Janpai wrote:

Do not grave plis
I regret that I didn't make you a banner lmao

Janpai wrote:

Do not grave plis
I regret that I didn't make you a banner lmao

Exile- wrote:

Squares

Deppyforce wrote:

wao

[General]
drain times not even reach 5min LOL
sb stuffs are off center with my standard res 4:3 screen ;;
http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4816148 clock
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4816166 ring
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4816172 effect
these are just examples, all of these effects are off center
lol

imo sb should be mapped with standard res and then the widescreen support will magically make it fits with widescreens

Exile- wrote:

Deppyforce wrote:

wao

[General]
drain times not even reach 5min LOL
sb stuffs are off center with my standard res 4:3 screen ;;
http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4816148 clock
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4816166 ring
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4816172 effect
these are just examples, all of these effects are off center
lol

imo sb should be mapped with standard res and then the widescreen support will magically make it fits with widescreens

Check them on autoplay before complaining. They're off center only in editor

Deppyforce wrote:

wao

[General]
drain times not even reach 5min LOL
sb stuffs are off center with my standard res 4:3 screen ;;
http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4816148 clock
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4816166 ring
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4816172 effect
these are just examples, all of these effects are off center
lol

imo sb should be mapped with standard res and then the widescreen support will magically make it fits with widescreens

[Fragments of Time]
01:13:540 (6) - dude theres no sound here, the sound is on the 1/4 tick at 01:13:378 - //yeah nice catch
01:31:459 (7) - maybe try split to 2 circles to follow vocals ? this part is least intense so u could do that to increase the intensity a bit here //i kinda like that pattern and asthetic so i wanna keep it ;w;
01:34:378 (4) - ^ //^
01:42:161 (3,1,3,5,6,8) - these looks weird to me idk, maybe try make a hexagon? //its fine to me
01:55:134 (7,1) - this jump should be bigger than 01:54:972 (6,7) - imo to emphasize the start of the new phase better //i think its big enough i dont wanna make a fullscreen jump lol, but ill try to reduce 6 7
02:49:783 - 02:53:999 - 02:54:972 - these drums sounds are strong and supposed to be clickable, even tho if youre focusing on the instrument sounds, u still should make those drums clickable to make rhythm more interesting than 1/2 slider spam imo //it was kinda my intention for that part tho, i think its intresting to play with velocity there and as the music is kinda calm so no reason for circles
05:08:432 (6,6) - um stack? //fixed
05:23:999 (5,6) - this looks undermapped compared to the 05:23:675 (1,2,3,4,5) - 's ds //idk, i think spacing is legit

http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4816375 no soterks in sb? rip

ayaya thats it good luck!

Janpai wrote:

I didn't mean to hurt senpai, gomenasai *hides*

I have nothing to do soo..

Deppyforce wrote:

legit

edit: changed screenshot with new skin so u can see better
edit 2: changed screenshot again with another skin

Deppyforce wrote:

wao

[General]
drain times not even reach 5min LOL
sb stuffs are off center with my standard res 4:3 screen ;;
http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4816148 clock
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4816166 ring
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4816172 effect
these are just examples, all of these effects are off center
lol

imo sb should be mapped with standard res and then the widescreen support will magically make it fits with widescreens

[Fragments of Time]
03:17:026 - pls there is no sound here (or maybe there is but its so feint i cant hear it) consider make 03:16:864 (1) - a 3/4 plz leave my patern alone derpyforce, but anyway, there a sound.. :/
03:19:134 (5,6) - tbh i think this is undermapped since 6 got emphasized with whislte hitsound but whatever well this patern is fine dewd
03:29:188 (1,2) - soterks tbh i dont quite understand why is this combo have low spacing while it supposed to be building up building up is not always spacing, here the jump is intense so I think spacing it more would be harder you know.. since the patern is already hard derp
03:44:432 (1,2,3,4,5) - try make a star maybe stars is for girls
03:58:215 (3,4) - this is strong, got a bit undermapped imo ok increased spacing here
04:12:648 (7,1,2,3) - this might be a bit confusing cuz the spacing between these are almost same but its actually diffrent gaps, mayb move 2 further away from1 nah, plz my best patern of my part dewd don't be so mean :c it's totally readable
04:36:810 (2,3,4,5,6) - fix the star pls this looks shite fk u dude, but fixed :C

ayaya thats it good luck!

