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Good luck here!
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tfw indo in the description cant read

translation pls?
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Maxus wrote:

Good luck here!
THANKS!

qqqant wrote:

tfw indo in the description cant read

translation pls?
you can use online translator, it already got the meaning imo
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op ichi
be aware with hitsound issue (if it exist) w
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06:04:598 - Unsnapped Timing Line
nothing else, according to your current timing

06:03:113 - Mnurut w ini bpmnya 101 bkan 102 dan bpm100nya snap di 06:04:895 ,pattern setelah timing ini klo mnurut gw sih agak telat.

also soft-hitnormal pls wkwkwk, old style banget.. probably u get this hs feedback issue lmao
should find someone who capable to check those timing too
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DE-CADE wrote:

06:04:598 - Unsnapped Timing Line
nothing else, according to your current timing

06:03:113 - Mnurut w ini bpmnya 101 bkan 102 dan bpm100nya snap di 06:04:895 ,pattern setelah timing ini klo mnurut gw sih agak telat.

also soft-hitnormal pls wkwkwk, old style banget.. probably u get this hs feedback issue lmao
should find someone who capable to check those timing too
Sorry for the late response.
I matched the current timing the same the ranked one, so I guess it 'no longer' have timing issue in my perspective.

About soft-hitnormal, lol, i think it matched the song.
Thanks for the short review
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Is this it!?
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long have we waited
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[Serpihan Dunia]
  1. 00:49:078 - Need a note for the light drum sound just like 00:49:411 (49411|0) -

  2. 01:10:411 - Same as above. Probably you can do some rearrangement like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/11989775

  3. 01:12:578 (72578|3) - I feel this seems like a ghost note. I'd prefer you delete it and use double on 01:12:495 - to emphasize the presented drum, which also resembles the previous rhythms like from 01:10:328 -

  4. 01:21:078 - Same as 01:10:411 -

  5. 01:23:161 - Same as 01:12:495 -

  6. 01:38:549 (98549|1,98598|2) - I think they are wrongly snapped. Should be on 01:38:577 - and 01:38:619 - in 1/8, but also on 01:38:619 - it is not a drum but a slash sound so I guess for consistency of mapping to drums, you can simply map 01:38:577 - on this spot in all only if you want.

  7. 01:54:826 (114826|2) - How about moving to col2 to avoid the stack on col3?

  8. 01:56:909 (116909|2) - How about moving this to col1 to stack with 01:56:743 (116743|0) - because they have the same drums?

  9. 01:56:743 (116743|0) - 02:13:076 - Why you are missing two important melodic sounds here?

  10. 02:16:097 (136097|0) - If you are mapping the slash sounds, the third one should be mapped onto 02:16:104 - in 1/6.

  11. 02:16:597 (136597|2) - Same, should be on 02:16:604 - .

  12. 02:20:243 - How about catching the melodic sound here by adding a note?

  13. 02:30:576 - 02:31:076 - Dunno but you can possibly catch the drum sounds if you want.

  14. 02:37:409 - How about having a drum here to complete the whole drum track and if possible, move 02:37:326 (157326|3) - to col2 for balance?

  15. 02:41:576 - Same as 02:20:243 -

  16. 02:51:909 - 02:52:409 - Same suggestion as 02:30:576 - 02:31:076 -

  17. 02:54:659 (174659|0) - How about moving it to col4 for balance?

  18. 03:04:243 - Actually here is a drum. Why not adding a note to complete it?

Will complete further later.
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Tofu1222 wrote:

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[Serpihan Dunia]
  1. 01:12:578 (72578|3) - I feel this seems like a ghost note. I'd prefer you delete it and use double on 01:12:495 - to emphasize the presented drum, which also resembles the previous rhythms like from 01:10:328 - | I think I'll keep it that way, the flow is kinda nice

  2. 01:23:161 - Same as 01:12:495 - | same reason as above

  3. 01:38:549 (98549|1,98598|2) - I think they are wrongly snapped. Should be on 01:38:577 - and 01:38:619 - in 1/8, but also on 01:38:619 - it is not a drum but a slash sound so I guess for consistency of mapping to drums, you can simply map 01:38:577 - on this spot in all only if you want. | Will also keep this, i think it's not a must to always follow the drum for some part like this.

  4. 02:30:576 - 02:31:076 - Dunno but you can possibly catch the drum sounds if you want. | would be weird for the current pattern

  5. 02:51:909 - 02:52:409 - Same suggestion as 02:30:576 - 02:31:076 - | same as above



everything that weren't answered are applied

Will complete further later. | I'll wait for it
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[Serpihan Dunia]
  1. 03:31:430 (211430|2,211764|1) - I don't really hear why there is a difference in snaps of these two notes from others. Shouldn't they be on 1/6?

