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Beatmap completed, please enjoy and do reply if any issues/off timing is founded.

Thanks!

~Shana

Hi from my queue o/

[Serious]

1. 00:00:784 (1) - NC (new combo) During streams its usually not a good idea to have this many nc's.
2. 00:01:473 (1) - ^
3. 00:02:163 (1) - ^
4. 00:02:853 (1) - ^ (i think you can start to see where this is going)
5. 00:03:542 (1) - ^
6. 00:03:887 (9) - ^
7. 00:04:232 (1) - Remove the NC
8. 00:05:267 (2) - Make this a slider to fit with 'owww' sound.
9. 00:10:784 (7) - You have 2 points at the top of the slider... delete one of them - actually it might be better to just make it one long slider to fit with the guitar... instead of the long repeat one you curently have.
10. 00:11:473 (1,2,3) - The drums in the song here are triples not 1/4's. Set the Beat snap divisor to 1/3 and then move the notes to their correct ticks (1 is in the right spot, 2 and 3 are not).
11. 00:11:818 (1) - Same problem as ^ - you have the bsd set to 1/4 when it should be 1/3. Notice how this slider sounds bad? End it on a 1/3 tick and it sounds much better.
12. 00:14:577 (2) - ^
13. 00:14:146 (4,1,2,3) - These are just bad... delete them and make new notes to fit with the lyrics.
14. 00:35:525 (1,2,3) - Only need circles on red and white tick as that what the drum line is,
15. 00:37:594 (4,5) - Delete
16. 00:40:439 (1,2) - These sliders end one tick too late... end them on white and red tick respectively.
17. 00:47:335 (1) - Same problem as ^. end on white tick.
18. 01:01:473 (6) - This slider ends tick too soon, end on white tick
19. 01:12:163 (1) - ^
20. 01:13:715 (1) - This should end on red tick.
21. 01:14:922 (4) - This should end on white tick.
22. 01:17:680 (1,2) - ^ for both of these

Ok thats enough.
Now dont be disheartened by the amount of problems in this diff. NO-ONES first map is any good, especially without help. It can take a long time before you can start producing consistently well done maps (im not there yet either xd). So just keep going over the map like once a week and you should start to find issues in it by yourself. Just because it isn't 'good' right now doesnt mean it can never be. So keep it up and gl!

NucleaRaven wrote:

Hi from my queue o/

[Serious]

1. 00:00:784 (1) - NC (new combo) During streams its usually not a good idea to have this many nc's.
2. 00:01:473 (1) - ^
3. 00:02:163 (1) - ^
4. 00:02:853 (1) - ^ (i think you can start to see where this is going)
5. 00:03:542 (1) - ^
6. 00:03:887 (9) - ^
7. 00:04:232 (1) - Remove the NC
8. 00:05:267 (2) - Make this a slider to fit with 'owww' sound.
9. 00:10:784 (7) - You have 2 points at the top of the slider... delete one of them - actually it might be better to just make it one long slider to fit with the guitar... instead of the long repeat one you curently have.
10. 00:11:473 (1,2,3) - The drums in the song here are triples not 1/4's. Set the Beat snap divisor to 1/3 and then move the notes to their correct ticks (1 is in the right spot, 2 and 3 are not).
11. 00:11:818 (1) - Same problem as ^ - you have the bsd set to 1/4 when it should be 1/3. Notice how this slider sounds bad? End it on a 1/3 tick and it sounds much better.
12. 00:14:577 (2) - ^
13. 00:14:146 (4,1,2,3) - These are just bad... delete them and make new notes to fit with the lyrics.
14. 00:35:525 (1,2,3) - Only need circles on red and white tick as that what the drum line is,
15. 00:37:594 (4,5) - Delete
16. 00:40:439 (1,2) - These sliders end one tick too late... end them on white and red tick respectively.
17. 00:47:335 (1) - Same problem as ^. end on white tick.
18. 01:01:473 (6) - This slider ends tick too soon, end on white tick
19. 01:12:163 (1) - ^
20. 01:13:715 (1) - This should end on red tick.
21. 01:14:922 (4) - This should end on white tick.
22. 01:17:680 (1,2) - ^ for both of these

Ok thats enough.
Now dont be disheartened by the amount of problems in this diff. NO-ONES first map is any good, especially without help. It can take a long time before you can start producing consistently well done maps (im not there yet either xd). So just keep going over the map like once a week and you should start to find issues in it by yourself. Just because it isn't 'good' right now doesnt mean it can never be. So keep it up and gl!

