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dj-Jo - Black Bullet feat. Lollia (dj-Jo Remix)

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Poi Panda
87 posts
Joined July 2014
Topic Starter
Poi Panda
This map has been deleted on the request of its creator. It is no longer available.
Last edited by Poi Panda , edited 48 times in total.
NickXitco
35 posts
Joined February 2014
NickXitco
00:00:192 (1,2,3, 4) - Could use some shape rather than a straight line
00:01:353 (5) - NC
00:01:740 (7) - Slider should start on this beat, doesn't make sense where it is now.
00:02:514 (9) - NC
00:03:288 (1,2,3) - These don't really fit with the rhythm at the time, it should hit on the 1/1s
00:04:062 (4,5,6,7,8,9) - Again, shape the streams a bit
00:04:837 (8) - Delete this note
00:05:804 (1,2) - This should be some sort of jump imo
00:06:385 (1) - This section could use some shaping
00:09:095 (4) - Consider NC
00:09:482 (1,2,3,4) - Curve the stream towards the slider
00:10:837 (5) - NC
00:20:030 (4) - Not on the right beat
00:20:514 (5) - Delete note?
00:21:772 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - This whole pattern is kinda nonsense, almost none of it is on the right beat and it's all squished together.

AR 9 is way too fast for this tempo.
Stoof
104 posts
Joined September 2014
Stoof

Learning wrote:

00:00:192 (1,2,3, 4) - Could use some shape rather than a straight line
00:01:353 (5) - NC
00:01:740 (7) - Slider should start on this beat, doesn't make sense where it is now.
00:02:514 (9) - NC
00:03:288 (1,2,3) - These don't really fit with the rhythm at the time, it should hit on the 1/1s
00:04:062 (4,5,6,7,8,9) - Again, shape the streams a bit
00:04:837 (8) - Delete this note
00:05:804 (1,2) - This should be some sort of jump imo
00:06:385 (1) - This section could use some shaping
00:09:095 (4) - Consider NC
00:09:482 (1,2,3,4) - Curve the stream towards the slider
00:10:837 (5) - NC
00:20:030 (4) - Not on the right beat
00:20:514 (5) - Delete note?
00:21:772 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - This whole pattern is kinda nonsense, almost none of it is on the right beat and it's all squished together.

AR 9 is way too fast for this tempo.
holy nuts
Shiorii
7 posts
Joined December 2014
Shiorii

Stoof wrote:

Learning wrote:

00:00:192 (1,2,3, 4) - Could use some shape rather than a straight line
00:01:353 (5) - NC
00:01:740 (7) - Slider should start on this beat, doesn't make sense where it is now.
00:02:514 (9) - NC
00:03:288 (1,2,3) - These don't really fit with the rhythm at the time, it should hit on the 1/1s
00:04:062 (4,5,6,7,8,9) - Again, shape the streams a bit
00:04:837 (8) - Delete this note
00:05:804 (1,2) - This should be some sort of jump imo
00:06:385 (1) - This section could use some shaping
00:09:095 (4) - Consider NC
00:09:482 (1,2,3,4) - Curve the stream towards the slider
00:10:837 (5) - NC
00:20:030 (4) - Not on the right beat
00:20:514 (5) - Delete note?
00:21:772 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - This whole pattern is kinda nonsense, almost none of it is on the right beat and it's all squished together.
AR 9 is way too fast for this tempo.
holy nuts
stoof's nuts
Nekros
4 posts
Joined November 2014
Nekros
Holy nuts
Poi Panda
87 posts
Joined July 2014
Topic Starter
Poi Panda

Learning wrote:

00:00:192 (1,2,3, 4) - Could use some shape rather than a straight line
00:01:353 (5) - NC
00:01:740 (7) - Slider should start on this beat, doesn't make sense where it is now.
00:02:514 (9) - NC
00:03:288 (1,2,3) - These don't really fit with the rhythm at the time, it should hit on the 1/1s
00:04:062 (4,5,6,7,8,9) - Again, shape the streams a bit
00:04:837 (8) - Delete this note
00:05:804 (1,2) - This should be some sort of jump imo
00:06:385 (1) - This section could use some shaping
00:09:095 (4) - Consider NC
00:09:482 (1,2,3,4) - Curve the stream towards the slider
00:10:837 (5) - NC
00:20:030 (4) - Not on the right beat
00:20:514 (5) - Delete note?
00:21:772 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - This whole pattern is kinda nonsense, almost none of it is on the right beat and it's all squished together.

AR 9 is way too fast for this tempo.
Thank you for the mod!

All of this should be fixed, but I'm keeping AR9 as the song becomes faster at 2:50 which should allow me to make some patterns that would be more playable with AR9 than any lower AR.
Diamondis
35 posts
Joined December 2014
Diamondis
Hello :D Just going through your song files~

http://prntscr.com/9larq7
Everything there seems in place.
General and Metadata checked out perfectly.

The map itself
01:04:450 (5,6,7) - Consider not having these stacked, as it doesn't fit the previous style
00:18:772 (1,2,3) - Doesn't fit very well imo
01:23:901 When you continue mapping, I'd suggest a break right here.

