1. Crowie's Normal (2.13 stars, 214 notes)
2. Hard (3.28 stars, 301 notes)
3. Lunatic (4.67 stars, 552 notes)

Cheesecake wrote:

Storyboard mod? What's that?

00:23:401 (1) - This ripple coming out here would probably be better placed on the stronger downbeat 00:23:578 (2) - here yup, sounds good

e: The examples I use are from the top diff and oh my god I just realised while editing this that you use ripples from the top diff in every diff where the objects aren't in the same place, so you need to make a new .osb for every diff and move the ripples Yea haha I made the ripples for the top diff only. I guess I will have to make different ones.

Also, to me it looks like you've just gone and placed it on top of where the circle is in the editor, but this doesn't correspond to where it'll actually appear in-game since they aren't lined up properly for whatever reason. To fix this you need to go into the .osb file and find the right "sb/ring" part, then change the line with M (move) so that the position co-ordinates are the circle's co-ordinates with +64 to x and +56 to y. For example, the position co-ordinate of 00:23:578 (2) - is X:266, Y:168, so the co-ordinate of your sprite should be X:330 Y:224. The line in your .osb will look like M,0,23313,,330,224 This helped a lot actually. I tried what you said but the ripples didn't quite line up, so did some math and found it to be around +64 and +72. Now I know!

01:31:166 (6) - Oops wrong colour fixed
01:33:989 (2) - ^ ^
01:36:813 (9) - ^ ^
01:38:225 (7) - Yeah you get it by now

Maybe start your fade out at 01:53:931 - so it's not so sudden fixed

When I look in the .osb you have all random numbers like this for girlbright.png, you should probably change all these to the same value for consistency - I can see they're all hovering around 0.5 and 0 so maybe change to those? (This is the benefit of making storyboards using SGL rather than the in-game design tab hehe) This is gonna take a while lol. I've tried using sql, but I don't have the time to figure everything out sadly. I would love to get into though, because I've seen many sb's with great animations out of it.

HydroCannon13 wrote:

Hey dude, here's the m4m

[ Easy]

1. 00:20:754 (3) - I would put spinner instead of reverse sliderfixed
2. 00:33:460 (3,1) - really weird overlap here, make it look nicer fixed
3. 00:54:637 (1) - have this start at 00:54:637, I know it currently starts at the beginning of the vocal thing, but the beat at 00:54:637 seems to be stronger. an example of how well this works is the spinner at 01:05:931 (1) fixed
4. 01:02:401 (3) - this slider ends on a strong beat which I think should be clickable fixed
5. 01:10:166 (2) - would play much nicer if this were to point down towards the next slider imo fixed
6. 01:13:519 (3) - odd overlap with the next slider fixed
7. 01:18:460 (1,1) - why not distance snap this? the rest is snapped to 1.5x, and it would also get rid of weird overlap as well This is actually was distance snapped lol But yea the overlap is weird. fixed
8. 01:35:578 - think you should fill this area instead of leaving nothing, there are some beats here that should be mappedfixed

[ Normal]

1. 00:23:225 (1) - end should be clicked tbh fixed
2. 01:05:754 (1) - same spinner thing from easy diff mod (3rd bullet) fixed
3. I think AR 4 - 5 suits this diff more

[ Hard]

1. first inherited point is off from the tick a little bit, makes the first slider follow a different svI would have never noticed lol
2. 00:23:401 (3,4) - instead of slider first then circle, think you should do circle first and then fix the positions on the grid fixed
3. 00:41:578 (5) - if this will have 2 reverses, then (6) should be placed closer to it fixed
4. 00:44:401 (8) - last reverse should be a circle or something to emphasize the white tick there fixed
5. 00:54:460 (1) - spinner thing again fixed
6. 01:05:754 (1) - ^ fixed
7. 01:04:519 - should be something here, feels odd without fixed
8. AR 7 - 7.5 maybe, as well as something like HP 6 and OD 6 fits Hard diff morefixed

[ Colors]

