1. Delirium (5,66 stars, 1326 notes)

Special thanks

Thanks to Pannari for helping out with the storyboard names

1. 00:22:670 (1) - This doesen't really feel like a place to use a 1/4 slider to be honest, it sounds quite better as a simple note since you haven't used any of these in these parts!
2. 00:59:567 (7) - Just a small thing, I would rotate this slider by 15 degrees so that it continues the curve with 00:59:739 (8) - better. Not a big thing though it would help with both the aesthetics and the flow of the pattern :p
3. 01:14:049 (1) - Is it just me or I can't find any 1/3 beat here to be emphatized with this slider? This slider would definitely sound better with two 1/4 sliders instead, it would follow the wubs better imo
4. 01:34:567 (2) - Huh, this is definitely a pretty big jump there, especially considering the stream 01:33:877 (1,2,3,4,5) - which isn't really that spaced I'd at least reverse this slider with a CTRL+G, since it would be quite easier to catch and in line with 01:34:912 (1,2,3) - . As of now this jump definitely feels too big :u
5. 01:36:118 (2,3) - Whistles with drum additions should be used on the top of these 2 sliders as well, since the sound actually starts from 01:36:118 - as you may hear in the background!
6. 01:37:239 (2) - Just a personal preference here, but what would you think about removing this note? A stop motion would definitely work pretty good here, and a 1/2 gap would definitely help with this
7. 01:42:670 (1) - There should be a soft whistle here according to your previous pattern
8. 01:50:429 (7) - I would actually use this as a 1/4 slider and place it on the other side of the stream like this, i actually like how it plays rather than making a 1/2 gap there!
9. 01:53:705 (1) - A whistle + normal addition on the top of this slider would fit pretty good with your hitsounds pattern here
10. 03:38:532 (1) - I'd make this a 1/2 slider instead making it shorter by 1/4, mainly because you are ignoring a beat on 03:38:532 (1) - following instead a weaker beat. You could also make a pretty good-looking pattern by playing with 03:38:532 (1) - 's end making a pattern just like this one: http://puu.sh/mbgNt/1cbeb8dd00.jpg Also remember to hitsound the end of this slider in case you decide to shorten this!
11. 03:40:860 (6) - I'd remove the whistle at the top of this slider, since I can't really hear any of these sounds here!
12. 03:42:153 (1) - This is a pretty weird choice for two reasons: first of all the 1/8 beats here are definitely not as strong as 03:42:325 - , and then I'm pretty sure such a sudden slider followed by a stream will confuse players which actually expect the opposite. I'd rather delete this slider and make it a whole stream or use a 1/8 slider at 03:42:325 - instead
13. 03:52:843 (2) - It would be pretty cool if you make the spacing here higher than the one at 03:51:808 (2,2) - to give a better idea of the progression going with the stream until the long slider. Something like this would be pretty cool!
14. 04:04:049 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4) - same thing as 03:42:153 (1) - even though it should be better readable because of the space between the slider at the stream. I would still see this rather as a 1/4 slider
15. 04:21:291 (1,2) - I'd replace both the sliders with simple notes instead, so that the wubs get emphatized better because of the difference between the notes and the sliders there
16. 04:33:532 (4) - While this looks pretty good because of it coinciding with 04:34:222 (1) - 's end, I think it would be better to have this spaced further from 04:33:705 (1) - than from 04:33:360 (3) - . Maybe you could put this slider at x:260 y:150 to maintain the sliders' ends still coinciding and also to adjust the spacing there!
17. 04:48:360 (2) - What about putting this at x:448 y:64 instead? Having this spaced from 04:48:187 (1) - but not from the following stream is kind of offputting there :U

Shiirn wrote:

Alright let's get this party started riiiiight now!

Since this is a wall of text mod, I will only be coloring major suggestions With this color right here. Everything else is just nazi.
[dick:for the delta]

