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Rido
mod berdatangan~ jangan berharap banyak2 ea chi
a
- 00:20:915 (20915|3,20998|2,21082|1) - jadiin trill 2 3 2, biar bisa bedain mana efek bssst (burst) sama piano (1/4)
- 00:30:498 - mungkin dari sini bisa dikasih tambahan note di tiap 1/2, buat emphasize piano yg juga ke emphasize di bagian ini
- 00:58:998 (58998|3,59082|2,59165|3,59165|1,59248|2,59332|1) - inconsistent sama ini 01:12:332 (72332|2,72415|1,72415|3,72498|2,72582|1,72665|3,72665|2) - padahal menurutku pattern drumnya sama
- 01:32:330 - tambah note di 1 biar konsisten sama part berikutnya 01:33:163 (93163|1,93163|0,93163|2,93830|1,93830|0,93830|3) -
- 02:12:913 - 02:13:080 - sengaja dikosingin?
- 03:26:497 - kyknya ini jg hrs dikasih 1/4 ln, soalnya ada suara lonceng juga
- 03:37:163 - ^
- 03:42:497 - ^ (tp yg ini minor sih soalnya nanti flownya jelek)
- 04:31:742 (271742|2) - remove?
- 08:22:678 (502678|1,502828|1) - ghost note
[Ping]
10 mins of awesomeness

1|2|3|4

Serpihan Dunia
First off - https://puu.sh/zf78f/1ac97d3882.jpg

00:04:308 - move note here from 3 to 1 for balance

00:16:221 (16221|2) - move this note from 3 to 4 for PR and also pls consider changing it to LN and end it at 00:19:762 - (on 1/8 snap)

00:30:498 - , 00:30:664 - , 00:30:831 - , 00:30:998 - , 00:31:164 - , 00:31:331 - , 00:31:498 - I suggest adding another note because there's 2 octaves playing for piano here.

00:39:999 - add a note on 3 for consistency with 00:38:665 -
02:11:997 - ^

04:22:826 - add a "Clap" hitsound here

06:51:328 - a piano sound here, suggestion to add it

:) :) :) :) :) :) :)
Topic Starter
Ichigaki

Rido wrote:

mod berdatangan~ jangan berharap banyak2 ea chi
a
- 00:20:915 (20915|3,20998|2,21082|1) - jadiin trill 2 3 2, biar bisa bedain mana efek bssst (burst) sama piano (1/4) // meh ini gue malah kepikiran buat ganti pattern sebelumnya, tapi bagian pianonya aku jadiin trill sih
- 00:30:498 - mungkin dari sini bisa dikasih tambahan note di tiap 1/2, buat emphasize piano yg juga ke emphasize di bagian ini // iya sih, dulu fokus 1/2nya doang dan gue pikir LN aja cukup. gue nemu pattern yang enak sekarang.
- 00:58:998 (58998|3,59082|2,59165|3,59165|1,59248|2,59332|1) - inconsistent sama ini 01:12:332 (72332|2,72415|1,72415|3,72498|2,72582|1,72665|3,72665|2) - padahal menurutku pattern drumnya sama // untuk ini aku udah nemu pattern yang cocok, juga disamakan ke nada serupa setelahnya
- 01:32:330 - tambah note di 1 biar konsisten sama part berikutnya 01:33:163 (93163|1,93163|0,93163|2,93830|1,93830|0,93830|3) - // daripada ditambah, mending aku jadiin 2 semua
- 02:12:913 - 02:13:080 - sengaja dikosingin? // imo emang kosong wkwkwk
- 03:26:497 - kyknya ini jg hrs dikasih 1/4 ln, soalnya ada suara lonceng juga // sure
- 03:37:163 - ^ // sure
- 03:42:497 - ^ (tp yg ini minor sih soalnya nanti flownya jelek) //ya, ini gausah
- 04:31:742 (271742|2) - remove? // buat apa toh dihapus? aku ngerasa pas kok itu
- 08:22:678 (502678|1,502828|1) - ghost note // mungkin yang note pertama aja yang ghost note, setelahnya masih kedengeran

TheNewBungping wrote:

10 mins of awesomeness // thank you!

1|2|3|4

Serpihan Dunia
First off - https://puu.sh/zf78f/1ac97d3882.jpg

00:04:308 - move note here from 3 to 1 for balance // pretty much good

00:16:221 (16221|2) - move this note from 3 to 4 for PR and also pls consider changing it to LN and end it at 00:19:762 - (on 1/8 snap) // that's a nice idea

00:30:498 - , 00:30:664 - , 00:30:831 - , 00:30:998 - , 00:31:164 - , 00:31:331 - , 00:31:498 - I suggest adding another note because there's 2 octaves playing for piano here. // added as the prior mod above

00:39:999 - add a note on 3 for consistency with 00:38:665 -
02:11:997 - ^ // nice catch, same as above

