Kencho wrote:

水了一貼

[nORMAL]

1. 00:23:104 (5) - DS1.25x了，誤差不要超過+-0.05 fixed
2. 02:31:104 (4) - 這都1.30x了 fixed
3. 02:33:993 (3) - 1.14x fixed
4. 02:44:215 (1) - 1.28x fixed

[hARD]

1. 如果主難度沒改HP，Hard用HP5.5比較好，如果主難度改成了HP6，那Hard就改成HP5。 [lUNATIC]
   
   1. 這個NC頻率和物件密度來說，HP6比較好 [color=#4080BF'>HP6太简单了...真的，HR都不存在难度
2. 00:10:215 (9) - ctrl+G可能會好點 这个位置玩家的机械记忆应该不会变，改了的话有点憋屈。
3. 01:37:549 (4,5) - 換個位置會好打點 个人觉得这里暂时没问题
4. 01:55:327 (6,7) - 感覺有點太遠了 我就怕别人说远了，但是实际上这些地方都不难，毕竟这才是135bpm的曲子，再跳也跳不过哪里去。我总不可能做个Ex来摆起来看对吧
5. 02:48:437 (4) - 在我的審美角度來說這個改成像02:48:882 (5) - 的直滑條會比較好看 fixed,可以可以
   大多數梗都是用同樣的方式和順序放的，也沒什麼可以摸的

GL~

Streliteela wrote:

人家才不是来送水摸的呢哼(╯^╰)

确定要开咩=。= 开呀，反正不影响。而且我不想动setup，因为会改标题。

[lUNATIC]

1. 00:25:326 (1) - 强迫症表示请转-8°，感觉弧度和00:24:437 (9) - 这里能对应得更舒服一些 中心翻转看看？这里应该我更强迫症一点。
2. 00:44:437 (6) - 这个建议ctrl+g，因为结合00:43:104 (1,2,3) - 来看这里你用的是逆flow，而且后面00:46:660 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 相同节奏的这里是连续用的两个逆flow，只有这里太顺了一些反而有些不统一了 fixed
3. 01:54:215 (1,3) - 我觉得这两个换一下位置会更舒服一些，正好顺时针就转下来了 我感觉..不是很适合..
4. 02:35:771 (4,5,6) - 这三个要不要加个drum hitnormal，我觉得这里音乐是有鼓点的 fixed
5. 03:47:104 (3) - 感觉漏了一个drum normal在这里 fixed

[hARD]

• 
  不是很懂这个喵里喵气的风格，思考 要怎样啦o3o

1. 00:24:437 (3) - 虽然不想nazi但是这里还是建议能稍稍和00:23:993 (2) - 的尾巴blanket一下，或者至少弧度大一些。现在这个位置总看着很尴尬 不是很想这么做
2. 00:49:326 (5,6,7,1) - 并不是很懂这三个东西不等距的意义何在，建议把00:49:771 (6,7) - 移到 x5|y117 单纯想突出啪啪两声，应该没啥问题
3. 01:32:437 (4) - 总觉得这位置好尴尬啊，移到 x208|y20让01:31:104 (1,2,3,4) - 凑个小对称或者 x248|y16凑个小三角都行，反正你前面01:31:549 (2,3) - 的ds都在2以上了这里大点也不过分 那就小三角吧 fixed

nm看你改了就不摸了，ez挺好，这喵外喵气的风格我喜欢
哼，才不会射星呢(╯^╰)

Spotty wrote:

eZ

00:14:660 (1) - I would make a curved slider here ~ fixed
00:18:215 (1) - I think this note is not necessary It doesnt feel good when delete it
02:27:993 (4,5,6,1,2,3) - I don't know, but I think this part is quite hard for an Easy level a bit, but it's in control and I think it's fine

nORMAL

01:24:882 (3) - I think it could be good if this slider is curved a bit :3 not to me this time ;w;
02:25:771 (4,1,2) - This part is a little bit "hard" for a Normal imo it spreads out well, should have no problem with it.
02:36:882 (1) - Isn't that out of the grid? D: Out of grid is fine, while out of edge(screen) is wrong
03:37:326 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - A bit hard here imo D: I think we should regard Easy as Normal, Normal as Hard, Hard as Insane... in this mapset. I want to do a balanced spread, then this is the result.

