Camellia - Exit This Earth's Atomosphere

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ClrSCR
Hi senpai
Just Miracle-
rrtyui<3
ProfessionalBox
14:33 ProfessionalBox: I can give you a quick irc mod on the map if you want
14:49 rrtyui: :ooooo
14:49 rrtyui: i need you
14:49 ProfessionalBox: There isn't much to change but I can go over what I thought could be improved
14:50 ProfessionalBox: How much do you care about aesthetics? Should I mention visual stuff at all :D
14:51 ProfessionalBox: 01:03:391 (5) - NC here would fit imo
14:52 ProfessionalBox: 01:14:685 (5) - This should be NC too if you want to NC the first one
14:54 ProfessionalBox: 01:09:038 (1,2,3,4) - The flow here is a bit meh so maybe try something like this? http://puu.sh/rzAPB/e0b9c4321c.jpg
14:55 rrtyui: well i wanna put aethetic everywhere thats why i have learned byfar's style
14:55 ProfessionalBox: 01:10:803 (4,5) - These could be better emphasized with a NC and placing like this http://puu.sh/rzASc/ae5950db2b.jpg
14:56 ProfessionalBox: Alright I'll mention some minor aesthetic things then :p
14:58 ProfessionalBox: 01:26:685 (1,2) - adjust the curve on the long slider a bit for better blanket http://puu.sh/rzAYE/f2ca7e10fd.jpg
14:59 ProfessionalBox: 01:27:921 (1,2) - Stack properly :p
14:59 rrtyui: first-third from the top are fixed
15:00 ProfessionalBox: 01:35:068 (3,1) - This plays almost the same but looks much better http://puu.sh/rzB16/aea2073723.jpg
15:01 ProfessionalBox: 01:48:921 (3) - You could NC because of the slider velocity change if you want but it's not a big deal
15:02 ProfessionalBox: 01:55:627 (1,2) - Super minor thing but if you adjust the slider a bit so that the slider tail points directly at (2) it looks better http://puu.sh/rzB5T/e237c4fe9d.jpg
15:02 ProfessionalBox: 01:55:979 (3) - I'd NC this in order to avoid misreadings from 01:55:803 (2,3) - because players might think that there is no break in between those
15:03 ProfessionalBox: if you NC the previous one then you should NC this too for consistency :p 01:58:803 (3) -
15:08 rrtyui: k updated
15:08 ProfessionalBox: I'm trying to come up with a few patterns in the kiai so this might take a while :D
15:11 rrtyui: ;w;
15:12 ProfessionalBox: 02:07:450 (1) - I'm thinking that this part needs more and something like this is the best that I could come up with quickly http://puu.sh/rzBqz/9184532d71.jpg
15:12 ProfessionalBox: If you don't understand what I did in the picture then I can explain more
15:12 ProfessionalBox: But this would give it a nice gimmicky back and forth movement while still not ignoring the cool sounds in the song
15:14 ProfessionalBox: 02:13:097 (1) - Here you could do something like this to fill the space too http://puu.sh/rzByf/dc634310df.jpg
15:15 ProfessionalBox: 02:18:744 (1) - and for here http://puu.sh/rzBAf/a5c42ded66.jpg
15:17 ProfessionalBox: 02:37:538 (2) - NC here!
15:19 ProfessionalBox: 02:38:597 (2,1) - This might be a bit too hard because the slider spins in the opposite direction of the flow with this kind of spacing :D This is just a wild suggestion http://puu.sh/rzBK8/a099ca1616.jpg
15:20 ProfessionalBox: 02:38:332 (3) - on the previous suggestion this would stay where it currently is, only 02:38:509 (1,2) - would move
15:21 ProfessionalBox: 03:24:568 (1,1) - If you add a tiny amount of spacing here it looks better because of the blanket http://puu.sh/rzBPz/e564d7bd17.jpg
15:22 ProfessionalBox: 03:33:215 (1) - Move this so that it doesn't touch 03:33:568 (1) - for better aesthetics 8) http://puu.sh/rzBRS/549e53afec.jpg
15:23 ProfessionalBox: 03:33:568 (1) - Also the last curve on this could look muchc better http://puu.sh/rzBTp/a00a8d32d2.jpg
15:23 ProfessionalBox: 03:48:920 (3) - If you used NC in the previous suggestions then do it here too!
15:24 ProfessionalBox: 04:04:450 (5) - Maybe NC here too if you want
15:24 ProfessionalBox: 04:15:744 (5) - ^
15:25 ProfessionalBox: 04:37:803 (1) - NC here and 04:38:332 (5) - for easier reading
15:26 ProfessionalBox: 04:43:274 (2,3,4) - Maybe NC all of these just to emphasize the speed of them more xD
15:26 ProfessionalBox: It's such a climax of the song too at that point so it would fit really well just to go ham with NC
15:28 ProfessionalBox: The outro is fine so I don't have anything more to mod
15:28 ProfessionalBox: I hope this helped :p
Topic Starter
rrtyui
updated. thanks for modding, professionalbox. :)


