1. 00:06:802 (5) - 前后保持ds
2. 00:03:802 (3) - 可以给nc，和你这里00:58:914 (1) - 一样
3. 00:19:580 (2,3) - 视觉上flow不太好，或许考虑把2横过来些
4. 00:23:247 (2) - 这里是1.4x 00:21:469 (6) - 这里是1.0x 这可以统一一下
5. 00:27:580 (3,4) - 这里往下甩flow有些不流畅，因为4是高音，其实可以ctrlg给个小跳，然后后面几个物件也相应调整一下。
6. 00:33:136 (4) - 虽然读起来可能没有困难，但好像全图就这里这样叠感觉有点突兀
7. 01:02:025 (3) - nc这?
8. 01:18:025 (1,5) - 这里overlap不合适，可以4，5开始往另一个方向跑

Frenkie09 wrote:

Yomi's Broom

1. 00:22:765 (7,1) - 这里的节拍细分改一改吧 不搞鸡巴了
2. 00:24:469 (1) - 这里放错了，请用1/6拍，放25%速度听听
3. 00:24:914 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - 这部分很奇怪，因为他是1/6拍的，你放的是1/4拍的，我建议还是不要放连打稳点，如果放1/6拍连打的话DT没得玩，所以直接放红线和白线吧
4. 00:38:691 (1) - 1/6拍
5. 00:39:136 (2,3,4,5,6) - 和上面一样，建议别放连打 1/6都改了
6. 00:49:136 (5) - overmap不好看 改了
7. 01:06:025 (2,3) - 这两个建议做成这样的节奏 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5387462 好让后面那个3个圈的节奏更明显 这不改
8. 01:10:469 (5) - 这里突然空了不符合，做成短滑条吧 也不改
9. 01:20:247 (2,3) - 建议做成滑条，原因和上面一样 也不改
10. 01:21:580 (1,2,3) - ds一样吧 好
11. 01:22:469 (1,2,3) - ↑最后跳一下

加油rank~GL

1. 看不出啥。。折返可能用的有点多了？

1. 前面一直在跟vocal，那么00:06:802 (5,1) - 这个节奏有点不对，人声在这里有一个00:07:025 - 。不过这样听起来非常奇怪，所以建议00:06:914 - 开始抓一下背景音
2. 00:11:358 (4) - 这里还是建议保持1.6的ds，因为这个人声并没有什么音调变化
3. 01:16:025 (6,1) - 听起来总觉得很奇怪...

1. 01:20:691 (4) - 跳的有点远
2. 基本没问题，00:24:469 (1,1,2,1) - 这种对dt可能不大友好(

Garden wrote:

[Hard]

1. 00:06:802 (5) - 前后保持ds
2. 00:03:802 (3) - 可以给nc，和你这里00:58:914 (1) - 一样
3. 00:19:580 (2,3) - 视觉上flow不太好，或许考虑把2横过来些
4. 00:23:247 (2) - 这里是1.4x 00:21:469 (6) - 这里是1.0x 这可以统一一下
5. 00:27:580 (3,4) - 这里往下甩flow有些不流畅，因为4是高音，其实可以ctrlg给个小跳，然后后面几个物件也相应调整一下。- 这个不改没事吧？和00:34:691 (3,4) - 统一
6. 00:33:136 (4) - 虽然读起来可能没有困难，但好像全图就这里这样叠感觉有点突兀
7. 01:02:025 (3) - nc这?
8. 01:18:025 (1,5) - 这里overlap不合适，可以4，5开始往另一个方向跑

除了就红字的都改了w

Frenkie09 wrote:

GlazeE's Hard

1. 00:03:802 (3) - NC
2. 00:05:136 (1,3) - 第一眼看这里好像3尾部贴2的距离和1尾部贴2的距离不一样，建议调整相同
3. 00:30:691 - 这个位置可以做成3连打，直接一个小滑条有点糟糕 http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5387238
4. 01:06:469 (4) - 这个尾巴在蓝线？建议放红线，然后做成滑条回打到白线
5. 01:07:802 - 三连吧，不要漏了节奏点
6. 01:08:691 - 跟人声的同时补上节奏点
7. 01:16:469 (1) - 不建议把这里的节奏点漏了
8. 01:27:802 - 这里是一个新的节奏点的开头，但是滑条的结尾放这里了，意味着这里不能按了，所以打起来很奇怪。 http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5387349 建议这里一定要放个滑条开头或者圈圈

