chocolatine
general
00:17:859 (5,6) - spacing should be as 00:17:495 (3,4) - as there's no really thing to emphasize here
00:20:041 (1,2,3) - mmh, i guess since you're overmapping at 00:20:313 - you should be consistent on 00:21:041 - ? and how about not skipping sound at 00:20:677 - ?
01:00:041 (1) - NC is not really necessary imo
01:33:859 (5,6) - 01:39:677 (6,7) - 01:45:495 (4,5) - NC as you did for 01:28:041 (1,2) -
02:36:041 (3) - mmh I think it's better to stop this on the red tick
04:36:404 (3,4,1) - flow is not really good imo, spacing between (4) and (1) should be bigger than (3) and (4) in order to have a good emphasize
04:54:041 (1,2,3,4,5) - try to make a better star pattern it would be great aethetically
04:55:677 (3,4,5,6) - same as above but a square pattern o:
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overall c'est good, good luck!
general
- BG is too try to reduce it to 1366x768 ):
00:17:859 (5,6) - spacing should be as 00:17:495 (3,4) - as there's no really thing to emphasize here
00:20:041 (1,2,3) - mmh, i guess since you're overmapping at 00:20:313 - you should be consistent on 00:21:041 - ? and how about not skipping sound at 00:20:677 - ?
01:00:041 (1) - NC is not really necessary imo
01:33:859 (5,6) - 01:39:677 (6,7) - 01:45:495 (4,5) - NC as you did for 01:28:041 (1,2) -
02:36:041 (3) - mmh I think it's better to stop this on the red tick
04:36:404 (3,4,1) - flow is not really good imo, spacing between (4) and (1) should be bigger than (3) and (4) in order to have a good emphasize
04:54:041 (1,2,3,4,5) - try to make a better star pattern it would be great aethetically
04:55:677 (3,4,5,6) - same as above but a square pattern o:
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only suggestions
overall c'est good, good luck!