1. 00:03:044 (1) - I think that this slider should end 00:03:200
2. 00:16:189 (4) - NC.
3. 00:16:344 (1) - delete NC.
4. 00:25:159 (4) - Maybe? https://puu.sh/sqN2D.png
5. 00:26:241 (2,3) - blanket.
6. 00:27:478 (1) - reverse head slider.
7. 00:33:973 (4) - make so? https://puu.sh/sqNeF.png
8. 00:42:014 (1) - move here https://puu.sh/sqNhn.png
9. 00:46:962 (3,1) - blanket
10. 01:01:963 (2,3) - Maybe? https://puu.sh/sqNqV.png
11. 01:03:354 (1,2) - make parallel
12. 01:07:065 (2) - I think it would be better https://puu.sh/sqNy0.png
13. 01:09:849 (2,3) - Maybe? https://puu.sh/sqNSp.png
14. 01:10:931 (2) - I think it's too sharp jump https://puu.sh/sqO5o.png
15. 01:14:333 (6) - overlap?
16. 01:14:488 (1) - I think it would be better https://puu.sh/sqOdq.png
17. 01:18:818 (3) - ^ https://puu.sh/sqOiU.png
18. 01:21:911 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - ^ https://puu.sh/sqOqM.png
19. 01:41:551 (4,5,1) - Looks weird.
20. 01:45:417 (1,2,3,4) - I think it would be better https://puu.sh/sqOyW.png
21. 01:49:128 (1,2,3) - ^ https://puu.sh/sqODN.png
22. 01:50:210 (7,8,1) - ^ https://puu.sh/sqOGY.png
23. 01:51:757 (2) - ^ https://puu.sh/sqOM1.png
24. 01:52:994 (3,4,5) - ^ https://puu.sh/sqOQf.png
25. 01:53:767 (9) - ^ https://puu.sh/sqOVZ.png
26. 01:55:623 (2) - ^ https://puu.sh/sqP0p.png
27. 02:20:674 (3) - ^ https://puu.sh/sqP5c.png
28. 02:23:457 (2) - ^ https://puu.sh/sqP80.png
29. 02:25:931 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - overlap. NotLikeThis
30. 03:12:478 (5) - ^ https://puu.sh/sqPig.png
31. 03:54:540 (2,3,4,5,6) - ^ https://puu.sh/sqPqI.png
32. 03:58:715 (5,6,7,1) - ^ https://puu.sh/sqPuz.png

Olegase wrote:

Hello

[It's a promise]

1. 00:03:044 (1) - I think that this slider should end 00:03:200 - Dont saw that thanks xD
2. 00:16:189 (4) - NC. - Fixed
3. 00:16:344 (1) - delete NC. - Fixed
4. 00:25:159 (4) - Maybe? https://puu.sh/sqN2D.png - Fixed
5. 00:26:241 (2,3) - blanket. - Done
6. 00:27:478 (1) - reverse head slider.
7. 00:33:973 (4) - make so? https://puu.sh/sqNeF.png - Fixed
8. 00:42:014 (1) - move here https://puu.sh/sqNhn.png - Fixed
9. 00:46:962 (3,1) - blanket - Done
10. 01:01:963 (2,3) - Maybe? https://puu.sh/sqNqV.png - I agree!
11. 01:03:354 (1,2) - make parallel
12. 01:07:065 (2) - I think it would be better https://puu.sh/sqNy0.png - Fixed
13. 01:09:849 (2,3) - Maybe? https://puu.sh/sqNSp.png - Like the idea i take it
14. 01:10:931 (2) - I think it's too sharp jump https://puu.sh/sqO5o.png - Fixed
15. 01:14:333 (6) - overlap? - Fixed xD
16. 01:14:488 (1) - I think it would be better https://puu.sh/sqOdq.png - Done
17. 01:18:818 (3) - ^ https://puu.sh/sqOiU.png - Done
18. 01:21:911 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - ^ https://puu.sh/sqOqM.png - Done
19. 01:41:551 (4,5,1) - Looks weird. - i thinks its better now
20. 01:45:417 (1,2,3,4) - I think it would be better https://puu.sh/sqOyW.png - Done
21. 01:49:128 (1,2,3) - ^ https://puu.sh/sqODN.png - Done
22. 01:50:210 (7,8,1) - ^ https://puu.sh/sqOGY.png - Done
23. 01:51:757 (2) - ^ https://puu.sh/sqOM1.png - Done
24. 01:52:994 (3,4,5) - ^ https://puu.sh/sqOQf.png - Done
25. 01:53:767 (9) - ^ https://puu.sh/sqOVZ.png - Done
26. 01:55:623 (2) - ^ https://puu.sh/sqP0p.png - Done
27. 02:20:674 (3) - ^ https://puu.sh/sqP5c.png - Done
28. 02:23:457 (2) - ^ https://puu.sh/sqP80.png - Done
29. 02:25:931 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - overlap. NotLikeThis - Fixed
30. 03:12:478 (5) - ^ https://puu.sh/sqPig.png - Fixed
31. 03:54:540 (2,3,4,5,6) - ^ https://puu.sh/sqPqI.png - Fixed
32. 03:58:715 (5,6,7,1) - ^ https://puu.sh/sqPuz.png - Fixed