MkGuh wrote:

[quote="DeRpyforce":1337]hey

• 
  
  
  General

1. Your soft-sliderslide*.wav files each 1 KB, so they're either silent or corrupt files which are unrankable http://puu.sh/o056t/88c128ca95.png. You can read more here https://osu.ppy.sh/wiki/Ranking_Criteria#Audio
2. Add "drum'n'bass" for Tags
   
   Fragments of Time
3. 00:16:702 (3) - Would be better to use circles here
4. 01:11:351 (1) - Ctrl + G?
5. 01:40:215 (2) - This should be put up higher on a higher position cause it would make more sense to the flow http://puu.sh/o05SM/e502f285a2.jpg Doesn't have to be this exact position, but something similar would fit.
6. 01:53:837 (5) - NC here ?
7. 02:04:215 (6,1,2) - Something is off here
8. 03:08:594 (3,4,5) - I feel like you could do this pattern better
9. 03:57:324 (5,6) - These should be closer to 03:57:080 (4) -
10. 04:25:459 (7) - move this down a little, to like x:40|y:244
11. 05:24:324 (1) - This would be very nice with a Finish hitsound
12. 05:23:675 (1) - This and this 04:05:999 (1) - stream got a NC, but this doesn't 05:05:513 (7) - and this 04:31:702 (8) - ??
13. 05:39:567 (6) - I'd NC this
    
    Very nice map! I wish you good luck!

hyouri wrote:

Hello from hyouri's Modding Queue~

NM

• 
  
  
  General

1. Your soft-sliderslide*.wav files each 1 KB, so they're either silent or corrupt files which are unrankable http://puu.sh/o056t/88c128ca95.png. You can read more here https://osu.ppy.sh/wiki/Ranking_Criteria#Audio //silent sliderslides are allowed lol
2. Add "drum'n'bass" for Tags
   
   Fragments of Time
3. 00:16:702 (3) - Would be better to use circles here //nah
4. 01:11:351 (1) - Ctrl + G? //nop
5. 01:40:215 (2) - This should be put up higher on a higher position cause it would make more sense to the flow http://puu.sh/o05SM/e502f285a2.jpg Doesn't have to be this exact position, but something similar would fit. //ye why not
   
6. 01:53:837 (5) - NC here ? //why
7. 02:04:215 (6,1,2) - Something is off here //wats off? o.o
8. 05:24:324 (1) - This would be very nice with a Finish hitsound //well there s a hitsound lol
9. 05:23:675 (1) - This and this 04:05:999 (1) - stream got a NC, but this doesn't 05:05:513 (7) - and this 04:31:702 (8) - ?? //if u didnt notice i put NC every big white tick, not randomly
10. 05:39:567 (6) - I'd NC this //same here
    
    Very nice map! I wish you good luck!

1. 00:57:729 (3) - can be moved to be stacked with 00:56:918 (4) -
2. 01:45:080 (1) - bit nitpicky but 01:43:783 (1,1,2) - are all nicely slightly moved down and to the right and then 01:45:080 (1) - isn't in this row because it's moved down even more to the left and bottom.
3. 02:17:188 (5) - could be a slider like 02:16:540 (2,4) - but then around 02:16:702 (3) - Imo it'd go well because 02:17:513 (1) - is below it.
4. 03:16:215 (1) - can be placed under 03:15:567 (1) - not stacked like this http://puu.sh/o1ggH.jpg
5. 04:47:675 (5) - same ^ (but this one seems fine actually) or at least match it with 04:46:702 (1) - (so when changed change this as well)

1. 03:17:675 (3) - just something i'd do, rotate this a bit more clockwise http://puu.sh/o1gpl.jpg
2. 03:24:648 (3) - this could be moved more to the right and bottom so it's not overlapping 03:24:161 (1) - but still have the same effect as it has now. maybe even try overlap or something with 03:25:459 (2) - ?
3. 03:35:351 (1) - this doesn't really fit here imo, maybe make it a straight slider with the same angle as 03:35:026 (5) - (you do it here 03:36:648 (1) - )
4. 03:49:296 (6,1) - don't really like this jump, can't you make 03:49:296 (6) - different so it transitions nicer into 03:49:621 (1) - or change other way around.
5. 03:57:324 (5,6) - why are these not stacked?
6. 04:46:702 (1) - just nitpicky but just feels a bit off to not have it like i pointed out with 01:45:080 (1) -

FCL wrote:

placeholder

• [placeholder]

1. drum and bass in tags pls. These words more important that drum'n'bass cuz much people will try to fing good dnb song through this tag
2. DUDE PLS
   
   [420754 Nekomata Master feat Misawa Aki - chrono diver -fragment-]
   
   • Storyboard image file dimensions are more than allowed maximum ( 640x1440 or 1920x480 for scrolling images) or (1366x768)
   {sb\\bg.jpg} (1450x768)
   
   • Usage of mp3 and ogg as hitsounds is not recommended (consider converting to .wav?): //ehh idk maybe ill change :v
   soft-hitwhistle69.mp3
   
