1. Beginner (1.43 stars, 66 notes)
2. Collab Advanced (3.2 stars, 160 notes)
3. Desperate's Novice (2.17 stars, 108 notes)

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Collab with XeroiZi HD
Desperate's Novice by Desperate-kun
Storyboard by XeroiZi HD
-

Thank you guys! :3

✧ XeroiZi HD
✧ MrSergio
✧ deadpon3
✧ 6th
✧ Tatsumaki
✧ Nerova Riuz GX
✧ Battle
✧ Kuki
✧ Rohit6
✧ -M4x
✧ Irreversible
✧ IamKwaN
✧ kirinokirino
✧ Desperate-kun
✧ ByBy13
✧ Mako Sakata

And also some huge thanks to:

✧ Stefan
✧ Mao
✧ Kurokami
✧ Bakari

Sooo..

deadpon3 wrote:

Collab

00:02:502 (1,2,3,4,5) - Try to curve the stream so it won't be a simple line. Nice idea!
00:07:702 (4,5) - You can reverse these notes. No it's the jump idea .
00:10:502 (3,4) - Needs different spacing. It's the overall spacing and it looks fine, how do you want me to change it ?
00:14:102 (4,5) - Reverse them. Same, it's the idea of the jump, it's kinda similiar to some jumps i've seen in Defenders if I remember.
00:21:502 (4,5) - Bad spacing. Yeah thanks, I don't know why I did that ^^.
00:24:102 (1) - You can make this slider a bit more unique. How, i'm not sure ton understand xD.
00:24:902 (3,4,5,6) - You can reverse "3" and "4,5,6" places. Nah again it's the idea of the jump, it is maybe a bit too jumpy but this if fine I guess, your idea was not bad tbh.
00:26:902 (4,5) - Also reverse. I did replaced the jump by just 2 simple points with DS.
00:30:102 (4,5) - Reverse. Nah it's the same style of jump you told me to reverse last time , there's like 2 types of jump in the diff., (my part).
00:31:702 (5,6) - Make it closer to each other. I did changed the jump, it is maybe more closer now !
00:33:702 (1,2,3) - This is way too far for 1/8 Yeah true!
00:56:902 (1,2) - Maybe a single reverser? That note may be hard to read. That is fine.

Beginner

00:09:702 (1,2) - Make each slider different and unique if they are not suppose to be symmetrical. Wait why? This is so cool :3.
00:12:902 (1) - Boring slider. Nah this is fine
00:19:302 (1,2) - Also boring. ^
00:25:302 (3,1) - Bad spacing. Nope xD. Spacing is 1.1.
00:33:702 (2,1) - Same here. ^
00:38:502 (1,2) - And here. ^
00:44:902 (1,2) - Here too. ^
00:49:702 (2,3,1) - Make it an interesting shape. ? The second slider is supposed to be a 90 degrees turned version of the first slider but i ctrl j it and it looks pretty nice tho', I don't know what thing you wanna change .

6th wrote:

SPOILER

[Collab]
00:07:702 (4) - Looks a little bit exagerated No it's fine compared to the other jumps .
00:09:702 (1) - https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4443380 ? Nah it's too complex and the slider I've put is fine... I guess xD, btw I like your skin :3.
00:24:902 (3) - You should reduce the jump since it is a little bit unpredictable Yeah I changed this .
00:38:502 - https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4443387 ? The jump is a bit weird tho' :/.
Really well mapped ^^ Je t'aime 6th <3 (no homo xD).

[Beginner]
00:09:702 (1) - Move it a little bit down Nah it's perfect when it's just a little bit under the other slider :3.
00:18:902 (3) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4443406 ? omg this is pure epicness .
00:22:502 (1) - Doesn't really matter but there is an useless point here Oops! xD
00:27:302 (2) - https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4443420 Nah xD, it looks a bit weird tho'.
00:36:902 (2,3,1) - I feel like flow could be smoother. You are right but I think this is fine, even tho' I like when it's perfext !
That's all, it is also nice :D

Tatsumaki wrote:

hi heyo

Beginner

00:17:702 (2,3) - Better blanket: http://puu.sh/n309A/7c958ee996.jpg Yep

Collab

00:09:702 (1) - Try to blanket 00:10:302 (2,3) - a little like this http://puu.sh/n2ZE8/c2bf536309.jpg Yeah
00:18:502 (3,4) - The curve at the end could be a little smaller: http://puu.sh/n2ZNI/e7026da9e1.jpg No this one is perfect
00:32:902 (5,6) - Blanket like this: http://puu.sh/n2ZTO/8c928dee62.jpg No it's fine and actually it's almost the same thing :p
00:36:902 (1) - This probably doesn't need to end on a blue tick, shorten Well it's on the vocals, I can ask Xero but yeah.
00:46:302 (4,1) - Better blanket: http://puu.sh/n301n/1c58e772a3.jpg Blanket is fine

Good luck. Thank you for everyhing !

