (1,1) - clap is on 04:42:523 - not 04:42:209 . also 04:42:209 (1) - could do with some whistles on the reverses for the 1/4 sounds
Sounds a lot nicer yea

going to pop the bubble for now, i feel some things could be improved and or discussed further generally regarding emphasis :3

1. 00:40:285 - Seems like a major skipped rhythmic beat here.
2. 00:47:649 (1) - Really should not have a whistle
3. 00:52:989 (1,2,3) - You can't just use the background thump rhythm here and ignore it 00:50:947 - here, 00:50:947 - here, etc. should really stick to one or the other. The violin is good. Stick to the violin.
4. 00:55:188 (1,2,3,4,5) - idk what shape this is but i get ur starting to transfer to the thumps but this shape is just fucking lopsided and nonsensical, it's not really a pattern
5. 00:56:131 (1,2,3,4) - To fit with the other times you have this violin buildup it should be 1,2,1,2, and be a bit more back-and-forth rather than zigzaggy upwards.
6. 00:57:702 (1,2,1,2,3) - now the thumps are really, really faint again and you've got this 1,2,1,2 pattern that doesnt really fit the thumps to begin with
7. 01:00:214 (1,2,3,4,5) - i dont get this pattern but uh sure whatever
8. 01:06:161 (1,2) - this is just so faint and so irrelevant it really shouldn't be mapped but whatever MY STYLE
9. 01:09:289 (2,3) - these two notes kind of ruin the stream entirely by turning a 6-note cascade into an 8-note super generic boring everyman stream. Stick a 1/4 slider here if you really want to extend that tone?
10. Let's just skip over how you're turning one of the most beautiful offbeat synth cascades into a 1/2 click fest for a moment.
11. 01:16:043 (3,4) - this rhythm is really fucked up, it should really really be a 1/2 slider for 3. Halcyon is all about offbeat rhythm consistency. You were doing okay before, but this just doesn't fit with the rhythm.

1. 01:18:242 (1,2,3) - You do a good job of breaking up the stream to emphasize the tones here. But you completely skip over 01:19:341 (9) - . You could have a 1/4 slider instead of 9, and then a pattern of 6 notes here. It fits way better than a random 1/8 tap.
2. 01:36:304 (1,2,1,2,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1) - Just taking a moment here to say that I really like this pattern! It fits really well. I'm not all gloom and doom.
3. 01:38:111 - Could probably fit a triple in here to make the rhythm more intense and fitting with the buildup.
4. 01:38:660 (5) - This should be a 1/8 repeat to be consistent with your representation of this sound, but honestly i feel like 1/4 sliders just plain work better
   If you put a 1/8 repeat ^ there, you should totally put a 1/4 replacing 01:38:818 (1,2) - , as 01:38:975 (3) - is where the 1/4 stream really begins.
5. 01:39:210 (2,4) - Again, these kind of just feel like "filler streams" that don't really fit the musical rhythm. You both overuse and underutilize 1/4 sliders across your entire map.
6. 01:46:357 (1,2,1,2) - This pattern worked far better when the 2s were "Backwards". Maybe reverse them to fit the tone like you did before?
7. 01:49:498 (5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4) - This should be patterened and new comboed to be an 8-note pattern, not the tail end of an 8 and a 1234. That's simply how the music is structured.
8. 01:58:530 (2,1,2,3) - The 2 completely ruins the beauty of the triple the music and your map has. Really should just stick to a 3/4 slider for 1.
9. 01:59:236 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - I don't know why you don't do cascades like this more often. It's good, it's clean, it fits the music, and it's "challenging".
10. 02:14:629 (1,2,1,2) - missing finishes if you want to map the background 3/4 bounce
11. 02:18:634 (4,1) - Normally you don't swap directions between 4 and 1 like this, usually you do it between 1 and 2. This really feels more like an error than something done "for variation".
12. 02:19:655 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - I like this idea of emphasizing the 3//4 bounce finishes in the background with 1/4 sliders, but to really be accurate you need to have 1,2 be a 1/4 slider as well.
13. That said, I actually fucking love how you did that entire stream section here before the second chorus, it's VERY well done and I love how you've accurately noticed the 123 falls and avoided having just generic 12345678 streams the entire way. I LIKE this. Good job. I just wish you did it for the smaller, shorter stream sections e_e
14. 02:26:880 (7) - can probably newcombo
15. 02:37:718 (3,4) - Ties in with 01:16:043 (3,4) - . Like, I don't like how you've mapped the choruses so i won't repeat myself here. Mapper style and all that; whatever. I'll just skip to other stuff so i won't repeat myself. (It's got copies itself anyway)
16. 03:02:064 (2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - see streams like this are great times to use those interesting cascades like you used at 01:59:236 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - , btw 5 should also be new comboed and uhhh yeah this is 5 sets of 4 lol
17. 03:18:728 (2,3,4,5) - 1,2,1,2 new combo to be consistent with intro
18. 03:37:497 (2) - This... actually ends earlier. It's kind of weird. It should end at 03:37:759 - . Technically a wrongly snapped note?
19. 03:46:293 (1,2) - Your inconsistency in stream breaks and 1/4 sliders really ruins most of your streams. These make no sense here and ruin the emphasis on 03:46:607 (3,4,5) - , among other things.
20. 03:59:094 (2,2) - missing finishes like before
21. 04:03:884 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - See 2:19
    