Interesting mapping

Thanks!

[ Pennek ] wrote:

00:26:241 (2,3) - remap - flow is out of sync with the rest of the map - i dont think that. So i dont change this sorry
02:21:911 (1) - no velchange. the subtle sound doesn't give a reason for speedup in slow section (use additions) - Yeah... you dont saw that xD i forgot to make the slider so long like the other in this section! xD
02:22:839 (1) - this is correct - Yeah yeah xD
03:06:138 (2) - slider on this tick to follow the guitar sound like you do on surrounding notes - The slider is on the vocal so i dont change this


enjoyable map!

Thanks for the mod dude!

Arutsuki wrote:

nm from q

promise

00:03:044 (1) - I think just a single circle would go with the music better
00:03:973 (2,1) - no real reason to have those, maybe change the first note into a slider ending on a blue tick
00:13:560 (1,2) - ^
00:04:746 (4) - put a circle instead and put a long slider on 00:04:901 -
00:31:035 (2,3,4,5,6,1) - use this instead of 00:33:664 (2,3,4,5,6,1) - these
00:48:045 (4,5) - ctrl+g these, flows better imo
00:52:143 (6) - no sound, delete
00:56:395 (4,5,6,1,2,3,4) - ^
01:03:277 (5,1) - make this gap somewhat smaller, seems too hard compared to the rest of the map
01:20:674 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - I like this part, try using it on the same parts after as well
01:31:498 (7,8) - no real reason for kicksliders here, put just normal circles
02:00:880 (4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,1) - again no sound to put a stream on
03:25:004 (3,4) - space these more
03:37:684 (8,9,10,11) - overmapped again

gl

thanks

My Angel RangE wrote:

Hello~
[It's a promise]


Cheek remove ' count down'

00:03:354 (1) - remove Nc
00:03:973 (2) - add Nc
00:06:138 (1) - same color NC..? why?
00:26:859 (3) - add Nc
00:43:560 (5) - Beat emphasis NC
00:44:179 (1) - remove Nc
00:46:653 (1) - ^
00:57:169 (1) - ^
01:02:968 (1) - ^
01:29:952 (1) - ^
03:18:664 (2) - over lap
03:18:664 (2,3,4) - add Nc
03:23:612 (3) - ^
03:42:632 (3,4,5) - stack?
03:44:952 (3) - ^

well.
good luck!

All Done!
Yeah thanks!

ChronoNig wrote:

trying to learn how to mod xd mercy on my soul

:d

Pretty nice map with cool storyboard but there's some NC and structure issues that I have to point out.