1. dunno about others thoughts, but you need another normal diff between them. their required playing skill have too much differences, you have to fill the gap.
2. bitrate 0kbps is cool

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Nerova Riuz GX wrote:

dunno about your map but
where's my minecraft bg u pleb xd

[general]

1. dunno about others thoughts, but you need another normal diff between them. their required playing skill have too much differences, you have to fill the gap. Yep I'll do that.
2. bitrate 0kbps is cool ikr

[beginner]
almost nothing to say tbh yay
probably OD3 HP3, it's too hard to die lmao i've put 2.5

00:02:702 - add a break, the drain in such a empty part is not necessary. (and maybe start the break at 00:03:302 - ) ok ye
00:54:502 (3) - add NC so you'll have a NC every 8 white ticks ye

[collab]
00:03:302 - plzzzzz start ur break hereeeeee okkkkkkkkk
00:08:902 (1) - can't understand what is that NC for. 00:08:902 (1,2) - this combo is quite short, it doesn't need to gain more hp heal or something else. yep true
00:32:102 (1,2,3) - ummm...I didn't here anything that can support this triplet. it sounds like that 1/4 note is useless. these are the vocals
00:40:902 (3) - try to move it up so your pattern can flex yee

image

00:41:702 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - the combo is too long to me, at least it's longer than anyone else here. you should probably add one more NC. hmeay
00:42:002 - this is the only blue tick which is covered by a reverse arrow. it feels awkward, there might be something audible, but it's not pretty clear. probably change it into a clearer one. vocals again
00:56:902 (1,2) - possible reverse arrow block. also, im wondering why it's not a stream, so it can make an echo with 00:02:502 (1,2,3,4,5) - now it should look like a triangle, nah it's fine without streamerino

[]
have a good day

Battle wrote:

. !

[Novice]
00:00:102 (1) - need 2 beats of recovery for normal, end at 00:01:702 - instead wat
00:17:702 (3) - move red anchor to left for better flow okay

[Collab]
00:02:502 (1,2,3,4,5) - ugly bump nah xD
00:12:502 (6,7,1) - Spacing for 6,7 isn't warranted. Spacing should be emphasized 7,1 instead i removed all jumps looks nice
00:31:902 (6,1) - Increase spacing in between these why xD
.

some of those sharp angles you have a real gross ._. thx

Thank you for the quick mod mate!

ayygurl wrote:

00:00:102 (1) - need 2 beats of recovery for normal, end at 00:01:702 - instead wat

-M4x wrote:

Hey dad Hey son

Beginner

1. 00:17:702 (2) - That slider tho. I don't know why you doesn't like it it's really cool tbh.
2. 00:56:102 (2) - AAAHH MY EYES I did changed it a little little bit!

Novice

1. 00:16:102 (1) - I'll just pass on the comment on this one so:
   Everything seems fine to me. You and the previous modders did a great job here! Haha this difficulty has only like 2 mods on it because it's the newer one! I'ts because I'm a boss . Thanks!

Collab

1. As I told you ingame, concider using this rhythm. (You miss soo important beats imo) It's fine since I don't miss any drum sound, and, isn't the triple a bit overmapped? :3
2. 00:02:902 (5) - I would put a nc here, just because the pattern highlights this note. Yeah you are maybe right, I'll ask a QAT just to be sure, that's interesting. Turns out it's fine .
3. 00:18:502 (3) - Yea... that slider... again... PLEASE make it a nice wave, curve or whatever. You are the only guy that I've seen that doesn't like it XD, don't worry it's fine .
4. 00:23:902 (4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Increase spacing here a little. The song pitches up and so should the spacing. It's okay I did the jump after :3.
5. 00:56:902 (1,2) - Whyyy?? Mapping it like this would fit so much better! The stream would be kinda weird tho', it's cool to change between a stream and slider with reverse arrows .

