HI~
总的来说不错 不过有些地方感觉节奏有点空 可以适当的添加些circle
[Hard]
00:32:873-00:33:173 (4) 改用1/6的回转slider
00:52:973 (1) 往左移一格
01:11:273-01:11:573 (3) 改用1/6的回转slider
01:30:473-01:30:773 (4) ^
01:54:473 (6) 往上移一格
03:39:773 (5) 加个timing把kiai去掉 break区域里最好不要有kiai 虽然问题不大?

基本上就这么多了 我本人也非常喜欢Okawari的歌 只可惜没时间做Guestdiff
Good luck star~~

[General]:

1. 别忘了preview point

[Easy]:

1. 这个难度并没有理由不做完, 没有任何分数问题, 所以建议还是做到和Hard一样的结束点
2. slider velocity (在timing页里可以看到) 也就是slider的速率 1.4对于一个Easy难度太高了 如果这个难度是Normal还勉强说得过去

[Hard]:

1. 03:58:973 (5) - newcombo 或者是按照spacing来

感觉Hard应该比Easy完成的时间早很多, 因为完全不像是一个人做出来的 Easy在很多方面都强过Hard不少 +_+

其他没什么 比第一次让我看的图强很多了 XD 加油~

As your Re-check request:

BluE=Suggestion only
ReD=I think you should fix this
*Major issue are in Bold

[Genernal]
關掉countdown
Offset貌似好像有點問題?
統一Kiai
考慮使用sliderslide

[Easy]
00:26:573(1)-Whistle
00:27:773(2)-^
00:57:773(1.3)-Nazi一下..難看了..
01:20:573(3)-除掉whistle
01:31:673(x)-weird break..map something here
01:38:573(1~8)-這樣排不好看喔
02:40:973(1~)好長的貪吃蛇啊0.0/
03:08:873(6)-令到players混亂/錯判
03:21:773(~)為甚麼在這裡停?..map到最後把..

[Hard]
為甚麼是SP3's hard?..這張map是你的..也沒有Guest diff..就把SP3去掉
這個難度我無從入手...如果不介意...我還真的是建議你Re-map
1.太貪吃蛇...
2.DS變得不好...
3.排列也沒easy好..
先就這樣...

[General]
I know A Cup of Coffee is the name of the single where this song appears but it shouldn't be in the source. viewtopic.php?f=6&t=24765&st=0&sk=t&sd=a&hilit=album+source&start=0
Just having it in the tags is enough.

There is no preview point, please add one on all difficulties (To add one, go to timing> set Preview point and it will be set where you are currently on the timeline)
I suggest you place it on 01:43:373

Combo colour 1 and 2 looks almost too similar on the hit circle, I suggest you change one of those colours into something else (I suggest Yellow)

Kinda wish that both difficulties had the same length.

[Easy]
I would call this more of an Normal than a Easy due to the mayor usage of 1/2 in the later parts in the difficulty.

Raise stacking latency so 03:07:973 (5,6) looks more pretty

00:34:073 (1) - Add new combo.
01:02:573 (1) - ^
01:18:173 (4,5) - Why this mini-jump here, doesn't make any sense and looks kinda weird, I suggest you just distance snap this.
02:28:973 (1) - Add new combo?
02:57:773 (1) - Add new combo.
03:17:273 (1) - ^

[sp3's Hard]
You don't need sp3's in the name as you did it

The last break felt just random and I would preferred if you mapped there.

00:34:073 (1) - New combo
00:40:973 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - This looks much much more like there should be one repeat in those short repeating sliders due to the spacing but there is two repeats.
Please remove one repeat on all those sliders or make the sliders ends much much closer to each other.
01:19:373 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - Same as above.
02:28:673 (5) - Why is this further away from the rest, putting this under (3) would make more sense. (or at least something where it's in the same distance as the rest)
03:19:373 (1) - Add new combo.

Pretty nice song that reminds me of those Haru remixes floating around here and pretty nice for being your first map.
Bit of stuff that needs to be checked out and fixed though but it's nice enough for a star.
*star*

General
Perhaps you could make an intermediate difficulty? Like a Normal?

Easy
01:42:173 (8) - Minor spacing error.
02:21:773 (1,2,3) - These sliders don't feel right. IMO just change it to this.
03:01:973 (3) - Something about the repeat feels odd. IMO remove the repeat then add a note instead. New combo that note. Like this
03:07:673 (4) - New combo
03:42:173 (X) - Make the kiai here consistent with Hard, but IMO you should map this part instead.

Hard
00:40:223 (7,8) - Spacing
01:04:073 (6,7) - [nazi] Place in the center of (4,5)?
01:05:573 (2) - This seems fairly simple compared to other patterns.
03:43:373 (x) - Map this part.