  2. 03:35:930 (215930|1,216430|2) - So do they. I don't really feel any difference to put them in 1/16 instead of 1/6.

  3. 03:47:409 - The sound here is essentially the same as 03:46:076 - , so I suggest reverting the double into single.

  4. 04:02:243 (242243|2,242930|1) - Shouldn't they be on 1/6? 04:03:264 (243264|3) - Same.

  5. 04:02:604 - Add note for the melody.

  6. 04:03:076 - Add note for the bass.

  7. 04:11:096 (251096|1) - Same thing regarding 1/6.

  8. 04:21:928 (261928|2) - 04:30:594 (270594|1) - 04:33:259 (273259|0) - 04:33:926 (273926|0) - 04:34:592 (274592|3) - 04:35:259 (275259|3) - 04:36:259 (276259|1) - 04:36:592 (276592|2) - 04:37:592 (277592|1,277759|1,277926|1,278092|1) - 04:41:925 (281925|3,282092|1) - 04:42:592 (282592|1) - 04:45:759 (285759|1) - 04:46:925 (286925|1) - ^

  9. 04:51:591 (291591|1) - Even though this is wrongly snapped, I'd rather suggest you delete this as to focus more on drums as you only catch this sound as melody, which would mislead the players.

  10. 04:58:696 (298696|2) - Should be on 04:58:710 - for the main melody.

  11. 04:59:863 (299863|3,299863|2,299926|0,299926|1,300030|0,300092|1) - Should all be on 1/6.

  12. 05:03:362 (303362|1) - 05:11:592 (311592|1,311696|2) - 05:12:696 (312696|1,312758|2) - 05:35:321 (335321|3,335425|1,335529|2,335592|1,335696|3,335758|2) - 05:39:924 (339924|1,340028|2,340257|1,340361|2,340590|2,340694|3,340924|2,341028|1) - 05:45:153 (345153|2,345257|3,345361|2) - ^

  13. 05:57:473 (357473|2) - More accurate on 05:57:448 - , 1/12.

  14. 06:30:300 (390300|2,390600|2,390900|2) - 06:35:700 (395700|0) - 06:56:400 (416400|1) - 07:00:900 (420900|1) - 07:13:200 (433200|2) - 1/6

  15. 07:16:894 (436894|2,436931|3,436969|1,437006|0,437044|2,437119|3,437194|1,437231|0,437269|3,437306|2,437344|1,437419|3,437494|0,437531|1,437569|3,437606|2,437644|0,437719|1,437794|3,437831|2,437869|0,437906|1,437944|3) - The whole snaps are wrong. They should all be 1/6 instead of 1/8, like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/12068324

  16. 07:21:169 (441169|3) - 07:22:819 (442819|2) - Ghost notes.

  17. 07:24:469 - Miss a note.

  18. 07:53:099 (473099|3,473099|2,473099|0,473699|0,473699|3,473699|1) - Should be snapped to 1/6.

  19. 07:54:393 - 07:54:468 - You miss two melody sounds.

  20. 07:55:293 - 07:55:368 - 07:55:443 - 07:55:518 - Some more melodic sounds to be caught. Though they are fainter than the others, they are still quite noticeable.

  21. 08:06:993 (486993|3) - I really feel that this sound ends 08:07:293 - here. The extending sounds are from a new one, which does not belong to this LN.

  22. 08:12:299 (492299|3,492299|0,492299|2,492899|2,492899|1,492899|3) - 1/6

  23. 08:13:593 - 08:13:668 - 08:14:493 - 08:14:568 - 08:14:643 - 08:14:718 - Same missing melodies as above.

  24. 08:22:693 (502693|2,502799|1) - They do not snap to anything here. If you wanna catch the light kick, notes should be on 08:22:743 - and 08:22:818 - . If only melody, the just on 08:22:743 - .

  25. 08:27:843 - 08:27:993 - According to the rhythms you preferred later, you should have notes for melodies here.

  26. 09:31:071 - You forget a kick here.

  27. 09:39:994 - 09:40:069 - 09:40:894 - 09:40:969 - 09:41:044 - 09:41:119 - Same missing melodies as pointed before.

  28. 09:59:194 - 09:59:269 - 10:00:094 - 10:00:169 - 10:00:244 - 10:00:319 - ^

  29. 10:05:269 - This note does not map to any drum and also rhythmically does not fit with your later patterns. After changing this I think you can also make 10:05:419 (605419|1) - into double with some rearrangements.

  30. 10:20:394 - 10:20:694 - 10:20:994 - 10:21:294 - 10:21:594 - Just a suggestion, but you can make doubles for these newly appeared kicks, which would show the progression of this part.

