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fhana - Sorairo Picture (TV Size)

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lenyahitz
This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 31 января 2016 г. at 16:34:36

Artist: fhana
Title: Sorairo Picture (TV Size)
Tags: fhana is love fhana is life <3
BPM: 182
Filesize: 3867kb
Play Time: 02:04
Difficulties Available:
  1. Insane (4.67 stars, 457 notes)
  2. SeaRasp's Extra (5.33 stars, 514 notes)


Download: fhana - Sorairo Picture (TV Size)
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fhana<3
Spiraler
My end from my queue

00:08:025 (1) - I would recommend making this a round slider (remove the midpoint and add it back)
00:10:580 (1,2,3) - move these one tick earlier to fit music better
00:12:640 (1,4) - don't have these two overlap like this
00:15:607 (1,1) - I would recommend putting a little space rather than a stack
00:19:233 (1) - remove NC
00:20:717 (6) - even the spacing before and after
00:24:343 (1) - remove NC
00:31:266 (7) - even the spacing before and after
00:40:827 (5,6,7) - this close spacing is confusing
00:55:167 (1,1) - wouldn't stack sliders like this
00:55:827 (2) - even the spacing before and after
00:56:651 (5) - stack the tail of this on the head of 00:57:475 (8)
01:00:442 (3,1) - wouldn't stack sliders like this
01:04:398 (1) - remove NC
01:06:047 (1,1) - spacing looks weirdly close
01:20:222 (1,1) - ^
01:29:783 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - this part is too hard to read. If you made each individual pair its own combo, that may be better
01:32:420 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - ^
01:37:365 (1,1) - spacing looks weirdly close
01:39:673 (1,1,1) - don't stack sliders like this
01:42:145 (8) - even spacing before and after
01:42:310 (1,1) - don't stack sliders like this
01:45:607 (3,1) - ^
01:48:244 (4,5) - ^
01:49:893 (1) - remove NC
01:50:552 (1) - ^
01:51:706 (3,4) - even the spacing around this

I notice this is your first beatmap (at least that is submitted on the site), and it is very good!
Topic Starter
lenyahitz

Spiral527 wrote:

My end from my queue

00:08:025 (1) - I would recommend making this a round slider (remove the midpoint and add it back)
00:10:580 (1,2,3) - move these one tick earlier to fit music better
00:12:640 (1,4) - don't have these two overlap like this
00:15:607 (1,1) - I would recommend putting a little space rather than a stack
00:19:233 (1) - remove NC
00:20:717 (6) - even the spacing before and after
00:24:343 (1) - remove NC
00:31:266 (7) - even the spacing before and after
00:40:827 (5,6,7) - this close spacing is confusing
00:55:167 (1,1) - wouldn't stack sliders like this
00:55:827 (2) - even the spacing before and after
00:56:651 (5) - stack the tail of this on the head of 00:57:475 (8)
01:00:442 (3,1) - wouldn't stack sliders like this
01:04:398 (1) - remove NC
01:06:047 (1,1) - spacing looks weirdly close
01:20:222 (1,1) - ^
01:29:783 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - this part is too hard to read. If you made each individual pair its own combo, that may be better
01:32:420 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - ^
01:37:365 (1,1) - spacing looks weirdly close
01:39:673 (1,1,1) - don't stack sliders like this
01:42:145 (8) - even spacing before and after
01:42:310 (1,1) - don't stack sliders like this
01:45:607 (3,1) - ^
01:48:244 (4,5) - ^
01:49:893 (1) - remove NC
01:50:552 (1) - ^
01:51:706 (3,4) - even the spacing around this

I notice this is your first beatmap (at least that is submitted on the site), and it is very good!
Thanks a lot!!! You really helped me to improve! Thanks!
[-Aphobias-]
My I don't have much to say tbh. But i noticed there were a lot of straight sliders and i was wondering if that was on purpose? You seem to have a lot of curvy-ish patterns with singles but straight sliders, which sort of ruin or mess with the flow of things.

The double sliders here felt a bit off? Not sure if it's because they're so slow compared to the notes before/after, but it def didn't feel smooth (at least for me). -- 00:23:849

And this slider here -- 01:40:332 -- feels a bit odd, just having a slow straight slider kills the flow and mood and i was thinking you could make it something similar to -- 01:08:684 or -- 01:50:882 -- because it goes fast-ish to pretty slow then fast again. Which may be intended but that doesn't seem to be the case since it doesn't happen often.

Hope i helped a little bit??? It's a nice map to a nice song and i like it. ^.^
Topic Starter
lenyahitz
Thanks a lot Aphobias!
Wou_old_1
M4M from my queues