00:02:117 (5) - you could position 5 so it blankets better with the slider end of 3 like so https://gyazo.com/b117d085e07f469b1c1b56d5a9e49ef6
00:03:973 (2,1,2) - here's a suggestion to make it look cleaner https://gyazo.com/c5757ad7ae04893feed59d251d292db8
00:03:354 (1) - remove NC
00:03:973 (2) - add NC
00:04:283 (1) - remove NC
I wont really mention similar stuff like this further cuz im not an expert but generally u want to add NC on big white ticks. So if you do decide to change the above u may want to check ur other NCs to keep it consistent
00:04:746 (3,4) - you stacked 00:04:283 (1,2) - so it'd make sense you'd do the same for this
00:09:385 (3) - I think extending this slider to red tick follows the volcals a lot better
00:11:087 (1,2,3) - spacing here could just be the same DS instead of random. Also the 3 is too close to the 1 imo.
00:08:612 (1) - u could extend slider to blue tick and remove whistle. There isn't really any music at the red tick, just the long vocals so long sliders I think are a good way to represent that.
00:16:808 (3) - shape suggestion https://gyazo.com/4eff81b60eb5b4abd76d3c3f28b35310
00:18:818 (2) - yea this is what i meant for 00:08:612 (1)
00:19:746 (6) - the downward curve is too harsh. try and make it lead into the circle.
00:24:386 (3) - I think this should be a circle and a silder https://gyazo.com/e39f80728d800dc0a62794507eef38fe
00:27:478 (1) - why dont you do the same like the other 2 sliders before? It sounds basically the same.
00:29:643 (5,1) - there's a pretty important big white tick note here that I think should be mapped
00:42:014 (1,2,3,4,5) - these can be NCs since the svs change
00:42:787 (3) - could also be blanketed better with 1
00:46:189 (2) - not a fan of this stacking but to make it better you could shift it a bit down to match the slider
00:46:962 (3,1) - also blanket here
00:50:056 (2,3) - I think there should be 2 sliders on the white ticks instead
00:52:220 (1,2,3,4) - just a suggestion but I think it'd be cool if the svs graduually got lower since the vocals also gets weaker
01:01:963 (2) - 2 circles instead stacked on 01:02:118 (3) - ?
01:30:570 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - this doesnt look very nice to me imo. May wanna consider remaking the pattern
01:42:633 (5) - slider here fits better
01:51:911 (3) - not properly stacked with 5
02:09:540 (1) - I think the svs here could be like x0.7 but thats imo
02:19:746 (6) - stacking error? i think
02:23:457 (2) - can be NC also 02:23:457 (2,1) - is too sharp bring them closer together
02:33:045 (3,4) - would be cool if u ctrl+g these
03:18:200 (1,2) - i dont like how these overlap a bit
03:22:143 (6) - note: my eyes QAQ that story board also NC can go here
03:44:952 (3) - also another stacking error?
03:48:818 (4,5) - I think this plays better https://gyazo.com/b76a4e9f75c4e7a7363759ce904a79ba
03:49:437 (2) - this would look better https://gyazo.com/d9c22881b568bd733f1a79ddc89d0091
03:52:839 (1) - the spacing here is too large
04:22:529 (1) - lift higher so it blankets with 4
I know it's a lot to change but don't get discouraged! This map is pretty good and it'll only get better

Yeah thanks for the mod!!