04:22:826 - add a "Clap" hitsound here // added there

06:51:328 - a piano sound here, suggestion to add it // i'm gonna leave it like what it is now ww

:) :) :) :) :) :) :)
Thank you fellows, have my kudos.
_VianK_
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_VianK_
hai kak '-')/

M4M dari thread

1/2/3/4

dunia yang pecah

00:02:381 (2381|0) - suara whistle nya ngapain sih....? hapus aja sama suara suara yang ada whistle nya

00:10:537 - kayak nya ada suara deh

00:14:100 (14100|2) - same problem

00:20:221 (20221|2,20276|1) - hapus, trus adain note bagian situ soalnya disitu 1/4

00:38:499 (38499|0,38499|2,38499|3,38665|3,38749|1,38749|0,38749|2,38832|3,38999|0,38999|3,38999|2) - rearrange dikit aje, buat ngehindari stack

01:00:248 - napa nggak di cover? suaranya sama kayak yang ini 01:00:082 (60082|3) -

03:29:330 (209330|0,209330|2,209497|3,209497|1,209663|3,209663|2,209830|1,209830|2) - untuk bagian yang kayak gini w liat semua nya ke arah kiri, trus patternnya juga rada monoton, tolong dong kak variasiin dikit


03:30:830 (210830|3,210886|1,210941|0,210997|3) - 1/4 snap 03:31:163 (211163|0) - add 1 (jadiin 2) 03:31:219 (211219|3,211274|2,211330|0,211386|1,211441|2) - 1/4 snap

03:31:997 (211997|2,211997|1) - ini ngapain 2 note? satu aja gih.... soalnya suaranya mirip ama 03:32:330 (212330|2) - tapi ini cuman 1 note

03:34:497 (214497|3) - mantap ini dikasih LN ampe 03:35:830 - sama juga buat bagian - bagian lainnya

dah itu aja...sorry ya
Maxus
[Butiran Debu]

00:08:122 (8122|1) - this note felt awkward, its supposed to be at 00:08:143 - , try look at 00:08:143 -

00:20:665 (20665|3,20721|1,20776|2) - Try 2-3-4 here? felt the pattern will overall flow better

00:30:998 - Felt the pattern will accentuate the pitch better if you do https://puu.sh/zhbjN/c6d441e476.png instead.

00:49:415 (49415|2,49498|0) - Personally prefer to be at col 1 and col 3 instead here coz the current shield pattern kinda out of place.

00:58:887 (58887|2,58943|1) - Isn't the snap supposed to be 1/8? i heard 3 sound coming instead of 2 here.

01:26:248 - think you should add note here, quite obvious sound here.

01:33:163 - should add another note here, cause you also make double+LN at 01:30:497 -

02:11:163 (131163|3,131247|2,131330|1,131413|0,131497|2,131497|3,131580|1,131663|0,131663|3,131747|2,131830|1,131830|3,131830|0) - Prefer if you actually Ctrl+H here, since you mirror between 02:09:330 - and 02:10:663 - , i figure this one should too , otherwise being the same pattern as 02:09:830 - makes it doesn't blend well with the piano pitch which is already different.

02:23:830 - Should be double cause have same sound as 02:22:830 -

03:00:997 - Should be double note here if follow consistency at 03:03:663 - and 03:06:330 -

03:20:663 - think you can do small LN pattern like you did at 03:25:997 -

03:26:330 - This pattern should be different with 03:25:997 - due to quite distinct pitch differences here, try https://puu.sh/zhfZl/fcdb79852e.png

03:30:663 - Felt the snap around here is really weird ._. , for instances, 03:30:997 - should be at same snap as 03:30:663 - , and 03:31:497 - have 1/8 again here, if i try to do the snap, i will do it like https://puu.sh/zhgtQ/43a7cd2684.png , you can try confirm with others, but i'm positive with this snap.

05:46:818 - I really prefer if you change how the LN placement every pitch changes, like this place and 05:47:818 - . like https://puu.sh/zhh1c/031876feed.png , it will makes the instrument more emphasized.

05:55:891 - Isn't this supposed to be timed? (i mean, need additional red line), I think it needs it, try https://puu.sh/zhiSs/4e8151b473.png , or you can copy paste directly to the notepad:

355891,612.244897959184,4,2,1,30,1,0
356503,625,4,2,1,30,1,0
356971,1000,4,2,1,30,1,0
357471,967.741935483871,4,2,1,30,1,0
357954,666.666666666667,4,2,1,30,1,0
358287,612.244897959184,4,2,1,30,1,0
358899,594.059405940594,4,2,1,30,1,0
360681,612.244897959184,4,2,1,30,1,0
362211,576.923076923077,4,2,1,30,1,0
362787,652.173913043478,4,2,1,30,1,0
363113,588.235294117647,4,2,1,30,1,0

06:54:028 - not sure if the small LN is intended or not, it feels come out of nowhere.

09:14:880 - Intended not get the timing? seems awkward this one suddenly not timed.

