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Aeds Fuwa
hello, from my nm queue
this song is cool

00:03:162 (3,4) - you should space these out more for time-distance equality, otherwise its confusing to read
00:09:004 (2) - you should map this with a circle and a slider or just circles bc there is a stronger sound playing where the reverse lands than where the slider head is
00:11:531 (1) - i think this would look better if it were more wavy
00:16:899 (1) - its better if this slider was straight like the ones after it for more accurate grouping
00:21:004 (1) - i dont think theres a point for this nc, so put it here 00:20:373 (5)
also, emphasize this sound with spacing, its strong 00:20:373 (5)
00:31:267 (4) - you should replace this with circles and move it to the next white tick, where the sound is stronger
00:31:899 (7,8) - the sounds here are sharp, so maybe make the slider shape sharp as well
00:32:373 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - its better if the stream was spaced the same throughout, or if it got smaller at the end since the piano is descending
00:34:110 (1) - the big white tick has a loud drum sound, so map that sound with a circle or sliderhead, but not a sliderend. if not, the rhythm is confusing
00:36:636 (1) - ^^^
00:38:689 (5) - shorten the slider to where you can put a circle on the big tick, because a strong sound plays on it (maybe shorten it to where the sliderend is on the blue tick, or the red tick before the big tick)
00:42:004 (2) - i think its better to map this with 2 circles where the guitar sound plays, or a 3/4 slider with a circle at the end
00:47:373 (3) - hitsound this differently, it makes it sound like a snare when its not
00:48:794 (2) - maybe rotate by 60 degrees since it doesnt look the best
00:51:794 (1) - make this a sharp slider for the sharp sound. same goes for the other sliders in this transition part
00:57:557 (5) - i dont here a sound here, so remove this plzz
01:01:425 (5) - it would be more intense if mapped with just 1/2 circles
01:22:899 (3) - make the last node more curved, it looks awkward
01:46:267 (1) - i get that youre mapping to the vocals, but the drum beats call for a more intense rhythm, so map those
01:47:531 (1) - ^^
02:06:952 (3) - make this less sharp, it doesnt make sense since its not a very very sharp sound
02:33:636 (1) - this whole section up to 02:51:952 (1) is very heavy and i think it would be best to map with sliders that are sharp
and maybe higher sv
03:02:057 (1) - blanket this with 03:01:741 (5)
03:19:741 (1,2) - this spacing makes this seem like a 1/2 gap, but its not, so make spacing smaller so its easier to read (or put a slider)
03:54:004 (3,4) - i dont see why these shouldnt be triples since the whole section was triples. to differentiate it, try making the triples close together
05:51:320 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - the song's over so i wouldve mapped with a spinner, but this is fine too.

pretty solid map, didnt see too many problems. most of the stuff above were suggestions. i like the streams
Topic Starter
Kokezigoku

Aeds Fuwa wrote:

hello, from my nm queue
this song is cool

00:03:162 (3,4) - you should space these out more for time-distance equality, otherwise its confusing to read No change
00:09:004 (2) - you should map this with a circle and a slider or just circles bc there is a stronger sound playing where the reverse lands than where the slider head is No change
00:11:531 (1) - i think this would look better if it were more wavy
00:16:899 (1) - its better if this slider was straight like the ones after it for more accurate grouping
00:21:004 (1) - i dont think theres a point for this nc, so put it here 00:20:373 (5)
also, emphasize this sound with spacing, its strong 00:20:373 (5)
00:31:267 (4) - you should replace this with circles and move it to the next white tick, where the sound is stronger
00:31:899 (7,8) - the sounds here are sharp, so maybe make the slider shape sharp as well No change
00:32:373 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - its better if the stream was spaced the same throughout, or if it got smaller at the end since the piano is descending No change
00:34:110 (1) - the big white tick has a loud drum sound, so map that sound with a circle or sliderhead, but not a sliderend. if not, the rhythm is confusing
00:36:636 (1) - ^^^
00:38:689 (5) - shorten the slider to where you can put a circle on the big tick, because a strong sound plays on it (maybe shorten it to where the sliderend is on the blue tick, or the red tick before the big tick) No change
00:42:004 (2) - i think its better to map this with 2 circles where the guitar sound plays, or a 3/4 slider with a circle at the end
00:47:373 (3) - hitsound this differently, it makes it sound like a snare when its not No change
00:48:794 (2) - maybe rotate by 60 degrees since it doesnt look the best
00:51:794 (1) - make this a sharp slider for the sharp sound. same goes for the other sliders in this transition part
00:57:557 (5) - i dont here a sound here, so remove this plzz
01:01:425 (5) - it would be more intense if mapped with just 1/2 circles
01:22:899 (3) - make the last node more curved, it looks awkward
01:46:267 (1) - i get that youre mapping to the vocals, but the drum beats call for a more intense rhythm, so map those
01:47:531 (1) - ^^
02:06:952 (3) - make this less sharp, it doesnt make sense since its not a very very sharp sound
02:33:636 (1) - this whole section up to 02:51:952 (1) is very heavy and i think it would be best to map with sliders that are sharp
and maybe higher sv
03:02:057 (1) - blanket this with 03:01:741 (5)
03:19:741 (1,2) - this spacing makes this seem like a 1/2 gap, but its not, so make spacing smaller so its easier to read (or put a slider)
03:54:004 (3,4) - i dont see why these shouldnt be triples since the whole section was triples. to differentiate it, try making the triples close together
05:51:320 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - the song's over so i wouldve mapped with a spinner, but this is fine too. No change