1. 00:13:166 (7) - don't think it has to be a 1/4 slider, could just be a circle I see what you mean, but I like how it adds a little impact to the snare at the end.
2. 00:14:578 (7) - ^ ^
3. 00:32:401 (2,3,4) - could possibly make these closer together instead of really spaced I made them spaced because of the high distortion in the singers voice, it kinda fits together. I think I'll put them a little closer though like you said.
4. 00:44:754 (1,2,3) - ^ fixed
5. 00:33:989 (4) - this is just 1/4, not 1/8 fixed

Very nice mapset, love song and nice storyboard as well

LigerZero wrote:

No Kudosu

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TenkaiPalm wrote:

Hi, here are my opinions

Colors (Insane)
00:13:342 (8) - The distance snap for this kinda seems off :< Consider putting near the stream/slider before it?
This happens several different times so I won't repeat it.ehh iI'll put em a little closer
00:17:754 (1,2,3) - I'm not sure why, but it feels like this feels like an out-liar to the rest, I'm not saying you have to change it but look at it again, and if you think you should change it, do so I added a slider to make it fit better
00:22:695 (4,5,6,1,2,3,4) - Un-even streams You don't have to change it, but I'm not a huge fan of them :< I spaced the 2nd stream more to add to the buildup of the spacing of the kiai time.
00:42:284 (1) - (These are nice, just a comment ) thanks
01:21:901 (4) - Round the edge of this stream? nahhh i like the way i have it
01:26:225 (5) - Not saying that you have to, but maybe making this slider bend the opposite direction would fit better. good idea
01:53:578 (2) - I feel like this last part should be 3 separate notes, and should be larger jumps. A small slider and small distance seems like such an underwhelming ending. Ya know, I actually had a bigger distance at first but i changed it because someone said it was weird. I agree with you! And I'm keeping it this time ! lol

Hard
00:24:284 (6) - Um, the storyboard elements don't fit for this difficulty Yea I'm still working on trying to make different sb's tfor each diff :/
00:29:225 (1) - 00:34:519 (5) - 00:43:342 (4) - 01:31:342 (1) - 01:32:754 - etc. You get the point^^^^ ^^
00:36:989 (3) - Maybe make the beat snap divider smaller and make this repeat faster? I liked it in the colors difficulty and technically it doesn't make the map any harder. fixed
00:42:284 (7) - Maybe make a repeat slider to fit with the song? fixed
00:44:401 (8,9) - I'm not too sure why, but this part sounds odd. sounds fine to me, it goes perfectly with the singers voice
01:53:578 (2) - Maybe this should be 3 separate notes like I said in the colors difficulty at the end^ fixed

Overall this map is pretty cool
Good luck with getting it ranked!!

General

Easy

Shorten this slider a bit, it's ending on a blue tick

Feels awkward for new players to play a slider that ends on the start of a new section of the chorus. consider shortening the slider and adding a single tap

Normal

Hard

Generally you should re-NC the chorus, there's some inconsistency there NC'ing every second big white beat would be recommended

Same here. (The beats should honestly be there )

Colors

Spork Lover wrote:

M4M hype

BEFORE YOU READ THE MOD:
I'm normally a very picky modder, and I normally give my honest opinions about the map.
Also, reading the colour coding explains the importance of said suggestion or necessity.

COLOURS:

Color coding

Importance:
Red = Unrankable if unchanged
Black = Normal Suggestion
Blue = Strong Suggestion
Pink = Comment

General

I don't know if the storyboard is bright enough to force an epilepsy warning (Talk to a BN about it)

Easy

00:16:519 (2,1) - I think you should make this blanket a bit more noticeable fixed
00:32:048 (1) - Remove this NC, you should NC every 4th big white beat instead imo for consistent NC'ing :3I'll remember that
00:39:107 (1) - Remove NC fixed
00:40:519 (3) - NC fixed
00:43:342 (1) - Remove NC fixed
00:54:637 (1) - Maybe make the spinner end on 00:56:754? It's a little short I think :3 Well I was told that for easy diffs, there should be a full measure for recovery after spinners.
01:03:107 (4) - NC fixed
01:03:813 (1) - Remove NC fixed
01:10:166 (2) - Shorten this slider a bit, it's ending on a blue tick (fixed)
01:20:048 - Feels awkward for new players to play a slider that ends on the start of a new section of the chorus. consider shortening the slider and adding a single tap (fixed)
01:21:460 (1) - Blanket this slider with the end of the previous slider (Or newly made single tap) fixed
01:29:931 (1) - Remove NC fixed
01:31:342 (2) - NC, this is a new section! (fixed)
01:39:813 (1) - Remove NC, since the previous was 6, and this one was a mere 2. fixed
01:45:460 (1) - Same thing. fixed