• 
  It's a promise
  
  00:01:963 (4,5) - move these to 264/240? so they look better with 00:01:189 (1,2) -
  00:09:540 (3) - y no use a slider here just like before? for consistency and I think fits with the vocals too
  00:09:849 (4) - imo this slider could look better like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/6917284
  00:11:859 (2,3) - ctrl+g ??
  00:16:653 (2) - move this to 296/20 so you have to move more and the next slider with more velocity plays better
  00:38:612 - should add a circle here
  00:42:323 (1) - ctrl+g?
  00:51:911 (6,1) - spacing between these its too much imo, should move 00:52:221 (1) - closer to the other slider end, suggestion: http://prntscr.com/doxm24
  01:12:324 (3,4,5) - suggestion for these 3 that looks a bit messed before: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/6917337 after: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/6917327
  01:17:891 (6,7) - this jump shouldnt be this longer since the song here isnt really intense or anything so this jump isnt emphatizing anything (just this one)
  01:23:458 (2,3) - should ctrl+g each individual and move to its original position like this http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/6917351 so it flows better!
  02:17:272 (3,4) - should change these for a slider imo
  02:50:211 (1) - the current shape of this slider doesnt look.. the best imo, http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/6917391 <this would play better and still looks good.. I guess, but ofc you can use another shape or just "fix" the current shape because.. I doesnt look.. the best..
  02:58:870 (4) - this should be split into 2 circles
  03:22:530 (1) - move to 232/256
  03:27:788 (1,2,3) - small suggestion for these 3 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/6917414
  03:35:211 (5) - move this to 200/268 so it looks better with the rest 03:35:365 (6,1,2,3,4) -
  03:54:541 (2) - hmm im not 100% sure but I think this is the ONLY kickslider you used in this whole kiai.. inconsistent, and should be a triplet
  03:59:025 (1) - make this a good slider shape :p (I mean.. http://prntscr.com/doxv6p something like that idk.. not just a simply stright line slider.. idk xdd)
  04:01:654 (4,5,6,1,2,3) - do ctrl+g on these? you already used the clockwise flow before so.. a change in the flow direction here would be better..
  04:05:828 (4,5) - should not stack these, I suggest something like this, https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/6917453 the reason why not stack these its because.. you didnt stack any of these > 04:04:591 (3,4,1,2,1,2) -
  04:43:560 (9) - uhh nice! (if this slidershape you got here is totally on porpuse, ignore my suggestion *or fix?*) I just think it could look better like this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/6917495 or you can make a perfect heart idk its on you to change or not :p

1. 00:19:283 (4) - try stacking the slidertail on the starting note of the first slider, like that https://puu.sh/t45Y1/4de39bd08d.png
2. 00:26:859 (1) - stack it on this note 00:25:932 (1) - , because it feels weird here + give a better rounded shape
3. 01:34:900 (4,5) - i feel like it should be clickable
4. 01:35:519 (1,2,3) - the flow between those notes feel very weird here. consider doing something more like that https://puu.sh/t46nO/539079e0ba.png
5. 04:43:560 (1,1) - the end is sooooo long
6. overall, the map is very nice, there is good rhythm use, but sometimes, there is lack of flow, i mean, there sometimes that the movement of the player will not be fluid because of the pattern, and it will probably lead 90% of the player into a failure, so patterns like this: 01:53:303 (6,7,8,9,1) - i dont feel comfortable while playing this pattern. because there is a sudden side change and it's very disturbing in my opinion. so mind changing some patterns like that.

Pachiru wrote:

1. 00:19:283 (4) - try stacking the slidertail on the starting note of the first slider, like that https://puu.sh/t45Y1/4de39bd08d.png
2. 00:26:859 (1) - stack it on this note 00:25:932 (1) - , because it feels weird here + give a better rounded shape
3. 01:34:900 (4,5) - i feel like it should be clickable
4. 01:35:519 (1,2,3) - the flow between those notes feel very weird here. consider doing something more like that https://puu.sh/t46nO/539079e0ba.png
5. 04:43:560 (1,1) - the end is sooooo long
6. overall, the map is very nice, there is good rhythm use, but sometimes, there is lack of flow, i mean, there sometimes that the movement of the player will not be fluid because of the pattern, and it will probably lead 90% of the player into a failure, so patterns like this: 01:53:303 (6,7,8,9,1) - i dont feel comfortable while playing this pattern. because there is a sudden side change and it's very disturbing in my opinion. so mind changing some patterns like that.

that's all for me
good luck for ranking

very nice storyboard!