09:24:351 (564351|0,564401|1) - I will make this 2-1 instead to make the change from 1/8 to 1/6 more apparent.

09:32:501 - This is a very good place to have 0,80x SV here, the moment immediately emphasized when having a bit slower SV.

09:33:701 - if you do above, do 0,85x SV here.

09:46:001 (586001|3) - really recommend move this to col 2, so that there's break between minijack at 09:45:776 - and OH trill at 09:46:151 -

09:50:651 (590651|0) - Will appreciate if this got moved to col 4, because it's too easy to stumbled here while this is already at minute 9, and its not really nice make players choked here.

Really nice map here, it's nice getting marathon that keep things interesting for 10 minute , even 5 minute is quite rare already.
Call me back~
Topic Starter
Ichigaki

_VianK_ wrote:

hai kak '-')/

M4M dari thread

1/2/3/4

dunia yang pecah

00:02:381 (2381|0) - suara whistle nya ngapain sih....? hapus aja sama suara suara yang ada whistle nya // ok

00:10:537 - kayak nya ada suara deh // aku dulu dengernya cuma 6 note, ternyata kedengeran 7 wkwk

00:14:100 (14100|2) - same problem // ada apa emangnya?

00:20:221 (20221|2,20276|1) - hapus, trus adain note bagian situ soalnya disitu 1/4 // oh nggak, ini imo jelas 1/6, justru ga cocok kalo pake 1/4

00:38:499 (38499|0,38499|2,38499|3,38665|3,38749|1,38749|0,38749|2,38832|3,38999|0,38999|3,38999|2) - rearrange dikit aje, buat ngehindari stack // loh ini mah sengaja

01:00:248 - napa nggak di cover? suaranya sama kayak yang ini 01:00:082 (60082|3) - // terlalu kecil suaranya, ga di map juga ga masalah

03:29:330 (209330|0,209330|2,209497|3,209497|1,209663|3,209663|2,209830|1,209830|2) - untuk bagian yang kayak gini w liat semua nya ke arah kiri, trus patternnya juga rada monoton, tolong dong kak variasiin dikit // karena nadanya makin kecil, makanya ke arah kiri semua. also itu udah bervariasi patternnya


03:30:830 (210830|3,210886|1,210941|0,210997|3) - 1/4 snap 03:31:163 (211163|0) - add 1 (jadiin 2) 03:31:219 (211219|3,211274|2,211330|0,211386|1,211441|2) - 1/4 snap
// itu semua bzz bzznya aku ambil 1/8, trus setelahnya itu rata-rata 1/6 kecuali 03:31:163 - (baru sadar kalo cuma 1/2), also 03:31:580 - ternyata 1/8 sampe 03:31:663 -

03:31:997 (211997|2,211997|1) - ini ngapain 2 note? satu aja gih.... soalnya suaranya mirip ama 03:32:330 (212330|2) - tapi ini cuman 1 note // ya ini aku jadiin satu note aja deh, beda sendiri juga. aku dengernya ini hampir sama kaya 1/2 note sebelum dan sesudahnya sih, tapi yaudah lah

03:34:497 (214497|3) - mantap ini dikasih LN ampe 03:35:830 - sama juga buat bagian - bagian lainnya // ga cocok

dah itu aja...sorry ya // mmkay, thanks

Maxus wrote:

[Butiran Debu]

00:08:122 (8122|1) - this note felt awkward, its supposed to be at 00:08:143 - , try look at 00:08:143 - // lmao, definitely missed this

00:20:665 (20665|3,20721|1,20776|2) - Try 2-3-4 here? felt the pattern will overall flow better // yeah, that's nice

00:30:998 - Felt the pattern will accentuate the pitch better if you do https://puu.sh/zhbjN/c6d441e476.png instead. // perfect

00:49:415 (49415|2,49498|0) - Personally prefer to be at col 1 and col 3 instead here coz the current shield pattern kinda out of place. // yeah, okay

00:58:887 (58887|2,58943|1) - Isn't the snap supposed to be 1/8? i heard 3 sound coming instead of 2 here. // sorry, but i heard 2 note instead

01:26:248 - think you should add note here, quite obvious sound here. well, rearranged

01:33:163 - should add another note here, cause you also make double+LN at 01:30:497 - // ah i missed this

02:11:163 (131163|3,131247|2,131330|1,131413|0,131497|2,131497|3,131580|1,131663|0,131663|3,131747|2,131830|1,131830|3,131830|0) - Prefer if you actually Ctrl+H here, since you mirror between 02:09:330 - and 02:10:663 - , i figure this one should too , otherwise being the same pattern as 02:09:830 - makes it doesn't blend well with the piano pitch which is already different. // yeah agree with that, seems i forgot to change this one earlier lmao

02:23:830 - Should be double cause have same sound as 02:22:830 - // okay

03:00:997 - Should be double note here if follow consistency at 03:03:663 - and 03:06:330 - // okay

03:20:663 - think you can do small LN pattern like you did at 03:25:997 - // i got it

03:26:330 - This pattern should be different with 03:25:997 - due to quite distinct pitch differences here, try https://puu.sh/zhfZl/fcdb79852e.png //not a fan with that pattern, rearranged instead

03:30:663 - Felt the snap around here is really weird ._. , for instances, 03:30:997 - should be at same snap as 03:30:663 - , and 03:31:497 - have 1/8 again here, if i try to do the snap, i will do it like https://puu.sh/zhgtQ/43a7cd2684.png , you can try confirm with others, but i'm positive with this snap. // i did the exact timing except 03:31:247 (211247|3) - because i don't hear any sound there.

