1. Farewell (3.52 stars, 835 notes)

Ars Novaa wrote:

Hello from my queue

GENERAL STUFF

Combo Colors : You should pick appropriate combo colors to match the background of the song
Sider shapes : I noticed many of your sliders are badly shaped . 00:08:999 (1) - , 00:14:538 (1) - and 00:19:153 (8) - are examples of badly shaped sliders. Actually these can be made simple with just 3 of those , uhh dots thingy you click when you make a slider. An example of an OK design with 3 clicks would be http://puu.sh/oDjJ8/7d31baafb4.jpg.
You should change your difficulty settings to correspond with this page https://osu.ppy.sh/wiki/Hard

HARD

00:04:153 (1) - Cancel NC
00:05:191 (4) - I would suggest removing this
Generally, your combos are a little messed up. No worries though , all you have to do is to take note of a few points.
Currently , your combo looks like this http://puu.sh/oDjQ7/7e98a7a40e.jpg
Now taking note of these few points :
- A NC should be added every time the song passes the section marked with a long white tick extending outwards .
Taking that in mind, your new combos should look like this ( after applying the above 2 changes ) http://puu.sh/oDjYs/445dfbd0e0.jpg
Notice a NC at 00:01:615 (1) - , 00:03:461 (1) - and 00:05:307 (1) - ? Thats how it should be done

I think you generally tend to misuse streams. They should be used only when the music calls for it, and also sparingly on a HARD difficulty.
00:11:653 (3) - Add a note here to create a stream and see if it sounds good to you

00:25:615 (3) - You should generally not end sliders on a blue tick as it makes the gameplay seem weird . I understand what you are doing here thought, following the vocals, but if you REALLY want to keep this , I suggest adding an additional hitcircle here 00:26:076
00:26:538 (5,6,7) - This cluttering of notes looks bad . http://puu.sh/oDkcl/abcda5cf45.jpg Try this
00:54:230 This place is missing a beat
00:57:922 (6,8) - If you want to keep this overlap , ensure the end of the first slider completely overlaps the start of the 2nd slider
01:08:076 (5) - Delete this and replace it with a spinner
Ok I noticed you kiai sections have almost the same SV as the rest of the song. I highly , highly recommend you to increase the SV of your kiai sections. They emphasize the chorus of the song and gives the player a sort of adrenaline rush when the increase in SV contrasts with the song
I also noticed you have many breaks in the song , http://puu.sh/oDkDV/3da89fbf72.jpg , taking this section as an example. You see many breaks in your objects which disrupt flow movement . Try to put stuff in those areas

Ok I'll stop here . Overall , a really well done map considering its your first . Just some stuff here and there that needs fixing and you're good to go Feel free to contact me online or via forum pm if you are unclear about anything I said in my mods . Good luck

Pentori wrote:

remember to click the Give Kudos button to those that helped out a lot with your map!


it increases the priority of your map and at the same time gives the modder some credit for their hard work :p


but don't give kudosu when the user didn't really assist in the construction of your map e.g timing help, background image suggestions, or a post like this. if you try to do so a moderator will deny it!



i'll take a look at your map for you tomorrow

Pentori wrote:

heya there. i got a bit of time so i'll do my nm now :3
from my queue

[General]
you should mute the slides of your sliders just download this and drop it into your folder
your background dimensions are 768 x 768. you should find a background that is of the screen ratio 16:9 such as 1366 x 768 or 1280 x 720