Final thoughts on Easy diff:
Overall I think you should create more blankety patterns to make the map prettier. The map isn't bad in any way, but there's definitely some stuff that could be fixed Thanks! I'll go back and make some tweaks.

Normal

00:19:342 (1) - Remove NC (This one isn't too important, but beware of inconsistent NC'ing) fixed
00:20:754 (1) - You could make the spinner longer like I suggested in the easy diff fixed
00:33:460 - Sliderend on a big white beat is a no-no, especially if a stream is coming up! (fixed)
00:39:637 (1) - Remove NC fixed
00:40:519 (3) - NC fixed
00:43:342 (1,2,3) - You could do some with blankets here, doesn't look aestheticly good. I tried to make blankets where i could lol
01:02:401 (1,2) - I'd say switch NC, but both work I think. I'll just leave it as is
01:19:695 - Add a single tap here, feels very empty! fixed
01:21:107 (3,4) - This part doesn't follow the vocals too well. Consider making the slider a single tap, and copying 01:20:048 (1,2,3) - (With 3 as singletap) and adding it later. fixed
01:23:931 (3,4) - Same problem. fixed
01:26:754 (3,4) - Again, it doesn't flow imo fixed
01:42:107 (1,2) - Switch NC, 2nd slider is on the main beat, so this could be prioritized :3 fixed
01:53:931 - I'd add another beat here I think I'd feel better if there was a note on the big white beat :3 I think it'd feel weird to add it there and then that's it, you know what i mean? I'll just keep it as is

Final thoughts on normal:
A few rhythm issues, and some patterns that could be prettier But the overall experience is positive thanks!

Hard

00:01:519 (3) - Move this slider down a bit ^^ The first note wasn't snapped and messed everything up lol. fixed
00:16:519 (4) - NC, since you NC'ed on this (00:13:695 (1) - ) spot. good point actually
00:20:754 (1,2,3,4) - To spice things up, you could add two 1/8 sliders instead of those 4 kicksliders to follow the fast beat here! good idea
00:44:753 (9) - NC fixed
00:44:931 (1) - Remove NC fixed
00:51:813 (1,3) - The sliderend on 3 should blanket the first slider a bit better :3 fixed
00:57:459 (2) - Shorten this slider, ending isn't snapped probably. fixed
00:57:459 (2) - Also, it has a fairly weird shape. The "Zig-zaggy" thing is alright, but it could look a bit more appealing. I think i fixed what you were talking about lol

Generally you should re-NC the chorus, there's some inconsistency there NC'ing every second big white beat would be recommended Will fix this!
01:09:813 - I'd add a note here. (fixed)
01:11:225 - Same here. (The beats should honestly be there ) (fixed)
01:12:989 (4,5) - This blanket's a little undone fixed
01:25:695 - Do something with a singletap here, and NC that singletap. fixed

Final thoughts on Hard:
Some NC issues and aesthetic issues with blankets and such, could be fixed. I'll try my best to add blankets where i can!

Colors

00:04:166 (1) - I donno if you should NC this because it's a mirror. I will, thanks for pointing it out
00:56:401 (2) - Make the slider into two single taps, that are further spaced. (The second singletap should be the start of the stream.) fixed
01:05:048 (6,7) - You should extend the slider instead and delete the singletap imo great idea actually lol
01:26:754 (6,1,2,3,4,5) - Place slider 6 in a way that makes the stream prettier, 'cause the contrast between 6 and 1 isn't too great atm. fixed
01:31:342 - From here, another NC re-do would be optimal. Every second big white beat! (It's fine to NC the "Ding" sound!) (fixed)
01:53:401 (1,2) - You could spice this part up by copy-pasting the previous 3 jumps instead and Ctrl+H'ing it. GENIUS

Final thoughts on Insane:
Imo this is the best diff of the set, 'cause you play around with star jumps and such, which makes the map very nice Tbh my the only diffs im confident in making are insanes. Any other diff I have trouble with haha

FINAL final thoughts:
Overall I think this mapset needs some tweaking and changes to be ranked in the future, since the approval standard is really high (Like, insanely high >.<). But I think that with enough mods and enough patience, you'll get there Good luck in the future with the mapset man !