   • Files unused: //redownload
   sb\bg.jpg
   sb\11t-fonts\'.png
   sb\11t-fonts\0.png
   sb\11t-fonts\1.png
   sb\11t-fonts\3.png
   sb\11t-fonts\5.png
   sb\11t-fonts\6.png
   sb\11t-fonts\7.png
   sb\11t-fonts\8.png
   sb\11t-fonts\9.png
   sb\11t-fonts\a1.png
   sb\11t-fonts\c.png
   sb\11t-fonts\c1.png
   sb\11t-fonts\d1.png
   sb\11t-fonts\f.png
   sb\11t-fonts\f1.png
   sb\11t-fonts\g.png
   sb\11t-fonts\g1.png
   sb\11t-fonts\h.png
   sb\11t-fonts\i1.png
   sb\11t-fonts\j.png
   sb\11t-fonts\j1.png
   sb\11t-fonts\k1.png
   sb\11t-fonts\l1.png
   sb\11t-fonts\m1.png
   sb\11t-fonts\n1.png
   sb\11t-fonts\o1.png
   sb\11t-fonts\p1.png
   sb\11t-fonts\q.png
   sb\11t-fonts\q1.png
   sb\11t-fonts\r1.png
   sb\11t-fonts\t1.png
   sb\11t-fonts\u.png
   sb\11t-fonts\u1.png
   sb\11t-fonts\v.png
   sb\11t-fonts\v1.png
   sb\11t-fonts\w.png
   sb\11t-fonts\w1.png
   sb\11t-fonts\x1.png
   sb\11t-fonts\y1.png
   sb\11t-fonts\z.png
   sb\11t-fonts\z1.png
   
   • Duplicate timing points(s) at:
   03:48:324 {228324}
   05:06:161 {306161}
   05:24:324 {324324}
   05:43:783 {343783}
3. I saw some useless green lines, so dude fix it too //dude did u even updated? xD

• [shitmapper]

1. 00:49:459 (4,5) - dude pls, you didn't make stacks like this before, it really not necessary, 00:49:783 (5) - doesn't have emphasized beats to do that clickable //ok :v
2. 00:50:269 - even if you want to map on melody, I still feel this section like undrmapped. So what about to add circle here? //nah i still want the melody
3. 00:58:053 (6,7) - add finishes at ends too? They have similar sounds like 00:57:891 (4,5) - //the thing is, i want whistles to be clickable xd
4. 01:13:945 (1) - I feel this bell sound redundant, it really doensn't supported by song //redownload, the bell sound is more pitched now :3
5. 01:24:648 (2,3,4,1) - dude why you so strong declining has volume?This doesn't provided. But anyway if you want keep effect of reduce, do it through bigger volume of hs //wot, is the idea bad?
6. 01:24:972 (3,4) - Only one I feel their clickable? //ye
7. 02:02:269 (4) - nc //is it necessary?
8. 02:02:918 (3) - ^ , just a suggestions, nc's would be logical here //no xd
9. 02:35:351 (5) -

   Only one I feel it clickable?

   //oh dude idk how to fix this one so ill leave it xd
10. 02:43:296 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - dude whistles pls, these sounds really perfect for this
11. 02:46:053 (5,6,7) - pls dude, map 1/8 sound here, it feels 2 hard for me http://puu.sh/o3899/cc037a3360.png //nah i like how i did that part with sv so ill keep it
12. 02:49:945 (1) - dude,missed clap? //nop

• [just a shit]

1. 05:05:188 (4,7,9) - similar suggestion about nc's as before
2. 05:10:864 (5,3) - stack? dude pls //ok xd
3. 05:23:999 (5) - nc
4. 05:39:891 (1,2,3,4) - (2) and (4) doesn't feels like hard beats, I think sliders instead would better //i like that part as it is
5. 05:41:513 (2) - The reverse situation, red tick fees clickable //wot

Log Off Now wrote:

wow

Log Off Now wrote:

wow

FCL wrote:

I think nc doesn't should be on doesn't emphasized beats.

Yohanes wrote:

Seeing the clock's counter-clockwise movement really irks me wtf lol

Kisses wrote:

hi m4m

Fragments of time

1. 00:48:972 (3,4) - 3 should go in the opposite direction of 2 imo, it flows well and fits the music. Used a lower AR cos yh http://puu.sh/o8Cd5/16e93a2033.jpg //take account of the ds i used there, its too sudden to make that huge spacing there
2. 00:47:999 (1,2,3,4,5) - Now that I think about it shouldnt the rhythm be this? http://puu.sh/o8Clj/0737b533ae.jpg
   00:49:296 - should be the start of a slider, not the end and there inst really a sound at 00:49:459 //the current rythme is okey and it fits vocals
3. 01:03:242 (1) - use 0.5 SV? I would just go as low as I could at this point //why, dont u think that bell sound needs some attention
4. 01:23:188 (2,4) - look better stacked when playing to me //nop, thats my mapping style sry
   
