1. Easy - 4Key (1,43 stars, 429 notes)
2. Hard - 4Key (2,85 stars, 986 notes)
3. Insane - 4Key (3,53 stars, 1344 notes)
4. Normal - 4Key (1,97 stars, 675 notes)

doykyoto wrote:

goodluck avalon

Web Box wrote:

WARNING: COMPLETELY USELESS POST
Just stumbled upon this, and I love this song, so I thought, might as well mod it
At least, that's what I thought. Then I tried actually finding something that needs fixing...

Well, this is embarrassing. .___.

I...um...

..I got nothing. ._.

This is both, an awesome map and an awesome song! I really hope this gets ranked!
I wasn't of much any help whatsoever so, sorry xD

Good luck, though ^-^

Kawawa wrote:

Disable the "Widescreen Support"
And don't forget that remove the "4K" on each diffculty name. =w=b okay . . . btw actually i plan to add other keys, but nvm i have no time for it hahaha =w=b

[Hard]
01:03:333 (63333|3) - move to 1. for pretty pattern. It will be better for playable than now. seems weird on this part XP okay re-arranged

01:21:086 (81086|1,81304|2) - It's awkward for me. I could not feel it as any exact sound. of course seems It's piano synth.
what do you think about? http://puu.sh/pKUmC/d3b1aa1e73.jpg
I think it's better for feeling. If you don't use LN's at here 01:21:086 - It will be effected for feeling to each cymbol LN and Piano synth. alright, applied =w=

01:22:445 - ~ 01:22:608 - seems here is 8snap. like insane diff. whoops, my bad . . . changed to 1/4

01:43:478 - ~ 01:44:999 - what do you think about? http://puu.sh/pKULA/48e6e8711f.jpg okay, feels more nicely to play this time

[Insane]
00:27:228 (27228|1,27282|2,27336|3) - It should be snapped 6snap for each drum like your Hard diffs my bad xD
00:29:347 - remove a note. I could not feel as 2note at here. because It's same structure with 00:28:043 (28043|2) - 00:31:521 - i don't know how to explain, i put it for expressing the long kick invasion . . . that should be diffrent like others, and also for keeping the flows with this too 00:28:913 (28913|3,28913|2,29021|1,29021|0,29130|2,29130|3) -

00:40:652 - 00:41:086 - remove a note. just follow snare sound only as 2note. like 00:38:695 - 00:39:130 -
And If you can remove a note at here 00:40:652 - 00:41:086 - . then It will be emphasized on this 00:41:521 - i mapped it with 2 notes because for give some pressing with the guitar impact

00:47:608 - 00:48:043 - same reason with above. same reason as above owo ^

00:44:565 - 00:44:999 - remove a note each. It did not be emphasized ^

even If there is a intention for each, but I think remove is better for highlight of snare.

01:12:173 - add a note. It can compare with 01:06:956 - 01:13:913 - 01:19:130 - okay, added

01:30:652 (90652|1,90760|3) - change the colume? It looks good. http://puu.sh/pKW75/3612772dae.jpg good :3

01:34:347 - add a note at here. It should be emphasized than thid drum 01:34:239 -
compare with this 01:36:847 (96847|3,96847|2,96956|1,96956|0) -
because when I saw around pattern, It focused on drum sound. hmm actually i focusing 2 notes for guitar . . . but okay, sure this time

01:37:826 - same reason with above. OK

I could not point out something obviously. oops!
because It already really good map. thanks Wawa =w=)b

-SoraGami- wrote:

Hi Ava :3

oke here's my mod

Column = 1|2|3|4

[Easy]

- 01:26:304 - kinda feels weird to play stopping the flow here, maybe start the LN here instead 01:26:521 ? it feels more better to start the LN there justifying the 1/4 sound only and not including the 1/6 sound here 01:26:304 just like here at 01:19:347 alright, i agreed with you, applied :3

owo

[Normal]

- 00:55:217 - add note since you double every drum sounds in every 3/4 in every measure for consistency LOL okay

- 01:42:391 and 01:45:869 - why not 1/4? i think it plays good with consistent flow with 01:35:434 and 01:38:913 my bad, changed to 1/4

owo

[Hard]

- 00:08:043 - move to right these notes? to differentiate it with insane okay

- 01:06:086 - how about this? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5507777 i dont know if you're a fan of having a jack after the triple but in my opinion this plays better yea, i think it's good too, but having this 1/2 01:06:521 (66521|2,66739|2) - was really have good feeling in my opinion . . . and you can see all of my 1/2 jacks is on your index finger

owo

[Insane]

- 00:32:717 - maybe remove one? it is not that special compared to 00:28:913 :o removed

- 00:42:826 - add note here, i think this part 00:42:608 is similar to this part 00:49:565 based on the sound of the guitar nope, it's different guitar impact imo . . . but i'll consider this later

- why this this 00:52:826 different from the rest? 00:56:304 and 00:59:782 - , remove the 1 on the other or add on the two part to make it consistent? whoops, deleted

- <3

i fell in love with the map <3
Really nice map Ava~
i dont know if these will help~
Good Luck ><

-[ AmiShici ]- wrote:

Yooo avava o/

Sorry for latemod ;w; no problem :3
Kemaren sibuk nonton anime. wkwkwk

4K = 1~4

Click Me!