Hope some of this helps out~
Poi Panda
87 posts
Joined July 2014
Topic Starter
Poi Panda

Daddy Volibear wrote:

Hello :D Just going through your song files~

http://prntscr.com/9larq7
Everything there seems in place.
General and Metadata checked out perfectly.

The map itself
01:04:450 (5,6,7) - Consider not having these stacked, as it doesn't fit the previous style
00:18:772 (1,2,3) - Doesn't fit very well imo
01:23:901 When you continue mapping, I'd suggest a break right here.

Hope some of this helps out~
Thank you. Everything you mentioned should have been fixed, and a break is a great idea there actually so thank you for that suggestion too! :D
Diamondis
35 posts
Joined December 2014
Diamondis
Glad I could help~
NickXitco
35 posts
Joined February 2014
NickXitco
General
  1. Your source should be Romanized
  2. Strongly consider not calling the difficulty something as vague as "Enju", where your only delineation of the map's difficulty is the star count.
  3. I know this map isn't polished yet, but there are absolutely no timing points. No Kiai time, no hitsound changes, no sv changes, nothing.
  4. Current hitsound is "soft" which doesn't work for this song.
  5. Preview Point isn't snapped to a beat.

Composition
  1. 00:01:546 (3) - Consider moving to (368,264)
  2. 00:04:062 (4) - NC
  3. 00:04:643 (7,8) - Consider switching these two notes. The slider fits with the music better before, and the single note after. Or, delete 7 and move 8 and 9 to where 7 was, either way.
  4. 00:09:095 (1,2) - Spread these out, it's hard to see the rhythm.
  5. 00:10:062 (4) - Rotate by ~27° and reposition at the end of the stream.
  6. 00:11:998 (8,9) - If you're going to keep 00:09:095 (1,2) as an NC, make this one as well, or get rid of the first NC.
  7. 00:22:159 (2,3) - This is mistimed. Don't know where you want it, I'm guessing 1/4 before this. (Actually after playing it again, the 3 does match up with a background rhythm, but it's still very off in terms of playability).
  8. 00:23:030 (4,5,6,7) - Something about this needs to change. No matter what, 00:23:611 (6,7) needs to spread out a bit. If you want it to follow the rhythm of the vocals, it's this.
    If you want it to follow the background track, then it needs to look like this.
  9. In general, throughout this whole section, it doesn't seem like you really know what you're following in the song. It switches back and forth from going with the vocals to the background track to constant 1/2s.
  10. 00:29:127 (5) - I'd make this go til 00:29:417.
  11. 00:29:514 (6) - Delete
  12. 00:29:611 (7) - NC
  13. 00:29:901 (1) - Remove NC
  14. 00:31:159 (1) - This whole section kind of bothers me, mostly because of the same this I said earlier about following the song. During this section, you have a kind of slow dubstep feel, and yet the map is just going constantly ham with 1/2s. You really need to amplify the important rhythmical moments of the song with your map. For example:
    1. The "Kasa" on 00:31:159 and 00:31:450
    2. The "neau" on 00:31:740 and 00:31:933
    3. In general, the kick you hear in the back is all important notes.
    4. Like the bass pattern at 00:34:837, very important. The sound almost completely pauses, so you should probably delete 00:35:417 (6)
    5. At 00:35:804 there's a "genjitsu" along with a loud synth stab, imo you should follow one or both, and you just kinda pass over them with 1/2s
    6. I'm sure there are more examples but I'm going to go back to regular modding.
  15. 00:33:482 (3) - Consider rotating ~21° around selection centre and move to ~(96,240), or something like that. Doesn't flow quite right atm.
  16. 00:35:804 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - This whole pattern feels really misshapen. Each part of it is curving at a different rate and together it feels off.
  17. 00:40:062 (5,6) - Consider changing this timing to
  18. 00:41:998 (1) - Remove, consider changing pattern to
  19. 00:46:256 (1,2,3,4) - Jumps are inconsistent in size (1 to 2 is 1x, 2 to 3 is 1.79x, 3 to 4 is 3.3x, 4 to 5 is 2.28x)
  20. 00:47:417 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Same thing
  21. 00:47:030 (5,1) and 00:48:772 (7,1) - You do a lot of this weird stacking where most of the time it doesn't play well at all and you miss the note underneath.
  22. 00:49:159 (1,2,3,4) - However you do it, 3 and 4 belong 1/2 earlier.
  23. 00:50:514 (5,6,7) - Consider changing to this (explanation in the next comment). Beat 5 to 00:50:514, (302, 129). Beat 6 to 00:50:804, (256,248). Beat 7 to 00:51:095, (136,280). No slider, no beat 8.
  24. 00:51:288 - Okay this is a VERY important rhythmic moment in the song and you gloss over it. You kinda had a cool jump pattern going, so I suggest you do the following (you have to be on 1/3 snap).
    1. 00:51:288 (1) - 256,92
    2. 00:51:546 (2) - 368,280
    3. 00:51:804 (3) - 124,260
    4. 00:52:062 (4) - 272,93
    5. 00:52:321 (5) - 353,296
    6. 00:52:579 (6) - 112,231
  25. 00:53:998 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - I'd honestly scrap this whole pattern.
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