also... wow many stars have shotten this map thanks ;w;
Kite
mod

Tickrate 2 would make sv changes easier to read in the beginning and the end
02:10:538 (1) - removing new combo is probably easier to read the pattern due to follow points
02:21:832 (1) - ^
02:29:156 (2,3,4,5,6) - is weird because the more impactful sound lands on 1/6 here but drum is 1/4, would probably be more fun / interesting to follow 1/6 here
02:31:979 (2,3,4,5,6) - ^
02:34:803 (2,3,4,5,6) - ^
02:38:156 (2) - ctrl+g for better and easier movement here imo
03:30:921 (1) - this slider is kinda ugly compared to the rest in your map
04:03:391 (1,2,3) - this feels out of place, considering you just entered a section with fast and fluid movement.. it really kills the pace; also i think you could add another object at 04:03:479 -
04:45:038 (3,4,5,7) - x320 y368? it feels really cramped in the corner and can be easily misinterpreted to be placed 1/4 after the slider on the timeline
04:58:803 (2) - ctrl+g seems better to me for movement and fix spacing issue with 04:58:803 (2,3,4,5) -
Kloyd
相変わらずやばいですなーー
Arenth
The day Axarious and Hollow Wings had a mutant baby

this is awesome
Topic Starter
rrtyui

Kite wrote:

mod

Tickrate 2 would make sv changes easier to read in the beginning and the end i prefer 1 than other
02:10:538 (1) - removing new combo is probably easier to read the pattern due to follow points sometimes i like fast slider plus near spacing thing
02:21:832 (1) - ^
02:29:156 (2,3,4,5,6) - is weird because the more impactful sound lands on 1/6 here but drum is 1/4, would probably be more fun / interesting to follow 1/6 here i wanna keep this 1/4 consistency and it emphasize this (02:35:068 (5,6) - ) strong drum sounds
02:31:979 (2,3,4,5,6) - ^
02:34:803 (2,3,4,5,6) - ^
02:38:156 (2) - ctrl+g for better and easier movement here imo but if i change to that it seems much weird...
03:30:921 (1) - this slider is kinda ugly compared to the rest in your map
04:03:391 (1,2,3) - this feels out of place, considering you just entered a section with fast and fluid movement.. it really kills the pace; also i think you could add another object at 04:03:479 - sometimes i like fast slider plus near spacing thing
04:45:038 (3,4,5,7) - x320 y368? it feels really cramped in the corner and can be easily misinterpreted to be placed 1/4 after the slider on the timeline
04:58:803 (2) - ctrl+g seems better to me for movement and fix spacing issue with 04:58:803 (2,3,4,5) - it may cause generation of hidden stacking object
thanks modding kite but i wanna keep this now.
Chloe
well done :D
Monstrata
Can I bubble this yet?
Topic Starter
rrtyui
im waiting some requested mods :oooooo
Okoratu
could you set combocolors?
03:57:391 (2) - and the likes have completely hidden repeat arrows which kinda has to be addressed

also pls don't flood thread with memes and nonsense stuff will have consequences from this point onwards
Side
Hey here's a thing :v

[GiRLC's -- oh wait]

00:20:332 (1) - Technically this is okay but you could consider ctrl+g this slider since all these other sliders starting at 00:16:097 - go like back and forth if that makes sense. You could try something else also but this is the one with the least change needed ;^)

00:25:274 (1,2) - I'm not that good a player so idk how good this plays but it doesn't look very intuitive xd you would know that better but if that's a concern to you maybe consider moving 00:25:274 (1) - to 00:25:362 (2) - slider head or ctrl+g 00:25:362 (2) - works also.

