Nikakis wrote:

Hard's difficulty :

00:02:313 (3,4) - : Those notes have weird placing,fix it

00:04:166 (3) - : This slider is too long,crop it just like the other sliders that you have placed

00:06:989 (3) - : This slider is kinda akward,make it smaller and add a reverse section just like this https://puu.sh/sWYdl/5a6c0382b8.png

00:07:519 (4) - : This note is akward too,add a simple slider

00:11:931 (1) - : Why New Combo?You have already placed NC on the previous note

00:16:431 (2,3) - Weird placing,Go to View --> Grid level --> and pick the 4th one,then place them exactly under the slider

00:18:813 (5) - : Place the right gray spot like this : https://puu.sh/sWYM6/3b0b0ef765.png

00:55:342 (1) - : Why NC,you have already placed on the previous note

00:56:578 (1) - : ^

01:05:225 (1) - : ^

01:24:813 (1) - : ^

01:27:460 (1) - : ^

01:27:107 (1,1,1) - : ...^


Insane's difficulty :

00:02:313 (2,3) - : Place them exactly under the slider

00:17:048 (3,4,5,6,7) - : Add two more notes on the stream line

00:21:989 (1) - : Why NC?

00:23:048 (7) - : Place this note somewhere else,not on the slider

00:30:284 (9) - : Add NC

00:32:225 (1) - : You have already placed NC on the previous note

00:42:460 (4) - : This note is out of rhythm,add a tiny reverse slider

00:51:813 (5) - : Add NC

00:53:578 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - : Weird form line,fix it

00:58:519 (5) - : This reverse slider does not have any rhythm,replace it with two simple notes

01:01:166 (4,1,2) - : The 4th note doesnt follow the vocal and the next slider is too long without any rhythm,so replace those notes with 3 sliders just like this https://puu.sh/sX0w6/bc8d7de3ea.png

01:04:342 (10) - : Add NC

01:10:342 (8,9,10) - : This triple doesnt have any rhythm at all.There's a drum sound after the triple so you have to replace the triple with a simple note,then add a stream line https://puu.sh/sX1b7/bb7e7f42e6.png

01:11:225 (14) - : Add NC

01:18:813 (1) - : No need to NC here..

Extra's difficulty :

00:18:813 (1) - : This slider is too long without any rhythm,make it smaller and add a reverse section https://puu.sh/sX1pG/336de5a242.png

00:20:931 (1) - : Why NC?

00:21:284 (1) - : ^

00:22:166 (1) - : ^

00:22:519 (1) - : ^

00:25:519 (6) - : There is noticeable drum sound here,make it smaller and add a reverse section https://puu.sh/sX1Ir/ddf1cee22a.png

00:30:284 (7) - : Add NC

00:31:695 (9) - : ^

00:34:166 (1) - : Why NC?

00:35:225 (1) - : ^

00:40:342 (1) - : ^

00:42:460 (4) - : There is noticeable drum sound here,replace this note with a tiny reverse slider https://puu.sh/sX28U/9f6372bf26.png

00:45:460 (1) - : Why NC?

00:53:578 (11) - : Add NC

00:55:519 (1) - : Why NC?

01:08:225 (1) - : ^

01:08:578 (1) - : ^

01:10:519 (2) - : Theres a drum sound here,replace this note with a small reverse slider https://puu.sh/sX2tm/222e9c95a0.png

01:14:931 (6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - : Fix the form of this stream line

01:21:813 (1) - : Why NC?

What i want to tell you about the combo changes,is that you should always start a new combo when the tempo of the song is changing.

~Good try overall

modding queue~

1. 00:04:166 (2) - avoid having sliders that are too curved like that, makes it seem very clustered.
2. 00:04:872 (3,4,5,6,7) - you could have a better patern here rather than just a square, try to avoid those (in all difficulties) unless somehow it really fits.
3. 00:06:284 (7,1) - this breaks the flow, the combo before this you have the squares moving clockwise and then you have to switch to counter-clockwise all of a sudden and it doesn't make sense, try to keep a steady flow and change direction of movement when it feels necessary (don't keep all the notes moving in 1 direction though, try to keep things interesting).
4. 00:09:460 (1) - don't put any complex looking sliders in easy difficulties, keep it simple.
5. 00:10:519 (2) - this is a little confusing since this note is so close to the previous slider so it kinda makes it seem like it's a 1/4? since you keep this difficulty in all 1/2 try to make your objects all equally spaced so everything is easy to read.
6. 00:11:578 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3) - take notice of your combos, this should be 1 full combo and there's no need for them to be seperated like that.
7. 00:12:636 (4,1) - again, flow breaker. i'm not gonna point out all of the flow breakers i see but just try to follow the notes with your mouse and see if it feels weird to have it change from clockwise to counter clockwise all of sudden, makes it slightly uncomfortable to play.
8. 00:14:048 (3,4) - these 2 notes are seperated by a 1/1, yet they are stacked, that is something you shouldnt do. it makes it a little confusing to play for noob players.
9. 00:20:578 (1) - keep in mind that you should NOT start sliders on a red tic, they should always be on a white tic unless necessary. something like this would work better, because it follows the beat rather than the vocals
10. 00:27:460 (3,4,5,6) - you could have a better usage of pattern here, the notes feel too close together.
11. 00:33:813 (1) - this difficulty shouldn't have any spinners honestly, you still have a good beat to place some notes on this perticular part.
12. 00:37:342 (1,2,3) - confusing rhythm choice, make sure you follow the beat of the song with a good usage of sliders here.
13. 00:47:225 (1) - map something here rather than a spinner.
14. 01:03:460 (1) - ^
15. 01:17:225 - never leave empty spaces like that, especially on the start of the kiai, map something there, and don't put overly long sliders either.

