00:08 Kite: fantastic map, aesthetically a huge improvement over apparition
00:08 *Kite is editing [https://osu.ppy.sh/b/806325 Fleshgod Apocalypse - The Deceit / The Violation [Skull Fracturing Nightmare]]
00:11 Kite: only thing i can really suggest is to remove the sliders here 05:17:863 - and have an actual break until 05:26:198 -
00:11 Kite: you have no need to drag out the drain time unless you want to keep it as a punshing hp drain section
00:11 Kite: other than that it's rather questionable tbh
00:14 Kite: 07:12:761 (1,2) - this stack might be a really bad idea on such a high bpm
00:14 Kite: people are likely to just mash through and overstream breakcombo on that
00:14 Mazzerin: what is happening
00:14 Kite: idk
00:14 Kite: randomly checking
00:14 Kite: your map
00:14 Kite: lol
00:20 Kite: 07:54:761 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - i find it weird that you decided to have smaller spacing on these streams seeing as its sort of the peak of intensity during that section
00:20 Kite: especially with your increasing spacing buildup beforehand
00:21 Mazzerin: oh that one can be higher
00:21 Mazzerin: the rest are dropping in intensity it seams
00:21 Mazzerin: seems*
00:21 Kite: yeah would be more fitting
00:22 Mazzerin: i change that stack too
00:22 Mazzerin: i dont wanna add that break the drain is tested and its fine, the spinner can grant full hp with not much effort
00:23 Kite: yeah thats up to you, i just find those long sliders strange since you are mapping something barely audible
00:24 Kite: 07:59:205 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - did you misplace the claps? it sounds really strange on blue ticks
00:24 Kite: sounds smoother on reds/whites
00:25 Mazzerin: nah the bass drum is on white/red and snares on blue
00:25 Mazzerin: they do this often in death metal
00:26 Kite: 08:06:983 (3) - all the sliders on this section -might- play better reversed
00:26 Kite: would result in a circular movement
00:26 Kite: but i cant test it properly since its too fast
00:26 Mazzerin: oh no i dont want circular movement
00:27 Mazzerin: i want sharp
00:27 Kite: oh okay
00:28 Kite: anyways i still think the claps sound better on white and reds but since you are following the drums i guess not much to do about it q:
00:29 Mazzerin: the entire choruses are like that 07:28:094 (1) -
00:29 Mazzerin: 08:12:539 (5) - these are the white/red snare and blue bass patterns
00:29 Kite: i know its just the part in particular sounded awkward, since you have really loud hitsounding and theres a sort of longer gap to the next clap
00:30 Kite: 09:56:093 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) -
00:30 Kite: same here as before then
00:30 Mazzerin: yea did that
00:31 Kite: 10:05:649 (1,2) - this ones not that bad since the stream is shorter but still not sure
00:31 Mazzerin: the stream is spaces
00:31 Mazzerin: spaced*
00:31 Mazzerin: so its more clear here
00:32 Kite: tthats about it
00:32 Kite: solid map
00:32 Kite: visually a lot more pleasing than the last one i modded from you
00:32 Kite: and layout is really good too
00:32 Mazzerin: thank you kite
00:32 Mazzerin: its been a while since that last one
00:32 Mazzerin: it was at summer
00:32 Kite: yeah

There's snares on the blue tick during these small sections that I'd consider mapping those in, just to vary up the patterning a bit; perhaps changing the triplets there to dkd, dunno
would also make it even fucking harder because why not
actually no, don't make it harder fuck me
00:08:988 to 00:10:188
00:20:748 to 00:21:708
03:55:783 to 03:56:983
04:07:303 to 04:08:503
06:47:428 to 06:48:317
09:16:316 to 09:17:205