pretty solid map, didnt see too many problems. most of the stuff above were suggestions. i like the streams
Thank you mod :)
I corrected anything other than blue letters
Milar001
Hi, from my queue

[Prologue]
00:11:531 (1,3) - Fix blanket
00:12:794 (1,2) - Why did you map this as a jump when music is calm?
00:31:899 (6,7,1) - Distance is same when timegaps are different
00:37:267 (4,5,6,7) - Angle is 180 degrees which is not comfortable to play
00:41:846 (1) - Maybe remove NC to show the change in rhythm (you didin't change anything in spacing so try this)
00:52:425 (5) - Nc?
01:15:794 (5,1,2) - Distance is same when timegaps are different
01:28:820 (2,3) - Try putting NCs to show change in rhythm
01:38:925 (2,3) - ^
02:56:373 (3,4) - Blanket?
03:19:978 (2,3) - NCs?
03:21:320 (1,2,3) - Distance is same when timegaps are different
03:22:267 (1,2) - Fix blanket
03:30:478 - Fill this hole
04:40:820 (2,3) - NCs?
04:43:741 - Consider filling
04:50:925 (2,3) - NCs?
04:55:425 (9,3) - Fix overlap

Hope to help :) GL!
Topic Starter
Kokezigoku

Milar001 wrote:

Hi, from my queue

[Prologue]
00:11:531 (1,3) - Fix blanket
00:12:794 (1,2) - Why did you map this as a jump when music is calm? I felt a strong sound here
00:31:899 (6,7,1) - Distance is same when timegaps are different
00:37:267 (4,5,6,7) - Angle is 180 degrees which is not comfortable to play
00:41:846 (1) - Maybe remove NC to show the change in rhythm (you didin't change anything in spacing so try this) No change
00:52:425 (5) - Nc?
01:15:794 (5,1,2) - Distance is same when timegaps are different
01:28:820 (2,3) - Try putting NCs to show change in rhythm
01:38:925 (2,3) - ^
02:56:373 (3,4) - Blanket?
03:19:978 (2,3) - NCs?
03:21:320 (1,2,3) - Distance is same when timegaps are different
03:22:267 (1,2) - Fix blanket
03:30:478 - Fill this hole
04:40:820 (2,3) - NCs?
04:43:741 - Consider filling
04:50:925 (2,3) - NCs?
04:55:425 (9,3) - Fix overlap

Hope to help :) GL!
Thank you mod :)
I corrected anything other than blue letters
Jian
00:22:899 (1,2,1,2,1,2) - second section of 1,2s space a little bit and 3rd seciton spaced a little bit more than the 2nd section (or just make spaces little bit smaller to add some variations into ur map ) , since music is going louder and you can do that to show it through ur mapping
00:25:425 (1,2,1,2,1,2) - same here
00:27:951 (1,2,1,2,1,2) - same here
00:42:004 (2,3) - make slider longer 1 tick, and change positioning of circle by 2 ticks ( on red tick and white )
00:49:346 (3) - snap to blue tick ( it's too fast now )
01:28:820 (1) - move it by 1 tick to the right ( white one ) it doesn't fit last tick ( white )
01:38:925 (1) - idkn why , but you have really weird placed these ( slow jumps ) replace them into white ticks please if there is white tick circle before , it fits better
02:09:241 (2) - move it on white tick ..
02:10:267 (4) - put there slider/circle , you ignored strong sound ( normally you don't do that )
03:19:978 (1) - ugh.. place this circle 1 tick earlier or 1 tick to the right since it just doesn't fit song properly