05:46:818 - I really prefer if you change how the LN placement every pitch changes, like this place and 05:47:818 - . like https://puu.sh/zhh1c/031876feed.png , it will makes the instrument more emphasized. // changed

05:55:891 - Isn't this supposed to be timed? (i mean, need additional red line), I think it needs it, try https://puu.sh/zhiSs/4e8151b473.png , or you can copy paste directly to the notepad:

355891,612.244897959184,4,2,1,30,1,0
356503,625,4,2,1,30,1,0
356971,1000,4,2,1,30,1,0
357471,967.741935483871,4,2,1,30,1,0
357954,666.666666666667,4,2,1,30,1,0
358287,612.244897959184,4,2,1,30,1,0
358899,594.059405940594,4,2,1,30,1,0
360681,612.244897959184,4,2,1,30,1,0
362211,576.923076923077,4,2,1,30,1,0
362787,652.173913043478,4,2,1,30,1,0
363113,588.235294117647,4,2,1,30,1,0

// added those timings

06:54:028 - not sure if the small LN is intended or not, it feels come out of nowhere. // yeah it's intended, i heard whooping sound there, so it's fun to add a LN there

09:14:880 - Intended not get the timing? seems awkward this one suddenly not timed. // added the timing

09:24:351 (564351|0,564401|1) - I will make this 2-1 instead to make the change from 1/8 to 1/6 more apparent. // well that's nice

09:32:501 - This is a very good place to have 0,80x SV here, the moment immediately emphasized when having a bit slower SV. // sounds great

09:33:701 - if you do above, do 0,85x SV here.

09:46:001 (586001|3) - really recommend move this to col 2, so that there's break between minijack at 09:45:776 - and OH trill at 09:46:151 - // moved

09:50:651 (590651|0) - Will appreciate if this got moved to col 4, because it's too easy to stumbled here while this is already at minute 9, and its not really nice make players choked here. // moved

Really nice map here, it's nice getting marathon that keep things interesting for 10 minute , even 5 minute is quite rare already.
Call me back~
Maxus
just a bit more , about wrong snap problem

08:50:868 (530868|1) - this one should be at 08:50:910 -

09:05:214 (545214|0) - same, should be at 09:05:248 -

10:22:601 - It's 1/8 piano i think? it should be like https://puu.sh/zj57B/fcab4585c5.png
Topic Starter
Ichigaki

Maxus wrote:

just a bit more , about wrong snap problem

08:50:868 (530868|1) - this one should be at 08:50:910 -

09:05:214 (545214|0) - same, should be at 09:05:248 -

10:22:601 - It's 1/8 piano i think? it should be like https://puu.sh/zj57B/fcab4585c5.png
updated!
Maxus
Good luck here!
-mint-
tfw indo in the description cant read

translation pls?
Topic Starter
Ichigaki

Maxus wrote:

Good luck here!
THANKS!

qqqant wrote:

tfw indo in the description cant read

translation pls?
you can use online translator, it already got the meaning imo
Arzenvald
op ichi
be aware with hitsound issue (if it exist) w
Lirai
06:04:598 - Unsnapped Timing Line
nothing else, according to your current timing

06:03:113 - Mnurut w ini bpmnya 101 bkan 102 dan bpm100nya snap di 06:04:895 ,pattern setelah timing ini klo mnurut gw sih agak telat.

also soft-hitnormal pls wkwkwk, old style banget.. probably u get this hs feedback issue lmao
should find someone who capable to check those timing too
Topic Starter
Ichigaki

DE-CADE wrote:

06:04:598 - Unsnapped Timing Line
nothing else, according to your current timing

06:03:113 - Mnurut w ini bpmnya 101 bkan 102 dan bpm100nya snap di 06:04:895 ,pattern setelah timing ini klo mnurut gw sih agak telat.

also soft-hitnormal pls wkwkwk, old style banget.. probably u get this hs feedback issue lmao
should find someone who capable to check those timing too


Sorry for the late response.
I matched the current timing the same the ranked one, so I guess it 'no longer' have timing issue in my perspective.