Kisses wrote:

hi m4m, ok so I'm a day late, dont hate me pls ;w;

Easy

1. 00:15:107 - This is one of the most dominant beats in the entire song, I really recommend putting a circle on it. fixed
2. 00:17:931 (1,2) - When the border touches slightly it looks kinda un-appealing to me fixed nazi
3. 00:27:813 (4) - This would flow better if it was on top of slider (3) going across. It flows nicely into slider (1) aswell. http://puu.sh/o3jfK/ec7181237b.jpg . if you like these kind of overlaps --> http://puu.sh/o3jgD/67158a8c0a.jpg delicious
4. 01:20:048 (1) - I think you should make this into a slider, it does feel pretty empty here fixed
5. 01:21:460 (1) - Delete NC fixed
6. 01:22:872 - Map this beat, same as 00:15:107 it feels especially empty having nothing here fixed
7. 01:24:284 (4,5) - Maybe consider having these 2 circles as one slider as on is on a white tick and the other is on a red tick fixed
8. 01:27:107 (2) - Can you move this up to around 84x, 140y? It loses its appeal when it slightly touches (1) fixed
9. 01:32:754 (2) - I think this pattern would look really pretty if you curved this, it also has good flow too. http://puu.sh/o3jWO/7304686c9e.jpg
10. 01:39:813 (3) - Do you not want to curve this slider the other way http://puu.sh/o3k1m/e51845fa16.jpg ? The sliders in the pattern 01:31:342 fixed(1,2,3,4,5,1,2) - all change direction according to the music but this one is an odd one out

Normal

1. 00:10:342 (2,3) - I think you should create a bit a space, visually. What do you think?I think I understand what you mean. I increased the spacing a little but I'm kinda limited since it's only a normal diff
2. 00:17:931 (1,3) - Because these are similar sounds I think you should have them both straight or both curved instead of one or the other fixed
3. 00:20:754 (1) - I would end this spinner at 00:22:166 , like you did for your easy. fixed
4. 00:25:519 (6) - I think its fine to have changes in direction generally but since you did one earlier at 00:24:460 (4,5) I think you should put this under http://puu.sh/o3kud/5802b7cb9c.jpg fixed
5. 00:30:637 (2) - - This appears quite some time before 00:29:225 (8) actually finishes so I would avoid the underlap fixed
6. 00:34:166 (6,7,8) - Consider changing to a reverse slider. the note density is so sort of pushing it towards a hard diff and I imagine normal players would already be ovewhelmed by 00:32:048 (1,2,3,4,5) - good point
7. 00:39:637 (5,6) - In all your previous patterns you stack the circle under the slider, how come you didnt do it here? I actually don't know lol. I guess I was tired or somethin
8. 00:58:872 (3) - what do you think about this rhythm? http://puu.sh/o3kM7/929b75a8ac.jpg great idea
9. 01:04:519 (1,2,3,4) - 4 1/2 single taps is quite harsh dont you think? lol
10. 01:03:637 (3) - Change to a 1/1 slider with a circle after it? http://puu.sh/o3kXY/e5246e46f6.jpg I think that first the music better imo. It gives a nice clickable object on 01:04:166 as well fixed
11. 01:13:872 - Since this is a normal try added a 1/2 slider here to fill some space, see if you like it http://puu.sh/o3l2Y/95964bf456.jpg (1) and (4) are 01:12:989 (4,1)
12. 01:27:107 (5) - Make into 1/1 slider for consistency fixed
13. 01:53:401 (1,2,3) - The spacing just doesnt look right, also since its the end of the song I think it plays better as a reverse slider as multiple clickable makes it feel like it has the same intensity as the music before it. fixed