[Hard]
Remove "A Cup of Coffee" from the source.
00:36:173 (2,3,4) - Spacing from 2 > 3 is shorter than 3 > 4, shouldn't it be the opposite?
00:39:773 (5,6) - New combo on (5) and then i recommend you unstack these notes and put a note on 00:40:073 and 00:40:673 so it follows the music better.
01:12:473 (1) - New combo on this spinner since it lost the new combo due to spinner bug.
02:29:273 (1) - ^
02:38:573 (1) - ^
02:57:773 (1) - ^
03:07:073 (1,2,3) - Inconsistent spacing, also why the sudden increase in spacing distance after this?.
03:37:973 (5,6) - Ninja spacing error.
03:57:773 (1,2,3,4,1) - This spacing can be confusing, but then again the slider has new combo, i'll leave this as a suggestion.

[Easy]
00:45:173 (5) - Add hitsound finish?
00:45:773 - Increase the hitsound volume a little so that the hitsounds arent overwhelmed by the song?
01:32:812 - Map this section.
01:43:373 - Here increase the hitsound volume even more.
02:39:773 - Map this section.
03:37:373 (3,4) - I think you could align (4) directly below (3) and it would look better.
03:48:368 You shouldnt have kiai during a break, end kiai when the break starts and restart kiai after the break instead.
04:00:323 - End kiai here.

[General]
The volume is a bit soft, think you can make it louder a bit?

[Easy]
This might be a Normal.. but I don't know.

[Hard]
-1 HP Drain...

Sorry for not having more to add...I am really out of it today. I think I'll go to sleep now. This marks the second last map I will mod before school.

Recheck. How could I have missed some of these earlier D:

Easy
01:33:773 (1) - This note is too soon from the previous spinner. IMO delete it and just extend the spinner.
02:40:973 (1) - Same as above ^

Normal
00:27:473 (2) - Spacing
01:42:173 (8) - ^
03:13:673 (4) - IMO don't stack. It ruins the flow.
03:49:973 (4,1) - [nazi] Stack these properly.
03:51:773 (2,3) - ^

Hard
Why is the kiai here different?
00:36:923 (3) - Spacing
00:40:223 (2) - ^. Also suggestion: Why not make it like this?
03:24:773 (3) - Compared to the other parts, this slider feels "empty". Change it to a bunch of notes?
03:28:973 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Don't like the sudden spacing change, but w/e.
03:52:673 (1) - Move this further corresponding with the spacing of the previous combo.

Easy and Normal done, hard will come tomorrow

http://puu.sh/OZq

[General]

- Remove countdown?

[Easy]
03:21:773 (4) - Finish instead of clap makes more sense here.

[Hard]
00:34:073 (1) - This would make more sense as a slider.

That's it. would bubble this but there is way too much bubbles right now so I shoot a extra star instead.

and here is hard: http://puu.sh/Ppd

don't forget to full submit if you haven't yet

Hard
00:40:223 (2) - This really should be moved closer to the previous slider >.>

moded in irc again.
嗯, 就快rank了吧, 加油~ > <

O.O

瞬间就被这曲迷住了....

So, I just modded this and then my internet crashed. I'm too pissed to type it out again so you'll have to wait some more -_-"

That being said, your skin elements look oddly like mine. Coincidence?
Generally, you do want to ask for permission before using others' skins as your own

wow 做得很不錯啊XD

>////<
謝謝AHO~~~

nice

........

感謝kaouji mod in irc!! give kds!

久等的Guestdiff

Download: DJ Okawari - Flower Dance (spboxer3) [Yuki YukI].osu

I like this map.
どうぞ頑張って！

NO KUDOSU FOR THIS POST

For the new diff:

Overall
務必以[Hard]為參考下hitsound! (尤其前半段)
有些combo太長了! 可以隨著節奏或著jump放new combo
spacing多變，如果可以的話降低歧異度

00:27:323 (2) - 這樣放whistle有點吵
00:32:873 (4) - ^ (諸如此類不再提)
00:54:173 (10,11,12) - 不考慮new combo然後把距離拉更大(jump)?
01:01:223 (7) - 強烈建議這樣
01:04:673 (3) - 這finish感覺好怪
01:16:973 (9,10,11,12) - spacing?
01:52:673 (7) - 這finish感覺也好怪 (諸如此類不再提)
03:48:473 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,15,1) - 漂亮!

yongtw123 wrote:

NO KUDOSU FOR THIS POST

For the new diff:

Overall
務必以[Hard]為參考下hitsound! (尤其前半段) fixed
有些combo太長了! 可以隨著節奏或著jump放new combo fixed
spacing多變，如果可以的話降低歧異度 fixed一些