• [Gila]

1. 00:01:739 (1739|1,1956|0) - move to 1 and 3? for PR re arranged
2. 00:02:391 (2391|0,2608|1) - swap colomb? PR too nope
3. 00:05:217 (5217|2,5434|1) - ctrl+H. PR oke
4. 00:08:043 (8043|0,8260|1) - swap colomb. PR re arranged
   tapi kayaknya ente si emang sengaja mengabaikan PR ya yang penting fun? Jadi gpp kalo ga diapply /me runs
5. 00:13:913 - ini kok double? lah ini kok triple? 00:17:391 - ? why? :oo deleted ones
6. 00:20:489 - add di 1/12s? CMIIW. i still doubt actually *runs or maybe add more 00:20:434 - for clap sound yea i know it have additional clap sound, but nope, i feel it's too wierd if you keep adding it
7. 00:20:869 - add note for cymbal and for notice it's begin new part of instrument. like this 00:24:347 - the sound is not really hard to be 3 notes here i think, just keep it with 2 notes is better
8. 00:27:826 - add note. same as above same^
9. 00:41:086 (41086|0,41195|2) - swap colomb? avoid this 00:40:869 (40869|0,40978|1,41086|0) - for hand balance 'w')b nice one >w<)b
10. 00:48:043 (48043|0,48152|2) - swap colomb. same as above okay . . . btw, pls use "column" instead of colomb lol . . . rip engrizh
11. 01:23:478 (83478|1) - i think delete is better. according your after and before pattern like as this 01:19:999 - ; 01:26:956 - ; and 01:30:434 - okay
12. 01:40:652 - add note? for give more impact from 01:39:782 (99782|3,99999|2,100217|3,100434|2) - or maybe you can try this http://puu.sh/pNuzh/314798006b.jpg ? for variation and drum pitch though? hmm, i will keep this, i think the current pattern is fine . . . membuat drum nya lebih berasa
    
    [Susah]
13. 00:01:086 (1086|1,1304|2,1739|2,1956|1) - ctrl+H? PR
14. 00:08:043 (8043|1,8260|2) - same as above :3 fcuk pitch :v
15. 00:41:304 (41304|1,41304|0,41521|1,41521|0) - i think this drum note same so i think better to make different/variation colomb. maybe http://puu.sh/pNuUR/6c3b7baa92.jpg? re arranged
16. 00:48:260 (48260|0,48260|1,48478|0,48478|1) - same as above re arranged
17. 01:21:304 - ~ 01:22:391 - feel too empty. so recommend to add note each 1/2s. lu tau lah maksud gw gmn lel emang itu fokusnya ke piano aja, masa 1/2 trus nge bosenin ntar . . . lagian timingnya bagus juga disana buat dijadikan break point owo)
    
    [Wajar]
18. 00:01:086 (1086|1,1304|2,1739|2,1956|0) - ctrl+H? PR
19. 00:05:217 (5217|2,5434|1) - ctrl+H? PR
20. 00:05:684 - to 1? PR.
21. 00:08:695 (8695|3,8913|2) - to 2 and 4? PR. wadooo mz

Thanks for mod Ami

Goodluck Avava 'w')b

[ S a k u r a ] wrote:

SPOILER

ez good thanks :3
normal
00:57:391 - change ln to note here hmm, i try to follow giutar here, just like 00:53:695 (53695|3) - so i think it would be fine now
01:22:391 - add ln? okay, added
hard
00:20:652 - one note like 00:18:478 - ? yup, okay
00:34:565 - ^ hmm, this time i will think it would be gould for impact for ending part
00:51:521 - i think one note will be fine actually i want to make a difference with this sound 00:51:086 - but maybe i'll consider about it later
insane
00:27:391 - add
00:20:434 - ^ that's maybe too hard after pressing 1/6 notes xD i'll keep that for now
u can reject all lol

Starry- wrote:

Hi again Avalon~ I don't really see anything wrong in general so I'll get right into the individual difficulties.
Looking through everything, the mapset follows quite a simple dynamic (this is a good thing, it fits the song well!). I honestly don't think I'll be able to find any major issues so a lot of my comments will mainly be suggestions. thank you so much starry, really glad you finally come to my map in this time xD

Easy

1. 00:00:000 (0|1,2608|2,3478|3) - Assuming you're following the string sound here, it'll be better to CTRL+G this for pitch. lol i really weak at pith, okay
2. 00:14:782 (14782|1,15217|2,15652|2) - Just a small suggestion, you can move these notes 1 to the left, to spread out the notes a bit more (it's fine to ignore this, but it helps become consistent with 00:20:869 - ). owo surely this time
3. 00:40:869 (40869|0,41304|0,41739|0,42173|0) - Slightly big relative strain here, perhaps you can move 00:40:869 (40869|0) - to 3? i agree with that but i would like to keep that for expressing the drum sound here, so for your suggestion, i make a little changes on pattern above that
4. Small suggestion - 00:59:565 (59565|3) - move to 1 and 01:00:217 (60217|2) - move to 4. Just a bit more balanced here but honestly it doesn't really matter too much. done
5. 01:20:869 (80869|3,81304|2) - Could move 1 to the left for better balance here. oki
6. 01:49:673 (109673|2,109782|0,110217|2,110326|0) - I think you should aim to make this 1/4 a bit more readable, especially since this is a newer difficulty. You can do this by putting the 1/4 notes closer together and separating all the other notes. Refer to Ex.1 for an example. done, really nice here and actually i get some trouble for this part too XD
   
   Ex.1

   
7. 01:53:586 (113586|0) - Same case - you can move this to 2. (Then you can move 01:53:913 (113913|1,114347|1) - to 1 for balance, and 01:54:782 (114782|0) - to 2.) okay sure
   You can apply the rest of these suggestions to the remaining 1/4 parts in the map, since it's the same sounds in the song. Just be really careful when using 1/4 in Easy difficulties and do your best to make them as readable as possible. okayyyyy :3

Normal

1. 00:00:000 - Pretty much the majority of the pitch relevancy in this section is off. D: If you want me to help sort it out, be sure to contact me in game, and I'll do my best to guide you through it. :3 I'm not sure if you intentionally have a different style here but I really think it is important, especially in the easier difficulties, to follow it and give every note a purpose. I remember you saying in the Censored!! mod reply that it is important for a mapper to be flexible - well, in easier difficulties like this, there is no harm in following it and it will only improve your map. i don't really know about pitch or something, i hope you understand it from beginning . . . yeah, i just noob for this, no matter i am a BN, mapper, or something . . . i just really don't know about pitch things . . . i just map that based on my feeling and testplay it again, again, again, and again to create the best feeling that i have for expressing that sound, that's how my way of mapping . . . and yeah if i want to make changes here, surely i don't know how to changes that pattern again from zero, except if i have a pattern suggestion that maybe would be have a better feeling from my current pattern, i would be happy to apply that for sure . . . yea i believe we have different way and i respect what you commented in here, thank you :3
2. 00:15:543 (15543|0,15869|1,16086|0) - Small balance suggestion here - CTRL+H, then drag left by 2. decide to re-arranged here
3. 01:26:956 (86956|2,87173|0) - CTRL+H and move left by 1 - this is to get rid of the strain in the middle columns and balance things a bit more. that would be pain for your left hand, i surely feel that xD
   
   Pretty nice difficulty, the rest of the patterning is just preference in which I don't really have any comments for. thank you :3

Hard

1. Same case with the intro pitch relevancy from Normal applies here too.
2. 00:21:521 (21521|2,21739|1) - Eh, I guess you could move this 1 to the left for a bit more balance here. hmm i feel my current pattern is fine, so i'll keep that
3. 00:28:695 (28695|1,28695|3) - Could possibly be better as a [12] chord instead - I don't really like the 1/2 jack beforehand. okay, done
4. 00:29:456 (29456|2) - Move to 4 for a better pitch effect. oki
5. 00:31:304 - Check out Ex.2 - just a small suggestion, I think it'll play a bit smoother. nice, applied :3
   
   Ex.2

   
   1. 00:51:956 (51956|3,51956|2) - Move left by 1;
   2. 00:52:173 (52173|1) - Move to 3. This just makes it a bit easier to read since going from 1/4 [12][34] to 1/2 [34] is kinda offputting. okay, both done
6. 01:21:304 (81304|3,81739|1,81956|3) - Mapping the piano here is extremely inconsistent in my opinion. I know it's the kiai part but even then, you should be sticking to the "ts" noises instead (1 note every 1/1 similar to 00:34:782 - ) yea, it's extremely inconsistent, but the taste is everything . . . piano sound in this time was really special for me to be honest
7. 01:46:086 - Spreading these LNs out will probably be a better idea. As an example:
   