I also give you a kudo, even if you don't need it, just because I like the map ♥
Good luck Frey !

Ataraxia wrote:

Hii
from my queue

Easy

00:49:771 (5,1) - I think this forced in a easy, you should use a reverse! based on the low bpm (135 should be low enough), I think it's fine to use proper 1/2s in such Easy diff.
02:50:660 (6,7) - I Don't belive this is good in a Easy, its suddenly fixed, change it into a slider

Normal

Its all good for me :3

Hard

00:03:104 (2) - Think is better if are 2 same sliders, not a straight and a curved umm, fixed, I decrease the angle

Lunatic

I Think the NC's Are incoerent, any upbeat needs to have NC, you should fix this in the map lyrics as 01:29:326 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - , they are in the same sentence, for an Insane, I think we have more freedom to use the NC.

Are not much to say, the map just great !

good luck with the rank !

6th wrote:

Hello ! m4m

[Easy]
01:13:326 (3) - Use circles as you did for 00:02:215 (3,4) - and 01:27:549 (3,4) - ? Fits better imo 01:13:326 (3,4) - but those look better to me
02:58:215 (1,2) - Those curves really feel like incoming flow is circular when playing but it isn't yeah.. but hard to change this place..

[Normal]
I'd increase AR a bit, like 5,5-ish 5 is enough to play
01:13:326 (1,2) - I think this could be improved. Try curving (2) ? Combining straight slider with curved slider, seems more balanced
02:27:549 (4,1,2) - This looks a bit harsh to play. You should try moving (2) up not to me, and it hurts the spacing.

[Hard]
00:15:549 (4) - Minor but I feel like this spacing is exagerated compared to 00:18:882 (4) - Just regard this Hard as a Light Insane. It seems like the only way that I can keep the balanced spread/
01:20:215 (5) - It would be nice if it could be placed at (x;64) x64?
01:43:104 (4) - I'd have placed it a bit further fixed
03:37:326 (1) - ^ fixed

[Lunatic]
01:46:882 (2,3,4) - This spacing looks a bit exagerated since you stacked this 02:01:104 (2,3,4) - 01:46:882 (2,5) - the stack trick looks cool to me, I want to keep it.

Nice map ! Good luck, sorry if I couldn't help a lot

1. Uncheck widescreen support because you don't have a storyboard...or are you planning to have one?
2. I just found the album of this song: BACKFLASH Audibility
   You might want to add the album name in tag.

1. 00:07:104 (1,2,3,4) - Would be better if you NC on downbeat (specifically on slider 4) instead on circle 1 (which is not downbeat). NC works best if applied on downbeats.
   
2. 03:16:437 (2,3) - Maybe it's just me, but the flow feels weird if stacked because the others (03:16:882 (4,5,6,7)) is unstacked.

1. 00:02:215 (1,2) - I think it would be better if slider 1 has a curve similiar to slider 2. Or the other way around, making slider 2 straight like slider 1.
2. 00:19:993 (1,2) - Looks blanket-able for me. Just saying.

1. 1.4 SV... In my opinion, 1.2 would be better.
2. 00:52:660 (3,4) - The blanket could be improved, I think.
3. 02:07:549 (4) - It would be better if the downbeat (big white tick) has a clickable object. For this one, try this:
   
4. 03:47:104 (3) - Same as above.

