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Deathray - I Wanna Lose Control

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Suslishka
105 posts
Joined August 2010
Topic Starter
Suslishka
This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 1 августа 2012 г. at 01:07:06

Artist: Deathray
Title: I Wanna Lose Control
Source: Open Season 2
Tags: sony pictures animation cartoon ost
BPM: 168
Filesize: 3325kb
Play Time: 02:00
Difficulties Available:
  1. Hard (4,97 stars, 322 notes)
  2. Normal (2,78 stars, 135 notes)
Download: Deathray - I Wanna Lose Control
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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here you are~ :)
Last edited by Suslishka , edited 125 times in total.
IceBeam
osu! Alumni
1,957 posts
Joined December 2009
IceBeam
BPM: 168,00
Offset: 159
vincerio
687 posts
Joined April 2009
vincerio
[General]
Romove "," (comma) from tag
why there is no tags in Hard diff...yay you forget it!
Your mp3 has 237kbps bitrate. Compress it to 192 or lower
deleting un-used .osb file and then do full-submitting.
preferable BG dimension is 4:3 (1024x768) now 1024x741 It would be nice if you resize this :3


[normal]
the way you seperate combo are so random, you really need fixing it by create your own combo rule *w* many choices to do
followed stanza, lyric, pattern etc.
Really use Finish hitsound on Really Heavy beat! D:
Using both normal whistle and finish hitsound at the same time is so cruel for people's ears...
Hold ALT and increase Distance Spacing to 1.0x or something
placing it so close that not meant it will be easily to play...

00:15:694(3)- a bit ugly overlapped... make it more clear to see
00:33:016(1) - a bit of screen... there many spacing for you to deal with this
00:59:444 - Unrankable spinner.. Make sure auto-pilot can scoring more than 2000 of score when spinning it... (2000 is still too hard for normal diff)
01:03:016(1,2,3,4,1,2) - very confuse here and there are many part alike this o: ... please make your map more clear to see... People will enjoy this way...
01:29:980(4) - unsnapped.... why it end up with blue tick Owo?
01:37:301 - Nooooo way~~~~

[Hard]
It's very rare to see people set Overall difficult higher than... Approach rate..

ah~ the same problem I'm already point in normal diff x.x

Quote from Official ranking submit criteria

# Each map set must have at least two difficulties, one of which must be below a 3-star difficulty level. This is so that players of all levels of experience are able to enjoy maps of the songs they love. A map set should not have more than two difficulties in the same difficulty level (not based on stars, but on how the map "feels"). That is, a map set can have no more than two "Insane" difficulties, etc. Finally, no map set should have more than 6 difficulties total.
a lot of work and more easier diff is needed

Nice try~
Star~
Suslishka
105 posts
Joined August 2010
Topic Starter
Suslishka
thanks vincerio, i'll fix hard and general bags, and i'm remaking a normal now :)
Fight69
1,639 posts
Joined January 2010
Fight69
Hoi ! Here we go ! ;)

[General]

Your mp3's bitrate is 320kbps, which is not rankable
You need a mp3 between 128kbps and 192kbps
So, here's a new one for you ! :)

http://www.mediafire.com/?gkul62wx42e1dka

The new offset is : 199
Don't forget to resnap everything !

[Hard]

Hmm...the slider velocity is way, way, way too high compared to the distance snap, you should reduce it :o
Also, everything is very...square, don't you think ? :|

00:05:242 - Why a break here ?
00:07:301 (1) - No new combo
00:08:730 (2) - This circle is a bit hidden by the previous slider, it make it ugly to see :<
00:11:230 (1) - No new combo
00:58:016 (3,4) - These two circle are really hard to notice, since they are in a pattern with a short spacing
00:58:730 (1) - 5 grid down
01:23:194 (5,8) - Don't put a circle completely behind a slider >.>
01:37:341 (1) - Delete ALL these finish and add one ONLY at the end ! It's just the best way to destroy your ears ! :cry:

~Starz'd !
Suslishka
105 posts
Joined August 2010
Topic Starter
Suslishka
thaaaank you very much, Fight69! :)
Teras
902 posts
Joined October 2009
Teras
Uh, The hard is really hard to read. Won't mod the easy diff cuz I don't know how to do that. :V

So yah, Let's begin.

[Hard]

Overall: Huge spacings, I would prefer if you could fix this or at least look over them when O pint them out.

Okay, everything is just suggestions. Feel free to use them if you agree.