  31. 10:22:631 (622631|1,622669|2,622706|3,622744|0,622781|1,622819|2,622894|0) - Again, entirely wrong snaps. Should be mapped to 1/6 all the way and have no note on 10:22:894 -

  32. 10:30:244 (630244|0,630319|1) - 10:30:694 (630694|3,630769|2) - Ghost notes for real.

  33. 10:30:919 - Need a note for melody.

  34. 10:35:569 - 10:35:719 - 10:35:869 - Some minor melodies that are worth catching.

Finally finished. Good luck!
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Tofu1222 wrote:

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[Serpihan Dunia]
  1. 03:31:430 (211430|2,211764|1) - I don't really hear why there is a difference in snaps of these two notes from others. Shouldn't they be on 1/6? | okay, changed this part

  2. 03:35:930 (215930|1,216430|2) - So do they. I don't really feel any difference to put them in 1/16 instead of 1/6. | same as above

  3. 03:47:409 - The sound here is essentially the same as 03:46:076 - , so I suggest reverting the double into single. changed this also

  4. 04:02:243 (242243|2,242930|1) - Shouldn't they be on 1/6? 04:03:264 (243264|3) - Same. | yeah right

  5. 04:02:604 - Add note for the melody. | sure

  6. 04:03:076 - Add note for the bass. | sure

  7. 04:11:096 (251096|1) - Same thing regarding 1/6. | ok

  8. 04:21:928 (261928|2) - 04:30:594 (270594|1) - 04:33:259 (273259|0) - 04:33:926 (273926|0) - 04:34:592 (274592|3) - 04:35:259 (275259|3) - 04:36:259 (276259|1) - 04:36:592 (276592|2) - 04:37:592 (277592|1,277759|1,277926|1,278092|1) - 04:41:925 (281925|3,282092|1) - 04:42:592 (282592|1) - 04:45:759 (285759|1) - 04:46:925 (286925|1) - ^ | idk why i keep getting this unsnapped thing lol, thank goodness you point it all

  9. 04:51:591 (291591|1) - Even though this is wrongly snapped, I'd rather suggest you delete this as to focus more on drums as you only catch this sound as melody, which would mislead the players. | i think i'll just make it in 1/3

  10. 04:58:696 (298696|2) - Should be on 04:58:710 - for the main melody. | ok

  11. 04:59:863 (299863|3,299863|2,299926|0,299926|1,300030|0,300092|1) - Should all be on 1/6. | ok

  12. 05:03:362 (303362|1) - 05:11:592 (311592|1,311696|2) - 05:12:696 (312696|1,312758|2) - 05:35:321 (335321|3,335425|1,335529|2,335592|1,335696|3,335758|2) - 05:39:924 (339924|1,340028|2,340257|1,340361|2,340590|2,340694|3,340924|2,341028|1) - 05:45:153 (345153|2,345257|3,345361|2) - ^ | ok

  13. 05:57:473 (357473|2) - More accurate on 05:57:448 - , 1/12. | ok

  14. 06:30:300 (390300|2,390600|2,390900|2) - 06:35:700 (395700|0) - 06:56:400 (416400|1) - 07:00:900 (420900|1) - 07:13:200 (433200|2) - 1/6 | ok

  15. 07:16:894 (436894|2,436931|3,436969|1,437006|0,437044|2,437119|3,437194|1,437231|0,437269|3,437306|2,437344|1,437419|3,437494|0,437531|1,437569|3,437606|2,437644|0,437719|1,437794|3,437831|2,437869|0,437906|1,437944|3) - The whole snaps are wrong. They should all be 1/6 instead of 1/8, like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/12068324 | ok, but changed a little bit different

  16. 07:21:169 (441169|3) - 07:22:819 (442819|2) - Ghost notes. | I do agree for the first one, i definitely hear sounds on 07:22:819

  17. 07:24:469 - Miss a note. | ok

  18. 07:53:099 (473099|3,473099|2,473099|0,473699|0,473699|3,473699|1) - Should be snapped to 1/6. | ok

  19. 07:54:393 - 07:54:468 - You miss two melody sounds. | ok

  20. 07:55:293 - 07:55:368 - 07:55:443 - 07:55:518 - Some more melodic sounds to be caught. Though they are fainter than the others, they are still quite noticeable. | ok

  21. 08:06:993 (486993|3) - I really feel that this sound ends 08:07:293 - here. The extending sounds are from a new one, which does not belong to this LN. | ok

  22. 08:12:299 (492299|3,492299|0,492299|2,492899|2,492899|1,492899|3) - 1/6 | ok

  23. 08:13:593 - 08:13:668 - 08:14:493 - 08:14:568 - 08:14:643 - 08:14:718 - Same missing melodies as above. | ok

