Hanatan - Sekai wa Koi ni Ochiteiru

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Cellina

Moly wrote:

[Falling in Love]

00:22:036 (3,4,5) - 연타 진행 방향이랑 숏슬라 방향이랑 너무 엇갈려서 이상해보여요. 이렇게 쓰는 사람이 많은 걸 보면 취향차이일지도 모르겠는데. http://puu.sh/rlkAG/ab17d9bc59.jpg 요런 모양도 괜찮지 않을까요? 딱히 문제는 없는거같아요
01:17:651 (3,4,5) - ^ ^
00:31:151 (3,4) - http://puu.sh/rlkox/1a65a7334a.jpg 이렇게 해야될듯? 보컬을 따라간건데.. 지금 리듬이 맞는거같네요
00:38:536 (3,4) - ^ ^
01:28:382 (3) - 이 아이는 1/2로 바꾸는 건 어떨까요? 저긴 꽉꽉 채워도 좋을 것 같아 보여요. 기타음 따라간거에요
01:28:959 - 여기 이렇게 http://puu.sh/rlkJs/da9af321ea.jpg 채워넣으면 촥촥 감길텐데 아쉽네요... 냅둘께요
02:08:420 (1,2) - 블랭킷 더 잘 할 수 있을 것 같아요.
03:07:497 (1) - 너무 벌어져서 모양이 엉성해보여요.





제가 드럼충이라서 음 따라서 찍은 패턴에 거부감이 있는듯...

랭크되길 바랍니다!! :):)
Lami
00:31:151 (3) - 이거 보컬인가요? 드럼이라고 하기도 좀 그런게 00:31:036 (3) - 는 빠져있어서..
뭔가 좀 빠진느낌이드는데 보컬이면 빨간리듬에 리듬넣고 드럼이면 흰틱에 넣는게 좋을듯하네요
보컬은 빨간리듬에서 끝나는거같은데 흠
00:56:420 (1,2) - 블랭킷 좀 많이 off
01:02:882 (3,4,5,6) - 배치 일직선으로 하는게 나을듯
01:12:112 (1) - 뉴콤 제거
02:31:497 (1) - ^
04:27:805 (1) - ^
02:24:459 (4) - 드럼힛사 miss
02:53:305 (4,5) - 스트림 간격 miss
04:04:728 (1,2,3,4) - 같은 뉴콤에 리듬은 막 다른게 나오는데 하다못해 간격이라도
04:50:882 (7) - 같은부분 앞에서 뉴콤넣었으면 여기도 넣어야할꺼같네요
05:06:689 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 노래상 드럼이 1/4에 스냅되어있지 않은거같은데요..?
만약 피아노에 맞추신거면 힛사도 1/4에 제대로 되있지않은 드럼보단 피아노에 맞춰서 가야할꺼같은데..

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Kibbleru
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04:06:228 (4) - sounds like it should be on the 1/8th 04:06:286 -
04:52:728 (1,4) - overlap doesnt look nice here
04:58:843 (4) - i'd prefer something like this
00:30:920 (2,3) - this would be more comfortable to play
as well as the other one similar to this ^
01:59:536 (2,3) - same
02:54:574 (1) - i think these look better if the head and tail didnt touch :d
03:25:728 - why skip this? i thought you like to focus on instrumentals
03:33:112 - ^
03:45:343 (2,3) - why not just extend these by 1 repeat
04:04:728 (1,2,3,4) - although vague, i think this part should be snapped something like this
01:12:112 (1) - 02:31:497 (1) - 04:27:805 (1) - what are these NC for?..
Topic Starter
Cellina

Lami wrote:

00:31:151 (3) - 이거 보컬인가요? 드럼이라고 하기도 좀 그런게 00:31:036 (3) - 는 빠져있어서..
뭔가 좀 빠진느낌이드는데 보컬이면 빨간리듬에 리듬넣고 드럼이면 흰틱에 넣는게 좋을듯하네요
보컬은 빨간리듬에서 끝나는거같은데 흠
00:56:420 (1,2) - 블랭킷 좀 많이 off 제눈에는 완벽한거같은데
01:02:882 (3,4,5,6) - 배치 일직선으로 하는게 나을듯
01:12:112 (1) - 뉴콤 제거
02:31:497 (1) - ^
04:27:805 (1) - ^
02:24:459 (4) - 드럼힛사 miss
02:53:305 (4,5) - 스트림 간격 miss
04:04:728 (1,2,3,4) - 같은 뉴콤에 리듬은 막 다른게 나오는데 하다못해 간격이라도
04:50:882 (7) - 같은부분 앞에서 뉴콤넣었으면 여기도 넣어야할꺼같네요 여기는 모딩받고 뺀부분이여서 일단 놔둘께요
05:06:689 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 노래상 드럼이 1/4에 스냅되어있지 않은거같은데요..?
만약 피아노에 맞추신거면 힛사도 1/4에 제대로 되있지않은 드럼보단 피아노에 맞춰서 가야할꺼같은데.. 저는 괜찮은거같은데

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Kibbleru wrote:

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04:06:228 (4) - sounds like it should be on the 1/8th 04:06:286 -
04:52:728 (1,4) - overlap doesnt look nice here
04:58:843 (4) - i'd prefer something like this
00:30:920 (2,3) - this would be more comfortable to play
I actually like current rhythm so i will keep them
as well as the other one similar to this ^
01:59:536 (2,3) - same
02:54:574 (1) - i think these look better if the head and tail didnt touch :d
03:25:728 - why skip this? i thought you like to focus on instrumentals
03:33:112 - ^
03:45:343 (2,3) - why not just extend these by 1 repeat
04:04:728 (1,2,3,4) - although vague, i think this part should be snapped something like this
01:12:112 (1) - 02:31:497 (1) - 04:27:805 (1) - what are these NC for?..
Kibbleru
can you reply to my mod properly? i would like to see some reasons for whatever u didn't fix.

get somebody to translate if u need

also i think you should set some combo colours
Topic Starter
Cellina

Kibbleru wrote:

can you reply to my mod properly? i would like to see some reasons for whatever u didn't fix.

get somebody to translate if u need

also i think you should set some combo colours
I fixed evrything from your mod except that rhythm thingy cuz imo those rhythms are suitable for both vocal and instruments. And I thought I set combo colours... I'm unable to check right now, so I will look at it later

+ added combo colours
Kibbleru
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Topic Starter
Cellina

Kibbleru wrote:

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thx~
Kibbleru
rebubble
Beomsan
he y
Topic Starter
Cellina

Beomsan wrote:

he y
wh y
Seijiro
#modreqs

02:09:112 (2) - maybe a ctrl + g?
02:33:805 (5,6,7) - I fee like this triplet should be different than 02:33:343 (2,3,4) - , so maybe unstack it?
I'd make 03:09:343 - 03:24:112 - this section with a lower SV in general, since it's really really quiet in comparison to the rest
03:44:420 (1) - (nazi) second curve can be done better, like this
03:45:805 (3) - either add a repeat on it, or reduce spacing between 03:45:343 (2,3) - , since the spacing between 03:45:805 (3,1) - is misleading right now (as a player I'll think it's still a 1/4 snap)
03:52:036 (2,4) - I'd really reduce the jumps on them, since they are really soft and background sounds here, so it's a bit strange to have such big spacing on them
04:30:112 (3) - idk, it feels a bit misleading having it like that, since it looks like a generic 1/4 jump. Try something like this or similar

poke me
Topic Starter
Cellina

MrSergio wrote:

#modreqs

02:09:112 (2) - maybe a ctrl + g?
02:33:805 (5,6,7) - I fee like this triplet should be different than 02:33:343 (2,3,4) - , so maybe unstack it? replaced them as a 1/4 slider
I'd make 03:09:343 - 03:24:112 - this section with a lower SV in general, since it's really really quiet in comparison to the rest well I disagree with it, cuz imo there are enough sounds if it's compared with 02:54:574 - (or even higher), and there are no much difference to use a different sv, so I will leave it.
03:44:420 (1) - (nazi) second curve can be done better, like this
03:45:805 (3) - either add a repeat on it, or reduce spacing between 03:45:343 (2,3) - , since the spacing between 03:45:805 (3,1) - is misleading right now (as a player I'll think it's still a 1/4 snap) added a 1/4
03:52:036 (2,4) - I'd really reduce the jumps on them, since they are really soft and background sounds here, so it's a bit strange to have such big spacing on them not really, i think guitar sounds can make a emphasis for those notes
04:30:112 (3) - idk, it feels a bit misleading having it like that, since it looks like a generic 1/4 jump. Try something like this or similar

poke me
no comment = fixed xD
Seijiro
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Topic Starter
Cellina

IamKwaN wrote:

that english name is unofficial translation, so feel free to ignore

and no, i don't think you need to add ver 花たん there simply because you have artist field for that purpose already

current meta is fine, Electoz also asked me the correct romanisation for 花たん, i have answered him as follows:

IamKwaN wrote:

i think i have searched about this before, here's what i have

She uses various styles for the Hanatan part in her album covers, so we don't have to make things complicated here.
https://image-proxy.namuwikiusercontent ... L1500_.jpg
http://static.zerochan.net/Hanatan.full.1414031.jpg
http://4.bp.blogspot.com/--QIzJRmDuSY/V ... /cover.jpg
Hanatan is good to go
good luck!
Metadata is fine
Electoz
Sry for the late

[General]

  1. Isn't one of the tags is supposed to be "honeyworks" instead of "honeywork"? Correct me if I'm wrong.


[Storyboard]

  1. 01:22:266 -The lyrics(ly-15) here should be "くて" instead of "くって". According to this which is from the official video(Thanks to Kanau).


[Falling in Love]

  1. 00:29:420 (3) - Pretty sure this is 1/6.
  2. 04:37:036 (1) - Remove NC? Since you didn't NC 01:21:343 (2) - 02:40:728 (2) either.
  3. 04:49:959 (1,7) - Swap NC?


Popped the bubble due to a wrong snap slider on 00:29:420 (3) . Call me back for a rebubble after you fixed the snap~
Topic Starter
Cellina
@Electoz all fixed, and I decided to remove storyboard cuz i lost my psd file (...) and it doesn't shows much stuffs
and I guess honeyworks is the right one..
Electoz
To other BNs: Storyboard is now removed.
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Rebubbled!
Kibbleru
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Seijiro
Can I?
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