jericho2442 wrote:

Normal
02:38:272 (4) - the empty space after this feels totally odd, the music does not weaken or become silent yet the mapping stopped, i would advise to put something after this point Added a circle, I don't know how it plays though
02:46:012 - i would advise to add a note here, it will increase the flow on the pattern after, atm the pattern after feels to start wrong due to the red tick start while the music kind of pulls you to start on a main beat done, the pattern looks weird now though
03:00:720 (4) - you need a new combo here to flow with your pattern, which atm you are breaking I'm not sure I understand that but okay

pointed out some sliders what could be better in irc as well not "better" but "more perfect" ;_;


Insane
00:42:353 (2,3,4) - this part of the jump pattern felt odd, before and after you have created a feel of wide jumps, then comes this part what feels too tight horizontally, the patten would feel better if it was made a more taller triangle spacing on the (2,4), atm it just feels abit odd changed the patterns after
(suggestion) 00:50:287 (1,2) - really did not like this jump, just felt toooo far for the current feel of the map, something like this would flow better tbh I thought it was fine, since the map is accelerating due to the drums, and these two are the highest spacing, then it comes back to normal
00:56:679 (8) - this note needs removing tbh, at a point what you have been fully following the vocals to add a note what does not follow the vocals felt odd to me, also it would flow with how you did 01:59:376 - better done
02:36:724 (5,1) - out of everything this is prolly the jump what felt the worst, it totally tricked me and really did not suit the current part of the map, i do advise to either get rid of this jump, or try to make it work in a different way I kind of liked it... It separated the pattern mapped on the drums (before) and on the weird sounds (after)... removed anyway
(suggestion) 03:16:587 (1,2) - again this jump just felt toooo far Same answer, except I'll add that I agree that this jumps is exaggerately huge - but it's kind made on purpose
03:19:103 (8) - and remove this note for the same reason i said over removing the other note done as well
(suggestion) 03:28:971 (1,2) - too far jump again imo Didn't fix the first one, so not fixing it
03:35:358 (8) - and remove same reason xD done

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maps are getting good they aren't
just somethings what really felt to break your flow abit this map has no flow -too many patterns are bizarre - so it can't be broken
check them things out, but for now you get a star I'd rather have more good mods ;_;

FireballFlame wrote:

The .mp3 is pretty quiet... maybe you could increase the volume? Actually, it was too loud at first... maybe I overdid it :/

[Normal]
00:50:287 (1) - I think this "jump" is confusing. It appears consistently and is easy to spot once you've figured it out, but it kinda comes out of nowhere. Same at 00:54:163 (1), 01:52:990 (1), 01:56:861 (1), 03:12:717 (1), 03:16:587 (1). It might surprise at first, but it's actually rather intuitive, so the next ones flow perfectly well.
01:43:315 (5) - Center this? Looks better with the spinner. grmblmbl fine
02:27:822 (1,2,3) - More jumps... Well, its not like they're hard to hit, but spacing changes are so rare in this map that it could catch players off guard. Same at 02:32:466 (1,2,3), 02:37:111 (1,2,3,4). These are intuitive as well...
02:38:272 (4,5) - Again, center? no, it completes the pattern with (1,2,3)
02:46:012 (7,1,2) - Would look better if the distance 7->2 wasn't smaller than 7->1 imo. that's a bit nazi, but fixed
03:38:261 (1,2) - Make them symmetric to the center? It would kind of break the spacing... And I don't see a reason why there should be jumps here.

[Jar's Hard]
01:53:184 (6,1) - The jump surprised me. I'm not sure why though, since there is a jump at the same point in the first chorus. Maybe because it looks like 01:48:926 (1,2,1,2,3), which isn't one. Same at 03:29:166 (6,1).

[Insane]
Hmmm... I don't really like the difficulty spikes in this diff. It feels like a Hard diff (0:00-0:40) with Insane parts suddenly thrown in (0:40-0:44). Maybe you can try to even this out a little. As in, make the jump not that insane. Or the rest of the map a bit harder. Or both. Actually, the difficulty is meant to be rather uneven, seeing the song itself is rather calm at first, then suddenly goes super excited.

Garven wrote:

I 'spose I should mod this now, eh?