[love live daisuki]
00:02:307 (4,5) - if you refer to the grid you can have this to be a straight line
00:05:307 (1,2,3,4) - you can make perfect squares using the create polygon circles tool
00:12:230 (6) - you missed a clap here. try to have a constant hitsound beat through the louder parts of the song c:
00:49:384 (4,5,6) - finishes should be used when there are cymbal crashes or when playing a downbeat. you can keep the one on 6 but remove it from 4,5
00:52:153 (5,6,7) - ^ (not gonna list all of them you can probably look over them yourself)
00:54:230 (3,5) - careful of this overlap
01:20:768 (7,8) - if you line the slider points up with the approach circle of 7, you can form a perfect blanket. you should keep this rule in mind when doing any blanket
01:26:538 (1) - heres a good example to put a finish
02:09:922 (1,1,1) - dont really have to put the ncs here
02:34:845 (2,3) - its very hard to see the note under slider 2. try avoid overlaps like this
03:44:076 - need a note here to keep the flow going
04:05:307 (1,2) - i suggest making this a slider and having it reverse like this

04:29:768 (1) - you only really need 3 points to a curve. too many makes the slider look wonky
04:38:538 (7) - put a new combo here. don't let jumps run too long on 1 combo

good luck! hopefully i gave you enough points that you can apply to the rest of your map

Pentori wrote:

but don't give kudosu when the user didn't really assist in the construction of your map e.g timing help

Pentori wrote:

timing help

Hard

00:07:615 (4) - This slider doesn't look very visually appealing.
00:20:768 (3,4,5) - Please fix overlap.
00:21:922 (7) - Remove the slider point circled on the image below to make slider more visually appealing.

dont talk shit about my circle drawing skills pls
00:27:461 (1,2) - Improve blanket.
00:32:076 (4,5) - This slider isn't very visually appealing, make curve better. Also, make blanket better.
00:32:768 (5,6) - ^
00:35:538 (4,5,6) - Fix overlap, please.
00:41:538 (4,5,6) - Don't do straight circle patterns like this, they look quite bad.
00:47:768 (1,2,3) - Make sliders more visually appealing, and change the hitcircle's position so it doesn't seem random.
00:50:538 (2) - This slight overlap should be changed.
00:53:307 (1,2) - Improve blanket.
00:57:691 (5) - Fix overlap.
00:57:922 (6) - Improve blanket.
01:13:384 (4) - I suggest moving this down by one grid space.
01:30:231 (1,2) - Improve blanket.
01:31:154 (3,4,5) - ^
01:37:385 (4) - Fix overlap.
01:40:153 (7,8,9,10,11) - This part may be hard for the normal Hard player.
01:52:153 (6) - Fix overlap.
01:55:153 (7) - This slider is very visually unappealing.
02:39:691 (6) - I suggest making this a flipped version of 02:39:230 (5) -
02:41:307 (6,7) - Improve blanket.
02:45:922 (1,2,3,4,5) - Sliders are visually unappealing, hitcircle placement seems random.
03:48:691 (1) - This slider is fine until the end.
03:57:461 (1) - I suggest moving this up by one grid space so it is on the middle line.
03:59:768 (1) - I suggest moving this down by one grid space so it is on the center.
04:10:615 (1) - Remove combo, and put a new combo on the slider after this beat.
04:33:230 (4,5) - Improve blanket.
04:41:999 (5,6) - ^

PlasticMemor wrote:

artist name is wrong, here is correct μ's

PlasticMemor wrote:

i think you should change background to this

PlasticMemor wrote:

01:10:153 (1) - spinner recovery time, consider moving it or slider

propasy wrote:

Sound - The hit sound effects are a bit repetitive. I rekon you should make the hit sounds in kiai mode different from the non-kiai mode for more variety

propasy wrote:

02:23:768 (1,2,3,4) – I think there should be another note at 2:24:345 due to the music

propasy wrote:

02:09:691 (8,9,10,11) – Due to the sound of the music, I think circle 8 should appear different to the rest. Perhaps make note 9,10 and 11 a little more spread out. Something like this: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5135363 (Just an idea of the mapping pattern)
02:32:768 (1,2,3,4,5) – I personally would have made note 3 a slider and end at 5 but I see the approach your trying to make
02:52:153 (7,8,9,10,11) – Try make the notes more parallel. Also I think it should look like this: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5135405
02:59:538 (7,8) – I think you should increase slider 7’s bounce while reducing slider 8’s bounce (and moving its position in the timebar) https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5135432
03:19:153 – If your planning to put a delay for the break, I think this should be a better spot as it more appropriately fits the music, or just put the break in as soon as possible (so people who did crap at that last second still have a fighting chance)
03:28:845 – You should add some extra circles here to turn this triple click 03:29:076 (1,2,3) - into a small stream
03:29:999 (1) – You should make that a slider starting at 03:29:768
03:35:768 (1,2,3,4,5) – make the spacing a bit more even
03:47:307 (2,3,4,5,6,7) – Personally, I didn’t think this slider stream didn’t fit with the music
03:52:384 (1) – I think this not shouldn’t be in the centre
04:20:999 (3,4,5,6) – I think all these sliders should be facing right of pointing at each other instead of pointing up
04:53:307 (5,6) – I think note 6 should be under the slider

B r o k e n wrote:

01:11:768 (1) - 01:12:691 (3) - 01:13:615 (5) - too many straight sliders, mix it up a bit curve them, do unique shape sliders or so
02:09:922 (9,10,11) - should have the same distance note 8 to 9 has such a different distance then 9 to 10 to 11, should just 1.6 distance 9 10 11
02:16:845 (2,3) - you can follow the music better here by having single notes, change 02:16:384 (1) - into full beat slider, 02:17:076 add single note, change 02:17:307 (3) - into 2 single note, the single notes will be number 2 3 4 and 5, distance them like 1.6 or stack them all together, for emphasizing the music
03:53:999 (2) - no sound on red tick no need to do a slider, just stick with the single note on the white tick
03:55:845 (4) - ^

B r o k e n wrote:

04:37:153 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - these distance might be a bit too much for hard, consider reducing it a bit, like 1.8 distance, I have no problem with it being like this but, it may be a bit too much as a hard

Underforest wrote:

Drain time is unrankable
You should map the break and make the spinner finish at 5:02

100bit wrote:

[Song and Beatmaps]Strange BG-ratio. Normal resolution for 16:9 is 1366x768. Also you can change picture because this picture have bad quality.
Title is さようならへさよなら！(remove "Sayonara e Sayonara!" from Title because you have it in Romanised Title)[/box]
[Sayonara]Offset is 1629.
00:17:999 (5,6) - don't stack
00:21:691 (6,7) - ^
00:53:307 - 01:04:038 - maybe put in 00:50:307 inherit points with 0.75x Slider Velosity speed?
01:25:384 (1,2,3,4,5) - it looks weird, what about stream?
01:29:077 (6,7,8,9,10,11) - this pattern is boring
01:40:153 (7,8,9,10,11) - overdose of kicksliders!
01:46:384 (7,1) - strange stack
01:50:307 (2,3) - don't stack
01:53:999 (5,6) - fix flow
02:08:076 (5,7) - try to avoid overlap
02:10:845 (1,2) - fix this jump, it's confused
02:12:691 (5,6) - ^
02:43:153 (3) - strange slider, i think
02:48:691 (7,9) - don't stack
03:11:768 (2,3) - fix flow
03:37:384 (1,2) - don't stack
03:56:999 (7) - nc?
03:52:384 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11) - recheck jumps
04:04:730 (6) - change to circles for stream?
04:07:153 (1) - strange slider in terms of constructing
04:20:999 (3,4,5,6) - very strange pattern, i think
04:37:153 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - make another jump-pattern
04:48:461 (1,2) - don't stack
04:48:691 (2,3,4) - fix flow
04:54:807 (1) - end in 05:00:691
Good luck!
{end of mod}

100bit wrote:

01:10:845 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - claps everywhere is bad, i think.
02:59:538 (7,8) - strange sliders because you have not-identical repeats, you can make another sliders or stream here
02:45:345 (4,5) - maybe continue stream with 02:44:999 (1,2,3) ?