都改了w

kanor wrote:

[GlazeE's Hard]
00:30:802 (3) - 这种起手蓝线滑条尾却在白线上的下法打起来感觉不是很舒服.......试着换成一个单点接一个1/1滑条试试？或者直接两个单点？ - 按照上面的摸改了w
00:53:136 (1) - 滑条头加个finish强调一下感觉比较舒服？00:53:802 (3) - 这个滑条头也可以加Orz（不过听曲子这里已经弱了，不加可能更好） - 不加了，感觉好违和233
01:06:914 - 这个音建议还是补上，虽然压vocal不过这个滑条打完总觉得还有东西才对，或者01:06:469 (4) - 换成一个1/2的折返试试？去试着压两个啪啪声，因为01:17:358 (2,3) - 这里你有意识地去压了 - 按照上面的摸改了w
从00:40:691 -这里开始的clap 在一句话的末尾，比如00:43:136 (3,4) - 总觉得就断掉了，我试着改了一下，如果不想改的话就跳过这个吧。
如果要改的话：
00:46:691 (3) -加个clap，
00:50:247 (3) - 加个clap，00:51:136 - 这个地方加个NOTE，然后clap
这样这里的处理方法就从一到二到四，从开始的不连续慢慢变得连续起来，然后00:53:136 (1) -一个finish强调整个段落的整体性。

不想改的：整体很舒服，GL - 听起来有点怪，还是不改了吧_(:з」∠)_

[Crz]Sword wrote:

[GlazeE's Hard]

1. 前面一直在跟vocal，那么00:06:802 (5,1) - 这个节奏有点不对，人声在这里有一个00:07:025 - 。不过这样听起来非常奇怪，所以建议00:06:914 - 开始抓一下背景音 - 不改了，00:06:914 (1) - 跟背景音
2. 00:11:358 (4) - 这里还是建议保持1.6的ds，因为这个人声并没有什么音调变化 - 不改，保持整体
3. 01:16:025 (6,1) - 听起来总觉得很奇怪... - 按照上面的摸改了w

_Stan wrote:

[GlazeE's Hard]
00:06:802 (5) - 是我的话 我会前后ds一致 - 已经按照前面的改了w
00:08:247 (2,3,1) - 整体移动，以note2为准移动到x:263 y:265，这样和00:06:914 (1) - 摆起来好看些 （不会插图，原谅我用坐标
01:00:247 (1,2,3) - 这里ds可以和00:58:025 (3,4,5) - 保持一致 - 不一致吗？
01:09:136 (4,1) - 放在一条直线上把，有点歪了
01:12:247 (2,3,4,5) - 和01:14:469 (1,2,3) - 同00:58:025 (3,4,5) - - 不一致吗？
01:24:247 - 前面抓的都是人声，到这里没有了?? - 人声不准

Mermaid girl wrote:

[GlazeE's Hard]
01:09:136 (5) - crtl+g - fixed~
很棒~

kanpakyin wrote:

標題應該是 シャンランラン feat.96猫 -TV Edit Ver.- ?
把 ~Anime ver.~ 換成 -TV Edit Ver.-

Reference here: http://www.flyingwitch.jp/goods/op.html

Ametrin wrote:

M4M
其实感觉也没什么好改的……也是强行摸

[GlazeE's Hard]
00:06:649(4,5,1) 打起来还是非常奇怪啊 这里节奏是 考虑一个大滑条糊过去吧 - 这里。。。。不用打滑条吧？
00:18:247(3,4) 重音在3的尾巴上？ 不如3单点4折返 强行和12对称一波
00:38:469(2) 挪下面点
00:46:691(3,4) 挪上面点 角度浅了
01:01:358(5) 也是重音在尾巴上（强迫症啊）

其他都改了ww

Xinely wrote:

Hard :
- 00:06:025 (3) - not really like with overlap to (2) as (2) covers up a bit the (3)'s tail makes a bit hard to read ok
- 00:06:802 (5) - it has inconsistency spacing between 0,63x and 0,68x ok
- 00:18:469 (4) - yep the overlap.. try ctrl+g and 328,200 instead ok
- 00:33:136 (4,1) - transition from the tail to catch (1)'s head is weird reallyyyyyyyyyyyy qwq i think it's not really weird qwq
- 00:43:580 - the string sound is quite strong so it will be nice to be mapped with clickable object like circle umm..but i dont think so..
- 00:47:136 - 00:50:691 - 00:51:136 - ^ ^
- 00:48:247 (2) - i would say ctrl+g, the vocal isnt strong and 00:48:691 - is stronger which feels weird mapped with normal spacing, better do jumps for both ok
- 01:06:469 (4) - feel weird why this slider only which is 1/2 slider repeat. 01:06:802 - has vocal which shouldnt be skipped when you do 01:03:802 (1,2,3) - due vocals ahhh im just follow the white line
- 01:09:580 (1) - 280,72 instead. do you want to make 1/8 jump? i dont think it is jump ;w;
- 01:22:469 (3,4) - click them and move to 360,144 for better flow what? im just code these 00:12:247 (1,2,3,4) -

Kencho wrote:

看了一下圖，感覺Hard的質量還能再提高點

[Hard]

1. 00:01:580 (1,2) - 和前面的DS來比這個靠太近，00:01:580 (1) - ctrl+G更好，然後把00:03:136 (2) - 旋轉90度來放 感觉那样好挤 不改啦
   
   SPOILER

   
2. 00:13:136 (3,4) - 這個節奏比較難讀，不如直接一個折返更好，刪掉00:13:802 (4) - 好像不会难读吧 应该打完00:12:247 (1) - 这个都知道是什么节奏了吧？
3. 01:08:914 (4,1,1,2,3) - 這裡間距不明顯，前面1/2的01:08:914 (4,1) - 跳那麼遠，後面1/1的01:09:580 (1,2,3) - 就太近了，你可以拉近1/2或者拉遠1/1，我個人建議拉遠1/1 改了下方向和ds
4. 00:57:802 - 這個空了很奇怪，你可以加個圓圈，但我更建議把00:57:358 (2) - 改成兩個圓圈+一個1/2滑條組成3連 改了
5. 01:06:469 (4,1) - 放遠一點 改了
6. 01:10:914 (1) - 這個的問題和00:56:691 (1,2) - 一樣，理應在00:57:802 - 加個圓圈，但是我更建議把節奏改成和改完的00:56:691 (1,2) - 一樣，也就是一個1/1滑條，然後兩個圓圈+1/2滑條的組合 改了
7. 01:22:469 (3,4) - 和00:13:136 (3,4) - 一樣的問題 一样不觉的难读0.0

ZZHBOY wrote:

hard:
还好吧..虽然有些不适合放hard里
几个地方:
00:05:469 (2,3) - 别叠 改了
00:06:802 (5) - 这种就别强行跟了 多放点1/2自然点 没事吧？
00:12:914 (2) - 这种完全可以用一个圈 00:13:025 - 还有人声 没事吧？
00:18:469 (4) - 折返箭头别被挡道 改了
00:21:469 (6,2) - 这种真的好垃圾 不如放两个圈 改了
00:30:691 (3) - 这种也是强行跟vocal了 改了
00:32:469 (3,4,1) - 这种都好丑的 改了
00:57:802 - 然后这种空出来也不是很好 都可以跟下 改了
好像好多地方都叠了 我觉得没啥必要 不如摆开
也没太差吧...