5. 01:25:296 (4) - Have this go from left to right like 01:24:324 (1,2,3) ? it makes more sense imho //nah i like it this way
6. 01:42:648 (2,4) - look better stacked when playing to me
7. 01:50:269 (1,2,1,2,1,2) - something about this jump pattern doesnt feel right to me and plays a bit funny. I think its mostly the DS 01:50:594 (1,2) is a bit too big //it is intended to be more spaced as the voice raises
8. 02:49:783 - can you emphasize this beat in any way? //no, i like sliders in that part

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Sprite,Background,Centre,"SB\white.png",320,240
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Sprite,Background,Centre,"SB\white.png",320,240
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Arduck_GR wrote:

m4m

Fragments of Time

01:13:945 (1) - That slider seems to be extremely close to the top of the screen. Maybe you could rotate it counter-clockwise and place it a bit lower.//i tried my best to lower it

01:19:134 (1) - Would you mind lining up this slider with the previous one? //wat do u mean

05:11:026 (6) - Maybe raising that slider just a little bit would help, for the same reason of my 1st suggestion. //fixed

05:23:594 (8,1,2,3,4,5) - These ones don't need to be that seperated in my opinion. The beat isnt getting more intense, it stays the same for the previous part of the stream too. You can either place these closer to eachother or if you don't want to change them like that, I suggest that you follow the piano beat's note scaling by placing these hitcircles further apart from eachother 05:23:026 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - as the beat's notes are ascending and then bringing these ones closer to eachother 05:23:675 (1,2,3,4,5) - as the beat's notes are descending. //if u can hear the drums getting louder as its preparing to enter the kiai it gives a nice sensation of kiai intro also the melody getting louder too

05:45:080 (1) - This spinner in HR is almost impossible to pass. If you miss the last 2 hitcircles and you had full hp before doing so, you can't pass that spinner even with max spins per minute. (Correct me if I m wrong but I tried that out both by playing with NF and on the editor.) //well sry HR players xd

Other than that, your map is gorgeous! Big props to the one who created the storyboard too
Wish you the best of luck on getting your beatmap ranked!
Hope my 1st mod was helpful for you :3

examination wrote:

Wonderful storyboard!

Passing by here through Fii's ctb map XD.

[Storyboard]
1. unnecessary white.png at the first part of the song
Line 2482

Sprite,Background,Centre,"SB\white.png",320,240
 F,0,0,,0,1
 C,0,0,42810,0,0,0
 F,0,42810,44810,1,0

This object appears too early and takes 1.33x SB load which can be removed to reduce the SB load.

You can simply change this code to

Sprite,Background,Centre,"SB\white.png",320,240
 C,0,42810,,0,0,0
 F,0,42810,44810,1,0

2. unnecessary duplicate pics covering the scene causing overload SB load at 01:03:567

Line 16567

Sprite,Background,Centre,"SB\white.png",320,240
 F,0,63567,64567,0.15,0
 P,0,63567,64567,A
Sprite,Background,Centre,"SB\white.png",320,240
 F,0,63567,64567,0.15,0
 P,0,63567,64567,A

As I checked what method you used for other scenes, you just use one layer. So I think you just mistakenly copied it once, you can just delete the redundant object.

If you wanna make this scene special, just change F,0,63567,64567,0.15,0 to F,0,63567,64567,0.3,0

One more suggestion for white.png: resize it to 854x480 XD

3. Line 10 and 14 duplicate blur.png delete one

Sprite,Background,Centre,"SB\Blur.jpg",320,240
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Sprite,Background,Centre,"SB\Blur.jpg",320,240
 F,0,143999,,0,1
 S,0,143999,,0.6393229
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4. same problem as as I mentioned in problem 1, unnecessary SB load caused by white.png
Line 2454

Sprite,Background,Centre,"SB\white.png",320,240
 F,0,163296,164756,0,1
 C,0,164756,186810,0,0,0
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change it to

Sprite,Background,Centre,"SB\white.png",320,240
 F,0,163296,164756,0,1
 F,0,164756,186810,0
 C,0,164756,,0,0,0
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5. same as ^, this also causes temporary sb load over 5.0 at about 04:30:102 That actually covers thebackground
(How can you make sb load over 1.0x when the background is dark )
Line 2467

Sprite,Background,Centre,"SB\white.png",320,240
 F,0,267242,269837,0,1
 C,0,269837,272432,0,0,0
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Some suggestions to improve the SB:
1. make the hit effect starts the moment when the clock hands hit the scales it doesn't always hit on notes
2. the highlight which traces the notes can be brighter (using Alpha effect with duplicate elements), but I also think you may proposed to make it dark, so it's just up to you. its fineeee...


It's an excellent work I love it~ Good luck with ranking this map!



Edit:
Though I didn't check seriously, I guess hand1 is walking abnormally? I hope that's not my illusion.