00:32:685 (3) - Here you have a whistle but not sure why since there's no sound like 00:15:744 (1) - somewhere and its also not consistent with 00:27:038 (1) - 00:29:862 (1) - etc. Pretty sure its accidental cuz its also on the whole body instead of the slider head xd

00:38:509 (3) - You also added the whistle to the whole body instead of just the slider head by accident :v

00:39:391 (1) - Touches the hp bar. Don't think that's unrankable but just pointing that out. If you move it at x:3 y:41 it doesn't do that anymore and keeps the same spacing as before

01:20:685 (2) - 03:24:921 (2) - These would be cool as a really slow 3/4 slider too

01:21:038 (1) - Really like this slider!

01:29:332 (1) - But not this one though but I'm not good at slider art so I can't suggest something else xd I think I don't like it much because it uses .8x SV but the ones before use .5x and .65x. I see what you're going for with making it go faster but imo I think it would make more sense to go back to .5x since the pitch in the music goes back down kinda like 01:24:215 (1) - ...idk this is kinda hard to explain I hope it makes sense cuz it makes sense to me but probably not to anyone else xd

01:54:921 (1,2) - Really like these sliders. Hard to explain why but it has to do with how they both go in the same direction ;)

02:06:568 (2,3,4,5,6) - nice! (did something similar in one of my maps lol)

02:08:685 (2) - Might be cooler with ctrl+g also since the wub pitch goes up so the slider could also go "up" kinda like how these two both go down and the pitch drops with the both 02:11:156 (1,2) - or how you do that here 02:13:979 (1,2) -

Also small suggestion with 02:11:509 (2) - maybe ctrl+h but in the same spot like this. Not necessary though :v And if you do that also do that for 02:22:803 (2) -

02:30:568 (3) - Change slider end to soft sample maybe. The sound you follow with the normal-hitnormal doesn't play there like 02:28:803 (1) -

02:31:627 (1) - Same for this one

02:41:156 (3) - imo I suggest changing this to a 1/2 slider something like 02:41:862 (3) - it will help with readability since there's so much rhythm that this pause kinda hurts at this difficulty.

02:48:568 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - I miss fanzhen ;-;

03:33:568 (1) - Yep same thing here. I guess I don't like the higher SV when compared to the other sliders before. Feels like too fast imo ;(

03:53:862 (1) - 03:54:215 (1) - 03:54:568 (1) - Change to normal sample and soft addition like the others.

04:03:568 (2) - 04:04:185 (3,4) - Maybe might wanna space this one out a bit more :v

04:20:332 (1,2,3) - I guess at this difficulty it wouldn't hurt to extend the 1/8 sliders one more tick like in the music but as you prefer.

04:38:729 - rip combos xd but its fine.

04:46:803 (1) - normal whistle would be cool like 04:52:450 (1) -

05:18:215 - btw really nice effect. Thank mr. mOnstrata!


Solid map. I think the only thing that raised an eyebrow for me is 00:25:274 (1,2) - since 00:24:921 (3,4,1) - gives circular momentum and yeah its easy to snap to 00:25:362 (2) - slider head but then to suddenly go up is the hard part. Also consider custom combo colors and stuffs u know