Big text

KrastrovLap wrote:

From your req ( ^ = same as above, Imo = In my opinion)

General

1. Only 2 combo colors? can you add more one? no problem if you disagree - I took 3 Colors from the background

It's a promise

1. 00:03:973 (8) - NC this - Fixed
2. 00:05:519 (1) - remove NC - Fixed
3. 00:06:448 (3) - Ctrl+J would be nice Imo - I take it
4. 00:07:993 (1) - remove NC - Fixed
5. 00:12:941 (1) - ^ - Fixed
6. 00:26:859 (1,1) - look so far, make it closer little bit - Fixed
7. 00:30:262 (1) - remove NC - Fixed
8. 00:31:035 (2) - NC this - Fixed
9. 00:32:736 (7) - make it closer to previous slider would be nice - I take it
10. 00:35:210 (1) - remove NC - Fixed
11. 00:35:829 (2) - NC this - Fixed
12. 01:36:524 (7) - remove this circle coz this interrupted when jumping - I take it
13. 01:40:082 (8) - remove this circle and arrange it like this (below) no problem if you disagree - I take it
    
    
    
14. 01:45:726 (3,4) - Ctrl+J arrange it like this (below) no problem if you disagree - I take it
    
    
    
15. 01:53:071 (4) - remove this circle coz this interrupted when jumping (Imo) - I take it
16. 02:14:179 (6) - stack to previous circle 02:14:024 (5) would be nice Imo - I take it
17. 02:44:489 (7,1) - look weird here
18. 03:34:514 (2) - remove this circle would be nice Imo - Fixed
19. 03:35:364 (6,7,8) - arrange it like this (below) would be nice, no problem if you disagree - I take it
    
    
    
20. 03:46:344 (6) - move this circle to left a bit (below) - I take it
    
    

P.S #1 Beautiful SB, Last slider part so pretty amazing, Osu! need moar cillia
P.S #2 Hope this will be ranked soon
WITH LOVE

KrastrovLap wrote:

P.S #1 Beautiful SB, Last slider part so pretty amazing, Osu! need moar cillia
P.S #2 Hope this will be ranked soon
WITH LOVE

THANKS for the mod!!

HighTec wrote:

title of song should be Fairytale,

this is found when even simply googling the song everywhere, even on the japanese sites
Changed!

-NeBu- wrote:

nm

00:01:962 (4,5) - keep same ds as 00:01:498 (3,4) - Fixed
00:03:354 (7,1) - polish those two sliders so they can fit better together - Fixed
00:03:973 (1,3) - blanket - Fixed
00:14:798 (5,1) - ^ - Fixed
00:32:736 (6) - maybe different slider looks? kinda ugly - Hope its better now
00:46:962 (6,1) - better blanket? - Fixed
00:48:509 (1,3) - ^ - Fixed
01:10:776 (1,3) - ^ - Fixed
01:10:467 (4,2) - unnecessary overlap - Fixed
02:03:354 (1,1,1) - I feel like you could remove them and just make pause here - Nope cause i want to rank it so i need the 5min!
02:44:333 (6,7) - blanket - Fixed

overall good map, I like hitsounding and storyboard, just some blankets/ugly sliders you could change for better map quality, gl!

Nikakis wrote:

~hi


00:06:757 (4) - : this note has an uncomfortable placement,i recommend to place it just like 00:07:375 (6) - -Fixed
00:09:849 (4) - : add NC.Im not fan of this slider's shape too,better remap it -I dont remap it
00:16:344 (2) - : move this a little higher,just a bit -Fixed
00:16:808 (3) - ...uh yeah,in my opinion this is ugly,try this https://puu.sh/vdUzx/4274a58256.png -Fixed
00:26:241 (2) - : add NC -Fixed
00:28:715 (3) - : ^ -Fixed
00:32:736 (6) - : ^ -Fixed
00:35:210 (6) - : ^ -Fixed
00:42:787 (3) - : uhm this slider has really ugly shape plus the flow.try this https://puu.sh/vdURu/610c26eff6.png -Fixed
00:43:560 (1) - : this is too high from the previous slider,making it weird.try this with that shape if you want https://puu.sh/vdV3y/65375fc6ed.png -Fixed
00:48:355 (6,7) - : with that placement,the player will surely choke this part.place them more diagonally https://puu.sh/vdVu3/1751a5affb.png -Fixed
00:49:127 (3) - : uncomfortable movement,try this https://puu.sh/vdVB8/30d475cde1.png -Fixed
00:53:689 - : i would add a note here,something like a triple,try it https://puu.sh/vdVIV/7ab4cb4762.png -Fixed
00:58:097 (8) - : this should be clickable,there's a very noticeable change to the beat,so yeah make it as 2 circles with a high distance -Fixed
01:13:869 (4) - : add NC -Fixed
01:24:386 (6) - : ^ -Fixed
01:43:406 (3,4,5) - : fix the triple position here -Fixed
01:45:417 (1,2,3,4) - : weird flow,this is more natural https://puu.sh/vdWef/3e8179bed5.png -Fixed
01:53:767 (8,1) - : naaaaaaah,please do this https://puu.sh/vdWpE/f37152900e.png and NC it too -Fixed
01:59:952 (1) - : ugly slider,remap it -Hope its better now
02:00:880 (4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,1) - : is this a handmade slider line?you should better make a slider then Ctrl+Shift+F it -Fixed
02:23:148 (1) - : there's a beat here that should be clickable,make the slider smaller and add a note near to it
https://puu.sh/vdWV3/095eb7a7c1.png -Fixed
02:26:859 (1,2,3,4) - : uhm yeah :p,fix the positioning -Fixed
03:10:777 (1) - : remove NC and put it on 03:11:086 (3) - Fixed
03:11:086 (3) - : you should not focus on her voice here and make this long slider,it's not consistent.as i see you didnt map this vocal again on the next seconds,so yeah try this https://puu.sh/vdXrt/574a109225.png -Fixed
03:20:365 (2,1) - : lol what is this reverse slider there???delete both of them and a spinner all the way down buddy,it fits perfectly! https://puu.sh/vdXKG/997c50285e.png -I dont change that a spinner is way to boring and i dont like the spinner
03:24:385 (3,4) - : why you do the same slider shape,just do this https://puu.sh/vdY3O/5810ea80c9.png -Fixed
03:43:715 (3,4) - : this is just a recommendation,i would add a stream line here,it's suitable https://puu.sh/vdYpF/d10ba18351.png , https://puu.sh/vdYCz/3cf006d492.png -I take it
04:20:983 (5) - : make it circles -Fixed

~gl ranking it

Yuuya_ke wrote:

hi #modreq just gonna check some SB elements or something

SB elements; not the actual objects

• 
  00:07:375 (6) - why is が so close to 足 it seems off-centered
  
  00:22:220 (3) - idk if I were to write that sentence I wouldn't put a space between 二人が and 寂しくないように
  
  00:32:118 (5) - 神様がきっと少しだけきっと　→　you're missing the と at the end
  
  00:36:757 (4) - oh I found it fix that 許した時間 looks better alone
  
  00:58:097 (8) - why would you make such an awkward transition here? 声を張り上げて should be in the next text block; also, please don't separate 張 and りyou can't just take off the the hiragana since the verb is different from the kanji itself
  
  01:19:436 (1) - wtf there isn't a storyboard element for あの頃には戻れないのにxd
  
  01:42:633 (5) - ^ god dammit there it is put it in the right place, please
  
  01:45:881 (4) - 別れの刻はすぐにやってきて is not displayed at the correct time
  
  01:55:313 (1) - for this I'd personally put 二人は with the bottom block of text and then show 再会の環に思いを馳せた at 01:56:396 (5) - or something
  
  02:20:519 (2) - I wouldn't separate 心も from the rest of the sentence
  
  03:14:024 (4) - you should display 聞いておいて on a completely separate block of text instead of keeping it spaced in the sentence 'cause it acts as a separate sentence
  
  03:18:664 (1) - couldn't you use a better transition to 久しぶりね? I don't like how it just fades into black and you can see the lyrics before they're even sung
  
  03:24:694 (2) - I really, REALLY don't like that you don't display 重なり合う at the same time that it is sung; the growl that the vocals have is truly the climax of the song and the storyboard, honestly, fails to represent that
  