   1. 01:46:086 (106086|3,106086|2) - Swap columns;
   2. 01:46:739 (106739|2) - Move to 4;
   3. 01:46:956 (106956|3) - Move to 1; okay, done all of them ^

Insane

1. 00:56:739 (56739|1,56956|1,57173|1) - It's a bit offputting how this a 3 note 1/2 jack onto the LN, although it isn't that important. actually i put that for expressing a vocal thing in this time, but maybe you're right . . . surely i re-arrange that on this time
2. 01:08:695 - Is there a reason you usually use 3 note chords for this sound but 2 note chords only when there is an LN? I don't see any problem in adding a third note here. As an example:
   
   1. 01:08:478 (68478|2) - Move to 3; yea, i know that surely . . . but i believe it would be kill you when pressing this 1/6 01:08:913 - after pressing 3 notes (with LN) . . . for this current star rating, that really no need imo
   2. 01:08:695 - Add at 2. Same thing for parts like 01:15:652 -. (I'm sure if you find a better way to rearrange the notes so that a 3 note chord is fine, that should be alright too. i agree with this part 01:15:652 - added a note on that

Sorry there isn't much here - and even then I was being a bit picky. There isn't any major issues here and a lot of the patterns have purpose. It's a rather simple song to map to with clear instruments so there isn't much to comment on - and the fact that the BPM is very low the patterning isn't too much of a concern than it would be on higher BPMs. Main thing to focus on is sorting out pitch relevancy in the intro and you should be ready to go. Nice map~

Kuo Kyoka wrote:

(Drumbass Dumbass Girl)

Fresh Chicken wrote:

Can you notice me about metadata? I can't find this, I can see only Yokomin feat. 結月ゆかり - Proof -Album ver-
also written on your mp3 file too i edit the mp3 tags by myself lol . . . don't trust that mp3
as i stated on my creator words, there is an official link for that ==> https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PvtpvnGGMHw
and i already discussed with Kwan too, since Yuzuki Yukari is a vocaloid and there is nothing any official source written with it's name
so i just need to put Yokomin (composer) in artist field (without Yuzuki Yukari)
also, this is already written on RC actually http://puu.sh/q5HRb/a200045cb1.png

eadf

Here is mod

Mod

[Easy]

hmm I really don't recommend to use 1/4 in Easy but well, lt's kinda low BPM for me so keep it if you want
since the majority of lead sound (the most audible) is guitar and drums, so i can't put any other notes in other sound, it's depend with the music itself and also this is the most simple pattern that i can make based on those primary sound

00:20:442 - I think it should be double like 00:16:529 - here okay, applied

Nice owo)b

[Normal]

00:14:247 (14247|2) - Move to 4 this note, this trill is kinda hard for Normal also for more structure pattern. okay

00:16:529 - I think you can add a one more in here like you did on 00:14:790 - 00:18:268 - 00:19:573 - ayy i can't do that because there is contains full streams, too hard for this diff i think xD

00:30:442 - ^ same reason ^

01:15:225 (75225|2) - imo, this note is pretty hard to feel, even making kinda awkwardness I guess, just I'm recommending to remove it whoops, seems i missing that, actually i did that for emphasize those 1/2 piano . . i will add it more for more understanding

01:38:921 - http://puu.sh/q5Gk5/32714abf1a.png for more structure pattern hmm, very good idea

[Hard]

00:40:660 (40660|3,40877|3,41094|3,41312|3,41529|3) - Is it intended? if not, 00:40:877 (40877|3) - recommend to 3 yea intended, bcuz i following those guitar sound

00:47:616 (47616|3,47834|3,48051|3,48268|3,48486|3) - ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) same ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

Nicex okay i seex

[Insane]

00:11:529 (11529|0,11964|0) - They are different pitch so it kinda makes awkwardness, how about to move a one guy? i see, re-arranged

01:45:279 (105279|1) - I swear this is ghost note. i swear to god i can hear drum sound in that, really =w=)v

Well made map. Just picked a little bit, call me after update thank you :3

Fresh Chicken wrote:

Good luck Ava you hentai <3

Kyousuke- wrote:

congrats lon
nice song tho =w=

Kawawa wrote:

Congratz!

erlinadewi- wrote:

yes.. yukari lagee \o/
Gratz avama owo)b

Kuo Kyoka wrote:

congrats <3

DixonBlackwing wrote:

yay map dgn bg yg dulu dpnya aba -- eh udah ganti y xd
congrats ya dh quali , i like the song -w-

-SoraGami- wrote:

<3 grats Ava <3