  24. 08:22:693 (502693|2,502799|1) - They do not snap to anything here. If you wanna catch the light kick, notes should be on 08:22:743 - and 08:22:818 - . If only melody, the just on 08:22:743 - . | I changed this a little bit different

  25. 08:27:843 - 08:27:993 - According to the rhythms you preferred later, you should have notes for melodies here. | ok

  26. 09:31:071 - You forget a kick here. | ok

  27. 09:39:994 - 09:40:069 - 09:40:894 - 09:40:969 - 09:41:044 - 09:41:119 - Same missing melodies as pointed before. | ok

  28. 09:59:194 - 09:59:269 - 10:00:094 - 10:00:169 - 10:00:244 - 10:00:319 - ^ | ok

  29. 10:05:269 - This note does not map to any drum and also rhythmically does not fit with your later patterns. After changing this I think you can also make 10:05:419 (605419|1) - into double with some rearrangements.

  30. 10:20:394 - 10:20:694 - 10:20:994 - 10:21:294 - 10:21:594 - Just a suggestion, but you can make doubles for these newly appeared kicks, which would show the progression of this part. | ok

  31. 10:22:631 (622631|1,622669|2,622706|3,622744|0,622781|1,622819|2,622894|0) - Again, entirely wrong snaps. Should be mapped to 1/6 all the way and have no note on 10:22:894 - | ok

  32. 10:30:244 (630244|0,630319|1) - 10:30:694 (630694|3,630769|2) - Ghost notes for real. | ok

  33. 10:30:919 - Need a note for melody. | ok

  34. 10:35:569 - 10:35:719 - 10:35:869 - Some minor melodies that are worth catching. | ok


Finally finished. Good luck!
THANKS!
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[Serpihan Dunia]
  1. 01:12:578 (72578|3) - You may need a W just like 01:23:245 - .

  2. 02:16:076 (136076|1,136576|1) - Feel that these two notes should not be there as only 1/6 is present.

  3. 02:54:659 (174659|0) - How about moving it to col4 for balance? (Mentioned last time but I think you forgot to fix this.)

  4. 07:18:044 (438044|2) - Need a W here.

  5. 07:24:469 (444469|1) - W

  6. 08:27:693 - Some pattern suggestions from here: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/12078320 It avoids stacks and also flows well.

  7. 09:31:071 (571071|1) - W

  8. 09:59:194 - I'd suggest a pattern like this here: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/12078303 It prevents unnecessary long stacks and also make sure that the first and second one having the same pattern, as what you did for previous cases.

  9. 10:22:744 (622744|3,622844|1) - W

  10. 10:31:444 (631444|2) - This note is too faint to be caught here, and actually without it for me the rhythms here go even better.

Make sure that you recheck hitsounds because for some notes you added you forgot the hitsounds on them.
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Tofu1222 wrote:

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[Serpihan Dunia]
  1. 01:12:578 (72578|3) - You may need a W just like 01:23:245 - .

  2. 02:16:076 (136076|1,136576|1) - Feel that these two notes should not be there as only 1/6 is present. I'm pretty sure it does exist, but feels weird now after you said that lol

  3. 02:54:659 (174659|0) - How about moving it to col4 for balance? (Mentioned last time but I think you forgot to fix this.) yeah sure

  4. 07:18:044 (438044|2) - Need a W here.

  5. 07:24:469 (444469|1) - W

  6. 08:27:693 - Some pattern suggestions from here: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/12078320 It avoids stacks and also flows well. Cool, re-arranged for this section

  7. 09:31:071 (571071|1) - W

  8. 09:59:194 - I'd suggest a pattern like this here: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/12078303 It prevents unnecessary long stacks and also make sure that the first and second one having the same pattern, as what you did for previous cases. Yeah, re-arranged the other one too just to make it balance. Actually this one is good suggestion

  9. 10:22:744 (622744|3,622844|1) - W

  10. 10:31:444 (631444|2) - This note is too faint to be caught here, and actually without it for me the rhythms here go even better. Yeah, i guess so


Make sure that you recheck hitsounds because for some notes you added you forgot the hitsounds on them.
Adding some hitsounds that went missing as mentioned (and a lot that haven't mentioned) and I think it's good to go now!
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Great fix. Just this one you forget to

01:12:578 (72578|3) - You may need a W just like 01:23:245 - .

After this will qualify~
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Tofu1222 wrote:

Great fix. Just this one you forget to

01:12:578 (72578|3) - You may need a W just like 01:23:245 - .

After this will qualify~
Okay done!
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Good luck! Let this masterpiece shine in the ranked section!
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qqqant wrote:

v1 time
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grats Ichi, lama engga ada kabar map masterpiece ini
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last v1 map?

grats om ichi, dah lama ga muncul di list map rank wkwk
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