Nice song btw
Good Luck! ^^
Topic Starter
Kokezigoku

VayneMaine wrote:

00:22:899 (1,2,1,2,1,2) - second section of 1,2s space a little bit and 3rd seciton spaced a little bit more than the 2nd section (or just make spaces little bit smaller to add some variations into ur map ) , since music is going louder and you can do that to show it through ur mapping
00:25:425 (1,2,1,2,1,2) - same here
00:27:951 (1,2,1,2,1,2) - same here
00:42:004 (2,3) - make slider longer 1 tick, and change positioning of circle by 2 ticks ( on red tick and white )
00:49:346 (3) - snap to blue tick ( it's too fast now )
01:28:820 (1) - move it by 1 tick to the right ( white one ) it doesn't fit last tick ( white )
01:38:925 (1) - idkn why , but you have really weird placed these ( slow jumps ) replace them into white ticks please if there is white tick circle before , it fits better
02:09:241 (2) - move it on white tick .. No change
02:10:267 (4) - put there slider/circle , you ignored strong sound ( normally you don't do that )
03:19:978 (1) - ugh.. place this circle 1 tick earlier or 1 tick to the right since it just doesn't fit song properly

Nice song btw
Good Luck! ^^
Thank you mod :)
I corrected anything other than blue letters
thiev
Oh boi mod v1 :?

It's been a long time since I did one of these, so bear with me.
All of these are suggestions

00:54:320 (1,3) - I think you should move these a bit to the right to make the transition here 00:54:162 (5,1) - flow better
01:13:741 (2,4) - I think making only these as circle is a bit akward as all the section as filler rhythm instead of here. Maybe the use of slider would make it more consistent
01:27:004 (3) - I think moving this up a bit to avoid the head overlap with 01:26:531 (2) - would make it look better
01:32:689 (3,1) - I think you should make the beetween these a bit higher as it could be misread as 1/4 gap I think
02:03:952 (1,2,3) - I think you could space these a bit more to emphasis the really strong sound, as of now it seems a bit bland to me
04:44:846 (2,1) - I think this is misleading for the player , 04:44:846 (2) - as kinda the same shape as 04:44:531 (1) - and it make it seems like it has a gap 1/2 after it.

Nice map, good luck!
Topic Starter
Kokezigoku

thiev wrote:

Oh boi mod v1 :?

It's been a long time since I did one of these, so bear with me.
All of these are suggestions

00:54:320 (1,3) - I think you should move these a bit to the right to make the transition here 00:54:162 (5,1) - flow better
01:13:741 (2,4) - I think making only these as circle is a bit akward as all the section as filler rhythm instead of here. Maybe the use of slider would make it more consistent No change
01:27:004 (3) - I think moving this up a bit to avoid the head overlap with 01:26:531 (2) - would make it look better
01:32:689 (3,1) - I think you should make the beetween these a bit higher as it could be misread as 1/4 gap I think
02:03:952 (1,2,3) - I think you could space these a bit more to emphasis the really strong sound, as of now it seems a bit bland to me
04:44:846 (2,1) - I think this is misleading for the player , 04:44:846 (2) - as kinda the same shape as 04:44:531 (1) - and it make it seems like it has a gap 1/2 after it. 04:44:846 (2) - I moved this a little to the left

Nice map, good luck!
Thank you mod :)
I corrected anything other than blue letters
hi-mei
hello

00:10:899 (3,1,3) - fix stack and blanket
00:36:320 (5,6,7,1,4) - i'd recommend to get rid of this overlap
01:10:899 (1,2) - maybe make a blanket from this?
01:30:478 (2,1) - stack 2 on slider end?
02:35:846 (4,7) - stack?
03:25:110 (2,3,4,5) - this doesnt flows right, the flow change from 03:25:583 (4) - shud be going to the top, but instead it goes down 03:25:741 (5) - and its a bit uncomfortable to play
03:47:215 (5,2) - you can make a blanket form them
01:34:899 - please consider to mute stuff like this, you can use either empty sliderslide.wav or add a green line on 5% to make it silenced.
01:37:425 - etc
well ithe map lacks strict structure but it plays very nice. good luck!
Topic Starter
Kokezigoku

hi-mei wrote:

hello

00:10:899 (3,1,3) - fix stack and blanket
00:36:320 (5,6,7,1,4) - i'd recommend to get rid of this overlap
01:10:899 (1,2) - maybe make a blanket from this?
01:30:478 (2,1) - stack 2 on slider end?
02:35:846 (4,7) - stack?
03:25:110 (2,3,4,5) - this doesnt flows right, the flow change from 03:25:583 (4) - shud be going to the top, but instead it goes down
03:25:741 (5) - and its a bit uncomfortable to play No change
03:47:215 (5,2) - you can make a blanket form them
01:34:899 - please consider to mute stuff like this, you can use either empty sliderslide.wav or add a green line on 5% to make it silenced.
01:37:425 - etc
well ithe map lacks strict structure but it plays very nice. good luck!
Thank you mod :)
I corrected anything other than blue letters
spookem
hey

00:10:267 (2) - you could rotate this slider so it follows a similar structure to this 00:15:320 (1,2,3) - it doesn't feel right being a perfect overlap of the previous reverse slider
01:12:794 (3,4) - improve blanket
01:56:846 (4,5) - this jump feels a little harsh, there isn't a huge amount of emphasis on the slider
03:18:162 (5,2) - you could move this circle over the left side of the round sliders body, just repeating what you did here 03:15:636 (5,1) - but with a different slider shape. the larger jump would also give this pattern more emphasis 03:19:110 (3,4) -
03:30:636 (3,4,5) - this stack looks a little weird, you could curve it onto the slider and it would contrast this sliders direction nicely 03:30:320 (2) -

that's about it, fun map :)
gansta
i likeeeee
Topic Starter
Kokezigoku

sp00kem wrote:

hey

00:10:267 (2) - you could rotate this slider so it follows a similar structure to this 00:15:320 (1,2,3) - it doesn't feel right being a perfect overlap of the previous reverse slider No change
01:12:794 (3,4) - improve blanket
01:56:846 (4,5) - this jump feels a little harsh, there isn't a huge amount of emphasis on the slider
03:18:162 (5,2) - you could move this circle over the left side of the round sliders body, just repeating what you did here 03:15:636 (5,1) - but with a different slider shape. the larger jump would also give this pattern more emphasis 03:19:110 (3,4) -
03:30:636 (3,4,5) - this stack looks a little weird, you could curve it onto the slider and it would contrast this sliders direction nicely 03:30:320 (2) -

that's about it, fun map :)
Thank you mod :)
I corrected anything other than blue letters
CircleFairy
00:12:794 (1) - The jump to this slider feels like it's too much.
00:23:373 (1,2,1,2) - The spacing changes on the second jumps here but the song doesn't.
00:25:899 (1,2,1,2) - Same case as above here.
00:35:846 (2,3,4) - I don't see a reason for the higher spacing here, doesn't feel right.
00:44:215 (3) - The song's intensity goes down here so I think the spacing needs to be lower
00:47:214 (2) - Same as above here.
01:23:531 (1,2,3) - The song kicks in here with Kiai, yet the sliders are so linear with small spacing.
01:46:741 (3) - Spacing here seems a little much.
01:49:899 (7) - Same as above.
02:57:004 (1) - I feel like this can flow better.
03:29:846 (1) - Can end on white tick.
04:30:478 (1,2,3) - You can do better :p
04:40:820 (1) - Bit high on the spacing of this, it will flow better with a bit less spacing I believe.
04:45:004 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - After seeing the really good streams you've been doing I feel you can make this better.
05:56:531 (5,6,7) - You could add sliders here where the song fades while reducing hitsound volume, might be a nice touch to the ending.

Hope some of this helped, really like the map and I wish you luck! :)
Topic Starter
Kokezigoku

CircleFairy wrote:

00:12:794 (1) - The jump to this slider feels like it's too much.
00:23:373 (1,2,1,2) - The spacing changes on the second jumps here but the song doesn't. No change
00:25:899 (1,2,1,2) - Same case as above here. No change
00:35:846 (2,3,4) - I don't see a reason for the higher spacing here, doesn't feel right. No change
00:44:215 (3) - The song's intensity goes down here so I think the spacing needs to be lower
00:47:214 (2) - Same as above here.
01:23:531 (1,2,3) - The song kicks in here with Kiai, yet the sliders are so linear with small spacing. changed a bit.
01:46:741 (3) - Spacing here seems a little much.
01:49:899 (7) - Same as above.
02:57:004 (1) - I feel like this can flow better.
03:29:846 (1) - Can end on white tick.
04:30:478 (1,2,3) - You can do better :p
04:40:820 (1) - Bit high on the spacing of this, it will flow better with a bit less spacing I believe.
04:45:004 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - After seeing the really good streams you've been doing I feel you can make this better.
05:56:531 (5,6,7) - You could add sliders here where the song fades while reducing hitsound volume, might be a nice touch to the ending.