00:27:323 (2) - 這樣放whistle有點吵 fixed
00:32:873 (4) - ^ (諸如此類不再提) fixed
00:54:173 (10,11,12) - 不考慮new combo然後把距離拉更大(jump)? 有点不太明白意思呢
01:01:223 (7) - 強烈建議這樣 改slider了

SPOILER

這種slider盡量不要從藍線開始
flow會有點不流暢
ATTACH[01.jpg]
除此之外還有很多地方也有相同狀況
例如 03:15:173 (4,5,6) - 讓(5)從白線開始吧

01:04:673 (3) - 這finish感覺好怪 fixed
01:16:973 (9,10,11,12) - spacing? 手滑了 fixed
01:52:673 (7) - 這finish感覺也好怪 (諸如此類不再提) fixed
03:48:473 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,15,1) - 漂亮! 一时兴起而已>.<

anyway thx for mod

Download: DJ Okawari - Flower Dance (spboxer3) [Yuki YukI].osu

HENTAIHONEY asked me to check this

+9 offset on all diffs please. Resnap and such, let me know when done.

All fixed via IRC.

GL /

Hmm I'm not seeing the guest diff. You decided not to include it?

This is so nicely made that i cant stop playing it
Well done and i shall shoot a star!

NoHItter wrote:

Hmm I'm not seeing the guest diff. You decided not to include it?

ok is submit again!
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sorry my map is submit again but the mat (yeahyeahyeahhh) isn't mat now
so can you re-bubble for me again plz~>/////<

General
Since you've added the guest diff you have to add Yumeko Yuki to the Tags of all difficulties.

Yuki YukI
00:33:782 (6) - IMO remove the 1/2x slider. But it's ok I guess as is.
00:42:782 (4,5,6) - IMO don't make it jump, especially after the previous sliders were all bunched up together.
00:53:282 (3) - Stack this on (5)?
00:54:782 (8) - Place this in the center of the square made by (4,5,6,7)?
00:55:382 (1) - IMO don't anti-jump this.
01:01:382 (6) - New combo
01:01:832 (1) - Remove new combo.
01:12:182 (8) - This 1/2x slider doesn't fit at all.
01:19:382 (1,2,3,4,5) - Same comment as 00:42:782 (4,5,6).
01:38:582 (5) - New combo
01:38:582 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - This part looks horrible and plays badly. Please just change it to regular stacks.
02:21:782 -> 02:38:582 - Whistles here sound very excessive. Especially on that repeat slider at 02:24:332 (2).
02:39:482 (x) - Add break here

NoHItter wrote:

Yuki YukI
00:33:782 (6) - IMO remove the 1/2x slider. But it's ok I guess as is. change to spinner
00:42:782 (4,5,6) - IMO don't make it jump, especially after the previous sliders were all bunched up together. thx for suggestion....but this is insane diff you know...
00:53:282 (3) - Stack this on (5)? not yet..but i change to another form
00:54:782 (8) - Place this in the center of the square made by (4,5,6,7)? fixed
00:55:382 (1) - IMO don't anti-jump this. thx...i think its okay
01:01:382 (6) - New combo fixed
01:01:832 (1) - Remove new combo. fixed
01:12:182 (8) - This 1/2x slider doesn't fit at all. fixed
01:19:382 (1,2,3,4,5) - Same comment as 00:42:782 (4,5,6). the same as above
01:38:582 (5) - New combo fixed
01:38:582 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - This part looks horrible and plays badly. Please just change it to regular stacks. fixed
02:21:782 -> 02:38:582 - Whistles here sound very excessive. Especially on that repeat slider at 02:24:332 (2). fixed
02:39:482 (x) - Add break here fixed

sry for my poor English
Anyway thx for mod

Download: DJ Okawari - Flower Dance (spboxer3) [Yuki YukI].osu

All done!!

Just a couple more suggestions for Yuki YukI
01:21:782 (5,6,7) - IDK it looks messy. Better if they're stacked.
03:21:782 (1) - Too sudden jump.

I'll bubble whether you fix or not.
(No kudosu btw)

NoHItter wrote:

Just a couple more suggestions for Yuki YukI
01:21:782 (5,6,7) - IDK it looks messy. Better if they're stacked. fixed
03:21:782 (1) - Too sudden jump. fixed


(No kudosu btw)

thx again

Download: DJ Okawari - Flower Dance (spboxer3) [Yuki YukI].osu

NoHItter wrote:

Just a couple more suggestions for Yuki YukI
01:21:782 (5,6,7) - IDK it looks messy. Better if they're stacked.
03:21:782 (1) - Too sudden jump.

I'll bubble whether you fix or not.
(No kudosu btw)

All done
thank you a lot!!!>"<

Rebubbled

Edit: Hold on
Edit2: There we go

!泡了

soulfear wrote:

!泡了

是啊~泡了＞_＞