Xinely wrote:

from m4m

General :
- http://puu.sh/pTyL5/2ced6b7a47.png (also anime doesnt need in tags, it will set in genre) fixed 加anime是为了本地搜索
- i think you need an easy diff. current sv is quite fast for newbie with combined many of 1/2 rhythms (if agree you can make a bit harder your normal diff to make nice spread) bpm这么低，真的没问题啦，这歌即使ez也会用1/2呀

Normal :
- 00:05:136 (1) - somehow copy paste from shape even the position feels weird. like lazy to make new pattern or something 我个人还是蛮喜欢这种梗的……
- 00:12:247 (1,2) - try rotate -10 degree to not make sharp flow 感觉没什么区别0.0
- 00:14:025 (1) - change to finish instead, the music is cymbal 加了，clap也留着，都有
- 00:26:469 (1,2) - that would be better if their shape are same so like a mirror pattern ww 我觉得现在的形状挺舒服的
- 00:33:580 (1,3) - if their overlap can be avoid that would be nice for design. i still see a bit overlap in gameplay fixed
- 00:53:358 - somehow i feel weird with the little break like it doesnt necessary. try map more like http://puu.sh/pTx5H/f2c64fe2bc.jpg (follow vocal, map start from 00:53:136 - ) 不仅这张图，我个人喜欢放过没有伴奏的人声。而且这个难度其他地方我也是这么做的
- 01:09:580 (4) - the slider mapped better with 3 circles. all those musics in whiteticks all are strong qwq用一个折返滑条能够更好地表现出这三个音是一组的。因为难度低，间隔也大，note不一定会比滑条好

good luck ~

IamKwaN wrote:

boom了巴達獸

Unicode Title: シャンランラン feat.96猫 –TV Edit Ver.-
Romanised Title: Shanranran feat.96neko -TV Edit Ver.-

-.-

References:
http://www.miwa-web.com/disco/archive/?SRCL-9093
http://www.sonymusic.co.jp/artist/miwa/ ... /SRCL-9093
http://www.flyingwitch.jp/goods/op.html

再boom

1. 00:03:802 (2,3) - a single slider would work better following the vocals, also the music is the same as 00:03:580 -.
2. 00:06:914 (1,2,3) - the spacing is really chaotic there and don't represent the song correctly IMO, since 2 and 3 has similar sounds in the music, why 3 is a jump and 2 is keeping spacing?
3. 00:15:802 - I'm wonder why you decide to end the spinner there, since 00:15:802 - is the start of the new section, not the end of the previous one.
4. 00:16:025 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - this is really calm music compared to 00:17:580 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - yet both use similar spacing.
5. I don't get the rhythm, for example I get you're following the claps at 00:19:802 (4) - and ignoring the melody 00:20:025 -, but why you're not consistent, since you are following the melody at 00:20:469 (6) -
6. 00:30:025 (1,2) - use two 1/2 sliders instead? they would follow the instruments and vocals better.
7. 00:35:469 - starting streams at blue ticks its really annoying to play, I'd just start the stream at 00:35:358 (1) - were the new music section is starting.
8. 01:26:914 (1,2) - swap NC, since the music changes at 01:27:136 (2) - not in 01:26:914 (1) -

1. 00:24:914 (1,2) - you have a nice rhythm in all the before part, but this isn't that nice, since the sounds at 00:25:136 - 00:25:358 - needs click action and the sounds at 00:25:802 - 00:26:025 (2) - are separate from the rest, my suggestion:
   
2. 00:33:136 (4) - move this a bit down, its actually touching the HP bar and doesn't looks nice at all
3. 01:01:802 (1,1) - something went wrong with the NCs.

1. it is fine, I'm not a fan of the design of this map, I guess you can work on the visual parts and patterning a bit more, sometimes I feel you're just following the distance snap without creating patterns.

Natsu wrote:

GlazeE's Hard

1. 00:24:914 (1,2) - you have a nice rhythm in all the before part, but this isn't that nice, since the sounds at 00:25:136 - 00:25:358 - needs click action and the sounds at 00:25:802 - 00:26:025 (2) - are separate from the rest, my suggestion:
   
2. 00:33:136 (4) - move this a bit down, its actually touching the HP bar and doesn't looks nice at all
3. 01:01:802 (1,1) - something went wrong with the NCs.
   All fixed!