Hard

1. 00:20:754 (1,2,3,4) - The use of rverse sliders doesnt match the music imho, maybe try using 1/2 sliders? I honestly can't figure out what to put here to go with the buildup without making it to difficult tbh. I'll just put the sliders until I can figure out something.
2. 00:35:048 (1) - Consider deleting this note, it suits the music and also creates a nice pause since there hasnt been a pause from the start of the kiai time. fixed
3. 00:36:637 (2,3) - Why are these sliders 1/6? All the other sliders are 1/4 I think someone told me in a previous mod, but now that I look at it I think 1/4 is better.
4. 00:46:166 (1,2,3) - For the parts where you have slider -> circle -> slider I think it would be better to have it as slider -> slider -> circle http://puu.sh/o3lFc/4de2316278.jpg that way you get a nice clickable object on the end 00:47:225 . If you use this apply to the areas where you've used this rhythm. I see what you mean. It goes really well with the beat there, I never noticed it really before.
5. 01:15:460 (4,8) - missing clap or is this intentional? probably a mistake
6. 01:53:401 (1,2) - Because all these notes are the same intensity I think it would be better to have this as either 3 circles or a reverse slider. that way the intensity of the 3 notes is the same fixed

Insane

1. 00:13:166 (7) - I have the feeling people are going to misread this as 2 circles, as you can see the number. It works at 00:17:048 (1,2,3,4,5) as the spacing here is higher I increased the spacing on the lower spaced streams
2. 00:31:519 (1) - I think sliders like these are suppose to be 1/8 good point
3. 00:36:989 (1) - ^ Also ending it on 00:37:298 by making it 1/8 gives a more comfortable hit window when moving on the the nest slider fixed
4. 00:20:754 (1) to 00:23:401 (1) - This pattern is really nice, n1 aye
5. 00:42:284 (1) - I think its appropiate to make this into 2 sliders Damn I thought I was gonna get through this with no rejections lol. I'm actually gonna keep this because it fits perfectly with her voice fading out while distorted.
6. 01:50:225 (1) - I think the SV feels out of place imho I think for the sake or consistency I'm just gonna leave it as is.

Most of these are just my thoughts and I tried to keep my suggestions as close to your own mapping style and current rhythm used though feel free to reject everyone if you like

GL!

Kisses wrote:

damn, if only I skipped the last 2 points I would have made the perfect mod xD I just looked over your hard diff again

00:36:637 (2) - I think the position of this is a mistake LOL WTF
01:04:166 (1,1) - delete one of these NC? fixed
01:53:401 (5) - needs to be snapped to red and white ticks fixed

no kds ofc

• 
  
  
  General

1. Epilepsy warning is kind of useless (idk I don't have epilepsy)
2. I believe PNG is superior to JPG so http://puu.sh/o51MG/2336af5f8f.png
   
   Colors
3. 00:13:342 (8) - NC here pls and not 00:13:519 (1) -
4. 00:14:048 (4) - ^
5. 00:14:754 (10) - ^
6. 00:16:166 (10) - ^
7. 00:19:519 (2,3) - plays better with CTRL + G
8. 00:22:872 (6) - NC should be on this white tick or 00:22:519 (3) - , and when you try to make a stream like that, make sure that it's divided evenly on object count where they split, right now you have 00:22:695 (4,5,6) - and 00:22:960 (1,2,3,4) - 3:4, you could alternatively move 00:23:225 (4) - away a little bit. Also I see no reason for the stream to bend like it does, make it straight all the way up
9. 00:23:401 (1,2,3) - make these form a triangle with even spacing instead, right now 00:23:578 (2,3) - are a little more spaced than 1,2
10. 00:25:519 (4) - this could be moved down here http://puu.sh/o52I9/cd1142bee9.png for the sake of flow
11. 00:26:401 (1) - CTRL + G
12. 00:28:342 (4) - move this to like x:192|y:172
13. 00:28:342 (4,5) - awkward spacing if you approved the mod above ^ so you should move 00:28:695 (5,6,7) - little to the right
14. 00:29:048 (7) - NC here instead
15. 00:31:166 (3,1) - too close, move 00:31:519 (1) - so you dont have weird spacing
16. 00:34:342 (1) - no need for NC here, 00:34:519 (2) - here is perfect for NC to fit with storyboard and also timing point
17. 00:34:342 - move this timing point 00:34:519 - here
18. 00:37:342 (2) - NC here because you already did on the other 3 before this
19. 00:37:872 (2,3) - CTRL + G?
20. 00:38:578 (5,7) - ^
21. 00:39:460 (2) - ^
22. 00:41:048 (3,4,5,6) - Bad spacing, since 00:40:519 (1,2) - are a bit further apart
23. 00:45:813 (4) - NC
    