[General]
Remove rock from tags since it'll be in the genre Alright.
American really needed in there? The language will be set to English anyway... removed
Strange that the first timing section is 155.020 BPM and all the others are 155.030. derp. fixed

[Normal]
00:49:513 (1,1) - Not a fan of tiny combos like this, tbh I tried to keep them consistent with Insane. Insane goes (1,2,3) (1,2), so Normal does that as well... Except they're sliders :/
Looks pretty solid now.

[Insane]
00:28:039 (2) - Easily avoidable overlap it doesn't overlap o.o
00:56:873 (1) - Have it right here looks more centered while in play mode. you're right, fixed
02:44:464 (3,5) - Maybe shape these more to the BG? sweet idea, I should have thought of it earlier
03:12:330 (4,1) - Kind of odd choice for spacing. Changed their placement, but I wonder if it's any better
03:25:488 (1) - Set this combo color to red. To have the same combo colours as the first chorus ? okay

Set looks much better than when I play-tested. Yar~

Azure_Kyte wrote:

Hi there, Odaril. It's an AzureMod. <3

Suggestion Please improve this

[Normal]

00:30:168 (2) - This makes the Slider's Curve look a lot nicer to the eye - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/89304. You would need to move (3) a little to maintain spacing, but the effect looks better this way. Done. I'm not used to making these sliders so I kind of made random things
00:56:873 (5) - Awesome, love it thanks <3
01:37:897 (1) - You should totally copy and place the fixed 00:30:168 (2) here. Done.
01:59:570 (5) - This is great, too. Simply make the few minor changes included in this screenshot (right side) http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/89305 It makes the curve much more circular, like the BG. done
02:46:787 (2) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/89306 Follow the slider point pattern here please, Odaril. Pleaaaaaaaaaaaaaase? done
03:19:296 (5) - That's..... Very well done! thanks <3


A very well done Normal Difficulty. keep up the good work!


[insane]
00:30:168 (2) - Sexy Curvy Slider. thanks =p
00:42:160 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - Have this as a flip of the first two groups of four beats. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/89311 okay
00:52:615 (6) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/89313 :3? hm, no, I like mine more
01:25:319 (2) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/89315 :3? yours isn't symmetrical =(
01:44:863 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - Same story here as 00:42:160 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) ah, this time I won't
02:30:531 (1) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/89318 perhaps change the Slider points here; the curve on the original is too tight, in my eyes. I don't even know why I did that curve in the first place, it makes no sense - fixed

03:19:296 (8) - <3 <3

Again, an awesome map. thanks




All in all, a good mapset. Keep it up, but consider the few Slider point changes i mentioned; They are really all I could find to improve on it.

Odaril wrote:

Garven wrote:

I 'spose I should mod this now, eh?

[Insane]
00:28:039 (2) - Easily avoidable overlap it doesn't overlap o.o

SPOILER

RandomJibberish wrote:

Dun make a sound

General
I'd suggest Tick rate 2 for this song. I really don't like how it sounds in this case
An easy would be nice I'll try...

Insane
00:43:708 (1) - Put this somewhere else? idk, it seems awkward doubling back after such a high pace section. changed its position
00:56:873 (1) - This sliderpoints are lol, but it works I guess . Also idk if that dent in the top's intentional, but it seems kinda random :/ it's intentional. When the singer goes for a tremolo the sliderball goes over that dent
01:30:736 (4,5) - This spacing confused me at first glance, but I'm probably just silly It plays like a stack, or at least I think it does, so I won't change this
01:59:570 (10) - Maybe make like this?

Normal
01:30:156 (1,2) - Uh, yeah.
01:40:993 (1,2,3) - ^, Looks like a resnap issue
02:55:301 (1,2) - ^
03:01:107 (2) - ^
03:09:234 (1,2) - ^
03:13:104 (1,2) - ^
yes all of these are resnap issues... I fixed the red sections, and resnapped in 1/1 like a noob

02:41:371 - Feels kinda awkward without a note here it would be too soon after the spinner...

Natteke wrote:

xierbaliti wrote:

-Normal-
00:32:877 (1,2) - D:
01:24:740 (1,2) - D: D:
02:48:335 (2,3) - D: D: D:
oh god I could I miss them ;_;

-Insane-
emm.. about timing, you are using 155.03bpm in this diff but another two diffs not. =_= I forgot to change the timing in Insane ;~;
00:46:423 - move this green line to 00:46:417. fixed ;_;
00:59:582 (3) - +whistle?
02:02:279 (3) - +whistle?
03:21:618 (1) - +whistle?
For the three above: no, I already explained why in previous replies to mods
03:22:005 (2) - +clap? okay

1. Rechecking :3
2. The jumps in [Normal] are fine now, so I'm not sure if an [Easy] would be needed... as a minor suggestion you should consider mapping an [Easy] diff.