22. 04:15:821 - No mappy this makey me super sad

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00:26:600 (1,2) - Man, and I get shit for MY blankets.
Never been that Nazi about blankets

[Commentary]

1. 00:40:285 - Seems like a major skipped rhythmic beat here.
   The violin here isn't as clear as the ones at 00:40:444 (1,2,3,1) - . Experimented before placing a circle here, doesn't seem to play well with the clear violin
   
2. 00:47:649 (1) - Really should not have a whistle
   Right, accidental I guess
   
3. 00:52:989 (1,2,3) - You can't just use the background thump rhythm here and ignore it 00:50:947 - here, 00:50:947 - here, etc. should really stick to one or the other. The violin is good. Stick to the violin.
   Yea, following the violin does sound a lot nicer
   
4. 00:55:188 (1,2,3,4,5) - idk what shape this is but i get ur starting to transfer to the thumps but this shape is just fucking lopsided and nonsensical, it's not really a pattern
   I guess I got a little lazy figuring out how to map this part. Should be fine now
   
5. 00:56:131 (1,2,3,4) - To fit with the other times you have this violin buildup it should be 1,2,1,2, and be a bit more back-and-forth rather than zigzaggy upwards.
   Yup, sure
   
6. 00:57:702 (1,2,1,2,3) - now the thumps are really, really faint again and you've got this 1,2,1,2 pattern that doesnt really fit the thumps to begin with
   Following the thumps seem pretty fine here. Made the pattern more consistent here
   
7. 01:00:214 (1,2,3,4,5) - i dont get this pattern but uh sure whatever
8. 01:06:161 (1,2) - this is just so faint and so irrelevant it really shouldn't be mapped but whatever MY STYLE
   I think following the faint thumps here should be fine as I started following it from 01:04:507 (1) - . Didn't really like putting a spinner or long slider here matching the violin
   
9. 01:09:289 (2,3) - these two notes kind of ruin the stream entirely by turning a 6-note cascade into an 8-note super generic boring everyman stream. Stick a 1/4 slider here if you really want to extend that tone?
   Stacked the 01:09:289 (2,3) - on the 6-note stream instead. 1/4 slider seems rather weak in emphasizing the 1/4 beat here
   
10. Let's just skip over how you're turning one of the most beautiful offbeat synth cascades into a 1/2 click fest for a moment.
11. 01:16:043 (3,4) - this rhythm is really fucked up, it should really really be a 1/2 slider for 3. Halcyon is all about offbeat rhythm consistency. You were doing okay before, but this just doesn't fit with the rhythm.

Always thought the rhythm here is okay, but your suggestion does sound a lot nicer
Okay, little break here. I want the mapper, and anyone who's bothering to read this, to take a moment.

Listen to Halcyon. Think about it. When you imagine "Halcyon", what is the FIRST rhythm that pops into your head?

It's 01:19:969 (1,2,3) - . It's 01:09:917 (1,2,3) - . Why are they different? I can understand the second, it's kind of missing the focus and purpose of that synth burst, but the first is completely random and is both inconsistent and sets up the wrong rhythm in the player's mind, since for the rest of the map, the map uses three 1/4 kick sliders (which is questionable to me to begin with, but it's at least consistent).
Initially I thought of starting the chorus with more simplistic rhythm then only introduce the three 1/4 sliders in the later section. I guess this isn't really necessary

Okay, back to nitpicking.

1. 01:18:242 (1,2,3) - You do a good job of breaking up the stream to emphasize the tones here. But you completely skip over 01:19:341 (9) - . You could have a 1/4 slider instead of 9, and then a pattern of 6 notes here. It fits way better than a random 1/8 tap.
   Does sound better. Wanted to map closely following the 1/8 but it can be safely ignored
   
2. 01:36:304 (1,2,1,2,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1) - Just taking a moment here to say that I really like this pattern! It fits really well. I'm not all gloom and doom.
   