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00:40:041 - This whole section right here would be more perfect if you accurately stacked them on top of eachother in places where they're barely not stacked. Ex: 00:28:532 (2) - could be on top of 00:25:429 (1) - 's starting position. This shit is really, really nazi and would require a lot of fiddling to make perfect, but it's just how I can see it being improved even more. - i tried
00:44:739 (1) - Make this a symmetrical-over-the-axis bend slider. - i kinda like having off-centered sliders like those, so it's mostly just personal preference
01:09:912 (2,3) - These don't quiiiite blanket 01:10:256 (4) - at the same period of time, which makes them seem sliiightly off. You should fix (3), it's easier to align it with (2) than vice versa. - done
01:10:774 (3) - Move this up and to the right a bit and blanket it with 01:10:946 (1) - at this time point: 01:10:601 - . As it is right now it's a pretty curve, but it can be a BLANKETTED pretty curve! \o/ - i didn't really want to adjust the location since there's a stack there, but i did make it blanket (1) a bit more
01:12:843 (2) - Second curve doesn't blanket 01:12:670 (1) - accurately. Normally I wouldn't be so nazi about this, but ya'll asked for a nazi mod and when you do mods to bring up perfection, it's all about the little details that stand out. The closer you get to perfection the more obvious the imperfections are, etc etc. - cri
01:30:256 (1) - For tablet players, this is no problem. For mouse players, however, this is a bitch to play. This is because spaced streams are the devil for mouse users, especially when they are done ineptly. For mouse users, there is momentum to their movements. Mouses are much heavier than tablet pens. When they're stretching around (1,2,3,4), they need to make a sudden, even more sharp curve to hit (1). This can be fixed simply by moving (1) over so that it follows the same curve as the stream before it. - uh i'm gonna need some testing for that one, since it feels alright to me personally
01:34:222 (4) - move this underneath 01:33:360 (1) - 's end to stack it as you were trying to do. I promise nobody will care about the slight spacing discrepancy. - moved all of 01:34:136 (3,4,5,1,2) - instead, i like streams neat
01:52:325 (1) - This doesn't perfectly blanket (2,3). But it'll require some hard work to make it work. GL! - adjusted a bit, doesn't really seem bad though
02:01:636 (1) - If you want this slider to be fancy, make sure it blankets both 02:01:981 (1) - and 02:01:463 (2) - 's ending. - i tried it out, but the distances of what's being blanketed end up making the slider just look like shit
03:09:049 (4) - There is no musical reason for this buzz slider. - just leaving this to mirror probox's response
03:47:843 (3) - Somehow this slider manages to not directly point at ANY of the notes in the triple after it. C'mooooon. - uh it should be pointing directly at (4), not the others. and its literally the same slider as 03:46:808 (5) - except longer
03:48:187 (1) - Move the bend so that 03:48:532 (3) - points at it. - again with personal preference, i don't really like to use the kind of sliders you're going for
04:06:118 (1) - Blanket that second bend! - mmk
04:07:498 (1) - Blanket it around the ending of 04:07:843 (1) - ! - this one's a bit harder, i tried
04:14:394 (1) - This ain't perfect. But you probably know that. - i had to compromise the symmetry bit to get it to look better and not overlap so much, tried to improve now
04:28:187 (1) - doesn't blanket. - fuck me
04:56:291 (3,4,5,6,7) - This quint doesn't blanket (2) like you've done with most of the others. - mmk

1. Your combo colors 1 and 3 are really really similar. This is usually fine when they are separated (IE there's a 4th comb color in between) but since there isnt, and these colors can be side by side, it makes new combo's harder to recognize. Can you contrast them a bit? or introduce a 4th color?
2. 00:18:532 (1,2) - Ctrl+G'ing plays really well if you're fine with the larger DS.
3. 00:24:049 (1) - Is it just me or is this literally the same color as before?
   
   how

   
4. 00:40:256 (1,2) - How about Ctrl G'ing for that jump from 3>1
5. 01:00:946 (7,8,1,2) - After those kick sliders, the jump from 1>2 is uncomfortably low xP.
6. 01:20:084 (5,6) - Would be cool if you could make the tail of slider 6 parallel with 5.
7. 01:27:843 (1,2,1,2) - You could space these kicksliders out a bit more so the jump onto 01:28:532 (3) - is better anticipated.
8. 02:06:291 (2) - This slider isnt symmetrical like 1.
9. 02:12:756 (4) - Overmapped. This really sounds like 2 sets of triplets, not a 7 note stream.
10. 03:28:187 (1,2,3,4) - Considering the build up into the stream, it makes more sense to have the kick sliders increase in DS rather than decrease.
11. 03:36:981 (4) - Kickslider? Cuz theres a really audible snare on 03:36:981 (4) -
12. 03:49:049 (1) - You could even add some more white control points in the slider to make it wubbier xD. It looks rigid atm with all those linear bends.
13. 03:53:015 (1) - Nice ;o. I would curve the head just a bit more but, up to you i guess~
    
    ~

    
14. 04:11:464 (2,1) - The location of 1 felt kind of awkward though, especially with how it transitioned into the later kicksliders. I would have moved 1 to 43||301.
15. 04:14:394 (1) - For these kinds of loop sliders, having the teardrop inside the loop being symmetrical looks a lot nicer.
    
    Set them up like this. Use two red control points stacked ontop of each other. White control points create an X

    
16. 04:27:670 (6) - Looks like this was supposed to stack with 04:26:463 (1) -

Monstrata wrote:

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1. Your combo colors 1 and 3 are really really similar. This is usually fine when they are separated (IE there's a 4th comb color in between) but since there isnt, and these colors can be side by side, it makes new combo's harder to recognize. Can you contrast them a bit? or introduce a 4th color?
2. 00:18:532 (1,2) - Ctrl+G'ing plays really well if you're fine with the larger DS.
3. 00:24:049 (1) - Is it just me or is this literally the same color as before? - hax
   