About soft-hitnormal, lol, i think it matched the song.
Thanks for the short review
Arzenvald
Is this it!?
Unpredictable
long have we waited
Shima Rin
4K:1|2|3|4


[Serpihan Dunia]
  1. 00:49:078 - Need a note for the light drum sound just like 00:49:411 (49411|0) -
  2. 01:10:411 - Same as above. Probably you can do some rearrangement like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/11989775
  3. 01:12:578 (72578|3) - I feel this seems like a ghost note. I'd prefer you delete it and use double on 01:12:495 - to emphasize the presented drum, which also resembles the previous rhythms like from 01:10:328 -
  4. 01:21:078 - Same as 01:10:411 -
  5. 01:23:161 - Same as 01:12:495 -
  6. 01:38:549 (98549|1,98598|2) - I think they are wrongly snapped. Should be on 01:38:577 - and 01:38:619 - in 1/8, but also on 01:38:619 - it is not a drum but a slash sound so I guess for consistency of mapping to drums, you can simply map 01:38:577 - on this spot in all only if you want.
  7. 01:54:826 (114826|2) - How about moving to col2 to avoid the stack on col3?
  8. 01:56:909 (116909|2) - How about moving this to col1 to stack with 01:56:743 (116743|0) - because they have the same drums?
  9. 01:56:743 (116743|0) - 02:13:076 - Why you are missing two important melodic sounds here?
  10. 02:16:097 (136097|0) - If you are mapping the slash sounds, the third one should be mapped onto 02:16:104 - in 1/6.
  11. 02:16:597 (136597|2) - Same, should be on 02:16:604 - .
  12. 02:20:243 - How about catching the melodic sound here by adding a note?
  13. 02:30:576 - 02:31:076 - Dunno but you can possibly catch the drum sounds if you want.
  14. 02:37:409 - How about having a drum here to complete the whole drum track and if possible, move 02:37:326 (157326|3) - to col2 for balance?
  15. 02:41:576 - Same as 02:20:243 -
  16. 02:51:909 - 02:52:409 - Same suggestion as 02:30:576 - 02:31:076 -
  17. 02:54:659 (174659|0) - How about moving it to col4 for balance?
  18. 03:04:243 - Actually here is a drum. Why not adding a note to complete it?

Will complete further later.
Topic Starter
Ichigaki

Tofu1222 wrote:

4K:1|2|3|4


[Serpihan Dunia]
  1. 01:12:578 (72578|3) - I feel this seems like a ghost note. I'd prefer you delete it and use double on 01:12:495 - to emphasize the presented drum, which also resembles the previous rhythms like from 01:10:328 - | I think I'll keep it that way, the flow is kinda nice
  2. 01:23:161 - Same as 01:12:495 - | same reason as above
  3. 01:38:549 (98549|1,98598|2) - I think they are wrongly snapped. Should be on 01:38:577 - and 01:38:619 - in 1/8, but also on 01:38:619 - it is not a drum but a slash sound so I guess for consistency of mapping to drums, you can simply map 01:38:577 - on this spot in all only if you want. | Will also keep this, i think it's not a must to always follow the drum for some part like this.
  4. 02:30:576 - 02:31:076 - Dunno but you can possibly catch the drum sounds if you want. | would be weird for the current pattern
  5. 02:51:909 - 02:52:409 - Same suggestion as 02:30:576 - 02:31:076 - | same as above