3. 01:38:111 - Could probably fit a triple in here to make the rhythm more intense and fitting with the buildup.
   Sure
   
4. 01:38:660 (5) - This should be a 1/8 repeat to be consistent with your representation of this sound, but honestly i feel like 1/4 sliders just plain work better
   If you put a 1/8 repeat ^ there, you should totally put a 1/4 replacing 01:38:818 (1,2) - , as 01:38:975 (3) - is where the 1/4 stream really begins.
   1/8 does fit really well here
   
5. 01:39:210 (2,4) - Again, these kind of just feel like "filler streams" that don't really fit the musical rhythm. You both overuse and underutilize 1/4 sliders across your entire map.
   Always wanted to keep the intensity going by having longer 1/4 stream than 1/4 sliders. The sliders do fit nicely here
   
6. 01:46:357 (1,2,1,2) - This pattern worked far better when the 2s were "Backwards". Maybe reverse them to fit the tone like you did before?
   Sure
   
7. 01:49:498 (5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4) - This should be patterened and new comboed to be an 8-note pattern, not the tail end of an 8 and a 1234. That's simply how the music is structured.
   Kept similar pattern but split the stream with two 1234
   
8. 01:58:530 (2,1,2,3) - The 2 completely ruins the beauty of the triple the music and your map has. Really should just stick to a 3/4 slider for 1.
   Sure. At first didn't really like having two consecutive 3/4 sliders at somewhat intense part of the song. Works here
   
9. 01:59:236 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - I don't know why you don't do cascades like this more often. It's good, it's clean, it fits the music, and it's "challenging".
10. 02:14:629 (1,2,1,2) - missing finishes if you want to map the background 3/4 bounce
    Current one is fine. Rather noisy here having three finishes at three white ticks
    
11. 02:18:634 (4,1) - Normally you don't swap directions between 4 and 1 like this, usually you do it between 1 and 2. This really feels more like an error than something done "for variation".
    Nice catch here
    
12. 02:19:655 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - I like this idea of emphasizing the 3//4 bounce finishes in the background with 1/4 sliders, but to really be accurate you need to have 1,2 be a 1/4 slider as well.
    Yea, the 1/4 slider at beginning does sound a lot nicer
    
13. That said, I actually fucking love how you did that entire stream section here before the second chorus, it's VERY well done and I love how you've accurately noticed the 123 falls and avoided having just generic 12345678 streams the entire way. I LIKE this. Good job. I just wish you did it for the smaller, shorter stream sections e_e
    E_E
    
14. 02:26:880 (7) - can probably newcombo
    Sure
    
15. 02:37:718 (3,4) - Ties in with 01:16:043 (3,4) - . Like, I don't like how you've mapped the choruses so i won't repeat myself here. Mapper style and all that; whatever. I'll just skip to other stuff so i won't repeat myself. (It's got copies itself anyway)
    Fixed from the above mod
    
16. 03:02:064 (2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - see streams like this are great times to use those interesting cascades like you used at 01:59:236
    (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - , btw 5 should also be new comboed and uhhh yeah this is 5 sets of 4 lol
    Hmm, sure. Hopefully the current version is better now
    
17. 03:18:728 (2,3,4,5) - 1,2,1,2 new combo to be consistent with intro
    Alright
    
18. 03:37:497 (2) - This... actually ends earlier. It's kind of weird. It should end at 03:37:759 - . Technically a wrongly snapped note?
    Yup it is
    
19. 03:46:293 (1,2) - Your inconsistency in stream breaks and 1/4 sliders really ruins most of your streams. These make no sense here and ruin the emphasis on 03:46:607 (3,4,5) - , among other things.
    Originally broke the stream so that it will transition better to the 03:46:607 (3,4,5) - following the beat. Now I look back at 03:44:251 (4) - , this isn't necessary at all
    
20. 03:59:094 (2,2) - missing finishes like before
    Mentioned above
    
21. 04:03:884 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - See 2:19
    Done
    
22. 04:15:821 - No mappy this makey me super sad
    :c Experimented lots of way to map this part. But it just doesn't transition nicely towards 04:16:764 (1) - . Current one seems like the best option to me

And the last chorus is mostly just the same weirdness and mistakes as before, i'm sure people who care far more about aesthetics than me can point them out.

So as a tl;dr you've got some really good bits but you don't ever expand them into the rest of the map and a lot of your major rhythm choice is arbitrary but can be painted under MY STYLE so im not even gonna bother objecting to them

some not-so-minor shit in there tho

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