    Only had the energy to mod first min, good luck

hyouri wrote:

• 
  
  
  General

1. Epilepsy warning is kind of useless (idk I don't have epilepsy) Better safe than sorry ya know
2. I believe PNG is superior to JPG so http://puu.sh/o51MG/2336af5f8f.png ok lol
   
   Colors
3. 00:13:342 (8) - NC here pls and not 00:13:519 (1) - fixed
4. 00:14:048 (4) - ^ ^
5. 00:14:754 (10) - ^ ^
6. 00:16:166 (10) - ^ ^
7. 00:19:519 (2,3) - plays better with CTRL + G mmmmmmmmm ok
8. 00:22:872 (6) - NC should be on this white tick or 00:22:519 (3) - , and when you try to make a stream like that, make sure that it's divided evenly on object count where they split, right now you have 00:22:695 (4,5,6) - and 00:22:960 (1,2,3,4) - 3:4, you could alternatively move 00:23:225 (4) - away a little bit. Also I see no reason for the stream to bend like it does, make it straight all the way up Hmm I see what you mean. I'm keeping my curve tho
9. 00:23:401 (1,2,3) - make these form a triangle with even spacing instead, right now 00:23:578 (2,3) - are a little more spaced than 1,2 lol I ended up changing 00:23:401 (1) - to a slider since I made the above change lol
10. 00:25:519 (4) - this could be moved down here http://puu.sh/o52I9/cd1142bee9.png for the sake of flow good idea
11. 00:26:401 (1) - CTRL + G fixed
12. 00:28:342 (4) - move this to like x:192|y:172 fixed
13. 00:28:342 (4,5) - awkward spacing if you approved the mod above ^ so you should move 00:28:695 (5,6,7) - little to the right fixed
14. 00:29:048 (7) - NC here instead fixed
15. 00:31:166 (3,1) - too close, move 00:31:519 (1) - so you dont have weird spacing fixed
16. 00:34:342 (1) - no need for NC here, 00:34:519 (2) - here is perfect for NC to fit with storyboard and also timing point fixed
17. 00:34:342 - move this timing point 00:34:519 - here fixed
18. 00:37:342 (2) - NC here because you already did on the other 3 before this fixed
19. 00:37:872 (2,3) - CTRL + G? you smart
20. 00:38:578 (5,7) - ^ you
21. 00:39:460 (2) - ^ smart
22. 00:41:048 (3,4,5,6) - Bad spacing, since 00:40:519 (1,2) - are a bit further apart fixed
23. 00:45:813 (4) - NC fixed
    
    Only had the energy to mod first min, good luck

AmigoDoChroome wrote:

hi
simple mod

normal
00:03:813 (4) - note here
normal difficulties need a fixed ds 00:23:225 (1,2,3,4) - (1.50ds)
Remap? lowered the ds to 1.2x in the kiai

hard
cs 4 ar 7 fixed
00:23:048 (1,2,3,4) - forced distance i put them a little closer
kiais overmaped I disagree
use more straight sliders good idea actually

colors
00:13:166 (7) - continue the stream with circles I think it's fine as is
00:34:519 (1) - forced sv it highlights the high distortion in her voice, keeping as is
00:37:342 (1) - ^^ ^
00:41:931 (1) - forced distance i shortened it a little
00:50:225 (1) - wrong tick this is fine

good luck with the map