Hope some of this helped, really like the map and I wish you luck! :)
Thank you mod :)
I corrected anything other than blue letters
hi-mei
you forgot to mute all of them
01:24:794 - 01:27:320 - 01:29:846 - 01:31:425 - 02:07:267 - 02:09:794 - 02:12:320 - 03:15:952 - 03:18:478 - 03:21:004 - 03:22:583 - 03:22:583 - 04:29:215 - 04:26:689 - 04:33:320 - 04:41:373 -
Topic Starter
Kokezigoku

hi-mei wrote:

you forgot to mute all of them
01:24:794 - 01:27:320 - 01:29:846 - 01:31:425 - 02:07:267 - 02:09:794 - 02:12:320 - 03:15:952 - 03:18:478 - 03:21:004 - 03:22:583 - 03:22:583 - 04:29:215 - 04:26:689 - 04:33:320 - 04:41:373 -
I forgot, thank you!
bigfrog
hi o///// nm from queue, seems few problem so just some suggestion :>

Prologue
  1. 01:34:110 (2,3) - it could be blanket actually, like this https://imgur.com/a/IZZhWxD
  2. 01:46:741 - quite confusing not place anything here because you filled them at other part like 01:47:373 (5,3) -
  3. 01:49:899 - same as above^
  4. 02:03:320 (7,2) - may be better to avoid the overlap like this imo >_>
  5. 03:15:636 (5,1) - i'm not sure if it's rankable but it just triggered me lol
  6. 03:56:373 (1,2) - could try blanket here o/

    try to use smaller ds at calm part, it'll improve the part of emphasize :>

that's all, GL~
Asuka_-
from my q

Prologue

00:16:899 (1,2,3) - 00:15:320 (1,2,3) - で綺麗に速度変化させているので こっちも緑線足してもいいかもしれません。 (自分ならlow→highにするかな、、)

00:21:004 (3,4,1) - ここの配置少し窮屈な印象を受けました。 もう少し離してもいいかも?
https://puu.sh/AKwFX/b51a3b5f4d.png

00:38:057 (1,2,3) - ほぼ等間隔配置ですが、リズムが違うので、00:38:531 (3,4,5) - を左に移動させるとプレイヤーが読みやすくなると思います。

01:13:425 (1,2,3) - ここも読みづらいds issueだと思います。

01:29:531 (3) - flow的にctrl+gとかどうでしょう?

02:04:425 (3) - ここのsv変化が少し急のような気がしました。 その前の02:03:320 (7) - は曲調に対して少し速い気がするので02:03:320 - をx1.0に変更しませんか?

02:54:478 - 曲調が変わるのがここなので 02:51:952 - に引いているx1.0線はここでもいいような気がします。

04:40:583 (1,1,1) - NC付けてあっても04:40:267 (6,7) - より距離が狭く、プレイヤーは少し読みづらいような気がします。
思い切って3/4使った方がplayability的には良いかもです。
https://puu.sh/AKwYb/112c3a0c26.png

05:56:215 (4,1) - 05:55:899 (2,3) - の差を考えると、最後の最後でタイミングミス誘いそうな配置に見えました。 1/1のbreakなのでここはもっと離してもいいと思います。
こんな感じでもいいかもしれません。 https://puu.sh/AKwz9/d0793ab332.png 

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02:37:110 (5,6,7,8) - 02:46:425 (5,6,7,1) - prise

頑張ってください!!
Topic Starter
Kokezigoku

bigfrog wrote:

hi o///// nm from queue, seems few problem so just some suggestion :>

Prologue
  1. 01:34:110 (2,3) - it could be blanket actually, like this https://imgur.com/a/IZZhWxD
  2. 01:46:741 - quite confusing not place anything here because you filled them at other part like 01:47:373 (5,3) -
  3. 01:49:899 - same as above^
  4. 02:03:320 (7,2) - may be better to avoid the overlap like this imo >_>
  5. 03:15:636 (5,1) - i'm not sure if it's rankable but it just triggered me lol No change
  6. 03:56:373 (1,2) - could try blanket here o/

    try to use smaller ds at calm part, it'll improve the part of emphasize :>

that's all, GL~
Thank you mod :)
I corrected anything other than blue letters
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