1. Wanna try 1.0 SV?
2. 00:05:771 (3,4) - Looks blanket-able for me.

Nelka714 wrote:

hi there
mod4mod here

SPOILER

[General]

1. Uncheck widescreen support because you don't have a storyboard...or are you planning to have one?
2. I just found the album of this song: BACKFLASH Audibility
   You might want to add the album name in tag. ok

[lUNATIC]

1. 00:07:104 (1,2,3,4) - Would be better if you NC on downbeat (specifically on slider 4) instead on circle 1 (which is not downbeat). NC works best if applied on downbeats. I want to avoid two digits and want to limit the sentence of lyrics in one combo color, so that is the result.
2. 03:16:437 (2,3) - Maybe it's just me, but the flow feels weird if stacked because the others (03:16:882 (4,5,6,7)) is unstacked. fixed

Other than that is mostly the NC issues. Take it to your preference. NC in high levels couldn't be called a issue, unless it's NC spam or you can't read it cuz of the NC.

[hARD]

1. 00:02:215 (1,2) - I think it would be better if slider 1 has a curve similiar to slider 2. Or the other way around, making slider 2 straight like slider 1. copy&paste looks poor and every mapper likes it, I just want to avoid it.
2. 00:19:993 (1,2) - Looks blanket-able for me. Just saying. not to me...

[nORMAL]

1. 1.4 SV... In my opinion, 1.2 would be better. it‘s 1.2x right?
2. 00:52:660 (3,4) - The blanket could be improved, I think. 2hard2fixit
3. 02:07:549 (4) - It would be better if the downbeat (big white tick) has a clickable object. For this one, try this:
4. 03:47:104 (3) - Same as above.

Other than that is mostly the downbeat issues. Take it to your preference. It will be poor if every downbeat is clickable in lower diffs

[eAZY]

1. Wanna try 1.0 SV? I don't want to remap it, sorry but no
2. 00:05:771 (3,4) - Looks blanket-able for me.

I guess you mean 00:04:882 (2,4) - , but I still don't want it
Other than that is mostly some blanket-able notes. Take it to your preference.

that's all i can do
i hope it's helpful

TicClick wrote:

Hey.

First thing that caught my eye is eAZY instead of eASY. You can also add th11 to tags if that matters anything for you. fixed and added

You should really find a QAT to fix the title's appearance for you; it's so long that it goes well off the screen. Following https://osu.ppy.sh/wiki/Changing_Title_Text, there are two ways to do this:

1. Insert a line break, presumably after "THE WORLD,", like it's been done for kanbu de todomatte blah blah:
   

   [size:20,bold:0]CYTOKINE|sEE NEW THE WORLD,|SHE KNEW THE WORLD - CYTOKINE Remix

   OR (recommended to try first)
   

   [size:20,bold:0]CYTOKINE|sEE NEW THE WORLD, SHE KNEW THE WORLD|[size:20,bold:0]CYTOKINE Remix

2. Use a smaller font size for title only (maybe 30 will do):
   

   [size:20,bold:0]CYTOKINE|[size:30]sEE NEW THE WORLD, SHE KNEW THE WORLD - CYTOKINE Remix

sure, I'm going to find a QAT

[lUNATIC and hARD]

1. 01:29:326 (1) - move it 1/2 backwards? I like how it creates a 1/1 gap, which emphasizes the vocals
2. 03:08:882 (1) - ↑ At the same time, I dont want to miss the drum sound, I think it can be followed
3. 02:00:437 (3) - you could make a nice long slider here for obvious reasons
4. 03:39:993 (3) - ↑ well, the reason is, if I use a long slider, there will be double-digit combo according to the NC I did before. tbh, I don't like double-digit combo.