1. 00:35:199 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Isn't this combo's lenght a bit long for the easiest diff? Perhaps New Combo on (6)?
2. 01:35:575 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - This combo seems a bit long too, Perhaps New Combo on (4)?
3. 02:37:113 (1,2,3,4,5) - Expected a New Combo on (4) after the jumps like the previous patterns.
4. 02:55:881 (2) - This sounds really odd to me, it sounds better like this

1. Everything seems fine here.

1. 00:41:966 (4,1) - It would be great if these 2 objects had the same spacing of the other circles (1.59~1.61) like you did with 01:43:315 -
2. 00:54:163 (1,2) - Expected a jump here. (Same for 03:12:718 (1,2) -
3. 01:34:414 (3,1) - Due to the previous jumps this anti-jump seems a bit random and confusing IMO.

Gonzvlo wrote:

[General]

1. Rechecking :3 Thanks :3
2. The jumps in [Normal] are fine now, so I'm not sure if an [Easy] would be needed... as a minor suggestion you should consider mapping an [Easy] diff. Normal was supposed to be the Easy diff... but it's the easiest I could make :/

[Normal]

1. 00:35:199 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Isn't this combo's lenght a bit long for the easiest diff? Perhaps New Combo on (6)?
2. 01:35:575 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - This combo seems a bit long too, Perhaps New Combo on (4)?
   For both of them: this map has rather long combos because the lyrics themselves have rather long sentences. I don't think it's really a problem, so I didn't change them.
3. 02:37:113 (1,2,3,4,5) - Expected a New Combo on (4) after the jumps like the previous patterns. You're right, fixed
4. 02:55:881 (2) - This sounds really odd to me, it sounds better like this I like mine but I don't see a reason why I should refuse. Changed.

[Jar's Hard]

1. Everything seems fine here.

[Insane]

1. 00:41:966 (4,1) - It would be great if these 2 objects had the same spacing of the other circles (1.59~1.61) like you did with 01:43:315 - ah damn I didn't pay attention to it when re-making the pattern .-. fixed
2. 00:54:163 (1,2) - Expected a jump here. (Same for 03:12:718 (1,2) - My point was to go increasing in difficulty for jumps, so... Having a stack here felt better instead of going to huge jumps right away
3. 01:34:414 (3,1) - Due to the previous jumps this anti-jump seems a bit random and confusing IMO. It could indeed be, but of all the testplays, none missed that note. What I could do is reduce the spacing of the triangle, so the patterns lead to the center and this note appears less confusing.

NoHItter wrote:

General
Kind of unsure about the timing. Discussed in PM
IMO you should use Jarby's kiai. It suits the song better IMO. okay

Normal
00:24:363 (1) - IMO making this into three notes sound better. One at 00:24:363, 00:24:750 and 00:25:137. Something like 00:29:781 (1,2). fixed
00:38:295 (6) - Shouldn't this part have no hitsound following the previous patterns? you're right, fixed
01:27:060 (1) - Normal-Finish here? instead of Soft-Finish? I blame the red section. Fixed.
01:37:897 (4) - Same as above damn red sections >=(
02:23:953 (x) - IMO it would be better if you add a note with a finish here. No, I'm not following the drums here, only the voices going mm mm mm mmmm mm mm m


Insane
00:31:329 (4) - IMO it looks ugly stacked on a slider. Looks fine ingame, and I use this kind of pattern pretty often... not changing
01:30:736 (4,5) - The overlap looks ugly. It flows exactly the way I want it to though =( not fixing
02:23:953 (x) - IMO it would be better if you add a note with a finish here. okay
02:27:824 (1,2,3) - IMO the small spacing here doesn't fit. It's supposed to establish a contrast between the patterns based on the voice, and this one which is based on the drums... changed the pattern
02:32:468 (1,2,3) - Same as above changed
02:38:274 (5) - I don't think the music here fits for a Crumpled Slider there's the guitar... which is what the slider is made for. not changing

Xact wrote:

What's with the huge dead zones? There's like a minute where you're just sitting there, looking at the background, doing nothing. Probably the worst dead zones I've seen in a map. Don't get me wrong, I like having a break, but those are a bit too long.