AR+1 feels better if you ask me. Easier to read some tricky parts then

00:14:127 (3) New combo?
00:15:556 - 00:15:734 (5-6) Tricky to read, one note is hidden at the jump there is kinda random if you ask me. I would suggest moving them closer to each other.
00:42:698 (3) New combo?
00:43:234 (5) ^

Pretty much it. I can probably find more, but you should look over the map yourself first, any parts that are hard to read? Etc.

I will star it, but from what I see there is some things you need to work on still.
Kuroneko-sHerald
1,081 posts
Joined August 2008
Kuroneko-sHerald
[Easy] & [Hard]
00:13:056 - Add a timing section with kiai.
00:19:127 - End kiai.
00:35:913 - Start kiai.
00:44:484 - End kiai.
00:58:770 - Start kiai.
01:10:198 - End kiai.
01:18:770 - Start kiai.
01:38:770 - End kiai.
01:50:198 - Start kiai.
02:00:556 - End kiai.
01:56:627 - Add a timing section here and lower volume to 50%
02:00:198 - Add a timing section here and lower volume to 30%

[Easy]
00:43:324 (1) - Add a break after this spinner.

[Hard]
Hard? It seems insane XD
00:15:556 (5,6) - Spacing. These two are just too distant.
00:35:913 (1,2) - 2 grid right (grid size level 3).
00:40:020 (10,1) - Spacing.
01:53:948 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11) - What? It's messy.

No star for now.
Aleks719
osu! Alumni
2,436 posts
Joined May 2010
Aleks719
Звезда за песенку, но модить не буду, т.к. если буду, то убью часа 3-4, а мне этого ой как не хочется)
Пропустил в эдиторе разок каждую диффу, что бросилось:

Хард
очень быстрые слайдеры и аццкие прыжки, как тут 00:35:734 (9,1,2).
Прям реально аццкие. И слайдеры быстрые. Очень. Да.
01:24:395 (1) - имхо, на 1/2 длиннее сделать.
Изи
В целом всё хорошо, но местами чёткий ритм глучится реверсивными слайдерами, и вот, несоответствие возникает. т.е. мне бы бит со свистком, а там слайдер уже.
Suslishka
105 posts
Joined August 2010
Topic Starter
Suslishka
thanks guy, i'll fix all bags you wrote tomorrow - i have no time right now)
HakuNoKaemi
3,828 posts
Joined October 2009
HakuNoKaemi
[Easy]
00:04:841 (x) - Add Hit Circle
00:43:324 (1) - Add Break Time after this
01:50:198 (1) - 2 less repeat and
01:51:627 (x) - Add Hit Circle

[Hard]
00:01:448 (8,9) - Unexpected jump, if you do play the first time
00:09:841 (x) - Add Hit Circle
uhm--- the spacing you're using make it confusive
wanhyrzh
376 posts
Joined December 2009
wanhyrzh
Hi~Sorry for late...
I think this one is much better fitting the ranking guidance...
just some suggestions:
SPOILER
[General]
you may need to start/end the KIAI at the long white ticks, since some MATs/BATs may complain about this. so you may end your 1st KIAI at 0018770, and last KIAI at 0155913

[esay]
00:16:806(4) I suggest you to move it to 0016627 since you don't need to follow to lyrics everywhere imo, and this slider here is a little weird imo.
00:43:323(1) turn the playback-rate to 25% and you will find this spinner should start at 0043234. what's more, this is to short for an easy imo, try to lengthen it and end at 00:45:913.

[uh oh]
omg the slider velocity....I think 1.8 is really enough
end your 3rd KIAI here 0108770 but not 0110198(it's a long break between them!) or you may need to put some notes.
00:15:198(4) out of the screen, try to make the whole part up 3 grids
01:24:395(1) turn the playback-rate to 25% and you will find this spinner should start at 0124306
01:35:734(9) delete this note and add a spinner here?
star~
Suslishka
105 posts
Joined August 2010
Topic Starter
Suslishka
HakuNoKaemi
thanks ^o^
it is hard so big jumps in my spacing are fine, aren't they?)

wanhyrzh
thank you ;3
i'll mod kiai later (to be honest, after i added a kiai, osu started to glitch and i can't play maps now ; _ ; so i am very upset because of it)
why don't you all like my great velocity? xD in this map there are not many sliders, so is it a really big problem?
wanhyrzh
376 posts
Joined December 2009
wanhyrzh
wanhyrzh
thank you ;3
i'll mod kiai later (to be honest, after i added a kiai, osu started to glitch and i can't play maps now ; _ ; so i am very upset because of it)
why don't you all like my great velocity? xD in this map there are not many sliders, so is it a really big problem?
lol about the velocity, I don't think it's too hard to follow since this song is not so fast,
I just think it's fun but not so fit the song...anyway it's no a big problem imo. ;)
wmfchris
osu! Alumni
5,072 posts
Joined March 2008
wmfchris
Add audio lead-in to 2 sec?