1. 00:01:519 (4,5,6) - this difficulty has a lot of back and fourth like that, try to avoid that for readability purposes.
2. 00:12:460 (4) - like the normal difficulty, avoid having too curved sliders like that.
3. 00:29:048 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5) - the notes seem very clustered together, make sure you have proper spacing, and also try to avoid having too many notes in a row like that, put a slider in there somewheres.
4. 00:34:607 (1) - avoid spinners
5. 00:37:342 (1,2) - doesn't make sense to have 2 of the same sliders like that when the rhythm doesn't call for it.
6. 00:42:989 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - confusing rhtythm choice.
7. 00:53:578 - after this part, it would be better to follow the beat rather than the vocals, because the short breaks in between makes it very boring and not interesting.

1. The star difficulty gap between your Normal and Hard difficulty is too wide. Consider adding an Advanced difficulty (About 2.6-2.7*)
2. I feel that the part you added kiai time shouldn't have kiai time. It isn't the climax of the song. Usually, you would put it at the chorus of the song which just so happens to be from 00:54:284 (3) - to 01:04:166 (1) - and from 01:05:578 (2) - to 01:15:460 (1) - . These two parts should have kiai time instead.
3. Your notes are all concentrated in the center of the play field. You have the entire playfield to utilise, so consider using it

1. In a Normal difficulty, the distance spacing between your notes must be proportional to the arrangement of the notes, that is, the notes must not be too far or too close to each other. Check the Distance Spacing in AIMod (Ctrl + Shift + A) as there are several disproportional spacings.
2. Also, in a Normal difficulty, Slider Velocity must be constant throughout the map. So it's is not advisable to have 2 different slider velocities. In any case, the shift from x0.6 multiplier to x1.0 multiplier is too much of a jump for a Normal. Sticking to one slider velocity multiplier is required.
3. Combos are also an issue in this difficulty. Usually, you would start a new combo on a big white tick. Take the first 12 objects in the difficulty as an example.
   
   You seem to start a new combo after the big white tick (which orange circle 6 falls on). However, if you listen to the song, the music "repeats" itself at the big white tick. This is a prime spot to start a new combo. So it would look like this:
   
   NCs would usually depict a new or repeated part of the music, and the best way to find this is to use the big white ticks to help you. Of course, you don't always start a new combo on a big white tick in every case. You will just have to listen to the music and start your combos in the right places.
4. Aesthetically, your map may require more polishing. I can't explain so much because it would take quite awhile. Main issues would be flow (object placement), wonky slider shapes, blanketing. Look at some mapping techniques in osu!wiki and just as said above, watch some of pishifat's instructional videos.
5. Overall, this map needs quite some work. You just have to keep trying! Don't give up

1. Oh yeah, might as well use CS 3.5 or 4.0 instead of 3.8
2. AR should be lower at around 6 imo
3. Not much else to say about this difficulty, take note of the Normal difficulty mod as most of the points there also apply here. (Except for the first two, where it is recommended, instead of required)

Skairul wrote:

Hard

1. Oh yeah, might as well use CS 3.5 or 4.0 instead of 3.8
2. AR should be lower at around 6 imo
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1. In the source, add the original name, in Japanese, this one: 七つの大罪

1. 00:06:636 (1,2,3) - This pattern is not good, there is no flow, I mean, look at the position of the end of your slider, and the position of the circle 3, it's completly at the opposite side, so the player will not have the capacity to play that, you see what I mean? Since it's a Normal diff, you have to do a simple mapping, because beginners can't play random things.
2. 00:38:048 (2,5) - Avoid those kind of overlap, it's not good for an Normal diff. In my opinion, you should rework some patterns of your map, because it's like it's always the same thing, it's turning in round. And it's not enjoyable, since you're a new mapper, that's okay, because you have to learn
3. 00:47:225 (4,5,6,7) - For exemple, here, you can really hear that there is a beat on the 1/2 tick. Try a beat like this: https://puu.sh/t7DoC/1f68b225db.png
   Since it's a normal diff, you can use simple 1/2 patterns, but obviously don't abuse of those things, because the BPM is quite high.
4. 00:49:342 (3) - Here, why you decided to put the slidertail near the 00:48:636 (1) - ? Why not putting it on the bottom of the grid, like this : https://puu.sh/t7Dsp/8005b90e3d.png?
5. I will do an overview of the map, because I've got some things to say to improve this map :3
   So! First of all, why you don't use curving sliders? On the Normal diff, you only used one, and it's not enough at all. Your map has to be beautiful, so it can give some enjoyment to the player, because a beatmap without art style isn't nice. I don't mean that you can't use straight sliders, but don't abuse of it. The feel I had when I played your map first was like I thought you placed notes randomly, I know that you didn't do that, but it's the feeling I had, so it means that there is an issue somewhere. Don't hesitate to play your beatmap once you have finished, then you can see where you had problems with it, or else.
   Now, let's talk about hitsounds. Why you don't use custom hitsounds? Without it, it ruins the originality of your own beatmap style, so please, add them, and if you don't know how to use it, or how to do hitsounds, you can go to some topics that can help, like this one: t/306177 (if you want to use basic hitsounds), or this one: https://osu.ppy.sh/wiki/Adding_custom_hitsounds (if you want to use custom hitsounds).
   Otherwise, that feels good to me, instead that this need rework, but don't give up, because I'm sure that you can do it, because the song is cool, and you seems to have some knowledge in this.