everything that weren't answered are applied

Will complete further later. | I'll wait for it
Shima Rin
4K:1|2|3|4


[Serpihan Dunia]
  1. 03:31:430 (211430|2,211764|1) - I don't really hear why there is a difference in snaps of these two notes from others. Shouldn't they be on 1/6?
  2. 03:35:930 (215930|1,216430|2) - So do they. I don't really feel any difference to put them in 1/16 instead of 1/6.
  3. 03:47:409 - The sound here is essentially the same as 03:46:076 - , so I suggest reverting the double into single.
  4. 04:02:243 (242243|2,242930|1) - Shouldn't they be on 1/6? 04:03:264 (243264|3) - Same.
  5. 04:02:604 - Add note for the melody.
  6. 04:03:076 - Add note for the bass.
  7. 04:11:096 (251096|1) - Same thing regarding 1/6.
  8. 04:21:928 (261928|2) - 04:30:594 (270594|1) - 04:33:259 (273259|0) - 04:33:926 (273926|0) - 04:34:592 (274592|3) - 04:35:259 (275259|3) - 04:36:259 (276259|1) - 04:36:592 (276592|2) - 04:37:592 (277592|1,277759|1,277926|1,278092|1) - 04:41:925 (281925|3,282092|1) - 04:42:592 (282592|1) - 04:45:759 (285759|1) - 04:46:925 (286925|1) - ^
  9. 04:51:591 (291591|1) - Even though this is wrongly snapped, I'd rather suggest you delete this as to focus more on drums as you only catch this sound as melody, which would mislead the players.
  10. 04:58:696 (298696|2) - Should be on 04:58:710 - for the main melody.
  11. 04:59:863 (299863|3,299863|2,299926|0,299926|1,300030|0,300092|1) - Should all be on 1/6.
  12. 05:03:362 (303362|1) - 05:11:592 (311592|1,311696|2) - 05:12:696 (312696|1,312758|2) - 05:35:321 (335321|3,335425|1,335529|2,335592|1,335696|3,335758|2) - 05:39:924 (339924|1,340028|2,340257|1,340361|2,340590|2,340694|3,340924|2,341028|1) - 05:45:153 (345153|2,345257|3,345361|2) - ^
  13. 05:57:473 (357473|2) - More accurate on 05:57:448 - , 1/12.
  14. 06:30:300 (390300|2,390600|2,390900|2) - 06:35:700 (395700|0) - 06:56:400 (416400|1) - 07:00:900 (420900|1) - 07:13:200 (433200|2) - 1/6
  15. 07:16:894 (436894|2,436931|3,436969|1,437006|0,437044|2,437119|3,437194|1,437231|0,437269|3,437306|2,437344|1,437419|3,437494|0,437531|1,437569|3,437606|2,437644|0,437719|1,437794|3,437831|2,437869|0,437906|1,437944|3) - The whole snaps are wrong. They should all be 1/6 instead of 1/8, like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/12068324
  16. 07:21:169 (441169|3) - 07:22:819 (442819|2) - Ghost notes.
  17. 07:24:469 - Miss a note.
  18. 07:53:099 (473099|3,473099|2,473099|0,473699|0,473699|3,473699|1) - Should be snapped to 1/6.
  19. 07:54:393 - 07:54:468 - You miss two melody sounds.
  20. 07:55:293 - 07:55:368 - 07:55:443 - 07:55:518 - Some more melodic sounds to be caught. Though they are fainter than the others, they are still quite noticeable.
  21. 08:06:993 (486993|3) - I really feel that this sound ends 08:07:293 - here. The extending sounds are from a new one, which does not belong to this LN.
  22. 08:12:299 (492299|3,492299|0,492299|2,492899|2,492899|1,492899|3) - 1/6
  23. 08:13:593 - 08:13:668 - 08:14:493 - 08:14:568 - 08:14:643 - 08:14:718 - Same missing melodies as above.
  24. 08:22:693 (502693|2,502799|1) - They do not snap to anything here. If you wanna catch the light kick, notes should be on 08:22:743 - and 08:22:818 - . If only melody, the just on 08:22:743 - .
  25. 08:27:843 - 08:27:993 - According to the rhythms you preferred later, you should have notes for melodies here.
  26. 09:31:071 - You forget a kick here.
  27. 09:39:994 - 09:40:069 - 09:40:894 - 09:40:969 - 09:41:044 - 09:41:119 - Same missing melodies as pointed before.
  28. 09:59:194 - 09:59:269 - 10:00:094 - 10:00:169 - 10:00:244 - 10:00:319 - ^
  29. 10:05:269 - This note does not map to any drum and also rhythmically does not fit with your later patterns. After changing this I think you can also make 10:05:419 (605419|1) - into double with some rearrangements.
  30. 10:20:394 - 10:20:694 - 10:20:994 - 10:21:294 - 10:21:594 - Just a suggestion, but you can make doubles for these newly appeared kicks, which would show the progression of this part.
  31. 10:22:631 (622631|1,622669|2,622706|3,622744|0,622781|1,622819|2,622894|0) - Again, entirely wrong snaps. Should be mapped to 1/6 all the way and have no note on 10:22:894 -
  32. 10:30:244 (630244|0,630319|1) - 10:30:694 (630694|3,630769|2) - Ghost notes for real.
  33. 10:30:919 - Need a note for melody.
  34. 10:35:569 - 10:35:719 - 10:35:869 - Some minor melodies that are worth catching.

Finally finished. Good luck!
Topic Starter
Ichigaki

Tofu1222 wrote:

4K:1|2|3|4


[Serpihan Dunia]
  1. 03:31:430 (211430|2,211764|1) - I don't really hear why there is a difference in snaps of these two notes from others. Shouldn't they be on 1/6? | okay, changed this part
  2. 03:35:930 (215930|1,216430|2) - So do they. I don't really feel any difference to put them in 1/16 instead of 1/6. | same as above
  3. 03:47:409 - The sound here is essentially the same as 03:46:076 - , so I suggest reverting the double into single. changed this also
  4. 04:02:243 (242243|2,242930|1) - Shouldn't they be on 1/6? 04:03:264 (243264|3) - Same. | yeah right
  5. 04:02:604 - Add note for the melody. | sure
  6. 04:03:076 - Add note for the bass. | sure
  7. 04:11:096 (251096|1) - Same thing regarding 1/6. | ok
  8. 04:21:928 (261928|2) - 04:30:594 (270594|1) - 04:33:259 (273259|0) - 04:33:926 (273926|0) - 04:34:592 (274592|3) - 04:35:259 (275259|3) - 04:36:259 (276259|1) - 04:36:592 (276592|2) - 04:37:592 (277592|1,277759|1,277926|1,278092|1) - 04:41:925 (281925|3,282092|1) - 04:42:592 (282592|1) - 04:45:759 (285759|1) - 04:46:925 (286925|1) - ^ | idk why i keep getting this unsnapped thing lol, thank goodness you point it all
  9. 04:51:591 (291591|1) - Even though this is wrongly snapped, I'd rather suggest you delete this as to focus more on drums as you only catch this sound as melody, which would mislead the players. | i think i'll just make it in 1/3
  10. 04:58:696 (298696|2) - Should be on 04:58:710 - for the main melody. | ok
  11. 04:59:863 (299863|3,299863|2,299926|0,299926|1,300030|0,300092|1) - Should all be on 1/6. | ok
  12. 05:03:362 (303362|1) - 05:11:592 (311592|1,311696|2) - 05:12:696 (312696|1,312758|2) - 05:35:321 (335321|3,335425|1,335529|2,335592|1,335696|3,335758|2) - 05:39:924 (339924|1,340028|2,340257|1,340361|2,340590|2,340694|3,340924|2,341028|1) - 05:45:153 (345153|2,345257|3,345361|2) - ^ | ok
  13. 05:57:473 (357473|2) - More accurate on 05:57:448 - , 1/12. | ok
  14. 06:30:300 (390300|2,390600|2,390900|2) - 06:35:700 (395700|0) - 06:56:400 (416400|1) - 07:00:900 (420900|1) - 07:13:200 (433200|2) - 1/6 | ok
  15. 07:16:894 (436894|2,436931|3,436969|1,437006|0,437044|2,437119|3,437194|1,437231|0,437269|3,437306|2,437344|1,437419|3,437494|0,437531|1,437569|3,437606|2,437644|0,437719|1,437794|3,437831|2,437869|0,437906|1,437944|3) - The whole snaps are wrong. They should all be 1/6 instead of 1/8, like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/12068324 | ok, but changed a little bit different
  16. 07:21:169 (441169|3) - 07:22:819 (442819|2) - Ghost notes. | I do agree for the first one, i definitely hear sounds on 07:22:819
  17. 07:24:469 - Miss a note. | ok
  18. 07:53:099 (473099|3,473099|2,473099|0,473699|0,473699|3,473699|1) - Should be snapped to 1/6. | ok
  19. 07:54:393 - 07:54:468 - You miss two melody sounds. | ok
  20. 07:55:293 - 07:55:368 - 07:55:443 - 07:55:518 - Some more melodic sounds to be caught. Though they are fainter than the others, they are still quite noticeable. | ok
  21. 08:06:993 (486993|3) - I really feel that this sound ends 08:07:293 - here. The extending sounds are from a new one, which does not belong to this LN. | ok
  22. 08:12:299 (492299|3,492299|0,492299|2,492899|2,492899|1,492899|3) - 1/6 | ok
  23. 08:13:593 - 08:13:668 - 08:14:493 - 08:14:568 - 08:14:643 - 08:14:718 - Same missing melodies as above. | ok
  24. 08:22:693 (502693|2,502799|1) - They do not snap to anything here. If you wanna catch the light kick, notes should be on 08:22:743 - and 08:22:818 - . If only melody, the just on 08:22:743 - . | I changed this a little bit different
  25. 08:27:843 - 08:27:993 - According to the rhythms you preferred later, you should have notes for melodies here. | ok
  26. 09:31:071 - You forget a kick here. | ok
  27. 09:39:994 - 09:40:069 - 09:40:894 - 09:40:969 - 09:41:044 - 09:41:119 - Same missing melodies as pointed before. | ok
  28. 09:59:194 - 09:59:269 - 10:00:094 - 10:00:169 - 10:00:244 - 10:00:319 - ^ | ok
  29. 10:05:269 - This note does not map to any drum and also rhythmically does not fit with your later patterns. After changing this I think you can also make 10:05:419 (605419|1) - into double with some rearrangements.
  30. 10:20:394 - 10:20:694 - 10:20:994 - 10:21:294 - 10:21:594 - Just a suggestion, but you can make doubles for these newly appeared kicks, which would show the progression of this part. | ok
  31. 10:22:631 (622631|1,622669|2,622706|3,622744|0,622781|1,622819|2,622894|0) - Again, entirely wrong snaps. Should be mapped to 1/6 all the way and have no note on 10:22:894 - | ok
  32. 10:30:244 (630244|0,630319|1) - 10:30:694 (630694|3,630769|2) - Ghost notes for real. | ok
  33. 10:30:919 - Need a note for melody. | ok
  34. 10:35:569 - 10:35:719 - 10:35:869 - Some minor melodies that are worth catching. | ok


Finally finished. Good luck!