[hARD]

1. 00:50:660 (2) - I'd bend it too to make it match the shape of 00:50:215 (1)

fixed

The only real (but at the same time major) complaint I have regarding lUNATIC (and probably hARD too) is about the way you mapped pre-chorus parts. The constant use of triplets instead of doubles is, in my opinion, a worse representation of song. For example, listen to 00:45:549 (4,5,6). What the song really calls for is a pair of doubles: https://tc.s-ul.eu/9zUpjvSW.png, which is welcome both by an accented syllable at 00:45:660 and a drum hit at 00:45:882. The same goes for 00:49:104 (4,5,6,7) and other similar patterns before preview point, 01:11:549, and the part after the second break, 02:22:660 to 02:51:104. You can make it mORE iNTERESTING to play if you follow my advice.

There are also notes you didn't map, like 00:44:104 and 00:47:660, but I'll leave it up to you (seems like you prefer vocals over anything, which isn't a bad thing at all).

I would also add slightly more hitsounds (specifically, normal hits or drum finishers) on sections 00:43:104 to 00:57:326 and 02:22:660 to 02:36:882. Examples:

1. 00:43:771 -
2. 00:45:549 -

Thanks for your advice, I was aware of the drum sound in blue lines. I know it sounds (or playrs) a bit weird. Why I don't map them out? I have to say, I planed to make this mapset easy to play with DT. If here are full of beats on basic lines, it would be surely easy to DT it. In a word, I want to make it more simple to play with DT.

Finally, I'd make purple and blue combo colors less bright, changing them to (225,75,125) and (45,125,210) respectively. fixed
All the best!

sahuang wrote:

[General]

1. soft-sliderslide然后把sampleset改成s:c1? 音乐的底音很足，应该可以盖过Slide

[e]

1. 00:18:215 (1,2) - 建议换位置，一来避免3个single tap二来和后面保持consistency QAQ 假如太追求一致性图就千篇一律很无聊，
2. 00:21:771 (1,2) - flow感觉有点怪。。 Easy应该不会太有flow问题
3. 00:55:549 (4,5,6) - 为啥不和前面保持一样的节奏啊00:48:437 (3,4,5) - 歌词在1/1有对应的话，我还是以歌词为主。
4. 01:15:104 (1,2,3) - 滑条最好从1或者3拍开始~~ 我还是希望稍微加一点变数来增加一点趣味。

[n]

1. 00:46:660 - 最好clickable 一改会改很多，而且可能会导致Easy和Normal之间的gap加大，这应该不是一个问题，为了避免新问题我觉得还是不改。
2. 00:53:771 - 01:00:882 - stc.^^大概是风格不同，滑条尾重音感觉挺奇怪，不过可能因为是normal的缘故 同上
3. 01:24:437 (2,3) - 我觉得稍微叠一下更好看咩 我尽量避免overlap。因为不喜欢
   http://puu.sh/oGYVc/bd97503d7c.jpg
4. 01:55:104 (4,5) - 唯一一个和其它地方inconsistent的节奏方式 随机一点没有问题，还是这句话。
5. 太神了，什么都摸不出来

[h]

1. 01:49:326 (3,4) - 倒是感觉距离可以近一点，重叠一点，和前面一样DS1.0 感觉改了并且降低难度没什么意义。

[l]

1. 卧槽开头一堆single tap。。 我一开始就是打算这段歌词全是3个3个圆圈。
2. 00:00:438 (1,2,3,4) - 按照vocal感觉3,4之间距离应该很近，2和3倒是可以拉开距离 不想变换规律让三连的位置不好猜。毕竟我是打算都可以轻松HD+DT（或者FL）的
3. 00:01:549 (6,7) - 也有点莫名
4. 感觉每个7,8个的跳都蛮卡手，一个钝角一个锐角的来hhh 实话说看多了日本流的兔子跳再看我这种一开始就不打算让你好打并且还突出几何图案的方法的确会不习惯。
5. 00:46:215 (8) - 可以考虑类似地方变成短滑条 曲子里没听到对应音符...
6. 01:40:215 (2,3,4,6,7) - 还是间距有点感觉不符合歌曲 反正以几何为中心作图的我肯定还会被其他人挑刺的。

感觉太水了，随便看看吧，GL