  04:01:035 (6) - 約束ね should be displayed as a separate element; the mapset description has that in a vertical arrangement, so it means that those words have a huge meaning in the song, so spacing it out in the same sentence makes it lacking of that
  
  04:12:632 (1) - wtf where's the lyrics to the second 約束ね :^(
  
  I notice that you (or whomever made the SB) took the lyrics directly out of the vocaloid wiki but making a lyrics SB based off of their format, I feel, makes some lyrics lacking of prominence when put together with an osu! map that has a coinciding variety of objects that also represent the song

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GhostFY wrote:

Yuuya_ke wrote:

hi #modreq just gonna check some SB elements or something

SB elements; not the actual objects

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  00:07:375 (6) - why is が so close to 足 it seems off-centered
  
  00:22:220 (3) - idk if I were to write that sentence I wouldn't put a space between 二人が and 寂しくないように
  
  00:32:118 (5) - 神様がきっと少しだけきっと　→　you're missing the と at the end
  
  00:36:757 (4) - oh I found it fix that 許した時間 looks better alone
  
  00:58:097 (8) - why would you make such an awkward transition here? 声を張り上げて should be in the next text block; also, please don't separate 張 and りyou can't just take off the the hiragana since the verb is different from the kanji itself
  
  01:19:436 (1) - wtf there isn't a storyboard element for あの頃には戻れないのにxd
  
  01:42:633 (5) - ^ god dammit there it is put it in the right place, please
  
  01:45:881 (4) - 別れの刻はすぐにやってきて is not displayed at the correct time
  
  01:55:313 (1) - for this I'd personally put 二人は with the bottom block of text and then show 再会の環に思いを馳せた at 01:56:396 (5) - or something
  
  02:20:519 (2) - I wouldn't separate 心も from the rest of the sentence
  
  03:14:024 (4) - you should display 聞いておいて on a completely separate block of text instead of keeping it spaced in the sentence 'cause it acts as a separate sentence
  
  03:18:664 (1) - couldn't you use a better transition to 久しぶりね? I don't like how it just fades into black and you can see the lyrics before they're even sung
  
  03:24:694 (2) - I really, REALLY don't like that you don't display 重なり合う at the same time that it is sung; the growl that the vocals have is truly the climax of the song and the storyboard, honestly, fails to represent that
  
  04:01:035 (6) - 約束ね should be displayed as a separate element; the mapset description has that in a vertical arrangement, so it means that those words have a huge meaning in the song, so spacing it out in the same sentence makes it lacking of that
  
  04:12:632 (1) - wtf where's the lyrics to the second 約束ね :^(
  
  I notice that you (or whomever made the SB) took the lyrics directly out of the vocaloid wiki but making a lyrics SB based off of their format, I feel, makes some lyrics lacking of prominence when put together with an osu! map that has a coinciding variety of objects that also represent the song

o

I'm very happy to recheck the SB but the thing is all the lyrics elements are made from XinCrin LyricsGenerator, so you tell me like put some spaces into the word or something,i have to redo all the lyrics elements again (and nobody likes that) D: (but the good thing is i already know how to make SB in storybrew, but is too late ;wwwwwwwwwwwwww;)
I TOTALLY FORGOT WHO GAVED ME THE LYRICS LMAO...




(SOMEONE PLS VOTE... SHOULD I RENEW THE SB?)

GhostFY wrote:

(SOMEONE PLS VOTE... SHOULD I RENEW THE SB?)

Yuuya_ke wrote:

GhostFY wrote:

(SOMEONE PLS VOTE... SHOULD I RENEW THE SB?)

I mean, some of those mods you don't necessarily have to fix, but something like separating the hiragana from its kanji base is like a really big issue. You don't really have to re-do the WHOLE thing, I mean, truly, it's a really nice storyboard and I know that there was plenty of effort put into it.