THANKS!
Shima Rin
4K:1|2|3|4


[Serpihan Dunia]
  1. 01:12:578 (72578|3) - You may need a W just like 01:23:245 - .
  2. 02:16:076 (136076|1,136576|1) - Feel that these two notes should not be there as only 1/6 is present.
  3. 02:54:659 (174659|0) - How about moving it to col4 for balance? (Mentioned last time but I think you forgot to fix this.)
  4. 07:18:044 (438044|2) - Need a W here.
  5. 07:24:469 (444469|1) - W
  6. 08:27:693 - Some pattern suggestions from here: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/12078320 It avoids stacks and also flows well.
  7. 09:31:071 (571071|1) - W
  8. 09:59:194 - I'd suggest a pattern like this here: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/12078303 It prevents unnecessary long stacks and also make sure that the first and second one having the same pattern, as what you did for previous cases.
  9. 10:22:744 (622744|3,622844|1) - W
  10. 10:31:444 (631444|2) - This note is too faint to be caught here, and actually without it for me the rhythms here go even better.

Make sure that you recheck hitsounds because for some notes you added you forgot the hitsounds on them.
Topic Starter
Ichigaki

Tofu1222 wrote:

4K:1|2|3|4


[Serpihan Dunia]
  1. 01:12:578 (72578|3) - You may need a W just like 01:23:245 - .
  2. 02:16:076 (136076|1,136576|1) - Feel that these two notes should not be there as only 1/6 is present. I'm pretty sure it does exist, but feels weird now after you said that lol
  3. 02:54:659 (174659|0) - How about moving it to col4 for balance? (Mentioned last time but I think you forgot to fix this.) yeah sure
  4. 07:18:044 (438044|2) - Need a W here.
  5. 07:24:469 (444469|1) - W
  6. 08:27:693 - Some pattern suggestions from here: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/12078320 It avoids stacks and also flows well. Cool, re-arranged for this section
  7. 09:31:071 (571071|1) - W
  8. 09:59:194 - I'd suggest a pattern like this here: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/12078303 It prevents unnecessary long stacks and also make sure that the first and second one having the same pattern, as what you did for previous cases. Yeah, re-arranged the other one too just to make it balance. Actually this one is good suggestion
  9. 10:22:744 (622744|3,622844|1) - W
  10. 10:31:444 (631444|2) - This note is too faint to be caught here, and actually without it for me the rhythms here go even better. Yeah, i guess so


Make sure that you recheck hitsounds because for some notes you added you forgot the hitsounds on them.


Adding some hitsounds that went missing as mentioned (and a lot that haven't mentioned) and I think it's good to go now!
Shima Rin
Great fix. Just this one you forget to

01:12:578 (72578|3) - You may need a W just like 01:23:245 - .

After this will qualify~
Topic Starter
Ichigaki

Tofu1222 wrote:

Great fix. Just this one you forget to

01:12:578 (72578|3) - You may need a W just like 01:23:245 - .

After this will qualify~


Okay done!
Shima Rin
Good luck! Let this masterpiece shine in the ranked section!
-mint-
v1 time
FAMoss

qqqant wrote:

v1 time
v1 time

grats Ichi, lama engga ada kabar map masterpiece ini
AchsanLovers
last v1 map?

grats om ichi, dah lama ga muncul di list map rank wkwk
_Stan
congratz
Kawawa
Hello Ichi, welcome back~
but I'm so sorry, I have some concern on the map

Major thing
04:32:656 - 04:32:822 - This two red line must be removed http://puu.sh/BWG6b/01ebc95bcd.png
not actually used to change any metronome or note sync. even If you remove it, the metronome still will be same at here 04:32:822 -
so It's counted as completely unnecessary red line. and for changing hs volume(that 60%), you can use a green line instead of a red line

10:43:204 - I don't feel any grace here. but I can understand what you expressed but the note in this section is indeed faster more than rhythm sync. other parts are still acceptable but here is quite out off. I think the exact sync is in center between 10:43:204 - and 10:43:258 - , therefore you will need another timing like 10:44:379 - 10:45:917 -


Additional point
09:50:569 - seems like there's a missing hitsound "w" reference 09:48:169 -
Topic Starter
Ichigaki

Kawawa wrote:

Hello Ichi, welcome back~
but I'm so sorry, I have some concern on the map

Major thing
04:32:656 - 04:32:822 - This two red line must be removed http://puu.sh/BWG6b/01ebc95bcd.png
not actually used to change any metronome or note sync. even If you remove it, the metronome still will be same at here 04:32:822 -
so It's counted as completely unnecessary red line. and for changing hs volume(that 60%), you can use a green line instead of a red line

10:43:204 - I don't feel any grace here. but I can understand what you expressed but the note in this section is indeed faster more than rhythm sync. other parts are still acceptable but here is quite out off. I think the exact sync is in center between 10:43:204 - and 10:43:258 - , therefore you will need another timing like 10:44:379 - 10:45:917 -


Additional point
09:50:569 - seems like there's a missing hitsound "w" reference 09:48:169 -


Fixed everything!
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