   how

   
4. 00:40:256 (1,2) - How about Ctrl G'ing for that jump from 3>1 - yeah that helps pronounce (3) a lot better
5. 01:00:946 (7,8,1,2) - After those kick sliders, the jump from 1>2 is uncomfortably low xP.
6. 01:20:084 (5,6) - Would be cool if you could make the tail of slider 6 parallel with 5.
7. 01:27:843 (1,2,1,2) - You could space these kicksliders out a bit more so the jump onto 01:28:532 (3) - is better anticipated.
8. 02:06:291 (2) - This slider isnt symmetrical like 1.
9. 02:12:756 (4) - Overmapped. This really sounds like 2 sets of triplets, not a 7 note stream.
10. 03:28:187 (1,2,3,4) - Considering the build up into the stream, it makes more sense to have the kick sliders increase in DS rather than decrease. - it is increasing, from 1.4x -> 1.5x
11. 03:36:981 (4) - Kickslider? Cuz theres a really audible snare on 03:36:981 (4) -
12. 03:49:049 (1) - You could even add some more white control points in the slider to make it wubbier xD. It looks rigid atm with all those linear bends. - done
13. 03:53:015 (1) - Nice ;o. I would curve the head just a bit more but, up to you i guess~ - sure, doesn't hurt
    
    ~

    
14. 04:11:464 (2,1) - The location of 1 felt kind of awkward though, especially with how it transitioned into the later kicksliders. I would have moved 1 to 43||301. - i think it'll be fine here, especially for its transition into the next pattern. i put it here originally to have a better aesthetic and to emphasize the difference in distance between the two patterns. also, the movement between the objects kinda help make it flow a bit better
15. 04:14:394 (1) - For these kinds of loop sliders, having the teardrop inside the loop being symmetrical looks a lot nicer. - i tried
    
    Set them up like this. Use two red control points stacked ontop of each other. White control points create an X

    
16. 04:27:670 (6) - Looks like this was supposed to stack with 04:26:463 (1) - ye

Nice!

Asahina Momoko wrote:

nice map

Artorias wrote:

Popping by to say that this is some good shit.

1. mp3 hitsounds are lol cuz they only have legacy support
2. i assume you are aware that letterboxing cuts off all the grass in the break, if not disable it lmao,,
3. I'd recommend scaling both names down to like 0.6 or 0.7, at 1.0 they're pixel-y -> not-that-pixel-y idk your choice in the end i just like how this looks and doesn't overlap character
4. OD and HP setting seems arbitrary decimal, just go with 8.5 and 6 since that's what you're leaning towards??
5. I tried to search for Probox in order to find this, was disappointed that you don't tag your pseudonym under which you gd
6. I liked Naitoshi's preview point better alternatively setting it to 01:50:903 - would include less fading out sounds
7. I find combo 2 and 4 to blend in with your BG a lot more than the other 2 colors do. This bothers me because i can read color 1 and 3 clearly and am thrown with colors and patterns that read much harder due to blending. Can you settle for something more clear about color 2 and 4? I'm bringing this up because things have to be readable without dim, too and i'm pretty confused between how clear these 2 other colors seem in comparison
8. I always wanted to say this: Tickrate 2 fits the song better as it has constant 1/2

1. 00:17:498 (2,3) - 00:18:877 (3,4,5) - 00:20:256 (3,4,5) - these seem quite forced,
   the first one and 05:04:394 (2,3) - are like omg i want to extend a slider, just using two 1/2 sliders for 00:17:498 (2,3) - feels actually better
   00:18:877 (3,4,5) - is a pain to click since you have to hold a long hold to click a short hold, something more simple would fit way better imo
   the intro is filled with faint 1/4 and you randomly took 2 to map and it feels pretty awkward to play them like this
2. 01:03:015 (5) - 01:05:774 (5) - uhh can you combo this so that the entire stream
3. 01:51:636 (2) - would look cooler with a combo i believe
4. 02:41:636 (1) - 02:52:670 (1) - considering how the other sliders like this are structured, shouldn't this be extended to the blue tick? at least i expected it to be and clicked the circle somewhat early
5. 02:56:118 (1) - you don't nc 02:45:084 (2) - so could you swap 02:56:118 (1,2) - ncs for these
6. 03:17:153 (1,2,3,4) - the only 4 1/2 notes that are circles and stack perfectly, cant you go for a custom stack lol
7. 03:37:153 (1) - felt much too close for the sake of stacking i'd recommend moving 03:37:153 (1,2,3,4) - as a whole down to the left until 1 is close to the disappeared 3
8. 04:48:187 (1) - i don't hear the 1/8 triplet where this slider is, it actually starts from the blue tickso uhhh 1/4 slider pls?

1. 00:40:256 (1) - seems like arbitrary comboing but whatever the entire rest is yolo
2. 01:14:567 (2,3,4) - this literally destroys sightreads and took me 3 times to actually fc because it's so huge in comparison to the surrounding patterns, can you nerf it a bit?
3. 01:18:705 (3) - melody is 1/8 like http://puu.sh/nalqu/b177b1d4d9.jpg an 1/6 slider doesn't really help with that so i'd suggest just ignoring and going for an 1/4 slider
4. 01:35:429 (1,2) - these are so easy to mistake for 1/2, that i think an 1/4 slider instead of 2 would make things more clear, or going for an 1/2 slider instead of 1,2 would also be more obvious imo