No no, it's good, I can see the mistakes and improvements, thanks
It is now updated on Serious mode as of 01/25/2016

Thanks
~Shana

From modding queue ~

[General]
Taken from the Osu! Wiki

1. Kiai should be consistent throughout difficulties of your mapset (especially since it is shown on the main menu). If you have a guest difficulty from another mapper that uses different kiai, then it's fine as long as it still makes sense. No Kiai time for everything but 'Serious' diff?
2. A difficulty's name must indicate its level of difficulty, with the exception of the hardest level of difficulty in a set. The mapset's hardest difficulty may use an appropriate custom difficulty name, unrelated to a username. Mapsets may also use a complete set of custom difficulty names that clearly indicate their level of difficulty to the player. Marathon maps with a single difficulty may use free naming. For the 'Tourist Diff' i suggest changing it to 'Beginner' or change all the other diff name
3. how about offset 11473 since theres no mapping for a while..
4. try changing the slider velocity more? there is literally no inherited timing points

[Tourist]

1. imo, the cs is too high and the ar, od, and hp is too low. maybe 2-3?
2. Distance Space, since this is for beginners make sure to use ds to make it flow c:
3. 00:11:473 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - i think you should change this up a bit instead of having all singletaps. maybe go with the vocals instead?
4. 00:23:887 (2,3) - dont overlap in beginner
5. 00:30:784 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5) - i dont get this rhythm.. it doesnt match the instrumentals or vocal imo
6. 00:42:939 (2) - put it on big white tick
7. i think you should make the kiai time more faster and emphasize it? bc right now it just matches the beginning.
8. 00:48:715 (2) - big white tick
   so.. honestly, this diff needs more work imo. dont just use linear sliders, make curvy ones as well. you can change the slider velocity too. & i think you should try to improve on the rhythm since it is inconsistent. Hopefully you can use what i said to improve the rest of the diff ~

[Easy]

1. why 1/3 .w.
2. Distance Space
3. 00:24:577 (4) - end at white tick
4. 00:26:646 (1) - no repeating more than once in easy
5. 00:28:715 (1,2,3) - this doesnt follow any rhythm imo & doesnt flow well
6. 00:33:542 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5) - so many singletaps lol
7. 00:41:818 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,1,2,3) - ^
8. 00:49:404 (4) - repeating more than once
9. 00:51:646 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,1,1,2) - singletaps lol
10. 01:11:473 (1) - repeating more than once
    for this diff, this looks way too rushed.. use more sliders ! :3

[Normal]

1. lol normal 3* 174bpm..
2. 00:14:922 (3,4,5,6,7,1) - no beginner can hit that LOL
3. no triplets in normal pls or doubles
4. im not going to repeat everything i said so i suggest taking out so many singletaps and adding more sliders linear & curved

[Hard]

1. why are some notes not even on a tick ;w;
2. 00:21:129 (5) - dont touch this
3. 00:52:163 (2,3) - space this out
4. 00:54:922 (2,3) - ^
5. i suggest you look at other maps for this one. idk this diff looks like you just placed notes at random places.

[Conclusion]
This map needs more work imo >< remember you dont have to do what i say haha. its your map ~ you do you. anyways, if you need any clarifications or help just pm me anytime ~

Maphi wrote:

From modding queue ~

[General]
Taken from the Osu! Wiki

1. Kiai should be consistent throughout difficulties of your mapset (especially since it is shown on the main menu). If you have a guest difficulty from another mapper that uses different kiai, then it's fine as long as it still makes sense. No Kiai time for everything but 'Serious' diff?
2. A difficulty's name must indicate its level of difficulty, with the exception of the hardest level of difficulty in a set. The mapset's hardest difficulty may use an appropriate custom difficulty name, unrelated to a username. Mapsets may also use a complete set of custom difficulty names that clearly indicate their level of difficulty to the player. Marathon maps with a single difficulty may use free naming. For the 'Tourist Diff' i suggest changing it to 'Beginner' or change all the other diff name
3. how about offset 11473 since theres no mapping for a while..
4. try changing the slider velocity more? there is literally no inherited timing points

[Tourist]

1. imo, the cs is too high and the ar, od, and hp is too low. maybe 2-3?
2. Distance Space, since this is for beginners make sure to use ds to make it flow c:
3. 00:11:473 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - i think you should change this up a bit instead of having all singletaps. maybe go with the vocals instead?
4. 00:23:887 (2,3) - dont overlap in beginner
5. 00:30:784 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5) - i dont get this rhythm.. it doesnt match the instrumentals or vocal imo
6. 00:42:939 (2) - put it on big white tick
7. i think you should make the kiai time more faster and emphasize it? bc right now it just matches the beginning.
8. 00:48:715 (2) - big white tick
   so.. honestly, this diff needs more work imo. dont just use linear sliders, make curvy ones as well. you can change the slider velocity too. & i think you should try to improve on the rhythm since it is inconsistent. Hopefully you can use what i said to improve the rest of the diff ~

[Easy]