Hope this helps. Good luck! :v
Kaifin
amazing map

tyui

  1. 01:24:215 (1) - do you think this is too close to burai? maybe it would be nice to make the triangle more pronouced so the path is 100% clear
  2. 02:10:450 (1) - slightly off center from the middle of the triangle
  3. 02:21:744 (1) - same here, pointing these two out because later when you do 02:33:039 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3) - its perfectly centered, so i figured you'd want these to be perfectly centered as well
  4. 03:58:627 (3,4) - maybe this would more intuitive ctrl g'd like how it is at 02:05:509 (1,2,3,4), the variation is fine but with the overlap of 03:58:273 (4,3) - i found it quite unintuitive while playing
  5. 04:09:127 - make this clickable to match with the rhythm you use at 04:31:627 (1,2) - for the same sound in the song? imo is more fitting rhythm
  6. 04:42:744 (4) - slider end off screen
  7. 04:44:685 (2,3,4,5) - spacing the 04:45:038 (3,4,5) - more here would be good to avoid reading confusion, all the other triples in this segment are spaced much more and are very clearly 1/2, maybe put it here like this?

take my stars
Otosaka-Yu
いい :)
Topic Starter
rrtyui

Okorin wrote:

could you set combocolors? ok.
03:57:391 (2) - and the likes have completely hidden repeat arrows which kinda has to be addressed changed the former slider smaller.

Side wrote:

00:20:332 (1) - Technically this is okay but you could consider ctrl+g this slider since all these other sliders starting at 00:16:097 - go like back and forth if that makes sense. You could try something else also but this is the one with the least change needed ;^) ok

00:25:274 (1,2) - I'm not that good a player so idk how good this plays but it doesn't look very intuitive xd you would know that better but if that's a concern to you maybe consider moving 00:25:274 (1) - to 00:25:362 (2) - slider head or ctrl+g 00:25:362 (2) - works also. ok.

00:32:685 (3) - Here you have a whistle but not sure why since there's no sound like 00:15:744 (1) - somewhere and its also not consistent with 00:27:038 (1) - 00:29:862 (1) - etc. Pretty sure its accidental cuz its also on the whole body instead of the slider head xd erased.

00:38:509 (3) - You also added the whistle to the whole body instead of just the slider head by accident :v erased.

00:39:391 (1) - Touches the hp bar. Don't think that's unrankable but just pointing that out. If you move it at x:3 y:41 it doesn't do that anymore and keeps the same spacing as before i don't care about touching hp bar but fixed for spacing problem.

01:20:685 (2) - 03:24:921 (2) - These would be cool as a really slow 3/4 slider too i used that slider (01:20:332 (1) - ) for emphasizing cymbal sound. then a circle + a bit idle time show quietness between

01:21:038 (1) - Really like this slider! thanks :)

01:29:332 (1) - But not this one though but I'm not good at slider art so I can't suggest something else xd I think I don't like it much because it uses .8x SV but the ones before use .5x and .65x. I see what you're going for with making it go faster but imo I think it would make more sense to go back to .5x since the pitch in the music goes back down kinda like 01:24:215 (1) - ...idk this is kinda hard to explain I hope it makes sense cuz it makes sense to me but probably not to anyone else xd uh... i understand and i didnt have consider them i forgot lol well i keep this logic for this song cuz i really like this slider and still emphasizing strong sounds by art slider imo, ill effort ot consider them if i make next maps.

01:54:921 (1,2) - Really like these sliders. Hard to explain why but it has to do with how they both go in the same direction ;)yay

02:06:568 (2,3,4,5,6) - nice! (did something similar in one of my maps lol) thanks :)
02:08:685 (2) - Might be cooler with ctrl+g also since the wub pitch goes up so the slider could also go "up" kinda like how these two both go down and the pitch drops with the both 02:11:156 (1,2) - or how you do that here 02:13:979 (1,2) - hmm i try to change.

Also small suggestion with 02:11:509 (2) - maybe ctrl+h but in the same spot like this. Not necessary though :v And if you do that also do that for 02:22:803 (2) - uh i like now standing like a linear formation.

02:30:568 (3) - Change slider end to soft sample maybe. The sound you follow with the normal-hitnormal doesn't play there like 02:28:803 (1) - ok.

02:31:627 (1) - Same for this one ok.

02:41:156 (3) - imo I suggest changing this to a 1/2 slider something like 02:41:862 (3) - it will help with readability since there's so much rhythm that this pause kinda hurts at this difficulty. umm i wanna emphasize next two circles.

