1. Insane (5.01 stars, 400 notes)

Zunv wrote:

Hey there. From #modreqs

Im still kinda new to this so don'T expect something perfect here



Insane

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  At first, you should make sure there is more structure to your map. Use grid snap and or DS more often. It helps to make your map look not that messy

1. 00:05:115 (1,2,3,4,5) - this Pattern looks odd. Also you use strange and varying DS. 00:05:589 (3,4) - are playing as a stream but the DS is bigger than 00:06:063 (4,5) -
   
2. 00:05:589 (3) - make this a blanket with start of 00:05:115 (1) - http://puu.sh/qYHEv/f7ade4c2d7.jpg
3. 00:06:852 (1,2,3,4) - DS also is just random which lets the map look without structure.
4. 00:08:115 (4,5) - try to also fix your blanket here http://puu.sh/qYHPy/e4094b4054.jpg
5. 00:10:642 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - also those jumps look very random. You could For example stack 00:11:115 (2) - with end of 00:11:905 (4) - and then try to create a blanket here 00:11:905 (4,5) - Fort example http://puu.sh/qYIkd/5c14eafd1f.jpg (you don't have to do it like that. Its just a way with more structure. Be creative )
6. 00:13:168 (1,2) - blanket or make the slidershape different but this looks to random
7. 00:15:379 (1,2) - Fix stack
8. 00:16:326 (1,2) - ^
9. 00:20:747 (1,2,3,4) - looks random again http://puu.sh/qYIEW/5e2635fd91.jpg i think u tried to put 00:21:063 (2,3) - with the same ds away from 00:20:747 (1) - . But it didn't look well.
   
   Here is How i do that: Enable your DS and place your notes http://puu.sh/qYIO4/03d446e2f5.jpg Now CTRL+G 00:20:747 (1) - select 00:21:063 (2) - and drag it while holding CTRL (Shift if you have grid snap enabled) around the end of 00:20:747 (1) - http://puu.sh/qYIVm/82caf89938.jpg (it will enable a ruler to get a better snap). Now either you double your DS OR you move 00:21:221 (3) - 1 tick to the right in the timeline http://puu.sh/qYJ4E/12b80a4e86.jpg Now do the same with 00:21:379 (3) - as you did with 00:21:063 (2) - (move back in timeline after). http://puu.sh/qYJaw/b1f173972f.jpg At the end CTRL + G 00:20:747 (1) - and blanket 00:21:379 (4) - with start of 00:20:747 (1) - for example. And the Final result: http://puu.sh/qYJdV/0ebbf57b5e.jpg
   
10. 00:21:852 (5,6,7,8) - This also looks without any structure. There is just random DS changes.
11. I could go on with pointing all those cosmetical issues. But i guess you should see at that point whats bad and what not i think. So i will no longer point them out that detailed.
12. 00:33:852 (2) - fix blanket
13. 00:47:273 (5) - ^
14. 00:48:537 (2) - fix blanket OR stack with 00:47:905 (7) -
15. 00:52:326 (6,7) - make those the same angle (looks better)
16. 01:02:431 (2) - you always use straight or curved slider. Why is this shaped like this?
17. 01:04:484 (6) - fix Blanket with 01:04:958 (7) -
18. 01:06:221 (2) - NC because SV change
19. 01:11:273 (4) - start NC here + Fix Blanket
20. 01:13:800 (1) - ^
21. 01:16:326 (1,2) - Fix Blanket
22. Fix those jumps to make them look not that random (you could copy 01:18:221 (1,2) - and put them where 01:18:536 (3,4) - are http://puu.sh/qYKCz/ffc1bc6b5a.jpg
23. 01:18:852 (5) - Move NC from 01:19:484 (1) - to 01:18:852 (5) -
24. 01:21:379 (7) - NC
25. 01:22:010 (3) - There is no reason to put that back and forth slider sincer there is no beat where it reverses ( it is overmapped)
26. 01:27:458 (6) - delete since there is no beat this allows you mapping to (overmapped)
27. 01:28:563 (5) - ^
28. 01:28:800 (7) - this alider also doesn't make sense. it ends unsnapped to no beat.
29. 01:32:352 (5) - overmapped -> delete
30. 01:34:247 (7) - ^
31. 01:37:405 (5) - ^
32. 01:38:668 (5) - ^
33. 01:40:089 (6) - ^
34. 01:43:800 (5) - ^
35. 01:44:194 (7) - ^
36. 01:44:747 (1,2,3,4) - those are off beat snap them to 1/3 http://puu.sh/qYLyS/72461a361d.jpg
37. 01:46:168 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Overmapped -> delete the offbeat notes and fix the stream
38. 01:47:668 (6) - Overmapped -> delete
39. 01:48:773 (5) - ^
40. 01:49:010 (1) - slider makes no sense because again ends to where no beat is hearable
41. 01:52:563 (5) - Overmapped -> delete
42. 01:54:458 (3) - ^
43. 01:57:773 (4) - ^
44. 01:59:668 (6) - ^ (man you like to overmap xD )
45. 02:02:431 make this clickable?
46. 02:09:379 (5) - a single circle makes more sense imo.
47. 02:11:905 (1) - end your slider here 02:16:326 and consider mapping the rest of the song? But the spinner feels weird that long.

Okai so as you can see, you need more structure to your map and you should stop overmapping
Good Luck with your map. Oh and btw, you should not just give random kudosu to people writing in the Thread like you did with naiper

Mei wrote:

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  开头的地方能用减速会好一点

1. 00:03:063 (1,2) - 按照你前面的下发，这两个应该合并为一个长滑条比较好
2. 00:08:115 (4) - 可以nc一下
3. 00:21:379 (4) - 这个4我认为和2，3离得太近了。个人认为没有必要做blanket，234做个三角可能会好些
4. 00:22:958 (1) - 长白线上落了一个挺明显的重音，放在滑条尾有点弱化了
5. 00:25:800 (1,2,3) - 这个间距处理的比较迷
6. 00:28:010 (7,1) - 离的有些近
7. 00:34:484 (3,4,5,6) - 试下这样的节奏
8. 00:38:747 (1,2) - 这个也用短滑条吧
9. 00:44:431 (1) - 这个删掉听起来自然一些
10. 00:54:694 (3) - 按着你前面的间距来看，这个跳出现的比较突兀啊
11. 01:28:010 (2) - 可以吧尾巴叠在那个三连的地方
12. 01:33:221 (2,3,4) - 很难度，建议改成这样的节奏
    
    到kiai节奏和排列都失控了，看的出来你是想做出那种激昂的感觉但是图直接就乱了。感觉基本功还差些，说句实在话多看看别人的图把，想好自己要做什么样的图出来。