- raspy wrote:

Here's your mod from my queue:

SPOILER

All of my assumptions that things are almost perfect triangles is based on the fact that they are intended to be perfect triangles
00:06:138 (1,2,3) - This is a wide angle, and can be uncomfortable to play.
00:06:448 (3,4,5) - This could be a better triangle
00:06:911 (5,6) - Try to rotate slider 5 so that it blankets circle 6 better - I changed the slider a bit i think it better now
00:08:612 (1,2) - The blanketing here feels wrong, although I'm unsure if it's intentional.
00:11:087 (1,2,3) - This could be a better triangle
00:13:560 (1,2,3) - This is a wide angle, and can be uncomfortable to play.
00:16:808 (3,4) - The blanketing of slider 3 with slider 4 is off.
00:17:890 (1,2,1) - Wide angle, but probably doesn't matter from how slow it is.
00:20:983 (1,2,3) - The starts of all these objects almost form a perfect triangle, use dummy circles and CTRL+Shift+R at 120 degrees to make it one - Fixed its better now i hope xd
00:26:859 (1,1,2) - The ends of these sliders almost form a triangle, try to make it one
00:33:664 (1,2,3) - This is almost a triangle
00:36:448 (3,4,5) - ^
00:37:375 (1,2,3,4) - Almost a perfect rhombus/parallelogram.
00:48:355 (6,7,8) - 7 in this pattern looks just a couple pixels off, but that's just my opinion -Moved it a bit i think it good now
01:04:591 (1,2,3) - Almost a triangle
01:10:467 (4,2) - The blanketing of circle 2 is off - fixed
01:41:705 (1,3) - If circle 3 is intended to be blanketed by slider 1, it's off by a couple pixels
01:53:147 (4,6,7) - This looks really close to a triangle but isn't, if it should be one then fix it - Fixed!
01:53:767 (8,9) - This blanketing is off -fixed
02:15:107 (2,3,1) - Slider 1 could be moved to make a perfect triangle, but your choice -I changed this a bit its better now i think
02:23:148 (1,2) - This hitsounding either sounds wrong, or is too loud. I can't decide -I turned down the volume
02:29:179 (3,4,5) - This isn't a perfect triangle -I fixed it
02:34:282 (1,2,3) - This is a wide angle, and can be uncomfortable to play.
02:44:024 (4,5,6,7) - ^
03:10:622 (7,8,9) - This is almost a perfect triangle
03:15:725 (1,2,3) - ^
03:20:365 (2) - There's a red anchor in the middle of this slider that adds a little sharp bump to the loop. Looks slightly wrong just in my opinion.
03:25:004 (3,4,5) - This is almost a perfect triangle
03:29:720 (2,3,4,5) - ^
03:32:581 (3,4,5) - ^
03:42:323 (1,2,3,4,5) - ^
03:45:416 (1,2,3) - ^
03:46:189 (5,6,7) - ^
03:55:777 (4,5,6) - A wide angle, which can be uncomfortable to play.
Same with 03:59:333 (2,3,4) - and 03:59:797 (5,6,7) -
04:08:457 (3,4,5) - Almost a perfect triangle
04:10:158 (1,2,3) - Wide angle
04:12:169 (6,7,8) - Almost a perfect triangle
04:12:478 (8,1) - The blanketing of circle 8 with slider 1 is off
04:15:107 (1,2,3,4,5) - If this is intended to be a star, slider 5 is off
04:17:581 (1,2,3) - Almost a perfect triangle
04:18:199 (4,5,6) - ^
04:19:437 (3,4,5) - ^
04:20:055 (1,2) - Blanketing of slider 1 with slider 2 is off - Fixed
04:20:674 (3,4,5) - Wide angle
04:43:560 (1) - This slider drained about 50% of my HP while play testing, not sure if this is bad, but I thought I'd let you know

If you want to fix the "almost a perfect triangle" problem and/or don't believe me, try using dummy circles under two of the 3 circles in the triangle and rotate them 120 degrees.
If you want to fix the "blanketing is off" problem and/or don't believe me, try using beat snap advisor 1/16 and slowly rotating the object by 1 degrees until it looks right.
Completely off-topic, but I'd just like to say the storyboarding at 02:35:829 - is absolutely amazing. Well done