[Hard]
00:00:199 (1,3,5,7) - clap?
00:08:413 (1,2) - delete whistle for ending of (1), (2), (4) right 2 grids
00:11:448 (6,8) - (6) remove whistle, (8) clap
00:13:056 (1,2) - remove whislte, clap? Make it symmetrical along the y-axis too
00:14:663 (1,2,4) - whistle?
00:16:270 (6) - clap?
00:18:413 (7,1) - whisle/clap?
00:39:127 (5) - clap?
00:46:627 (6) - finish
01:32:520 (1,2) - stack properly
01:53:056 (7,9) - clap

Many spacing error, plx fix them by checking the spacing muliple :/

[Easy]
00:00:199 (1,2) - clap at beginning
00:03:413 (2,3) - (2), (3) beginning clap?
00:04:841 (4,5) - ^
00:06:627 - ^
add some hitsounds like hard?

._.
JoJo
1,177 posts
Joined July 2010
JoJo
Hi~Take the request from kanpakyin's queue.
Red-You must fix it.
Blue-You'd better fix it.
Black-Suggestion only.

[General]
●Delete the .osb file in the folder and then do a full-submit.

[Easy]
●Consider to rename it to normal?
00:16:627 (4) - New combo.
00:27:341 (3) - New combo.
00:33:056 (3) - New combo.
00:34:484 (1) - No new combo.
00:35:913 (3) - New combo.
00:38:770 (3) - New combo.And, stacking it will be better.
00:41:627 (3) - New combo.
01:25:377 (6) - New combo.
01:27:341 (1) - Not a good idea to make a slider like this.

[Hard]
●Hmm...Too many line sliders...That's not good.
●Just to mention you..You have set a low distance spacing that makes your map feels too crowd.
00:07:341 (4) - New combo.
00:15:734 (6) - Very ugly.
00:17:877 (4,5,6,7,8,1,2) - Hard to read.
00:35:734 (9,1) - Unreadable spacing.
00:37:877 (2,3,4) - Don't overlap plz.
00:42:699 (1) - Confusing pattern.Putting the 3,4,5,6 on the top of the screen which instead of in the left will be better.
00:55:377 (4) - Confusing spacing.
00:58:591 (5) - ^
01:03:056 (2,3,4,5) - ^
01:27:699 (2,3,4,5,6) - ^
01:54:306 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11) - Hmm....Too hard to read.

Anyway..Have a star~ :3
Kurai
osu! Alumni
7,734 posts
Joined March 2009
Kurai
Easy
- Approach rate 3 would be better, it will make the map more readable
00:35:913 (4) - hs slider is just 1/2 far from the end of the previous slider, in easy difficulty it's bad, you ought to reduce 00:35:198 (3) by 1/2
00:37:520 (2) - I think you should remove this reverse and add a circle at 00:38:413, it would be more readable
00:41:984 (2) - Move this circle 1 grid right

Hard
- Why have you a so huge slider velocity, it totally don't fit the song, I think 2.00 would make your map really better ! You ought to fix that, it would make your map nicer and funnier, but if you fix, you will need to remake all sliders. It's a boring job but 2.50 is really too much D:
- And please, try to use the same spacing for the whole map, spacing changes are just good when you want to make a jump, but the way you change the spacing in this difficulty is not good :/ Choose a distance spacing value, and use the same for the whole map please (Yes, it means that you need to change all of you pattern, but believe me, your map will be so much better after that.)

Please, fix what I have said for the hard difficulty, it's really important if you want to make a great map.
I will make a recheck after~

Star~
Suslishka
105 posts
Joined August 2010
Topic Starter
Suslishka
KuraiPettan

hard:

nooooo, i won't use the distance snap for hard -_- is it soooo neccesary?? D:

really, in this map there is small spacing in verses and big one in refrains. isn't it logical? in addition, there is no finish hitsounds in verses, because i don't need to single it out, and in the refrains there are a lot of finish hitsounds because this is refrain and i need to single it out. so can i use various spacing? DDDDD:
and by the way, there is the stabile spacing in hard O_o it is quite big, but stabile, it is hard after all

i did the jumps but here they wrote that i need to remove it.

easy:

>00:35:913 (4) - hs slider is just 1/2 far from the end of the previous slider, in easy difficulty it's bad, you ought to reduce 00:35:198 (3) by 1/2
can i use it ONE TIME? T_T

and all other remarks i corrected :3 thanks for modding~ :3
Tanmak
896 posts
Joined August 2009
Tanmak
Sorry about my late modding. T_T

Then, I modded.