1. why 1/3 .w.
2. Distance Space
3. 00:24:577 (4) - end at white tick
4. 00:26:646 (1) - no repeating more than once in easy
5. 00:28:715 (1,2,3) - this doesnt follow any rhythm imo & doesnt flow well
6. 00:33:542 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5) - so many singletaps lol
7. 00:41:818 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,1,2,3) - ^
8. 00:49:404 (4) - repeating more than once
9. 00:51:646 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,1,1,2) - singletaps lol
10. 01:11:473 (1) - repeating more than once
    for this diff, this looks way too rushed.. use more sliders ! :3

[Normal]

1. lol normal 3* 174bpm..
2. 00:14:922 (3,4,5,6,7,1) - no beginner can hit that LOL
3. no triplets in normal pls or doubles
4. im not going to repeat everything i said so i suggest taking out so many singletaps and adding more sliders linear & curved

[Hard]

1. why are some notes not even on a tick ;w;
2. 00:21:129 (5) - dont touch this
3. 00:52:163 (2,3) - space this out
4. 00:54:922 (2,3) - ^
5. i suggest you look at other maps for this one. idk this diff looks like you just placed notes at random places.

[Conclusion]
This map needs more work imo >< remember you dont have to do what i say haha. its your map ~ you do you. anyways, if you need any clarifications or help just pm me anytime ~

Thanks very much

~Shana

A random mod i hope you like it how to i said on my queue

Hi from my queue


That's all from me! Try to apply what I've told you in your maps. Feel free to PM me if you have any questions regarding the map. You can also call me anytime for a remod after you have fixed your map accordingly with proper spacing. Anyways good luck in your map!
Can I have a melon pan? :p

Hi, from my queue~ I’m so, so sorry for being super late T^T. I only give recommendations, feel free to disagree with them.

[General]
Turn off grid snap, it makes some blanket errors and you can’t really shape sliders that much with it being on. Only use 1/1 snap divisor for easy diffs and 1/2 for normal. If the song has a low bpm, this can be excepted, but this song has a pretty high bpm.

I recommend you to use distance snap for every diff and add jumps when it suits the song afterwards for ONLY hard and insane diffs.

Maps are also better if they are consistent. You can give big gaps between your notes only when you want to emphasise something from the music. I’m sorry if this didn’t make sense T-T, but you can see what I mean by looking at some ranked maps. Okay, maybe one way you can make it more consistent: don’t map only the vocals, but also the music. Actually, the music is actually more important than the vocal, but mapping vocals won't ruin anything as long as it fits the beat.
Also, include more sliders, just to make it less repetitive. Especially in easy and normal diffs. Beginners can’t hit many circles in a row yet.

[Tourist]
I can’t really say anything about patterns since your spacings aren’t right. You need to turn on your distance snap for easy and normal diffs.
Lots of blankets need to be fixed. Eg. 00:12:852 (2,3)
00:41:818 (1,2,3,4) – They feel a bit random, why miss so much sounds?
00:51:473 (1,2,3,4,5) - ^
01:03:887 (1,1,1) – Stacks are confusing
01:06:646 (1,1,1,1,1) – Why only circles here? The music started again, so maybe put more notes.
01:24:577 (1,2) – Patterns like this are confusing for beginners.
00:57:335 – Kiai so long! Maybe end it here?
01:06:646 (1) – And start kiai here again.
01:19:059 – And end here.
01:27:163 (1) – This spinner here is a bit short. Maybe just remove it?

[Easy]
Turn on distance snap. Lots of confusing patters too.
Notes bunched up aren’t good for beginners. Maybe fix them? Eg. 00:11:473 (1,2,3,4) 00:22:508 (1,2,3,4,5,6)
00:27:335 (2,1) – Overlaps aren’t good either OWO
00:37:335 (4) – This does not belong here. It’s supposed to be on the next blue tick, but since it’s an easy diff, I’d recommend you not to map it.

[Normal]
Only use 1/2 snap divisor. Turn on distance snap.
This diff is way too hard for normal. Eg. 00:26:646 (1,2,3,4)
01:27:163 (2) – Maybe turn this into a long slider?

[Hard]
You can’t change your snap divisor from time to time. You have to decide which one suits better, 1/3 or 1/4. To me, 1/4 is better, though. Also, there are too many spacing errors. Maybe base your spacing with distance snap. You can press alt and scroll your mouse to change the distance snap multiplier.
00:26:646 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) – Too hard for a hard diff.
00:34:404 (4,5,6) – Spacing error. This is very misleading.
00:35:611 (1,2) – Why so close?
01:23:542 (6) – Fix shapes?
They were some examples. I can’t point out at every spacing errors, so maybe check again and fix other similar errors?

[Serious]
1/3 really doesn’t suit the song. And please, add more sliders ><
00:00:439 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) – The stream doesn’t suit the music. Slowen the song to 25% and listen to it in a slow motion, then you'll see what I mean.
00:05:956 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6) - ^
Check the spacings for this diff too.
Hope that helped. GL~

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