00:11:748 (2,3,4,5) - ddd k instead of ddk d since the snares re-enters at 00:11:988
00:17:508 (2,3,4,5) - same thing as above
00:32:508 - consider this:

since there's a subtle 2/1 pattern in the guitar repeated 3 times over the 2 measures.
00:54:708 (155,156,157,158,159) - kdddk
00:55:188 (163,164,165,166,167,168,169) - perhaps mono k would match the snares better
01:07:008 - add a note here, again, 2/1 pattern in the music and it would be consistent with 01:06:528 (92) and 01:07:488 (101)
01:17:628 (87,88,89) - perhaps link these up together since there's some heavy toms (?) in the background, would be consistent with how you did 04:30:583
01:37:668 (5) - can't help but feel that putting the k at 01:38:028 instead would lead towards the next stream better, like, for a even distance between 01:37:308 (5) and 01:38:748 (5)
02:38:405 (54) - k? 54 and 55 sounds different, not 53 and 54 imo, unless my ears deceive me
03:08:263 - don't you want to map the strings or the guitar riff upwards? Perhaps like this:

Having the pause at 03:08:863 feels more natural imo
03:18:943 (125) - d to help accentuate the k before this
03:34:663 (223,224,225,226,227,228) - kkddkk?
04:19:303 - see 00:32:508
04:50:623 (5) - see 01:37:668 (5)
06:04:095 - add a note here to match strings please
06:21:096 (149,150,151,152,153,154) - I think k dkkkd works better since the k would be isolated to match strings
06:36:150 (74,75,76,77) - oh boy ._.
06:44:095 (1) - change to k to match snares
06:50:317 - dafuq there's 1/3s here LOL, anyways 06:50:761 (5) really should be k, perhaps change 06:50:650 (3,4,5,6,1) to ddkdk or ddkkk
07:03:539 - I feel like there should be a note here to match strings, 07:03:761 too
07:40:687 (13,14) - suggest changing to k as well, 07:40:687 (13,14,15) are the toms
07:55:205 (12,13) - if I were the one mapping I would switch these two, but it doesn't really matter lol
08:09:095 (142,143,144,145,146,147) - see 06:21:096
09:19:205 - 1/3s again, I don't advise you to map those though, but like previously 09:19:539 (3,4,5,6,1) consider ddkkk since 5 should really be k imo
09:41:649 - recommended:

Don't really care what pattern you use, though 09:42:538 onward is 1/4, not 1/3
09:56:982 (95) - d would make the pattern reflect 09:56:093 (85,86,87,88,89,90,91,92,93)
10:17:539 (59,60,61,62,63,64) - see see 06:21:096
10:20:538 (92,1) - uh don't you feel that a heavier D is more befitting to end this 10 minute long RSI-fest?

i cant testplay this because rip streaming so im just basically going off of what feels right

metal

00:45:228 (3,4) - itd be kind of cool if you spaced it out like you did with the previous circle-circle-slider sections before this, something like this but i have no idea how 2 map so
00:46:548 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,15,16,17,18,19,20,21,22,23,24,25,26,27,28,29,30) - holy shit can u like split this up so its not 30 notes??

i legit cant look at the first kiai without my eyes dying

02:39:463 (1,1) - idk if its just me but this feels better if its spaced out a bit more
03:03:223 (1,1) - basically same thing here

also cant look at the third kiai for the same reason dude nice

05:05:443 (1) - this spinner could probably end a bit earlier just to show the transition into the next song because 05:17:863 (1) - idk if people will expect a slider like this after a long as hell spinner lol
06:22:984 (5) - nc this to showcase jump?
06:58:094 (1,1) - wouldnt people get caught off guard by the first slider because of the repeat sliders before it?? why not just make it consistent
07:29:983 (2) - why isn't this nc'd like the other notes-after-sliders like 07:33:205 (1) - wh
07:38:983 (2) - ^
08:49:650 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - what i dont even know what this is
at least put a nc on 08:50:094 (7) - this because the entire section up to this point is nc spammy
08:52:761 (6) - if you did the above suggestion you'd have to put one here 2
09:26:982 (1,1) - same as 06:58:094 (1,1)
09:31:427 (2) - nc this cuz the note-after-slider thin g again
09:40:316 (2) - ^
09:42:982 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1) - ok why the hell does 09:43:204 (1,2,3,4) - go upwards instead of downwards that's just confusing af

also is the mp3 supposed to cut off the finish is that like part of the song