[General]

A lot of needlness kiai. Remove all kiai except of kiai in 01:21:627

[Normal]

I think there is no problem, I see.

[Hard]

Wow.. This diff is so difficult in others meaning... :o

In first, note spacing is very irregular.(Especially about 00:33:056 - 00:39:127)
Then, very surprising space will be to play uncomfortable.
In possible, arrange to set same spacing each note group.

00:01:627 (9) - surprise note. D:
01:05:377 (5,6) - Don't cover part of end in slide note with note (5).
Return arrow might hide there. Player which first play this diff can't notice that and miss, I think.


Hmm....[Hard] is maybe..need to some mod more..I think.

star.
Suslishka
105 posts
Joined August 2010
Topic Starter
Suslishka
thanks for modding :)

In first, note spacing is very irregular.(Especially about 00:33:056 - 00:39:127)
there is small spacing in verses and big one in refrains

01:05:377 (5,6) - Don't cover part of end in slide note with note (5).
Return arrow might hide there. Player which first play this diff can't notice that and miss, I think.
but i met the way of this spacing many times in ranked maps D: when the circle is on the end of slider, it is a part of hardness
gdeath
1,598 posts
Joined May 2009
gdeath
[Normal]:
  1. 01:06:270 (4,5,6,7) - suggest to remove finish.
  2. 01:33:056 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - add too much finish, recommend to remove some of them.
[Hard]:
  1. 00:01:627 (1) - Switch combo(adjust color to the earth yellow)? Will look better.
  2. 00:20:198 (1,2,3,4) - Remove finish, not sound good imo.

    The suggestion about new combo as below.
  3. 00:26:448 (8) - Switch combo
  4. 00:27:341 (1) - Remove combo
  5. 00:28:770 (5) - Swtich combo
  6. 00:47:341 (10) - New combo?
    --------------------------------------------------------------------------
  7. 01:00:377 (1,2,3,4) - Remove finish, sound a bit noisy.
  8. 01:06:091 (1,2,3,4) - ^
  9. 01:23:234 (1,2,3,4) - ^
  10. 01:51:806 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - suggest do not add finish on every note.
  11. 01:53:948 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11) - here again.
The map itself has no main error. I'm just not a super fan for finish hitsound.
Apart from those stuff, you made a good effort. Good luck!
/me shoots a star.
Suslishka
105 posts
Joined August 2010
Topic Starter
Suslishka
thank you gdeath, fixed~
y u c a
844 posts
Joined April 2009
y u c a
hi :3

General

music track lead-in are different
plz add same time T.T

Normal

00:04:484 (3) - remove finish
00:04:841 (4) - new combo
00:23:056 (3) - remove finish(all of slider)
00:24:484 (3) - add finish(end of slider)
00:35:913 (4) - new combo and remove finish(all of slider)and add finish00:35:913(start of slider)
00:43:056 - try this
SPOILER
00:55:913 (2) - new combo
00:57:341 (4) - remove finish
01:03:056 (1,2) - ^
01:04:484 (1) - add finish
01:05:198 (3) - remove finish
01:06:270 (4) - new combo
01:06:270 (4,5,6,7) - remove finish
01:23:056 (5) - remove finish
01:34:484 (4) - new combo
01:59:484 (5) - ^




Hard

AR+1

too many finish hitsound ....noisy..T.T
01:08:591 - kiai time end
Louis Cyphre
2,684 posts
Joined October 2009
Louis Cyphre
Я ничего не нашел. Кроме этого (Uh Oh) я думаю стоит удалить из тайтла.
Suslishka
105 posts
Joined August 2010
Topic Starter
Suslishka
спасибо :3
HeatKai
osu! Alumni
2,801 posts
Joined April 2010
HeatKai
Got request from crimmi queue.
so here's the mod


[easy]
00:01:627 (1) - cannot make one straight slider ?
00:43:056 (1) - too short for easy :o
00:50:198 (x) - add a circle
00:53:056 (5) - spacing
00:53:413 (x) - add a note
00:53:770 (1) - spacing


[hard]
Actually you can delete circle put repeat slider or whatever slider follow the rhythm :o
If it must follow how's the mapper map :P

00:28:770 (8) - new combo
00:46:627 (6) - new combo
01:21:984 (2) - spacing

It's fine for now :)





star ~ *

Good luck Suslishka


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