02:48:568 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - I miss fanzhen ;-; qawertgyhujikolp

03:33:568 (1) - Yep same thing here. I guess I don't like the higher SV when compared to the other sliders before. Feels like too fast imo ;( umm.

03:53:862 (1) - 03:54:215 (1) - 03:54:568 (1) - Change to normal sample and soft addition like the others. ok.

04:03:568 (2) - 04:04:185 (3,4) - Maybe might wanna space this one out a bit more :v no i wanna keep this xp

04:20:332 (1,2,3) - I guess at this difficulty it wouldn't hurt to extend the 1/8 sliders one more tick like in the music but as you prefer. maybe it may cause shit combobreak?

04:38:729 - rip combos xd but its fine. i like this xd

04:46:803 (1) - normal whistle would be cool like 04:52:450 (1) - ok.

05:18:215 - btw really nice effect. Thank mr. mOnstrata! yeah i was inspired by him thanks.


Solid map. I think the only thing that raised an eyebrow for me is 00:25:274 (1,2) - since 00:24:921 (3,4,1) - gives circular momentum and yeah its easy to snap to 00:25:362 (2) - slider head but then to suddenly go up is the hard part. Also consider custom combo colors and stuffs u know

Hope this helps. Good luck! :v

Kaifin wrote:

  1. 01:24:215 (1) - do you think this is too close to burai? maybe it would be nice to make the triangle more pronouced so the path is 100% clear uh i dont think like that. these arcs flowing isnt same.
  2. 02:10:450 (1) - slightly off center from the middle of the triangle wow thats important.
  3. 02:21:744 (1) - same here, pointing these two out because later when you do 02:33:039 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3) - its perfectly centered, so i figured you'd want these to be perfectly centered as well ok.
  4. 03:58:627 (3,4) - maybe this would more intuitive ctrl g'd like how it is at 02:05:509 (1,2,3,4), the variation is fine but with the overlap of 03:58:273 (4,3) - i found it quite unintuitive while playing ok. but ill keep this stacking
  5. 04:09:127 - make this clickable to match with the rhythm you use at 04:31:627 (1,2) - for the same sound in the song? imo is more fitting rhythm
  6. 04:42:744 (4) - slider end off screen thats no problem.
  7. 04:44:685 (2,3,4,5) - spacing the 04:45:038 (3,4,5) - more here would be good to avoid reading confusion, all the other triples in this segment are spaced much more and are very clearly 1/2, maybe put it here like this? ok.
thanks for modding. also added combo colors, changed diff name (both are improvised stuff :P ).
Venix
o/ rrtyui!
My mod here!
  1. 00:36:127 (2) - This slider not including 00:36:215 - this bass, please fix it, because it's the main rythm. Mby try make a repeat slider?
  2. 00:36:921 - on this moment you can leave this slider because this part of rythm is not to hearable
  3. 00:52:097 - why break end not here? You can place elements after this moment :P
  4. 01:01:274 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - ik, this is nazi but i cant understand your logic here, this stack not follow the aesthetics rules, for better logic of this 01:02:685 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - mby stack it?
  5. 02:14:332 (2) - i think this slider should be longer than 02:13:979 (1) - this because music here is more energetic

Hmm... i will end this mod soon because i havent more time right now ;P
EDIT:
Some unrankable stuff
  1. 04:42:744 (4) - Please fix end of this slider, this is unrankable
  2. Stack Leniency is 0
  3. Music is not 192kbit or VBR ~1.0
Kyuukai
rrtyui prolly trying to make this ranked so he can earn pp from it D:
+1 Star btw
blahpy

Venix wrote:

[*]Stack Leniency is 0
Is this actually not allowed? I was always under the impression that it was, but I'm no experienced mapper.

osu! wiki wrote:

Rules dictate that if Stack Leniency is set so that stacking no longer occurs, you must manually offset the objects. This option is best left as it is if you really do not know what will happen and what you are doing.
Firis Mistlud
Hmmmm... i am not sure about that, osu only allow to lower the SL to 2, in order to lower it to 0, editing the osu. file is required, which is technically rankable only for slider borders (?) , but i saw some maps getting dq'd for editing to osu. file, i think it's better to let BN and QATs to desire at this point
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