Thanks a lot for the mod mate! And also thank you for testing my last map !

kirinokirino wrote:

yo DJ sick beats xd this is my mixtape

uncheck "letter box during breaks" maybe? ok

BEGINNER:
00:56:102 (2) - thats not right, red slider-point sould be under the center yep it's better

SPOILER

NOVICE:
00:02:502 (1) - can this be a liitle further from center of the screen? not too much but yep
00:16:102 (1) -

SPOILER

it's fine tbh
00:20:902 (1) - no new combo i think you're right
00:53:702 (4) - becouse of the "drop-off effect" this slider can be a bit further, like 4-5 grids up i tried so hard

COLLAB:
00:02:902 (5) - why it is not on the stright line of 00:02:502 (1,2,3,4) - theese? because a simple line is not very cool xD
00:18:502 (3) - this can be a bit better, like first slider-point 1 grid right and down. (slider end 1 grid right and up or smth) this one is perfect :3
00:32:102 (1,2,3) - that was a bit unpredictable, so maybe change to short slider with repeat and circle after? i think its fine its just a triple tbh
00:33:702 (1,2,3) - cool pattern! i'll tell xero
00:48:302 (1) - new combos broke after this? Id yes, press "Q" there: 00:48:302 (5) - 00:48:502 (1) - 00:49:702 (5) - 00:50:502 (3) - 00:51:502 (1) -
00:51:702 (2) - 00:52:902 (1) - 00:53:702 (3) - 00:54:502 (5) - 00:55:302 (4) - 00:56:102 (1) - 00:56:902 (3) - I've put a NC every big white tick or the red tick just after .

I think stacks on slider-end are overused a bit. maybe place some of them at the start of next slider? :P

neat map, good luck!

Thanks a lot for the great mod!

- Mika - wrote:

Nice map mate

EMachine03 wrote:

Let's mod this.
Please note that my mods are just suggestions.
Novice:
00:07:702 (2) - X:338 Y:126 It's a triangle idk xD.
00:14:102 (2) - X:203 Y:352 Yep
00:16:102 (1) - I don't know why, but this slider feels weird.It's okay
00:17:302 (2) - X:160 Y:158
00:23:702 (2) - X:183 Y:328
00:28:502 (5) - X:506 Y:249
00:30:502 (3) - X:108 Y:285
00:44:502 (5) - X:345 Y:308
00:44:902 (1) - X:293 Y:215
Honestly, this map is pretty good. I think the song is funny also. Good work!

1. You have an unused OSB. file into your mapset folder.You have to kill it since it is not used at something like Storyboarding
2. drum-slidertick.wav sounds like a recording sound if you ask me.Moreover,it is barely audible in-game,actually inaudible which this could give you the impression that both slidertick and sliderslide are both silenced.You must find another drum-slidertick to fit the song indeed or delete it in case you will change your mind regarding this hitsound file
3. Your mp3 have only 0kpbs which unfortunately it is not acceptable for rank.Your mp3 must have the bitrate between 128kbps - 192kbps,depends how kind of quality you will get after you will re-encode the mp3
4. Combo1 is similar with Combo2 as i can see.Maybe make combo1 a dark blue?It will still fit the Background color but it will be darker the colour
5. You have to disable the widescreen support since there is no any Storyboard

1. 00:46:102(2)- This note is about to touch the HP bar don't you think? I think you can avoid it
   Not really much to say here.Great job!

1. Why you don't rename it to Collab Hard? The players will know that this is a hard difficulty or you can use a default name I mean you can be creative.You can name it to something related to the song or the game (reffering at wii shop channel) since this is the hardest difficulty of the set and you are free to name it how do you want
2. 00:02:502(1,2,3,4,5)- This 5x stream looks bad structured plus it is destroying the flow plus the playability if you ask me.You can re-arange the notes like this to improve the flow and the playability.Moreover,it will look more better structured than the current one
3. 00:24:902(3,4,5,6)- If you ask me,the instruments are more stronger between (3)- and the triplets rather than the triplets and (7)- so I suggest to do a little jump between these triplets and (3)- and lowering the distance between the triplets and (7)-

ByBy13 wrote:

Greetings ayygurl!

[General]

1. You have an unused OSB. file into your mapset folder.You have to kill it since it is not used at something like Storyboarding yep
2. drum-slidertick.wav sounds like a recording sound if you ask me.Moreover,it is barely audible in-game,actually inaudible which this could give you the impression that both slidertick and sliderslide are both silenced.You must find another drum-slidertick to fit the song indeed or delete it in case you will change your mind regarding this hitsound file It's deleted!
3. Your mp3 have only 0kpbs which unfortunately it is not acceptable for rank.Your mp3 must have the bitrate between 128kbps - 192kbps,depends how kind of quality you will get after you will re-encode the mp3 Changed!
4. Combo1 is similar with Combo2 as i can see.Maybe make combo1 a dark blue?It will still fit the Background color but it will be darker the colour Yep
5. You have to disable the widescreen support since there is no any Storyboard Yep

[Beginner]

1. 00:46:102(2)- This note is about to touch the HP bar don't you think? I think you can avoid it Should be okay now
   Not really much to say here.Great job! Thanks!