Pata-Mon wrote:

@小激光
我垃圾审美扭不动。最后那里，ez转盘后一小节不能放东西所以不行

@fm
主要你说的那几个地方都不是人声起点……人声基本都是红线音来着所以算啦

thanks for mod

神tm走过场

Ultimate Madoka wrote:

Pata-Mon wrote:

@小激光
我垃圾审美扭不动。最后那里，ez转盘后一小节不能放东西所以不行

@fm
主要你说的那几个地方都不是人声起点……人声基本都是红线音来着所以算啦

thanks for mod

神tm走过场

我给你补个论文如何？

Regraz wrote:

The quality of map is ok but I think it's not a nice idea that the creator only made one difficulty of the map, especially when it is the lowest difficulty.

Natsu wrote:

placeholder

Yomi's Broom

1. 00:03:802 (2,3) - a single slider would work better following the vocals, also the music is the same as 00:03:580 -.
   i prefer pattern now
2. 00:06:914 (1,2,3) - the spacing is really chaotic there and don't represent the song correctly IMO, since 2 and 3 has similar sounds in the music, why 3 is a jump and 2 is keeping spacing? changed
3. 00:15:802 - I'm wonder why you decide to end the spinner there, since 00:15:802 - is the start of the new section, not the end of the previous one. fix
4. 00:16:025 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - this is really calm music compared to 00:17:580 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - yet both use similar spacing.
   i think its not really a big spacing change though
5. I don't get the rhythm, for example I get you're following the claps at 00:19:802 (4) - and ignoring the melody 00:20:025 -, but why you're not consistent, since you are following the melody at 00:20:469 (6) - i didnt donsider about vocal here, idk why but keep my old mind
6. 00:30:025 (1,2) - use two 1/2 sliders instead? they would follow the instruments and vocals better. ^
7. 00:35:469 - starting streams at blue ticks its really annoying to play, I'd just start the stream at 00:35:358 (1) - were the new music section is starting. i think its fine? really common pattern
8. 01:26:914 (1,2) - swap NC, since the music changes at 01:27:136 (2) - not in 01:26:914 (1) -k

sahuang wrote:

[Hard]

1. SV 1.0 is even lower than Normal 1.3... -
   

   sahuang wrote:

   My biggest concern is the sv in Hard, but it's fine to me and i had irc with other bns.

2. 01:00:691 (3,4) - too far away compared to 01:00:914 (4,5,6) - fixed
3. 01:07:358 (1,2,3) - 01:08:247 (1,2,3) - make them consistent with 01:00:247 (1,2,3) - 01:12:247 (5,6,7) - 01:18:025 (1,2,3) - etc.? - fixed
4. 01:18:914 (5,6,2) - the overlap is too random. - fixed
5. 01:26:914 (1,2,3) - http://puu.sh/qQai7/f1ca00f9de.jpg same for 01:00:691 (3,4,5) - don't point reverse slider to the circle cuz it's really hard to read and will ruin ds. - fixed
6. 00:33:580 (1,2) - very bad overlap. - keep, i dont think so
7. 01:09:580 (1,2) - swap NC? - keep, 人声在这里01:09:580 - 开始
8. 00:10:469 (3) - NC - fixed

Regraz wrote:

The quality of map is ok but I think it's not a nice idea that the creator only made one difficulty of the map, especially when it is the lowest difficulty.

sahuang wrote:

My biggest concern is the sv in Hard, but it's fine to me and i had irc with other bns.

Kencho wrote:

[GlazeE's Hard]

1. 00:25:136 (2,3) - 這個節奏改成這樣放比較好，http://puu.sh/qUZ0F/ba6450133c.jpg ，因為原本2的滑條尾是重音，原本那樣不太好，至於排列的話，建議1疊到2上然後3疊到4上就好了 - fixed
2. 00:20:914 (5) - 和00:21:802 (1) - NC互換 - fixed
3. 按照前面的NC套路，00:37:802 (1) - 和00:38:691 (3) - NC也要互換 - fixed
4. 01:08:247 (1) - 不需要NC - fixed
5. 01:23:247 - 個人建議這裡可以像主難度一樣加個轉盤到01:24:247 - ，當然別忘了幫轉盤尾加綠線降低音量。 - fixed