  1. Your Bg is 1280x720, the size that it should be, is 1024x768 or 1366x768
  1. There are several Space the note out about 1.0x DS. looks like it should be on the blue tick but isn't
  2. 00:09:673 (4) - I didn't hear sound/vocal here.
    If you acc, try to remove this note 00:09:673 (4) - then 00:10:003 (5) - stack on the 00:09:343 (3) -
  3. 00:10:662 (3,4) - Try to blanket this
  4. 00:13:134 (4,5) - I guess it will seems good if you blanket that
  5. 00:29:948 (4) - I think this look so heavy
  6. 00:41:651 (3,4) - Space the 4th note out about 1.0x DS. looks like it should be on the blue tick but isn't
  7. 00:42:145 (5) - Try to stack on the head of 00:42:310 (1) -
  8. 00:43:299 (3) - Why not Clap sound ?
  9. 00:46:926 (4,5) - It's looks strange
  10. 00:58:134 (1,2) - Like i said Space the 2th note out about 1.0x DS. looks like it should be on the blue tick but isn't
  11. 00:58:794 (3) - Try to stack on the head of 00:59:123 (5) -
  1. 00:11:816 (1,2) - Like i said Space the 2th note out about 1.0x DS. looks like it should be on the blue tick but isn't
  2. 00:34:398 (1) - Remove nc then add nc 00:34:563 (2) -

GL Friend ( '-' )
Topic Starter
lenyahitz
Thanks for ur mod!
Kroytz
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00:08:025 (1) - from here up until 00:18:740 (1) - should HEAVILY be considered for remapping. I say this because this part is extremely quiet in the music yet you have HUGE spacing like 00:08:025 (1,2) -. From (2) to (3) is slightly more acceptable because of pitch change but from 1 to 2 is pretty harsh for quiet section. The SV is changed to .90 but that isn't so much different than 1.0 so try to use something like .70

00:09:343 (1,2) - From a structural standpoint, this is pretty lame. You have one overlap and come back down to another overlap and you've exhausted this general area already and neglected a lot of the playfield. The next 3 seconds where you've mapped it further proves this.

00:11:486 (6,7,1) - The flow on this is very sharp when it really shouldn't be. The spacing as I've mentioned before is really high x-x

00:11:816 (1,2) - These are spaced as if they would be 1/4 apart but yet they are 1/2 apart on timeline.

00:13:299 (1,2) - This is proper. Regardless, this quiet section shouldn't be so intense.

00:17:915 (3) - You could have this be a slower extended slider just so that you can get that downbeat click. Especially in a transition, you WANT that clickable downbeat (in general you want clickable downbeats but this you REALLY want lol).

00:18:740 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,1,2,3,4) - I really don't like how these 6 seconds all are mapped to the top right area of the playfield. Only using a small portion of the playfield limits mapping creativity such as patterning, structure, differentiating spacing, etc. Try not to get so focused here.

00:22:365 (1) - Need to click downbeat

00:24:838 (1) - If you want this vocal, just extend it to the blue tick (with a muted end) and have another slider or circle be on the downbeat

00:25:827 (6,8,1) - lots of heavy overlapping here doesn't appeal so well. Either space things out more or use some sort of blanketing techniques to keep spacing minimal while not touching everything .

00:27:805 (1,2,3,4) - It'd be really cool if you increased the SV on this to grow more. So from .7 to .8 to .9 and 1.0

00:29:948 (5,6,1) - Overlapping plays and looks a little odd tbh

00:34:398 (6,1) - The 6 should be the long slider and NC'd because downbeats bruh. There's a drum sound inside your (1) slider that gets neglected so, that's not good

00:44:288 (3) - not really liking that overlap

00:51:541 (1,2,3,4) - The sudden shift in direction is kind of uneasy. I would rather see the jumps "build up" in intensity as it continues. It was looking okay at first, but then this comes out of nowhere and sort of ruins the flowiness of the jumps.

01:29:782 (1) - I think it'd be cool to have antijump aesthetics for this star jumpy part

02:00:113 (1) - oo cute

I think the main concern for this diff is the intro intensity to be lowered down severely and the usage of your overlaps are a little more jarring than they should be. Heavy overlaps don't look so well unless the music really calls for it (usually in wubby songs). Another thing I didn't really mention was your extended sliders don't have muted ends so consider doing that to them. Patterning and structure isn't so evident but I think that's due to the fact that your playfield usage looks like this: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4457001 Lots of uncovered spots and mostly everything is in that top right sections ><
00:13:299 (5) - Why not have this come upwards to follow the pattern?

00:15:607 (2) - mute end

00:17:255 (1) - Overlap so >< space out more so it doesn't create interference with calmness in the song

00:17:750 - Could probably start a triple on this beat and hit everything else

00:18:574 (3) - NC

00:25:992 (6,7) - Spacing is very tight

00:37:860 (5,6) - This feels spaced at 1/2 but you have it at 1/1 so consider changing this >>

00:40:662 (6) - Dont think this is supposed to stack over 5

00:42:145 (5,1) - mind as well stack this so it doesn't create a fake illusion of having a triple on it

00:49:398 - jumps should still continue with this beat

00:55:167 (4) - mute slider end

00:56:651 (1) - This has to have a clickable downbeat

The thing I'm noticing about this diff is really just a lack of structure and rhythm gets wonky sometimes. 01:36:211 (7) - Here for example should be clickable downbeat but you have as 1/2 and here 01:38:849 (1) - should also have clickable downbeat but then you use 1/1 slider so idk. 01:40:332 (1) - SV's like this feel a little uncomfortable because this is kiai time and the music is very upbeat but you lower down the intensity for the sake of following vocal and its NotLikeThis. The map flows fairly nicely but there aren't really much patterns going on. For instance, if I highlight this: 01:46:761 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - it just goes around in itself (the downbeat should also be hit lol) and so there isn't really anything exciting going on.
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