[Collab]

1. Why you don't rename it to Collab Hard? The players will know that this is a hard difficulty or you can use a default name I mean you can be creative.You can name it to something related to the song or the game (reffering at wii shop channel) since this is the hardest difficulty of the set and you are free to name it how do you want Transformation to Collab Advanced
2. 00:02:502(1,2,3,4,5)- This 5x stream looks bad structured plus it is destroying the flow plus the playability if you ask me.You can re-arange the notes like this to improve the flow and the playability.Moreover,it will look more better structured than the current one Changed!
3. 00:24:902(3,4,5,6)- If you ask me,the instruments are more stronger between (3)- and the triplets rather than the triplets and (7)- so I suggest to do a little jump between these triplets and (3)- and lowering the distance between the triplets and (7)- You're right, but is this really important? Because it is really really hard to change it D:.

I think that must be all! Sorry for my poor mod but the set looks nice and it have the opportunity to see it ranked.Call me back after the issues are addresed (: Thanks a lot! .

XeroiZi HD wrote:

Before I quit forever.

Collab name tagging codes (Put it in "Collab Advanced" osu. file)

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 M,0,32214,32314,551,409,551,422
 M,0,32314,38514,551,422,551,431
 F,0,32314,57314,1
 M,0,38514,44914,551,431,551,422
 M,0,44914,51314,551,422,551,419
 M,0,51314,57414,551,419,551,422
 M,0,57314,57414,551,409,551,439
 F,0,57314,57414,1,0
//Storyboard Sound Samples

All the elements you need:

Here

Do NOT rename those files, and put them to the correct place!

Right, I'm done, Cya.

ByBy13 wrote:

Just last thing:
Regarding hitsounds,you can add more whistles as cymbals because there are some parts which needs some cymbal in my point of view.The claps are fine.
If you have problems in adding more whistles on all difficulties,I can help you ^^
Call me back again!

ByBy13 wrote:

About tags remove 'vocals' and 'accurate_bg g_l_u_e_7_0' since they are kinda useless for example accurate_bg g_l_u_e_7_0 is the name of the BG and the players won't search the song by the name of the background.Call me back!

1. Un-tick wide screenn support on Hard diff
2. About the combo colors, imo during gameplay combo 1 and combo 2 looks pretty much same. Can't you add a color between them? a pink or purple pastel would be great
3. Umm about the metadata, do you have a source for it?

1. 00:08:914 (4) - Maybe you can try to flip it by doing ctrl+j then ctrl+g that one and move it to x:438 y:341? so at least it more paralel with previous slider and bit fixing the inconsistent spacing on that one http://puu.sh/nV7zx/9d43ceba3f.jpg
2. 00:12:114 (4,1) - Spacing too far imo better follow the ds more consistent to prevent confuseness to beginner as this diff the easiest on the set
3. 00:17:314 (2) - A bit move down to x:165 y57? slightly fix the spacing there would be good
4. 00:33:314 (2,3,4) - Those overlapping looks a bit slopy yet the rest seems nice nothing weird overlapping like that, maybe you can try to move both 00:33:714 (3,4) - a bit higher, so at least these 00:33:314 (2,4) - won't overlpapping, an idea http://puu.sh/nV8oN/587e1910d3.jpg
5. 00:46:514 (3) - I prefer a curve on that one, so at least the flow on 00:46:514 (3,4) - more natural

1. 00:57:314 (1) - Due to your measurement, that's better not be nc to keep the consistency?
2. I have a question, is this diff supposed to be a normal diff desp kun? ayygurl said this diff is a normal diff, yet there is some inconsistency spacing like 00:08:114 (4,5) - , 00:09:314 (7,1) - also 00:36:914 (5,6) - and etc. Because normally a normal diff is better to stick with the ds

1. 00:31:714 (5,6) - Not sure why you have more spacing on that one, yet on downbeat here 00:31:914 (6,1) - the spacing is kinda low, kinda a bit odd during testplay imo. My sugestion is you can try to reduce the jump here 00:31:714 (5,6) - and stick with the 1.30 ds like you did on 00:31:914 (6,1) - , or you can a bit emphasized the spacing on downbeat here 00:31:914 (6,1) - by reducing the spacing on 00:31:714 (5,6) - ?